The Scribe's Corner

[Sabra Kusabana]

I'm starting this thread as a less structured alternative to the Saga thread that so many people have taken interest in. If you want to write something go for it.

There are few rules:
You cannot use any character from the anime or manga.

Don't make your characters gods, they have weaknesses, follow the original story as an example. Everyone has something they do well, but there's also something that makes them vulnerable.

Respect the other writers, if someone does something that steps beyond what you're comfortable with, tell them, but do it without using inappropriate language. Avoid insults, slang, and cursing. Arguements happen, but we're trying to keep things civil, not desolve into namecalling.

You don't have to submit a sample or anything for this thread, just jump in. Without further ado I present a starting point, an example:

The sand blew across his face as he stepped into the city. He'd been gone for a long time. Sent to the mighty desert strongehold of Suna over seven years again, he'd missed this place. The man let the suitcases he carryed fall to the ground as the gates were closed behind him. The city had grown sense he'd been gone. The short adobe brick houses stretched out before him, people walked the street oblivious to the man.

Hitori turned his head to look down the streets of his home town. This was his chance to relax for a few days before he had to return to the ninja village. His vest felt terribly heavy in the beating sun of the desert. He snatched his suitcases up again and dashed down the sandy streets toward his old home. He hit the door with a great yell that rang within the building. "Mother, Sister I'm home!"

The young man watched in joy as his younger sister came into his veiw from the kitchen. Her wide sky blue eyes shined as she jumped at him, holding the man in a tight hug. He held her back breathing in the scent of fresh bread from her light brown hair. He let his green eyes flutter closed at the smell, he was home.

His little sister pulled back and touched his face, letting her hand slid up and brush his aubrun curls out of his eyes. He stared at her, she'd grown up sense last he'd seen her. She was only ten then, now at 17 she looked so much more like their mother. "You filled out well." "So did you Nii-san." The man blushed lightly. He was home for his birthday, he would turn twenty tomorrow and he noted the smeer of icing on her apron as a sign she was making his cake.

The woman hugged him again, and lead him to his old room. "Mom will be back in a while, she went to the market." Hitori looked the couple of inchs down at his sister. "Thank you, Tsuin." The woman smiled up at him and then fluttered off for the kitchen again leaving the young chunin to his thoughts. He hung his vest on the door and threw his suitcases on the bed. Looking around the room he smiled at all his old childish things. Leave it to his mother not to change anything.

He stretched and sighed as he went to wash up. Traveling thru the desert had taken it out of him. He only had till the end of the week before he had to do it again. He was due back in Suna after that to accept his next mission, but till then he could relax.

Suna, the Village Hidden in the Wind, the Sand Village, so many names for one place. This and the small outlaying towns throughout the desert is where I'm going to be setting my part of this story. Anyone can start where they want to, but Suna is a place we know some about from the Anime, and Manga.

In Suna there is no formal ninja Academy, but they're trying to build one. The young ninja right now seem to apprintice to older ninja for training. The skills are handed down within the family, and from the elders. The city is ruled by both the Kazekage, and a high counsel of elders and politicians. The village is in a friendly union with the Leaf, but thier relationship with the other villages is at best neutral. Most building ins Suna are made from sand and stone found in the surrounding area, and it's surrounded by a high wall to help prevent sandstorm damage.

Beyond that the canvas is blank and anyone can paint it how they want to. It'll be fun, and interesting. Come on, anyone who wants to can jump right on in. If you just want to read that's fine, but if you get the itch to add something go for it. Just keep it nice, and enjoy yourselves. I know I look forward to seeing everyone elses writing skills in action!

[Kon]

Originally Posted by Sabra Kusabana

I'm starting this thread as a less structured alternative to the Saga thread that so many people have taken interest in. If you want to write something go for it.

There are few rules:
You cannot use any character from the anime or manga.

Don't make your characters gods, they have weaknesses, follow the original story as an example. Everyone has something they do well, but there's also something that makes them vulnerable.

Respect the other writers, if someone does something that steps beyond what you're comfortable with, tell them, but do it without using inappropriate language. Avoid insults, slang, and cursing. Arguements happen, but we're trying to keep things civil, not desolve into namecalling.

You don't have to submit a sample or anything for this thread, just jump in. Without further ado I present a starting point, an example:

The sand blew across his face as he stepped into the city. He'd been gone for a long time. Sent to the mighty desert strongehold of Suna over seven years again, he'd missed this place. The man let the suitcases he carryed fall to the ground as the gates were closed behind him. The city had grown sense he'd been gone. The short adobe brick houses stretched out before him, people walked the street oblivious to the man.

