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Old 06-03-2010, 09:48 AM   #1
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Chapter 1:The Beginning I Know
~age 3~
I woke up to the screaming of my mom and the yelling of my dad. Suddenly I heard something liquid dropping onto the floor, the sound of blood, and a sickening thud, the sound of my mother falling to the ground dead, as her screams slowly faded away. Dad was screaming "Monster! You monster!" and "Don't hurt our only daughter or I'll kill you!" Then i heard a snap and again the sound of blood falling onto the kitchen floor and the sickening thud of my dad's body falling to the ground. Someone was standing above me and he was covered in my parents blood. He jerked back my head and it hurt, almost as much as what he did to my parents, the only people i knew in my whole life. Then he bit down on my neck, hard. After him feeding of me for 15 seconds he pulled back, smashed a window and jumped out, only leaving a three year old girl crying, and two dead bodies, one of her mother, and the other of her father. Rosy, my Shetland sheep dog, got up on my bed and curled up into a ball in front of me, letting me hold onto her neck and cry. After 5 minutes of me crying a black wolf came up to my bed and put his head onto the edge of my bed, and just stared at me. I put a hand on his head and I suddenly felt calm, 'what's the point of worrying if I have a wolf and a dog to protect me?' a short while later I fell asleep.
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Old 06-03-2010, 10:21 AM   #2
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you need to write more
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Old 06-03-2010, 10:28 AM   #3
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Old 06-03-2010, 12:10 PM   #4
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Chapter 2:Sensei
~continued from chapter 1~
A man picked me up and carried me to his house and laid me down on his couch. The next morning I woke up to the black wolf licking my face and Rosy barking. "hey Rosy,quit will you?" I looked at the black wolf who was running around in circles and laughed. A man with black hair and blue eyes walked in. "I see your awake now. And don't worry I'm not the one who attacked you and you family" "Rosy." Rosy looked up and saw me glancing from her to the man. She started growling at the man and the black wolf started growling at her."Shadow! Quit that!" Shadow, the wolf, quit growling at Rosy. "Rosy you too." "Which do you perfer? Canines(dogs) or felines(cats)?" "Canines." "Have you been more at ease with dogs more than people?" "Yeah, I live near the top of the mountain and we raise sheep there," I said as i put a hand on top of Rosy's head. "You mean you and Rosy?" "Yeah it was always me and Rosy, mom and dad were either fighting over me or wrighting, they never wondered where I went or what I did." "They why did you cry for them?" "Even if they didn't care about me I cared about them." "what were their last words." "I didn't hear my mother say anything but my dad said 'Don't hurt our only daughter or I'll kill you!'" "I guess you don't have anywhere to go now exept your house, which I guess you don't wanna go to the bad memories?" I shook my head. "Would you like to stay with me?" I noded my head in reply. "Would you like to train incase some one hurts you or other people?" I nodded again. "First lesson starts now," he said as he tied a bandana around my eyes. "Live without one of your senses." He walked around the room. "Try to get me." I stayed silent and listened to his foot steps and reliezed he was going counter clockwise. I pictured the room before he put the bandana over my eyes and knew that there was an end table behind me and i thought 'well he will eventualy go infront of it, I can jump off it and tackle him, but i have to be silent or he'll know right away where I am and what I'm planing'. "Don't worry I made it a fair fight, I have one on too." He's right before I had to jump. I got up and didn't make a sound. I got on the table and, one more step, and I jumped and got him. "haha, a preety sharp minded girl to," he said as he took my bandana off. "Time for you to get some sleep" I got up and walked to the couch.
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Old 06-03-2010, 12:23 PM   #5
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Wow its pretty good. Keep it up.
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Old 06-03-2010, 12:27 PM   #6
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Old 06-03-2010, 12:54 PM   #7
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Old 06-03-2010, 02:15 PM   #8
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i don't know if i should wright more...what do you think
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Old 06-03-2010, 02:19 PM   #9
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yep i look forward to the continuation
well its up to you twilight
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Old 06-03-2010, 02:22 PM   #10
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write is spelt like that...sorry its bugging me...sure...
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Old 06-03-2010, 02:37 PM   #11
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well it's spelled not spelt xD and ok
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well i would encourage it ^_^

and spelt is wheat
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well i would encourage it ^_^

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ok*writes more*
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Chapter 3: Training For Exams
~age 10~
I woke with a start and got dressed quickly. "Sensei! I'm going to train with Rosy out side!" "Okay! I'll call you in when it's time to go train," Sensei said as i ran out the door, still barefoot. "Rosy come on!" Me and Rosy went to the back yard which had two trees, and five dummies, one as if a dog had beat up on it. "Rosy go train too," I said as I started to train on one of the dummies. Rosy growled at the dummy that had bite marks all over it, them attacked it the kept jumping back and forth attacking the dummy. One hour later Sensei came out to bring us to the training grounds, where we will be put to the test, and found me and Rosy curled up under a tree, asleep. "Hey wake up it's time" "huh, oh yeah," I said as i got up quickly. "better get your shoes on." "but I'll be better without them." "they have a written part too and that's when you need the shoes to get in." "oh, alright," I said as I put on my shoes. "Can Rosy and Shadow come?" "sure" "come on you two lazy bums." They got off the couch and with Rosy next to me and Shadow next to Sensei, we headed off.
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Chapter 4:Exams
when we got there they were just about to close the doors but they saw us and left it open. "Animals are not allowed into this building," one of the men said. "okay Rosy stay here with these men and don't leave, I'll be coming back" Rosy sat down and I went inside. I got 100% on the written part of the test, now we just had to do the physical part. I got in line and waited my turn and when my turn came up I took off my shoes and closed my eyes. I "watched" with my ears. Duck, dodge by going behind the enemy, trip the enemy, trip the one behind me, kick the one to my left in the stomach, while he's bent over knee him in the face, get behind the one behind me which was to my left original by back flipping over his head, and kick him in the back paralyzing him. "never once have we had any participant complete all three parts of the test in one, and in just under a minute!" "what were the three tests?" "how silent you could be, how well without sight, and combat." "I guess I'm done?" " yes." I opened my eyes and smiled. "truly amazing," one of the judges muttered. Sensei and I walked home the way we came here. I went straight to my room to draw one of the most interesting people that I saw there. I asked Sensei who it was when I finished. "Why that's Vampire Lycan, why do you ask?" "just wanted to know, he was interesting." The next day my results came in. "Rosy go see what Sensei wants please." Rosy went to Sensei and came back with a piece of paper. "Yes! I got 90% on the test and 100% on the physical!" Sensei came in. "So who do you want to turn you?""You Sensei!" Sensei was by my side in a second and moved my hair out of the way and tilted my head and bit down, just as hard as the first vampire who bit me. "ow, Sensei!" He just bit harder. I started to cry. "SENSEI!" He pulled back once one of my tears touched him. "You'll start changing soon. Try to stay calm while you are." That's when the fangs started coming out. Rosy jumped onto my bed and I clung onto her until the pain passed. Suddenly it stopped and all that was left was a thirst. "You should be thirst, come on," he said as he got up. I wiped the tears off my face. "Where are we going?" "To the feeders*"

*Feeders means people who willingly give blood
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yours is very similar to VL's but then u r his sis ^^
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lol his story is what inspired me xD *works on chapter 5*
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i has writer's block T_T
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well just take some time to think itll come to ya
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well just take some time to think itll come to ya
All I know is that at the feeders place
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I guess I'll just make a character profile for her while I think
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