Ishtar: Origins, Elements and Fates rewritten

[Ishtar]

So I was noticing my fanfics were not satisfying me. That's why I want to rewrite them all. All in one thread. The descriptions, characters, and arcs are below with their chapters. There are a total of 50 arcs with 500 chapters and 40 arcs and 400 chapters for Lugot.

Main Story: Ishtar aspires to be like the legends and to become the greatest ninja in history.
Secondary Story: The story of how Lugot came to be.

Ishtar characters:

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Ishtar (Main)

Lily-Na:
Is a little shy at first, but will eventually show her true colors of her personality
Her favorite color is purple.

Mikomi:
A young girl who cannot use jutsu effectively.

Lone:
Lone is after vengeance, but he doesn't let vengeance consume him.

Sosuke:
Sosuke is Ishtar' father

Ishtar:
Ishtar was named after his mother

Raiku:
A jonin who wears a red head band and red accessories. His favorite color is red.

Lugot:
A mysterious man with a shady past. What are his motives?

Hugh:
A cheery female ninja who also has a shady past.
She hates the taste of ramen, and her favorite color is lime green.

The Mugendai Karuto:
A cult made up of ninja's, they believe in unlimited power, and have been practicing necromancy and odd ritual's for some time now.

Lugot characters:

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Logan
Lugot
Shaul
Motheth
Marv

Artwork:
Still waiting on some art.

The tale of Ishtar:

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Origins:

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Arc 1: Ishtar

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Chapter 1: http://naruto.viz.com/forum/showpost...1&postcount=27
Chapter 2: http://naruto.viz.com/forum/showpost...0&postcount=30
Chapter 3:
Chapter 4:
Chapter 5:
Chapter 6:
Chapter 7:
Chapter 8:
Chapter 9:
Chapter 10:

Arc 2: The searing power of the fire element!

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Chapter 1:
Chapter 2:
Chapter 3:
Chapter 4:
Chapter 5:
Chapter 6:
Chapter 7:
Chapter 8:
Chapter 9:
Chapter 10:

Arc 3: Delivery of the sword and the Kami ninja!

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Chapter 1:
Chapter 2:
Chapter 3:
Chapter 4:
Chapter 5:
Chapter 6:
Chapter 7:
Chapter 8:
Chapter 9:
Chapter 10:

Arc 4: The winds of fate

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Chapter 1:
Chapter 2:
Chapter 3:
Chapter 4:
Chapter 5:
Chapter 6:
Chapter 7:
Chapter 8:
Chapter 9:
Chapter 10:

Arc 5: The immortal being

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Chapter 1:
Chapter 2:
Chapter 3:
Chapter 4:
Chapter 5:
Chapter 6:
Chapter 7:
Chapter 8:
Chapter 9:
Chapter 10:

Arc 6: The earth

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Chapter 1:
Chapter 2:
Chapter 3:
Chapter 4:
Chapter 5:
Chapter 6:
Chapter 7:
Chapter 8:
Chapter 9:
Chapter 10:

Arc 7: Electric surge

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Chapter 1:
Chapter 2:
Chapter 3:
Chapter 4:
Chapter 5:
Chapter 6:
Chapter 7:
Chapter 8:
Chapter 9:
Chapter 10:

Arc 8: Chunin Exams

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Chapter 1:
Chapter 2:
Chapter 3:
Chapter 4:
Chapter 5:
Chapter 6:
Chapter 7:
Chapter 8:
Chapter 9:
Chapter 10:

Arc 9: Chunin Exams, Final

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Chapter 1:
Chapter 2:
Chapter 3:
Chapter 4:
Chapter 5:
Chapter 6:
Chapter 7:
Chapter 8:
Chapter 9:
Chapter 10:

Arc 10: Dimensions

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Chapter 1:
Chapter 2:
Chapter 3:
Chapter 4:
Chapter 5:
Chapter 6:
Chapter 7:
Chapter 8:
Chapter 9:
Chapter 10:

Arc 11: The rushing power of water

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Chapter 1:
Chapter 2:
Chapter 3:
Chapter 4:
Chapter 5:
Chapter 6:
Chapter 7:
Chapter 8:
Chapter 9:
Chapter 10:

Arc 12: Edge

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Chapter 1:
Chapter 2:
Chapter 3:
Chapter 4:
Chapter 5:
Chapter 6:
Chapter 7:
Chapter 8:
Chapter 9:
Chapter 10:

Arc 13: Forbidden Power

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Chapter 1:
Chapter 2:
Chapter 3:
Chapter 4:
Chapter 5:
Chapter 6:
Chapter 7:
Chapter 8:
Chapter 9:
Chapter 10:

Arc 14: Lugot

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Chapter 1:
Chapter 2:
Chapter 3:
Chapter 4:
Chapter 5:
Chapter 6:
Chapter 7:
Chapter 8:
Chapter 9:
Chapter 10:

