Revolt! A World of Secrets

[puppetmasterpossession]

Hopefully I will continue to write this instead of just stopping like I have with my other stories. Anyhoo, anyone who would like to be a character just tell me and I will include you.

This story is inspired by current world events *coughEgyptLibyaBahraincough*

[puppetmasterpossession]

Chapter 1

Leigheas

Beau

"The King of Leigheas, David Dawa, had declared that his son, Victor will be the new King of Leigheas." This is what started it. This is what made my life bearable, this, is what saved me.

Hi, I am Beau Daisy. I am 5'11, 18. I live by myself.

My eyes slowly drifted open as I woke up on my sofa. I looked to my left and I saw 3 bottles of Jack Daniels, a Swiss Army Knife, and a white powder. I looked to my left and saw the cushions on the back of my sofa and my arm with 3 lines cut down the middle of it. I felt a throbbing in my head, when I noticed I had a massive headache. I stood up, and attempted to walk into my kitchen. I reminded myself that I am still tired and that this is the first time you have stood up today with my knees giving out. After picking myself back up I got to the counter of my kitchen. I looked at it and saw a 7 more finished Jack Daniels bottles. I reached to my cupboard and opened it. It creaked open to reveal my bottle of Motrin. I quickly grabbed 3 pills and down them as fast as I could. I then slowly walked myself back to the couch where I had fallen asleep and though about last night. I remembered the announcement on the new about King David making his son the next king. "What was his son's name? Oh, Victor." I thought to myself.

I then heard my doorbell ring. As I slung it open I saw 3 people. They seemed like good people, they seemed like they were nervous. What were they nervous about? "H-Hi, Sir. We are here to ask you to help on Wednesday with the p-protest we are having against Victor becoming the next k-king. Would you like to help us?" It was then when I noticed her. A child, about 14 years of age standing in the middle of the group. It was then when I also noticed why he was nervous. He was in my neighborhood. He was scared of being in this area of the city. What a douche."GET THE HELL OUT OF MY SIGHT, THIS INSTANT YOU SHITLESS SACK OF CRAP!" I screamed at his face. I can't believe people, judging me because of where I live. I watch as the man ran away like a zebra from a cheetah. I looked down and saw the little girl standing on my doorstep still. Her dad screamed for her to run to them, but she didn't listen, she just stood there in front of me. "Are you scared of me?" I asked
"Are you scared of me? I just stood in front of you after you threatened to kill us, and I am only 13." The little girl said. I stopped and though about it for a second or two. She has a point, I should be scared of her.
"Why aren't you scared of me?" I said.
"Why would I be scared of you? I just walked up to your door to ask you to protest with us, I have no reason to be scared of you. For all I know the reason you live here is because the houses are cheaper here, so you can go to Disney World every year." She stated
"Good point. I like you." I say to the little girl. I then yell to the dad "I'm coming, hold on a second."

[Kiseki]

Creepy girl is creepy. I like the intro.
Took my imagination on some several trips.. xD

[puppetmasterpossession]

lol, she is creepy
lol, thanks

[Shikamaru Nara]

Longer chapters pl0x it's great.

[puppetmasterpossession]

haha, thanks, I'll prolly write another tonight.

[Cloukora]

interesting, curious on what the plot is

[puppetmasterpossession]

Chapter 2
The Son

Victor

"WHAT?!?!? YOU ARE MAKING ME THE NEXT KING?!?!?! YOU CRAZY OLD SON OF A !!! ARE YOU INSANE! I CAN'T RULE A LAND!!!" I Screamed at my father. "I CAN'T BELIEVE THAT YOU ENTRUSTED ME WITH BEING THE NEXT KING!! I AM A TERRIBLE POLITICIAN!! I LOST THE STUDENT BODY PRESIDENT RACE TO A HANDICAPPED KID!!"
"Now son, I see that you are surprised by this decision but, our family MUST stay in power!" My father said to me.
"DAD, what am I supposed to do? I...I don't want to be king! I have a brother who would be a WAY better king then me! He is a political FREAK! Why can't he be king?" I asked.
"Because...he is corrupt."
"WHAT?!?!?!" I screamed in my dad's face. " I think you are just making stuff up now! He isn't corrupt!!"
"YOU ARE GOING TO BE KING!! THAT IS FINAL!!!" My dad yelled in my face as he stomped out of the room.

