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Old 08-04-2010, 06:26 PM   #1
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I got this from another site as the start. I am going to add on with chapters as I think of more.

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Born in Amegakure the 16th of January 19 years ago, Yoshitsune entered this world as a child to two shinobi parents, Minoru Nue and Kaede Nue. Yoshitsune had a happy childhood, his family thankfully spared the dangers of Ninja life. As he started growing ever bigger, Yoshitune's parents started to notice odd things about their son. Unlike most babies who have yet to understand the concept of a world existing outside of what they can see, Yoshitsune never cried when his parents left his sight. Those moments would instead happen whenever one of the parents traveled a few kilometer from the house. Being born to a family of ninja, Yoshitsune had his training started at the early age of 5. Exercises disguised as games stood on the agenda, and Yoshitsune delighted in completing these tasks set before him, accelerating his growth towards becoming a ninja. Eventually enough symptoms of Yoshitsune's ability shone through, marking him as a bearer of the Jigo Rai'un bloodline. The discovery was slightly tumultuous to his parents, especially since Yoshitsune was the first person within their quite large family to bear this peculiar kekkei genkai.

Entering the academy at age 6, the years spent in school were a happy blur of new friends, new experiences, and new happenings for Yoshitsune. He even experienced his first broken bone, his first camping trip, and then later, his first kiss, at 10 years of age, with one of the persons that would later end up on the same ninja cell as him, a ninja born of one shinobi and one civilian parent, Shinju Akatoshi. Their relationship never evolved farther than that, something that Yoshitsune regrets to this day, having had a crush on her that never could be answered. Passing the Genin-exam and being on team 3 together with Shinju Ayatoshi and another classmate, Akio Takanada, and led by the jounin Chinoe Utuzumi, Yoshitsune was one of the teams selected to join the chuunin exams after having been held back a year.

The exams started good, the test being passed with a breeze thanks to Akio's intelligence and strength in deception along with Shinju's mastery of ninjutsu and Yoshitsune's sealing constructs, learned specifically for the exams. The problem began in the second round. Fighting another team for their right to pass, Yoshitsunes towering physique, being a whooping 165 cm tall at the age of 13 and a half, led to him attracting more enemy fire and suffering a nasty, diagonal, sword slash across his abdomen. Shinju being the medical ninja of their squad interjected and saved Yoshitsune while crying and begging him to live on. The team made it into the tower and after 4 awkward days of rest it was time for the preliminaries. That was the moment that defined Yoshitsune. having quite easily overwhelmed and won over his opponent thanks to his fuuinjutsu-taijutsu hybridized fighting style, Yoshitsune could do nothing but watch as the Konoha genin opened the gates and went on a cold-blooded rampage in her match against Shinju. Shinju was caught after a valiant effort and quickly dismembered courtesy of the cold, powerful strikes of the user of the Hachimon Tonku. The match was quickly stopped as it became clear that Shinju could no longer fight and was dead or dying, but not before the genin had finished it's macabre display, forever dooming Shinju to the life of a cripple, no arms, no legs. That life ended soon afterwards, despite the medical efforts to save her, Shinju passed away on the medical table. Akio, not having fought his match yet, was unfocused and ended up losing to his opponent.