Hitori turned his head to look down the streets of his home town. This was his chance to relax for a few days before he had to return to the ninja village. His vest felt terribly heavy in the beating sun of the desert. He snatched his suitcases up again and dashed down the sandy streets toward his old home. He hit the door with a great yell that ran within the building. "Mother, Sister I'm home!"

The young man watched in joy as his younger sister came into his veiw from the kitchen. Her wide sky blue eyes shined as she jumped at him, holding the man in a tight hug. He held her back breathing in the scent of fresh bread from her light brown hair. He let his green eyes flutter closed at the smell, he was home.

His little sister pulled back and touched his face, letting her hand slid up and brush his aubrun curls out of his eyes. He stared at her, she'd grown up sense last he'd seen her. She was only ten then, now at 17 she looked so much more like their mother. "You filled out well." "So did you Nii-san." The man blushed lightly. He was home from his birthday, he would turn twenty tomorrow and he noted the smeer of icing on her apron as a sign she was making his cake.

The woman hugged him again, and lead him to his old room. "Mom will be back in a while, she went to the market." Hitori looked the couple of inchs down at his sister. "Thank you, Tsuin." The woman smiled up at him and then fluttered off for the kitchen again leaving the young chunin to his thoughts. He hung his vest on the door and threw his suitcases on the bed. Looking around the room he smiled at all his old childish things. Leave it to his mother not to change anything.

He stretched and sighed as he went to wash up. Traveling thru the desert had taken it out of him. He only had till the end of the week before he had to do it again. He was due back in Suna after that to accept his next mission, but till then he could relax.

Suna, the Village Hidden in the Wind, the Sand Village, so many names for one place. This and the small outlaying towns throughout the desert is where I'm going to be setting my part of this story. Anyone can start where they want to, but Suna is a place we know some about from the Anime, and Manga.

In Suna there is no formal ninja Academy, but they're trying to build one. The young ninja right now seem to apprintice to older ninja for training. The skills are handed down within the family, and from the elders. The city is ruled by both the Kazekage, and a high counsel of elders and politicians. The village is in a friendly union with the Leaf, but thier relationship with the other villages is at best neutral. Most building ins Suna are made from sand and stone found in the surrounding area, and it's surrounded by a high wall to help prevent sandstorm damage.

Beyond that the canvas is blank and anyone can paint it how they want to. It'll be fun, and interesting. Come on, anyone who wants to can jump right on in. If you just want to read that's fine, but if you get the itch to add something go for it. Just keep it nice, and enjoy yourselves. I know I look forward to seeing everyone elses writing skills in action!

why cant we use characters from the manga or anime???????????

[TheViolletteHeart]

Originally Posted by Naruto/Fan Boy

why cant we use characters from the manga or anime???????????

Legal issues.

[Sabra Kusabana]

why cant we use characters from the manga or anime???????????

Because it's in the rules of the forum, we can write whatever we want as long as we don't violate the copyright by using the real characters. We can use the place, or even the justus, but we can't use people.

As V said, it's a legal thing.

Any other questions?

[TheViolletteHeart]

((Okay, since this isn't catching on, I'll try introducing a character.))

The chunin dreamed of adventure. He was sitting on one of the bridges that connected the islands of his land, the Land of Waves. The salty wind that blew in from the sea rushed through his thick black hair. He spent much of his time on beaches and near the water, so his skin was a nice tan.

"Kaito!"

The young man looked up, curiosity in his rich brown eyes. A woman was running towards him. Her blue hair tied back in a thin ponytail flicked up and down behind her.

"Chiyoko, what is it?" Kaito asked.

The female skidded to a halt and tried to catch her breath. "The Kage *pant* was looking for you *pant*. Something about Suna," she finished.

The onyx-haired male stood. "Thank you, Chiyo-chan." He started in the direction of the newly-built Kage mansion.

"Wait, Kaito!"

The chunin turned back. Chiyoko's purple eyes held something mysterious in her gaze.

"What is it?"

The woman bit her lip as if she wanted to say something. She closed her eyes and smiled. "Good luck!"

[Sabra Kusabana]

The meal had been better then he'd had in a long time. Hitori grinned at his mother as he leaned back with a statisfied stretch. "I'm so proud of you," she told him for the upteenth time that evening. "Ah come on I'm only a chunin, I'm slacking." The woman shook her head, "No, your dad never went beyond that, and he had a great life as just a chunin."