"NO!!" I screamed as I fell to the floor. I started to cry, some would even say I was bawling. As the tears streamed down my face I thought of what would happen if I was king. Murders all around, the citizens in poverty, the city under attack every other day, crime at an all time high! Just because I wouldn't be strong enough to stop it. I cried myself to sleep that night, thinking of the city in terror.

Hi, I'm Victor Dawa, I'm 6'1, 22 years old and the son of King David Dawa.

I woke up to the sound of people shouting. I heard, "NO MONARCHY!!" I quickly stood up and walked over to my desk and put on my glasses. I ran into my closet and put on my usual attire, a white vestish thing and blue pants. I have a black cape over my shoulders.. As soon as I do, I rush outside and see protesters protesting about me becoming the new king. Nobody seems to notice me, so I decide to run over to the crowd and help protest. "No to King Victor!!" I yell at the top of my lungs. Just then somebody in the crown notices me. "THERE IS VICTOR!!" He shouts as he tries to tackle me! "NO!" I scream as I run back into the castle. I quickly run up to the top of the castle so I can look over the edge and see all the protesters. "Citizens of Leigheas! I am against me becoming king too! I support you, citizens, so CONTINUE!" I say, trying to make them protest more.

Just as I finish my father comes up by me. "Citizens! Go back to your homes immediately! I may use brutal force on any who disobey!" My father says as his soldiers surround the citizens. A few scatter, but most stay. "I shall give you ONE HOUR, to return to your homes!" My father then walks back down the stairs of the castle and into the kitchen.

From somewhere in the crowd I suddenly hear, "Stupid soldiers! Getting paid off by the king! I thought you were supposed to work for the citizens of this town! You traitors!!" I find the person the voice it coming from. It is a 13 year old girl. I watch as she screams at the soldier, spitting on him, swearing at him. Doing everything but harming him. The soldier does nothing, because if he does anything he will be killed on the spot by the other guards. The only way the soldiers can fight back is if the order is given, or the person hits the guard. I continue to stare at the girl as she gets more and more irate every second. It seems like if she continues this for 30 more seconds, she will be clenching her fists so tight they will break.

The child then makes a fatal mistake. She punches the guard. The soldier hits the girl with the butt of his rifle, then flips it around and fires a shoot strait through the girls forehead. The bullet goes in, then goes out through the other side. Then, the soldier impales her through the heart with the bayonet strapped to the top of his gun.

I duck for cover. This protest has now become bloody. This is the start of the great revolt.

[Kiseki]

Why are you writing your character curses.
Kinda makes me feel like its a comedy, while I think you do not intend that.

[Cloukora]

things just got real lol
It's getting good, but can I give you a tip? To help organize the story a bit more?

[puppetmasterpossession]

Originally Posted by Kiseki

Why are you writing your character curses.
Kinda makes me feel like its a comedy, while I think you do not intend that.

Ya, just trying to get emotion through.

@Cloukora
Ya, I am not to good at that...

[Cloukora]

Originally Posted by puppetmasterpossession

Ya, just trying to get emotion through.

@Cloukora
Ya, I am not to good at that...

I've noticed you clump one conversation into a paragraph like this:
"I CAN'T BELIEVE THAT YOU ENTRUSTED ME WITH BEING THE NEXT KING!! I AM A TERRIBLE POLITICIAN!! I LOST THE STUDENT BODY PRESIDENT RACE TO A HANDICAPPED KID!!" "Now son, I see that you are surprised by this decision but, our family MUST stay in power!"

but, to make it easier, write it like this:
"I CAN'T BELIEVE THAT YOU ENTRUSTED ME WITH BEING THE NEXT KING!! I AM A TERRIBLE POLITICIAN!! I LOST THE STUDENT BODY PRESIDENT RACE TO A HANDICAPPED KID!!" I said.
"Now son, I see that you are surprised by this decision but, our family MUST stay in power!" My father said.

basically like that, whenever a person speaks, give them a "paragraph" to themselves

[puppetmasterpossession]

