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Sasori Hatori, Legend of the Grand Lightning Shinobi (Fanfic / Plz comment)
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Re: Sasori Hatori, Legend of the Grand Lightning Shinobi (Fanfic / Plz comment)
The Awakening (Prologue)
Ch. 1 The Aoi
A huge explosion crackled through the air, sounds of metal grinding and hitting surrounded the area. I was standing behind, covering a team of medical ninja. Three kunai came flying out of the forest, I quickly jumped in front of the incoming attack, and deflected it with my sword. Two ninja assassin’s protruded out of the shadows. One held a large, bulky sword, and wore a black trench coat, the other held two katana’s, and wore the same outfit. They both leaped towards me, and I quickly engaged them, our weapon’s making contact, time after time. It was hard trying to keep up with their movement. I sent an electrical current through my blade, and struck their weapons. After contact their weapons were destroyed. They both backed away, startled, then retreated into the darkness. I turned towards the medical ninja. They have finished healing the wounded, and were finally able to retreat back to safety. We moved quickly through the thick forest, avoiding enemy contact if necessary. I then felt an ominous chakra, emitting from ahead. We immediately stopped, and I went ahead, checking for any dangers. Their was a loud scream, then silence. I ducked behind a fallen tree, peering over at the four figures’ ahead. There was a man, who looked cold, as if he had no heart. Then there were three lightning shinobi, all with weapons drawn. They all began to attack the man, he was fast, and quickly fended off the three lightning ninja. They fell, as quickly as the battle started, it was ended. One of the ninja began to move, and the man turned to the weakened ninja. He lifted her up by the neck, griping tightly. A grin reached across his face, I couldn’t take anymore, I quickly jumped the tree and began to assault the man.
He turned to me and threw the girl across the field. And grabbed my arm and flipped me over on my back, and then raised his arm, and began to bring it down, I rolled out of the way, and leaped back on to my feat. And quickly drew my sword. “Humph….your good, I’ll give you that, what is your name boy?” the man asked me. “Sasori Hatori, yours?” I replied. “Inohu Mezukage, leader of the Aoi.” “Aoi?” I said in confusion. “We are a band of mercenaries’, all who have no family, no friend’s or future.” He said clenching his fist, “And we have been hired to attack the lightning village” I stepped back, inching towards the injured ninja. “Too bad you’re a member of the lightning, or I would considered recruiting you, but unfortunately, I must kill you” Inohu drew a huge executioner blade from his back with one arm, I could tell he was going to be a challenge.
Ch. 2 A shinobi's will
He leaped towards me, bringing down the huge blade, I jumped out of the way, and then struck back with my own weapon, and he was able to deflect it. He drew back his arm, and threw a powerful punch, nearly knocking me uncouncess. Before I could blink, the man was already over me, sword high in the air. He began to bring it down with heavy force. I pulled my sword in front of me, deflecting the huge weapon. He pulled back the blade and began to bring it down again; I rolled away quickly and leaped back on my feet. Our swords kept clashing and grinding never stopped making contact. The duel lasted for what seemed hours. He slashed his sword horizontally, quickly leaped back, nearly avoiding the huge blade. I was out of breath, my body hurt, and my arms ached. But the man looked as if he just came from a comfterble nap. He vanished, I couldn't see him anywhere. A felt a sharp pain in my right shoulder, I looked down and it was the blade of a dagger, a shiver went up my spine as I heard the man speak, "It's about time I ended this..." He twisted the blade, and I screamed out in pain. He then sent me flying across the battle field, I came down, hitting the ground hard, and I landed next to the girl from earlier, I could see she was still alive, breathing, but uncouncess. I couldn’t let it end here not yet, not after coming this far. I began to get up, struggling with the pain in my body. I could barely stand, my vision began to blur, and the image of the, man began to disappear. I was loosing too much blood. "Boy, why don't you just die!" The man roared. I began to assault him, but then there was a heavy force in my chest, and I was knocked back down to the ground. I began to stand back up, but it was more difficult to try. I felt something Grab ma arm, it was the girl, she was crying, eye's were wide. "Pl..Please......stop, no more, I won't let another ninja fall because of me." Their was sadness in her voice, and hearing her made me furious. I stood back up, and looked back at the man. "How many times do I have to knock you down, boy?!" He said clenching his fist. "B-Because, I made a vow, to protect all the lightning shinobi, even if I shall fall ...I will fight till the last drop of blood leave's my body!" The man screamed and began to come after me, but this time I was able to see him, as soon as he disappeared, I could easily find him. It was much easier to dodge, I could read every movement of his, and I was able to anticipate every one of his attacks, this must be the final activation of the Hatori's kekkei-Genkkei, the Lakugan. I found my speed and strength were increased, and the same for the rest of my abilities’. He was right in front of me, and began to swing his arm; I ducked and pulled my sword down, and thrust forward as hard as my body would let me. I felt something wet, fall to my face. It was blood, the very same blood coming from the man's chest. I retrieved my sword, and the man's body fell limp and fast to the ground. I turned towards the girl who began to get up, thank god she was ok. my vision began to blur again, and the pain in my body returned, I fell to the ground as darkness swept across my mind.