Arc 15: Confrontation

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Chapter 1:
Chapter 2:
Chapter 3:
Chapter 4:
Chapter 5:
Chapter 6:
Chapter 7:
Chapter 8:
Chapter 9:
Chapter 10:

Elements:

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Arcs:

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Arc 1
Arc 2
Arc 3
Arc 4
Arc 5
Arc 6
Arc 7
Arc 8
Arc 9
Arc 10
Arc 11
Arc 12
Arc 13
Arc 14
Arc 15

Fate:

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Arcs:

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Arc 1
Arc 2
Arc 3
Arc 4
Arc 5
Arc 6
Arc 7
Arc 8
Arc 9
Arc 10
Arc 11
Arc 12
Arc 13
Arc 14
Arc 15
Arc 16
Arc 17
Arc 18
Arc 19
Arc 20
Last chapter

The tale of Lugot:

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Lugot:

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Arc 1
Arc 2
Arc 3
Arc 4
Arc 5
Arc 6
Arc 7
Arc 8
Arc 9
Arc 10

Part 2:

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Arc 1
Arc 2
Arc 3
Arc 4
Arc 5
Arc 6
Arc 7
Arc 8
Arc 9
Arc 10
Arc 11
Arc 12
Arc 13
Arc 14
Arc 15

Part 3:

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Arc 1
Arc 2
Arc 3
Arc 4
Arc 5
Arc 6
Arc 7
Arc 8
Arc 9
Arc 10
Arc 11
Arc 12
Arc 13
Arc 14
Arc 15

[Ishtar]

A total of about 75 characters.

[sakura_lover]

NIce good job its really good!

[Ishtar]

Thank you. =D

Here is a list of arcs for "Origins"

Arc 1: Ishtar
Arc 2: The searing power of the fire element
Arc 3: Delivery of the sword and the Kami ninja!
Arc 4: The winds of fate
Arc 5: The Immortal being
Arc 6: The earth
Arc 7: Electric Surge
Arc 8: The Chunin Exams
Arc 9: The Chunin Exams, Final
Arc 10: Dimensions
Arc 11: The rushing power of water
Arc 12: Edge
Arc 13: Forbidden power
Arc 14: Naraku
Arc 15: Confrontation

[Ishtar]

"The tale of Naraku?" I wondered. I was in my bed covers, facing the wall. My mother, came in and stood at the doorway of my room, my father then said "Naraku, was the leader of the Kurobatsu. He later founded the elemental village." he explained. I opened my eyes in shock and sat up to face my father in the eyes. "I'm confused. What happened? I mean, is that how the elemental village was founded? I thought that wait, huh? How did, but-" I stammered. Ishtar, my mother, who stood in the doorway came over to sit at the foot of my soft bed. "It all went like this, now, this was 700 years ago when the power hungry Kurobatsu wanted to rule the world, and decided to wage war against humanity, they had a special kekkei genkai, a very legendary ocular jutsu. 500 years later, someone decided to stand up to them, it was none other than the first kage of our village, he went by the name of Naraku, legend has it, that he was immortal, because he had lived a very long life. But before all that happened, he came across a young lady, he fled with her, and abandoned his leadership with the Kurobatsu and founded the elemental village and then defeated the Kurobatsu." explained mother. I looked into her eyes and finally said "So you're saying all this ended 200 years ago because of our first kage? And it took him 500 years to finally establish this village?" I stopped there, and awaited an answer. My father opened his mouth to say something, but mother interrupted him. "Yes, but he suddenly disappeared one day out of nowhere, no traces of him were found, and a new kage was selected. None know what became of this legendary man." she said. "Awesome." I said waiting to hear more. "It's time to go to bed, sweet dreams, we both love you." my mother Ishtar smiled. She had long flowing black hair, with beautiful bright blue eyes, my father and mother got up from my bed and headed for the door, I said "Love you too." before they completely left the room. I looked out my window and saw the great full moon, lighting everything in the darkness. I gazed into the starry sky.

"What a beautiful night" Hugh was sitting at the edge of the building, looking and staring at the full moon. Hugh knew she wasn't alone, yet she pretended that she didn't. "What brings you here? And who are you talking to?" Hugh smiled at the sound of the voice behind her. "Lone! I missed you!" she squealed. "Who is this Naraku person you speak of and what business do you have here at the elemental village?!" questioned Lone. Hugh smirked. Lone took a step forward toward her, but she giggled and jumped off the building before Lone can confront her. "Get back here, Hugh!" yelled Lone. He started running after her a few steps and then stopped quickly in his tracks to sense someone else and jumped to the side to dodge an incoming attack from the shadows. Lone quickly drew his sword. "Who are you? Show yourself!" he said defensively. A sword had struck the ground where Lone once stood, footsteps were heard as a man stepped out from the shadows. The man had a black robe, black boots, a hood, a big neck collar and a pair of shades to conceal his identity. He suddenly introduced himself. "My name is Naraku." he slowly unsheathed his sword. His black shades gleamed in the moonlight.

