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Chapter 1- Homecoming ------------------------------ Setting Spoiler:
Mom: Hurry and clean up. Your Uncle Wallace is coming over today! I told you to clean up over a week ago! What are you doing! Wake up! Julious: Fine I am working on it now... hey is dad home yet Mom: urg your father is not back from work yet Julious: But he is been bone for 8 months now and today is when he is supposed to be back. I miss him he was supposed to help me catch my first pokemon *kneals down to son * Mom: I know . it has been hard for us. I miss him as well and I am looking forward to seeing him. -------------Few Hours Later--------------------- Dad- Honey I'm home! Mom: Archie! Julious: Dad! *hugs* Julious: I have missed you so much dad look how much I have grown! I have so much to tell you! Did you bring me back anything! How was your bussiness trip ! Did you... Dad: ENOUGH! I need to talk with your mother alone go to your room Julious: B- but... I Dad: NOW!!!!! Mom: Archie what is the meaning of this? Wallace: I know sis and I would be happy to explain... unless Archie is man enough to tell you? Mom: Son go to your room *Julious walks back to his room with the door slightly open on a crack listening and looking at what was going on* ---------------------------------------------- Preview of Chapter 2" Bad Bussiness" ----------------------------------------------- Why is Wallace the champion of Hoenn here? What has Archie done in his 8 months? Who will be Julio's first pokemon All of these questions and more will be answered Next time!!
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Not the right section. Please move it to the Fan Fiction, Art, Stories section.
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Can someone move this please
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um, dude just go the thread tools and click move thread.
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I agree-other than that the story looks good so far
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