Ch. 3 Her name's Naomi
I was in a vast forest, surrounded by nothing but tree's. I was clueless of where i was. "Was it all a dream?" I kept asking myself this same question, over and over. I found a clearing, and walked into the light. The image's i saw were terrible, sarrow filled up my emotion's, a tear fell from my eye, what i saw was, the ruin's and wreckage of the once great lightning village, nothing remained, building's were destroyed, bodies covered the street's. I was in a state of shock. I couldn't believe what i saw. I screamed out in anger, my emotion's flowed with hate, only one word remained in my mind.......revenge. I began hearing voices calling my name, over and over they repeated. I shut my eye's and wished for it to stop. They began to get louder, and louder, then...they stopped. I opened my eye's, i was in a white room, an emergency room. Bandage's covered my body, and my arm felt like it was hacked off. "Oh, your up...." I turned to see who was talking to me, their was a girl, who looked about the age of 18. She had long purple hair that was tied up, and beautiful teal eye's. She walked over to my bedside, and stared at me for a couple of moment's. "Uhh, is there..." Before i could finish my scentance, the girl lunged in, and wrapped her arm's around me, squeezing me tightly. I could tell she was crying, b'cuz of the reason that my shoulder was nearly soaked with tear's. "Thank you for saving my life, i could never thank you enough..." The girl said. "Uh, don't mension it..." I replied, wrapping my arm's around her. "Uhh, is there anyway i could get you to let go?" I asked "Huh, oh sorry, i was just afraid that you may have been killed just b'cuz of me..." She said backing away. "Well, as a village guard i felt it was my dutie to protect you,.....so what is your name?" I asked her as i threw on my shirt over the bandage's. "Naomi Urahada, member of squad 10." She replied soaking up her tear's. "My name is Sasori Hatori, member of the Lightning village guard. Would you like to walk with me outside?" I said, as i began to mover towards the door. "Um...Sure!" Naomi twirled around and ran to me. When i grabbed the handle to walk out of the emergency room, the door suddenly flew open ,and knocked me to the floor. It was Jose Hatori, one of my clan member's who was completely out of breath. "Oh.....uh...s..sorry....Sasori. I...didn't know you were their." He said trying to catch his breath. I picked myself up and brushed myself off. "So what's the rush?" I asked Jose, he looked at me with a funny look in his eye's, which i really didn't like.
Ch. 4 Promotion!
I began walking to the hakikage's building that rested in the center of the village. The Hakikage has requested an audiance with me. I reached the great big building and opened the massive door's. As soon as i entered, Skylar was already waiting at the entrance for me, and had a large smile spread accross his face. "Evening Sasori, great news for you,.." He said walking me to the Hakikage's office. We both stood at the door and i had a feeling of nervousness, as Skylar opened the door. "Ahh, Skylar, come in, and who is this you broought with you?" The kage said with a smile on his face. "Sasori Hatori, the one who had slain Inohu Mezukage." Skylar replied. A serious looke overtook the hakikage's face, as he began to stand up. "Skylar, leave us please." Skylar turned and stepped out the door, and the kage stepped towards me. He reached out a hand and the smile returned to his face. I reached my hand out and reached his as we shook hands. "Hmm, so your the one who defeated the Aoi's leader, pretty amazing." A puzzling look found it's way accros my face. "Oh, you don't know, Inohu is the most wanted man in the land of lightning, you have defeated an S-ranked criminal!" The kage said, "And that require's a great reward Sasori Hatori, from here on out, you will hold the title of the grand lightning shinobi, and will be promoted to jonin, Congratulation's!" Tear's began to form as i felt a great feeling of accomplishment. From that day, i devoted my life to protecting the village hidden in Lightning, i defeated many foe's and saved the village from certain davastation. I was only 17, when i becam Jonin, and earned the title of "The Grand Lightning Shinobi", and i put that title to the test.....