[Ishtar]

"Naraku? And which blade is that you wield along with the other one planted into the ground of where I once stood? Answer me." demanded Lone. "I know of your brother." replied Naraku. A realization had swept over Lone. "It's you." Lone glared. The man, who killed my brother in cold blood. Why are you showing yourself now?!" Lone turned up his tone a bit. "Where are the crystals?" asked Naraku. "What crystals? Don't ignore my question, why have you shown yourself now?" barked Lone. Naraku was silent. "Answer me, or you I will have no choice but to capture or eliminate you." said Lone. Naraku held out his palm in Lone's direction of where he once stood. The sword planted into the ground started shaking. Lone had readied himself. The black sword lifted itself up from it's planted state and flew back into Naraku's hand. Telekinesis? thought Lone. But it wasn't telekinesis, it was something else. Naraku had taken the blade, it seemed to have a life of it's own and slid itself into his sleeve, concealing itself. Naraku sheathed his sword and stood there silently. "I have to go." he said. "You're not going anywhere!" yelled Lone, he disappeared in a flicker and appeared behind Naraku, attempting to stab through him with his blade, but failed. Something was holding Lone back.

"I'm untouchable." Naraku said. Lone couldn't move his blade. It was like his own sword was resisting to stab through his enemy. "That blade, Kinbu, the one you're holding now, it's a legendary item. I know it." Naraku spoke. Lone had finally figured it out. This was indeed, the legendary Naraku from the village's history. "It can't be. Impossible." Lone was shocked. "Indeed." replied Naraku. He quickly reached his arm back to grab Lone's face, then spun around in a split second, and before you can blink, Naraku had his hand rested on top of Lone's head and his black blade already sliding across Lone's throat. Lone felt his slit throat with his hands, dropping his sword on the ground and finally falling to his knee's. Keo. I'm sorry. he thought as his vision blurred and blacked out.

Outside the village gates, Hugh had taken out a purple scroll and layed it across the ground. She placed her hand on the center. Poof! She disappeared in a cloud of black smoke.

The moon had shone through Ishtar' window.
Sosuke, Ishtar's father, peeked into his son's room. "If only you knew of your sister, Jessica." He closed his eyes and shut the door. Ishtar was fast asleep in the moonlit room.

"Heyo, I'm back!" Hugh had burst through the doors at dinner time.
Candles lit the dining room table, a large chandelier hung overhead. "Welcome back, Hugh. What brings you back? Did you forget something?" asked a dark echoed voice."Um nope! I just wanted to hang out with you guys!" she said cheerfully plopping herself onto a chair. "Haha, what the hell? Shouldn't you be assisting Naraku?" said a male's voice. Hugh looked down. She stared at the checkered floor. She lifted her head up with a smile and lied through her teeth. "No, Akio. He told me to go back because he has everything under control." she said scratching her short spiky brown hair and then finally said "So. Any word on these elemental hosts?" she said with a grin leaning forward. "No. Except for one. He or she supposedly is from the elemental village. I'm still searching for the other four." said the echoed voice. Hugh looked at all the other members who were eating at the table with their forks, knives and spoons. "Hey Toshiro." she greeted. "Shut up. You're annoying. I can't stand you." Toshiro replied stuffing his face with mashed potatoes. "That's you're opinion, Toshiro. She may be annoying to you, but I think she lights this dark place up!" said another voice. "Thank you, Zacky!" said Hugh. It's obvious he has a little crush on her. Thought Kitsune, listening in to all the chatter. "Whatever." said Toshiro trying to cut his meat with his fork and knife. "How are you?" asked Tanoth to Kitsune, who was sitting beside her. "You're not touching your food?" she asked in a soft voice. Zack and Toshiro were now arguing. "No. I'm not hungry." replied Tanoth. "Shut up you two!" A female finally yelled from the corners of the room. She had dark hair, and her eyes were steel gray. "Silence! All of you." ordered Zer0, who was sitting at the end of the table, leaving his food untouched the same as Tanoth. "Thank you." he said as the room went quiet. "Hugh. I have a mission for you-" "Excuse me!" interrupted Kitsune. Everyone stopped and stared at her. "Speak." answered Zer0. 5 pairs of different colored eyes opened and stared Kitsune down into the room from the dark corners of the ceiling. Thunder clapped and lightning struck flashing the entire room white for a split second. Kitsune spoke nervously "What are these elemental hosts and what do we plan to do with them?" she gulped. Two pairs of red eyes glowed within the darkness. Zero leaned forward from the shadows revealing a skull dragon mask fitted on his face, An open mouthed mask slightly revealing his moving lips with a smile pattern on the mask, With sharp looking teeth and two horns jutting out near the top of the mask. The mask's eye sockets were glowing. He had blonde spiky hair. "Well." His dark voice echoed within the mask.