The auburn haired man sat up in his chair straighter, looking across the table at a picture sat in place of where the fourth person would be. "Yeah, he did," his eyes flicked to his sister. "Now about that cake." She went without anything else needing to be said. Leaving her mother and brother to talk for a moment.

The woman's old green eyes and faded brown hair looked tired even as her son tried to envision her as she was years before. "Dear have you found a girlfriend yet?" The question left the shy man blushing and waving her off with a hasty reply as Tsuin returned with the cake. "Leave him alone mother." The girl said as she handed her big brother a soft edged knife to cut with. "It's got strawberries in it," she said with a smile.

Hitori cut into the cake with gusto as he took his slice. "It looks great sis, thank you." She bowed his head to her in praise and she laughed as he dug in like a little kid instead of the refined ninja he was supposed to be. "You'll always just be a messy child!" Their mother said a she reached for him with a napkin. "Oh mom!" He fake pulled out of reach, making the old woman smile as he let her catch him to whip his face.

[Viceroy]

I can't help it. I love writing too much. I'm sorry if I seem like old news but I'll add to the story.
Her calves flexed as she stretched foward. When she had finished her stretches walked out into the hallway yelling to her brother who still laid asleep in the next room, "I'll be back in an hour Xiang. And it's your turn to cook breakfast." The chite rolled over in his bed, "Why so early? It's hot as diyu outside Katashi." But the words fell on deaf ears as she had already left.

Katashi stepped out into te street and began a quick stide through the sandy streets. During her morning jog she always became lost in thought. Memories drifted by and plans formed. She had been born in the sand village in the household of a jonin captain. Opposite her brother, she had worked hard all her life to become a formiddable ninja. Every book she read and every technique she tried, but she still was unable to surpass her younger brother. To him everything came naturally. She believed that he was adopted since he looked so different from the rest of the family. In fact he didn't seem to belong to any part of the country. Katashi was short and shaped nicely. Her vigorous training kept her top shape. The raven haired woman usually wore an electric blue kimono cut short above the knees and leggings the wrapped around to her calves.

She finally reached the top of the mountains to the east and stopped. Without breaking a sweat she looked out over the gritty texture that enveloped the horizon. Katashi tied her hair up into a bun and fit a needle into it preparing to sprint down the middle of the village back home. Today she would finalize her training with her grandpa and hopefully reach the Chunin rank by morining.

[Sabra Kusabana]

You're not the only one who's so into the writing, that's why I opened this thread.

Hitori tossed and turned in the small bed of his old home. He was glade to be here, but he suddenly realized why most nin's packed a sleeping bag if they hadn't been to see their family in a long time. He finally gave up on the bed and threw his pillow to the smooth stone floor below. The man sighed at the cool of the ground, this would be so much easier to relax on, as crazy as that sounded, even as he drifted off to sleep.

[TheViolletteHeart]

The Wave's Kage was a strong old man. Under his wrinkled skin, large muscles were still visible. His hair was gray, and even with the bags under his eyes, his black eyes were fierce. The man crossed his arms and leaned over his desk.

He cleared his throat and began. "As you know, the ninja system is still very new in our land. No one has made jounin rank yet, and I am not going to advance anyone who isn't ready.

"However, it does not change the fact that we need allies from other villages. In fact, it amplifies the need for such allies. I have already sent someone to Konoha to reach the hand of friendship, but I have been informed that a tie with Suna would also be beneficial."

"So...You're sending me to Suna?" Kaito cut in.

The Kage coughed. "Yes. I know it is a long journey, but the mission is important."

[Sabra Kusabana]

Tsuin clung to her big brother's arm as they traveled thru the market. He was in search of some things to take back with him when this trip was over, but the girl kept distracting him. "So was mom right? Did you find a girlfriend yet?" She questioned up at him even as she pulled him toward a stand with lots of shined stones and crystals. "That's none of your business!" Hitori whined at her with a fake grin.

"Oh yes it is!" She released him long enough to grab up a pretty purple geode. "It is my business if my big brother gets involved with someone! Even if you're not here where it happens!" She told him as she moved to another stone. The man just sighed, this was what he came home for?

[TheViolletteHeart]

Kaito changed into his ninja garb. He had a skin-hugging black shirt with sleeves that reached his elbows and tight black pants of the same material that reached his ankles. He wore a navy-blue FLAK vest over the shirt. The brunet's headband was secured over his forehead and black sandals were on his feet.

He set off to get a boat that would take him over the sea to where his running journey would begin. The chunin was surprised to see a familiar face when he reached the docks.

"Chiyoko!?"

The young woman smiled at him. "Yep. I was chosen to go to Konoha."

"That's great! Hey, why don't you wait for me there and we can travel home together."