The Acedemy (Story Start)
Ch. 5 Focus!
"Focus,...focus on the target, concentrate, block out the outside world..." A boy said with a low tone. He steadied his stance, studying the target down range. "50, no 62 meter's..." He thought to himself, a few or so moment's later, he quickly reached to his back pocket and pulled out a kunai, and then leaped high into the air, doing an aireal flip, then tossing the small dagger with great speed down range. It hit, right in the dead center, he landed back on his feet, looking at his accomplishment. A smile spread across his face, as he looked into the bright sky, it was still about noon. He began to think of what he could do with the rest of the day as he walked around the Hatori clan trainig ground's, he was alredy flawless with the use of shuriken, and perfected his skill with kunai, and accuracy, He stopped next to a large body of water, looking out to the horrizen. Then he got the thought, it was time to try that technique. Their was a small island, dead center in the lake, he began to walk to it, over the water, all his chakra, focused into the sole's of his feet. He reached the small shore, and began strolling arounf the island, searching for a spot to use the technique. Then he found it, a dead tree, still standing tall. He walked a certain distance away from the tree, then formed several handsign's and grabbed his arm. An electical discharge began to form in the form of a ball, with a discharge around it. It released a high pitched sound, like a thousand bird's chirpping. He brought his right arm back, bracing his shoulder with the left, then began to sprint towards the dead tree with great speed. As he reached the dead tree, he brought his right arm foward, still bracing it with his left, and let out a yell as the jutsu, crashed through the tree, "Lightning Style: Lightning Edge!" The attack wen't straight through the dead tree, and continued to emit tremindous power, the jutsu finaly released, the lightning edge technique was a tremindous attack. He continued to practice the technique, over and over as many hour's passed, before he knew it, it was nightfall. He began walking home gazing at the night's many star's, and was as carefree as can be. When he reached home, his younger brother was at the door. "Sasori, c'mon it's time to eat, where'd you go?" the little boy said with a small voice. "Just training back at the ground's. c'mon Seto, let's eat" Sasori said with a large smile, they ate their meal which was Sasori's favourite, Rice treat's and delicious home made ramen, with small slice's of beef. When Sasori was finished stuffing his face, he walked off to bed, passing out on the floor. (Too tired to reach the bed.)
Ch. 6 Welcome to Squad 5!
Sasori awoke the next day, wondering if he passed the exam that they had taken two day's earlier. He got dressed and tied on the old black cloth, that was givin to him by an old freind. Inside read a quote that he tought him,
"Even though we may die, the world will still turn, but many will still remember
The sacrafice that was made."
Every day Sasori would read the quote for insperation, to keep his dream living. Sasori walked down stair's and out the door. He greeted all his fellow clan member's on his way out of the area. He began strolling around the town market, and purchased a strawberry tart, which was extremely sweet. He sat up in a tree, enjoying the morning air. he heard a voice calling his name. Amaru was waving with a bright smile on her face, she had a small dog in her arm's, and she called him Arouku. Sasori leaped out of the tree and waved back with a smile. She bagan to run and finaly reached him. "Hey Sasori, how's your morning going?" She asked, "Well so far it's been good." Sasori replied. They both sat down together under the tree, talking and chatting. Someone walked up to the both of them, and they both looked up. The figure blocked out the sunlight, and neither of them could tell who it is. "Heheh, you guy's done holding hand's?" Sasori reckongnized the voice, it was Jose, his fellow clan member. he sat down in front of Sasori and Amaru, "So, uh Sasori, did you pop the question yet?" Jose said with a rude smile. A blank expression found it's way across Sasori's face, and Amaru's lit up with embarrassment. "Ugh, Jose just shut up....." Sasori exclaimed. Jose began to giggle, then let out an outburst of laughing. "Well anyway's, Skylar want's us all to meet in the training ground's immediatly!" Jose said, still chuckling. The three stood up, and began to walk to the training ground's that was located at the edge of the valley, surrounded by a vast forrest. Skylar was the Co-Hakikage of the lightning village, what did he wan't with a bunch of genin? They reached the pathway that led up to the training ground's. It took 'em about 6 minute's until they reached the opening, that led to the open feild. They began looking for Skylar, checking if he was already there. "He's late!" Jose said in frustration. "Ahh, eye's can be decieving, can't they?" A voice said. The three clueless genin began to look around in confusion. Then they heard a small sound, then Jose was lifted into the air, feet over head. He had fell in to a trap, that was set by Skylar. Sasori began to burst out laughing, as soon as he saw jose get hoisted up into the air, amaru began to giggle. Their was a swishing sound and Skylar was standing right next to Jose, who was struggling to get out. "See, what did i tell you?" Skylar said with a large smile. "Alright, down to buisness, you three have been chosen to be in squad 5, which unfortunatelyis the unit I command." Skylar said in a low tone, "So, for my training excersize, i wan't you to......"