[Ishtar]

"Well." Zer0 spoke. The eye sockets of his dragon skull mask glowed demonic red and then finally dimmed into darkness. "There are five elemental hosts. Somewhere, but we only know of one location of one might be, and that is the elemental village." he finished. Kitsune spoke out again "But what are we planning to do with them?" Zer0 had finished taking a drink from his goblet and set it down on the old wooden dining table. "That is none of your concern." his eyes began glowing again. Thunder clapped, and lightning flashed, lighting the room once again through the large window behind Zer0. "Let me tell you a little story. THIS is the tale of the five deity's. The gods and demons of nature. These five beings created the earth itself. Their names are forgotten by many, but not I. Dalitha Alythista Hathy the water demon spirit. With her trident that granted her rushing power, she created the oceans and sea's. Kraleel Dionus Ephaxeo Thetym the earth spirit, he created life, oxygen, and earth, all with visualization. Rtheus Kror the lightning spirit, who rode the lightning, created thunder and rain clouds with his surging legs with the help of Dalitha. Vicius Trith, created air. He is nicknamed the Wind of Fate, because he controls the flow of time, and determines every living things fate. The amulet of time, and the spear of destiny, none can hope to defeat him. Lastly, but not least, Ntar, the pyro spirit, god of fire, created the very core. The god of death, spirit, hatred, and hope." Zer0 had finally finished. "Hope?" Kitsune became very interested. "The fires of hope, and they say that they are still out there, hiding in the elements, far, yet close, their physical forms are well hidden. Long ago, they split their chakra's in half, then they gave man a gift. The power of nature itself. These five beings became known as the elemental hosts. Everytime one passes away, the gods grant another random, but worthy, child to utilize their power when the time comes. They are picked out, by the help of Vicius Trith, whom can control time and fate. That's why we don't know where any of those hosts lie, except for the one, confirmed to be in the village hidden in the elements." Zer0's eye sockets had dimmed into darkness. Everyone was intrigued by this, but there were some, who already knew this. Zer0 pushed out his chair and got up. "Akasun. Time for dishes." he ordered. A roar of thunder was heard throughout the room, white light filled the room. "Oh, and Hugh, I've got a mission for you." he said looking in her direction. "Oh what is it, master Zer0?" Hugh was bored out of her mind and picking at her nails. "I need you to gather three ninja. I've got some in mind." Zer0's eyes glowed, and then dimmed into darkness.

[Ishtar]

Naraku's name needs to be changed. That's what I think. >>
And I need to edit just a bit more so that I can publish it on fanfiction.net. :3
I'm in still need of more experience as a writer.

[tsuki]

Is this all the first chapter so far?

[Ishtar]

It's the first arc. Each arc will have 10 chapters. But listening to advice given to me in that one thread the other day has inspired me to become better.

[tsuki]

You should put links in the OP so we know which chapter and arc it belongs to.

[Ishtar]

I will do that. Just not now, because these chapters are kinda unofficial, they have yet to be official by today. xD

[tsuki]

Ok, hey did you get my last pm yesterday?

[Ishtar]

I did. I'm just working on stuff first, but I will get back to you again today. =]

[tsuki]

mmkay

let me know when you post more of your story.

[Ishtar]

Or you can just subscribe to it. =]

[EmoSakura]

Ishy, you always amaze me. No wonder you're a great RPer, you make fantastic stories.

Just a tip:
Whenever a different character speaks, make a new paragraph. It helps us readers know who's talking. For example:

"I want pie now!!!" said Bob, angrily grunting at his mother.
"Not until you eat your dinner," she replied calmly.
"FINE!" he yelled and left the kitchen.

See what I did? I made a new paragraph each time the character switched talking.

It really does help. But overall, fantastic. ^^

[Kiseki]

I don't agree with emo-chan.

I dislike it when people make conversations like this:

"I want pie now!!!" said Bob, angrily grunting at his mother.
"Not until you eat your dinner," she replied calmly.
"FINE!" he yelled and left the kitchen.

Doesn't happen in many books either. I prefer his current style

After his second bedtime story this Hugh suddenly shows up.
I serious lost track of story there. It's very confusing sometimes where it takes place and with who.

[Bacon]

Same here, I like how Ishtar actually seems to be a kid. You really know how to make a believable character,but the part with hughes and Naruku following that was confusing. >.<

[Ishtar]

Those are unofficial chapters. So I'm going to delete them. Anyways, Introducing a new part of the story that may unlock some answers.
The story of Lugot. I will add it to the OP.