Chiyoko eyes sparkled for a moment and she smiled. "I would love that!"

Kaito wondered what the look in her eyes meant, but tried not to dwell on it too much. "Hey, good luck, Chiyo-chan!"

[Viceroy]

Xiang rolled out of bed budened with soreness from the night before. The blondie had tied to keep up with his sister's workout regiment the day before but failed miserably. The only wokout he needed was walking to the bath house and making breakfast. Cooking was the only thing he enjoyed doing and he wasn't half bad at it. He took a large rock cod from the cooler. They had brought back tons of fish from their trip to the wave country last year. As he set to work he thought about making Chunin. It was as far as many people got but it was still an honor to bear the rank. Today would be the day of decision and he felt confident, then again he always felt confident his very name meant lucky. His whole life had been one giant ocean of fortune.

As he got dressed he heard the doo slide shut and his sister walk into the kitchen. He walked out and met her in the dining room where the food wait. "You've really outdone yourself today Xixi." she smiled, "Maybe I won't embarass you too bad today." Xiang sat down and started eating ravenously talking in between bites, "Have you heard mama or papa yet?" "No, but I'm sure they'll be back soon." "They said they would be home before I become Chunin." "And they will be since you're not becoming Chunin today." Xiang stopped eating and looked up curiously, "What do you mean?" "Oh nothing. Don't worry about it Xixi."

[TheViolletteHeart]

The sail was boring, but didn't last more than a day. Kaito kept himself busy by helping (or atleast trying to) with maitenance. Once the boat docked, however, he only gave a brief word of thanks before he was off.

'I wonder what Suna is like...'

[Sabra Kusabana]

I'd hoped to get a few hits from others by now... Oh well I'll add another small part in a while, till then I'll just bump it up to keep it visible.

[Nick Tasogare]

I might try to make a small character in awhile, if that's ok. I figured we could write our main story, and then use this as a spot to write out our own seperate stories, and maybe have them criss-cross.

[Sabra Kusabana]

Not so sure we wanna have threads cross, but I figured sense our main thread gets so intense, and had so many people that we could use this for more casual writing. I also didn't plan on making people have to submit something to join this one. I'm hoping it will really get to hopping and people can just come to enjoy posting or reading whatever. It's a refreshing break from the constant story drive we're going for with the Saga series.

[Nick Tasogare]

Originally Posted by Sabra Kusabana

Not so sure we wanna have threads cross, but I figured sense our main thread gets so intense, and had so many people that we could use this for more casual writing. I also didn't plan on making people have to submit something to join this one. I'm hoping it will really get to hopping and people can just come to enjoy posting or reading whatever. It's a refreshing break from the constant story drive we're going for with the Saga series.

Yea, you're right, but we can't really stop people if they want to make their own story in a seperate thread with characters they make here, right? I think it would be cool if others were to do that. Kind of motivating.

[Nick Tasogare]

Originally Posted by Sabra Kusabana

Not so sure we wanna have threads cross, but I figured sense our main thread gets so intense, and had so many people that we could use this for more casual writing. I also didn't plan on making people have to submit something to join this one. I'm hoping it will really get to hopping and people can just come to enjoy posting or reading whatever. It's a refreshing break from the constant story drive we're going for with the Saga series.

Oh, and I didn't mean have "Shinobi: The Saga" cross with this, I meant the way we started, starting with our seperate characters, and then having them merge, if other people wanted, they could do that.

[TheViolletteHeart]

Was going for having Kaito meet Sabra's characters during his mission to Suna.

[Sabra Kusabana]

Originally Posted by TheViolletteHeart

Was going for having Kaito meet Sabra's characters during his mission to Suna.

I was betting you were planning that.

Hitori looked around the boxes we was carrying, trying to see his siter. "Tsuin what in the world are you getting all this for?" He whined as the girl paid another merchant. She skipped over to him and grinned up at his questioning face. "Why I'm going back with you when you leave for Suna, silly." Her singsong voice bounced as she told him.

The young chunin at first stared at her with his mouth open in shock, then he tried to speak and it came out a garbled mess. He swollowed his confusion, and stilled his gaze on her as he balanced her packages. "You are not. What made you think that anyway?" He finally managed out.

The girl grinned at him still, like she knew some secret he didn't. "You'll have to ask momma about that." She said before prancing off down the street toward their home. Hitori sighed and looked up in time to see the top of the stack of good tremble. He ended up with the whole pile falling before he could do anything about it. Looking down at the mess he rolled his eyes toward where his sister had gone and mumbled, "Why me?"