Originally Posted by Cloukora

I've noticed you clump one conversation into a paragraph like this:
"I CAN'T BELIEVE THAT YOU ENTRUSTED ME WITH BEING THE NEXT KING!! I AM A TERRIBLE POLITICIAN!! I LOST THE STUDENT BODY PRESIDENT RACE TO A HANDICAPPED KID!!" "Now son, I see that you are surprised by this decision but, our family MUST stay in power!"

but, to make it easier, write it like this:
"I CAN'T BELIEVE THAT YOU ENTRUSTED ME WITH BEING THE NEXT KING!! I AM A TERRIBLE POLITICIAN!! I LOST THE STUDENT BODY PRESIDENT RACE TO A HANDICAPPED KID!!" I said.
"Now son, I see that you are surprised by this decision but, our family MUST stay in power!" My father said.

basically like that, whenever a person speaks, give them a "paragraph" to themselves

I was wondering whether I should do that or not, thanks for clearing that up.

[puppetmasterpossession]

Chapter 3

The Protest

Beau

As we walked down the street to get to the castle, I decided to talk to the girl. "So, uh, whats your name?" I asked her
"Jackie" She answered. "What's yours?"
"Umm, Beau."
"Oh, cool."
"Yup..." I answered, feeling kinda awkward.

"You know, I can't believe that someone would actually do something like this. I mean, we all know that once the king dies another one is elected. I can't believe that he just designated his son being the next one." She ranted to me.
"Ya, its a pretty dumb thing that he did, it seems like our king would be smar-" I said as she cut me off.

"We're here." She said to me.
"Oh, uh, we are?" I looked up and saw the golden palace, covered in red flags. I then looked down and saw the huge crowd that had surrounded the castle. We must have been late because the prince was at the top of the castle talking about something that I couldn't understand. Then I saw the King David Dawa go to the top of the castle. He stood there and said some stuff that I still couldn't understand. He then said something and soldiers came marching around us. "Crap." I say under my breath. I attempt to run out of the circle of soldiers, but I am to late. One soldier puts his arm out and knocks me out. In about 5 minutes I wake up and see Jackie arguing with the soldier. I stand up and look at her. "Hey, Jackie, stop it. You are gonna get yourself hurt!" I say to her. She hadn't noticed I stood up, and when I said that it scared her. It scared her enough that her fist flew forward and hit the soldier. "JACKIE!!!" I screamed. The soldier hit her with the butt of the gun and knocked her down. Then he shot the gun. Jackie is dead. I watch as her dad runs over to her dead body and cries over it. Her mom runs up right next to her and hugs her tightly with her dad. "What are you doing? YOU KNOW THE RULES!!!" The guard then shoots both of her parents. "No touching the dead before she is rid of any diseases."

3 dead bodies in front of me.

Most of the protesters had brought weapons. I had too. I reached in my shoe and pulled out 2 stiletto knifes. The citizens then began their attack. We all turned around and rushed the soldiers. The soldier, armed with guns, began shooting into the crowd. I begin to cut up any soldier I see. The ONE person in the world, that I had ever met that has gotten me that well, is now dead. I suddenly went into a fit of rage. I felt like the Hulk. My euphoria charging, adrenalin surging, blood pumping, I felt like nothing could stop me. Suddenly a shock went through my body, almost like lightning, but it didn't hurt. Then my fingers started to burn, the nails began to recede, and my bones began to grow. They popped out of my skin, and they were sharper then nails. Then the skin regrew around them. My fingers now looked like knives. "What th-" Just then a swing of a gun came at my face. I get hit and fall to the ground. I then stand up and swing my fingers across his face. His face now had five inch deep cuts across it. The man falls to the ground dead. I then start to run, slicing anyone in my way. Once I get away from the commotion, I sit down next to a tree. "WHAT THE HELL IS HAPPENING?" I say. I lay down and calm down. As I do my fingers recede to their normal state.

[Cloukora]

No problem

and the stories getting even more interesting
I had a feeling that girl that got shot in the 2nd chapter was her

[Kiseki]

Haha Jackie... inspired by Jacq aka CrackFat? xD
Nice new chapter. Very good.

[puppetmasterpossession]

Haha, ya I actually saw his name in his siggy and I was like, "Thats a cool name, Imma use it."

EDIT:I have the third chapter, but I left it at school, I'll get it tomorrow and put it up.