After a month of diligent training under Chinoe-sensei it was time for the Finals, the usual fashion of showing of the cream of the crop in front of dignitaries from all around. Yoshitsune's first fight which was against an Iwa-nin, was just hard enough that he had to work and commit himself to it, unfortunately showing more of his skills in taijutsu and planning than he had intended. On his way up to the competitors terrace, he bumped into the person to be his next opponent, the very Konoha genin to have killed Shinju, Jun Maboroshi. Jun said only a few words in the moment they passed each other but those words sealed Honejeiks fate. "That weak bit(h of a teammate you had deserved what I gave her." Jun trounced her opponent with little difficulty, using a strange taijutsu with brutal efficiency to make her opponent almost completely harmless and playing with the boy in question before brutally finishing the match with a kick to her opponent's back, most likely crippling the young Kiri genin for life. Yoshitsune had stood at the rails, completely unmoving, watching the match, and those that followed with a completely uncaring expression, a cold face made of stone. The cold facade hid an even colder rage that tried to temper a flaming fury that had almost erupted during that brief meeting. The time finally came and as soon as the match started, Yoshitsune threw himself at Jun, pummeling the Ame genin as much as he could before Jun managed to find enough of a gap that the strange opening stance of her taijutsu could be initiated. The battle dragged on, fist versus fist and the clash of suiton and raiton jutsu. Having been caught on one of Jun's traps, Yoshitsune sported a deep wound all around his shoulder courtesy of razor-wire that could have severed his arm. The blood-loss was starting to get to Yoshitsune when he performed what looked like a desperate final charge, managing to knock Jun back a few meters so that the Konoha genin was positioned right over the place Yoshitsune had stood before the fight started. Yoshitsune suffered a jagged slash over his throat as a reward, thanks to Jun's primary weapon, razor sharp wires, crashing back into the tree with a smile. The way he fell against the trunk was what saved him as pressure was put on the wound, enough pressure that the bleeding slowed to a trickle instead of the gushing it had done just previously. Using the last remaining strength he had, Yoshitsune formed the half-ram seal with his still functioning left arm and detonated the 10 exploding tags he had planted on the spot he started the match through a creative use of chakra and his feet. The detonation came just as the proctor was to declare Jun as the victor, and after that Yoshitsune blacked out. Yoshitsune was awarded with the rank of chuunin as he had shown himself capable of keeping a cool head even to the point when his life was almost over. But Yoshitsune did not know this until he woke up a month later, having slipped into a coma due to the blood loss. After a year of rehabilitation, Yoshitsune started to go on missions with other chuunin ninja, growing more and more distant from Akio and Chinoe-sensei. As a way of coping with the grief of never taking it further with Shinju, Yoshitsune resigned himself to the "no strings attached" lifestyle, drinking hard when he could and taking pleasure in the opposite gender equally often.

After serving faithfully as a chuunin for 4 years, the then 17 year old Yoshitsune was promoted to ANBU after his most recent success in infiltrating a gathering for the underground leaders of the elemental countries, the crime lords, the corrupt business men and officials that ensure that the illegal branch of the world keeps on thriving. Having gone undercover within a complex henge as the boy-toy of an informant, Yoshitsune and the team of ANBU that he wroked with had managed to poison and/or otherwise physically assassinate all attendees, leaving a dead body-double corpse-doll behind to replace the still living informant who would start her new life at a different location. His "graduation" mission being a complete success, Yoshitsune got respected within the ANBU and his stellar track-record has kept his reputation clean, despite the practice of "comforting" dying enemies.

Nowadays, Yoshitsune is still within the ANBU, serving as the private force of the Amekage. He lives on his own, and although he is sometimes visited by Chinoe-sensei and Akio, he keeps to himself. But Yoshitsune is troubled. He has been seeing this woman that strongly resembles Shinju at different occasions. What is happening within Amegakure?


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Bloodline Name: Jigo Rai’un (=Whispering Thundercloud)

Clan Classification: Bloodline Limit, loosely affiliated clan.

Kekkei Genkai: Innate

Element: N/A

Description: The Jigo Rai’un is a kekkei genkai that seemingly transcends relations and blood, being spread out over a very large geographical area. This has led to the rise of several different branches spread over the elemental countries.

Dress: None, but members tend to have a badge or mark in the form of a thundercloud sending out a lightning bolt to denote themselves as bearing the Jigo Rai’un.

Unique Insignia: N/A

Traditions: Being very spread out, the bearers of the Jigo Rai’un tend to group together in small compounds all over the world. Each compound is willing to house a bearer of the Jigo Rai’un that has not slain any other bearers, despite the fact that each compound is fiercely loyal to the village they reside in. This is because there seems to be some kind of genetic camaraderie between each bearer of the bloodline. This is indeed strange as the bloodline itself seems to just occur, most of the time only happening in one person of a family, sometimes in all. The specific traditions tend to vary quite a lot between each branch, signifying the difference between each founder. These are the current villages with a branch within them: Kumogakure, Konohagakure, Iwagakure, Amegakure, and Takigakure.

Clan History: No one knows what it was that caused newborn children to start developing the Jigo Rai’un, but the first recorded case of this bloodline occurring is dated to 50 years ago when a child born to shinobi parents without bloodlines started showing signs at the age of 3. That child eventually grew to be the founder of the Kumo branch of the Jigo Rai’un. Within the next 30 years, branches had started popping up all over the elemental countries.