Ch. 7 The Test!
"….So, for my training exercise, I want you to locate the three scrolls before sundown!" Skylar said with a large smile. “Are you serious, that is going to be way too easy!” Jose, complained, still hanging from the tree. A grin stretched across Skylar’s face. He turned and cut Jose down from the trap and began to speak, “…and obtain them all, without getting caught by me!” Skylar announced. Worried look’s masked the three genin’s faces. “Are you serious, three genin versus a jonin, impossible!?” Sasori exclaimed, crossing his arms. “Well, unless you want to pass and stay a genin, you will complete the challenge!” Skylar said bending over the 14-year old child, “Now, when I say go….I want you to start, when you encounter me, defeat me with all you got, and come at me with the intention of killing me!” The three genin shook their head’s, and prepared. “Ready …Go!” Skylar ordered throwing his arm, and the three genin were off, dashing through the thick woods. The three continued sprinting until they were sure that they were far from sensei. They stopped, and began to check their surrounding’s for Skylar, nothing. Sasori turned to Amaru and Jose, “Okay, we need to put our tracking skills to the test here, Jose…you and I are going to use our Lakugan’s to improve our senses to find the three scroll’s, and to watch out for sensei, Amaru, you have Arouku, use his sense of smell to track the scroll’s, understood?” The other two shook their head’s, and continued on, searching for the scrolls. Sasori and Jose noticed a few trap’s up ahead that were guarding a scroll. Jose, and I turn to each other, and knew what we were both thinking, we all halted and formed a handsign, and summoned a shadow clone. Our clone’s went in and released the set traps, which sent kunai in all direction’s destroying the clones. Sasori and Jose scanned for anymore trap’s, it was clear. They all continued in cautiously, being extremely careful, not to set off any other well hidden trap’s. They stopped and picked up the scroll, which held a note:
“This scroll can only be revealed, when the night sky has said goodbye”
The three genin looked at each other in confusion, “What do you think it means?” Jose asked around, and Amaru was just as confused as he was. Sasori sat and thought, trying to understand the riddle. “Well, I think we may need to find the other three to figure it out” Sasori said, pocketing the orange scroll. The other two nodded, and they continued off, scanning and searching. Sasori sensed something, and quickly turned around. “What is it Sasori?” Jose asked, while he whipped around. “Duck!” Sasori ordered, falling to a prone position, and the other two fallowed. A large shuriken came flying by, and crashed in to a tree, nearly cutting it in half. The three genin got to their feet, and saw Skylar, positioned on a tree branch, with a grin on his face. “Found you….”
Ch. 8 Roar, Lightning Edge!
