Jenny`s story

jenny · 07-23-2009, 07:02 AM

The stone

It was Tuesday,and i was taking my usual night walk. I was walking past the cemetary near our church, about half of 2 miles from our house, when it suddenly started to rain. This was no councidence, the weather man said it was going to drizzle today. So i headed back to the house before i got soaked, I may have known about the rain, but doesn`t mean I remembered to take an umbrella. Well,anyways,i was about half way home, when something peculiar cought the corner of my eye. I`m not sure wat it was, but I never saw it before, and i know everyone in this town and I don`t remember anyone having this. It was a small, medium sized stone ball. It dull, yet shiny at the same tme, it was hard, yet soft. I stuck it in my pocket, and it seemed the rain had stoped.But like after every rain, the bad smell came off the street. But im uses to it, I share a room with my sister.

I started to walk again, and i finally reached my house, it was quite dark outside. My walk was longer than usual. I came in, and my mom was worried, because I missed curfew. I didn`t tell them or anyone about the stone i found, I just simply went off to bed, and good thing i found it today, my sister is at her friends house. My house looks like an antice, ok no, we just have a lot of priceless things. We live in a big house, with 5 bedrooms, 3 bathrooms, a livingroom, a TV room, and a kitchen. My mom decorated most of the house, we got to decorate our rooms. My room, the walls all the walls in my room, are a midnight look at a lake, and the celing is midnight stary sky, with a moon, and clouds, its really pretty. Well, I put the ston on the dest, and i got ready for bed.I thought to myself,"Wat is this thing? Where did it come from? Why is it here?" I threw it across the room, and it landed on a box,a box i got last year for my birthday. I never opened it, it was from my Aunt Rula, my aunt that i dislike the most.

I know,its kinda bad, but Im new, i dont really lik to read or write much. i mean i do, but i dont really have to for it.

so wat do u thnk of it so far?

NaruSakufluff4ever · 07-23-2009, 08:54 AM

less coma's, try to phrase things better, but otherwise its good

jenny · 07-23-2009, 09:02 AM

yeah,i now.but its my thng.

assassin · 07-23-2009, 09:04 AM

it ain't terible. not great either but sort of in the middle.

god of puppets · 07-23-2009, 09:06 AM

i dont see wat it has to do with naruto tho...

jenny · 07-23-2009, 09:07 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by assassin

it ain't terible. not great either but sort of in the middle.

thnk u for being honest.

i thought,u were going to say it was wonderful,cuz im ur gf.but ur so honest,n cool

but u have admit,for 2nd grade paper,its good.cuz i originally wrote it in 2nd grade.

jenny · 07-23-2009, 09:17 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by god of puppets

i dont see wat it has to do with naruto tho...

it doesnt relate to naruto at all.I WROTE IT IN 2ND GRADE!! i didnt know naruto excisted in 2nd grade,and it doesnt have to relate to naruto.

ItachiAnbu · 07-23-2009, 10:44 AM

I liked it!

The only thing is, it would be easier to read if you spaced after each comma and period. Like what I'm doing here.

jenny · 07-23-2009, 11:02 AM

thnk u!

07-23-2009, 07:02 AM	#1
jenny Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: We are in enemy territory. Those are enemy birds. Posts: 7,297 Rep Power: 10	Jenny`s story The stone It was Tuesday,and i was taking my usual night walk. I was walking past the cemetary near our church, about half of 2 miles from our house, when it suddenly started to rain. This was no councidence, the weather man said it was going to drizzle today. So i headed back to the house before i got soaked, I may have known about the rain, but doesn`t mean I remembered to take an umbrella. Well,anyways,i was about half way home, when something peculiar cought the corner of my eye. I`m not sure wat it was, but I never saw it before, and i know everyone in this town and I don`t remember anyone having this. It was a small, medium sized stone ball. It dull, yet shiny at the same tme, it was hard, yet soft. I stuck it in my pocket, and it seemed the rain had stoped.But like after every rain, the bad smell came off the street. But im uses to it, I share a room with my sister. I started to walk again, and i finally reached my house, it was quite dark outside. My walk was longer than usual. I came in, and my mom was worried, because I missed curfew. I didn`t tell them or anyone about the stone i found, I just simply went off to bed, and good thing i found it today, my sister is at her friends house. My house looks like an antice, ok no, we just have a lot of priceless things. We live in a big house, with 5 bedrooms, 3 bathrooms, a livingroom, a TV room, and a kitchen. My mom decorated most of the house, we got to decorate our rooms. My room, the walls all the walls in my room, are a midnight look at a lake, and the celing is midnight stary sky, with a moon, and clouds, its really pretty. Well, I put the ston on the dest, and i got ready for bed.I thought to myself,"Wat is this thing? Where did it come from? Why is it here?" I threw it across the room, and it landed on a box,a box i got last year for my birthday. I never opened it, it was from my Aunt Rula, my aunt that i dislike the most. I know,its kinda bad, but Im new, i dont really lik to read or write much. i mean i do, but i dont really have to for it. so wat do u thnk of it so far? __________________ Breathe in, Breath out.. Breathe in, Breath out.. All these masks we wore We never knew what we had in store.. Breath in, Breathe out.. Breath in, Breathe out.. The storm is rolling in, The thunders loud, it hurts my ears.. I'm paying for my sins, And it's gonna rain for years and years.. Last edited by jenny; 07-23-2009 at 11:11 AM.

07-23-2009, 08:54 AM	#2
NaruSakufluff4ever Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: I somehow got stuck in the portal to Hyrule and Naruto... NOT AGAIN! Posts: 2,420 Rep Power: 9	Re: Jenny`s story less coma's, try to phrase things better, but otherwise its good

07-23-2009, 09:02 AM	#3
jenny Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: We are in enemy territory. Those are enemy birds. Posts: 7,297 Rep Power: 10	Re: Jenny`s story yeah,i now.but its my thng. __________________ Breathe in, Breath out.. Breathe in, Breath out.. All these masks we wore We never knew what we had in store.. Breath in, Breathe out.. Breath in, Breathe out.. The storm is rolling in, The thunders loud, it hurts my ears.. I'm paying for my sins, And it's gonna rain for years and years..

07-23-2009, 09:06 AM	#5
god of puppets Chunin Exam Participant Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: under ur bed! Posts: 752 Rep Power: 0	Re: Jenny`s story i dont see wat it has to do with naruto tho...

07-23-2009, 10:44 AM	#8
ItachiAnbu Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: May 2009 Location: Imagine Posts: 3,122 Rep Power: 9	Re: Jenny`s story I liked it! The only thing is, it would be easier to read if you spaced after each comma and period. Like what I'm doing here. __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

07-23-2009, 11:02 AM	#9
jenny Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: We are in enemy territory. Those are enemy birds. Posts: 7,297 Rep Power: 10	Re: Jenny`s story thnk u! __________________ Breathe in, Breath out.. Breathe in, Breath out.. All these masks we wore We never knew what we had in store.. Breath in, Breathe out.. Breath in, Breathe out.. The storm is rolling in, The thunders loud, it hurts my ears.. I'm paying for my sins, And it's gonna rain for years and years..

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