Kekkei Genkai Information:
The kekkei genkai seems to work by creating a sort of field around the bearer that allows them to sense bio-electric signatures. It is possible to know when one has entered such a field as it will create a brief feeling of the hair in the back of your neck standing on end. This feeling is very brief and it only occurs when entering the field. Here are the specifications for this kekkei genkai:
  • Stage 1 - The basic stage - what you start with.
    • The ability to sense the bio-electric signature of anything with a nervous system within a radius of 500 meters 1 kilometers away if the sense is focused like a narrow cone (the cone being a maximum of 50 meters wide at the farthest point.
    • Sense everything that happens within the limits of the 10 meter radius spherical field that surrounds them. The knowledge is presented as a sort of 3d-map that is "felt", for a lack of better words. Strong electrical interference may cause this field to be almost completely put out of play.
    • Weakly improved reaction speed due to a slightly superior nervous system, giving the ability to react quicker.
    • Mildly manipulate ones own nervous systems to, for example, dampen pain and create/enhance pleasure. This can be likened to a temporary +1 boost to constitution against pain only. The post must detail that the nervous impulses are suppressed or enhanced for this ability to work.
  • Stage 2 - the intermediate stage
    • The ability to sense the bio-electric signature of anything with a nervous system within a radius of 1500 meters, or 2500 meters away if the sense is focused like a narrow cone (the cone being a maximum of 100 meters wide at the farthest point.
    • Sense everything that happens within the limits of the 20 meter radius spherical field that surrounds them. The knowledge is presented as a sort of 3d-map that is "felt", for a lack of better words. Strong electrical interference may cause this field to become very fuzzy, meaning small animals and such things might pass through unnoticed.
    • moderately improved reaction speed due to a superior nervous system, giving the ability to react much quicker.
    • Moderately manipulate ones own nervous systems to, for example, dampen pain and create/enhance pleasure. This can be likened to a temporary +2 boost to constitution against pain only. The post must detail that the nervous impulses are suppressed or enhanced for this ability to work.
  • Stage 3 - The Final Stage
    • The ability to sense the bio-electric signature of anything with a nervous system within a radius of 3000 meters.
    • Sense everything that happens within the limits of the 30 meter radius spherical field that surrounds them. The knowledge is presented as a sort of 3d-map that is "felt", for a lack of better words. Strong electrical interference may cause this field to become very fuzzy, meaning metals and such things might pass through unnoticed.
    • Improved reaction speed due to a vastly superior nervous system gives them the ability to react at a mere moments notice.
    • Greatly manipulate ones own nervous systems to, for example, dampen pain and create/enhance pleasure. This can be likened to a temporary +3 boost to constitution against pain only. The post must detail that the nervous impulses are suppressed or enhanced for this ability to work.

Limitations: The muscle of those that possesses this kkg seems to build more to speed while seemingly sacrificing strength. That might have something to do with how the nervous system is built but this is so far unknown. Strong electrical activity (an ordinary lightning strike, etc) can disrupt the field at higher stages and almost completely take the field out of function on lower levels.
May try to use this as a KKG in the next war for the WS, please don't steal it.
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Old 08-05-2010, 02:23 AM   #2
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Can't wait to see more. Cool character!
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Old 08-06-2010, 07:49 AM   #3
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Well I am not the one to be saying cool to. I am just the one who is gonna write the battles and missions and such. I got the character from a different site.
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Not sure if I should post here but I have no idea how to navigate the forum. Anywho I am posting because this person RIP'd this character. He had no permission from the author of the character to use it. I believe this persons RIP'd RP character should be deleted and have him make a completely new one from scratch. Or by chance he can get permission to use the character from the author would be fine. Though as the author is quite angry for such an act to take place I dont think he will give permission to the RIPer. If the RIPer wants to ask for permission to use this character he can contact Minoru (Yoshitsune Nue).
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As I am not allowed to post links This next post is just spam.
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The forum that this person took the character from is originally from the following link http://narutouzumaki-rpg.coolbb.net/t28303-yoshitsune-nue-anbu-finished

You can send Minoru a PM if youd like to appologize at the following link. http://narutouzumaki-rpg.com/memberl...ewprofile&u=64
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