Skylar sat up on the tree branch, staring down at the three shocked genin, who all were stunned that Skylar was serious about training. “Hey, what the heck, you could have killed us!” Jose barked, getting to his feet. Skylar said nothing, but still stood at the tree branch. Sasori, quickly formed a couple hand sign’s, and cupped his right hand around his mouth, shooting out a fire that consumed everything in front of him, Jose and Amaru watched in amazement, as Sasori shot out the flame’s. The fire then stopped, and Sasori’s mouth was bruised and burnt from the intense heat of the fire style attack. When the flame’s where blown out, Skylar was already gone, nowhere to be seen. The three genin all looked around searching, high and low for their sensei, but were unable to find him. Then Sasori caught the sound of electricity. He quickly looked above, and Skylar was free falling, with lightning edge in hand. Jose, and Amaru quickly jumped out of the way, but Sasori stood still, and formed many hand sign’s, and threw back his arm, as an electrical pulse began to form. Then came the sound, of many chirping birds. A smile stretched across Sasori’s face as he threw his arm high into the air with his jutsu emitting extraordinary power. As the two jutsu’s made contact, the loud crackle of thunder, boomed around the immense forest. The impact forced Sasori to his knees but still held his arm in the air, and braced it with his other. The jutsu’s both canceled out, sending a shockwave, which knocked Skylar and Sasori separate ways. Sasori slammed in to a tree, crashing it to the ground, and Skylar flew back, and caught his balance. Sasori struggled to his feet, and was extremely fatigued. The lightning edge took a lot out of him, weakening him, yet Skylar stood with no sight of exhaustion. Sasori began to slip uncouncess, darkness began to sweep over him, and his eye’s felt heavy. Then he fell to the ground, and the last images he saw were Jose and Amaru, running to him. He awoke in the emergency room, clueless of what had happened. He looked around, trying to figure out what had happened. One of the medical ninja’s walked in with a tray of food, and sat it on the table next to his bed. Their was a knock at the door, and the medic answered. Jose, Amaru, and Skylar were at the door, all with smiles on their faces. “Hah, what’s up sleeping beauty” Jose said laughing, and giggling. “Would you just shut up!?” Amaru said with a blank expression, “You are so immature!” “Augh, what ever” Jose said crossing his arm’s. “Well, did we pass?” Sasori asked with a worried look. Skylar’s smile turned in to a disappointed expression. “Well…”
The start of a journey
Ch. 9 A genin's first mission!
“…You showed great determination, and some of the best leadership skill’s that a genin can show, but…” Skylar said, with the smile returning, “…You passed!” Jose and Amaru began to jump in excitement. Sasori sat up, and began to tear up in amazement. He looked up to Amaru and Jose, and said, “If it wasn’t for you two, we would still be stuck at the academy!” Amaru smiled, and Jose already had a smirk on his face. “Aw, c’mon Sasori, don’t get too soft on me know” Jose spoke with a giggle. That night, Skylar took the newly named genin out to a congratulatory dinner. They also received new head bands, with the lightning village symbol engraved in to the metal. After filling them selves’ they all began to walk home together, chatting about what was to become of them. Sasori finally reached his house, and every one was still asleep. Sasori reached his room and threw his clothes’ to the floor, and jumped in to bed, drifting off in to a deep sleep. For the next two week’s Sasori, along with Amaru, and Jose trained hard increasing their talents. Sasori finally increased his skill with the Lightning Edge technique. Finally the day arrived; Sasori and the team received their first C-rank mission. They were summoned to the Hakikage’s building to be briefed on their mission. When Sasori arrived, Amaru and Jose were already waiting at the door. Amaru sat down, hugging her little dog, and Jose was passed out on a tree branch. “Oh, hi Sasori.” Amaru said getting to her feet. Jose awoke in a daze, looking around. “Hmm…oh, it’s you.” Jose had a blank look on his face. They all traveled up into the large beige colored building, and reached the door. They knocked ready and stood firm, Skylar answered the door, and welcomed them in. Katsu was at his desk, buried in paper work. “Oh, these must be squad 5!” Katsu spoke, throwing down a large file, “So are you three ready for your first mission?” They all nodded, looking very interested. “Okay, your mission is an escort mission, you are to escort and defend an convoy if diplomats! You are to meet them at the thunder valley at sunset, you have twenty-four hour’s to get ready” Katsu explained and dismissed the three young children. Sasori, Amaru, and Jose were all in the village market, purchasing new items for their journey. Sasori purchased new clothes’ which were extremely baggy; he also purchased an extraordinary amount of ninja wire, which confused the other two genin. Jose purchased a similar looking outfit, but of different color. When he zipped up his outfit, it covers half of his face. They all left that night with many supplies’, Sasori had many more than four pouches and a couple of ninja scroll’s, that he had plan’s for in the future. They all met at the village gate’s at six ‘o’clock in the morning, and were off to meat the convoy. Squad 5 traveled for many mile’s stopping at a few stop’s along the way. After a two day’s trip, they stopped at a hot spring’s. Sasori and Jose began to play a few game’s of Shoji, and of course Sasori kept on winning until Jose lost his temper and broke the board. Skylar was down stair’s sweet talking the ladies’ which, somehow Jose found extremely funny. Sasori went and laid down on a bed, and stared at the ceiling. Sasori jumped out of bed, after hearing the sound of Amaru screaming…
Ch. 10 The Urahada Brother's!
Lightning Village - "The Great Lightning Sage"
Squad Sasori's Sensei - Chunin - 球|火
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