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Old 06-12-2009, 01:12 PM   #1
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It is a personal story on The Grim Reaper and how he came to be with twists and turns throughout the first trilogy. The second trilogy delves further.

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The Reaper Trilogy:
Book 1 : Tarnished Tranquility
Book 2 : Sinister Ambition
Book 3 : Focal Atrophy

The Licharius Trilogy:
Book 4 : Eternal Serpentine
Book 5 : Fiery Divergence
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Old 06-12-2009, 02:18 PM   #2
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Old 06-12-2009, 02:26 PM   #3
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Well don't think negitively, the next harry potter could be you! I think you should publish it, if not for the book but the experince. I dislike grammar as well, unless its a formal essay for school I tend to let it was slip away...(like right now!) I enjoy writing to but I never had had the patience for writing a book I've tryed and sorta stoped at page 3...Keep writing it'll be great I know it. I can speak for myself, not every one esle but I'll support 'cha! It seems like my genre too. Oh, the thought of books...
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Old 06-12-2009, 02:34 PM   #4
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Thanks ooh I'm not pessimistic about it ... just doubt it can be THAT popular. Like I said I'm sure I can make a good story but not sure how well I can right it. I'm not a hundred percent sure what genre it would be though. It has a mixture of love, hate, religion, magic, betrayal, mystery, drama, death, twists, etc... I'm not sure there is an element I haven't touched yet it is very wide varied. I think my twists are brilliant although I have to admit I got one of my ideas from the Harry Potter books. The last books twist I came up with I like the most. I also leave the reader ask a question in each chapter and some have the answer at the end of the chapters.
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I love twists! amd genre is the type of book you like. (ex. horror fantasy romance)
wow, sounds like you have put alot into it, that's really cool. I get my inspirtion from Philophers, and Walter Dean Myers. (an author)
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wow, maikeru, havvent seen you forever, i used to mysticnin15/ninjanick15, and i have to say, youre prety good, my friends and i also write a role play

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but the grim reaper uses a scythe, not a sai, elektra uses a sai
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Sorry Kage I gotta go, my computers freaking out. Keep writing I expect to see it in print!
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Oh yeah duh... I can't believe I put down sai ... I must've been watching the Ninja Turtles around that time or something, lol. Ohh yeah it does get a bit of a horror element in it later on. Yeah I'll put the next chapter or two up soon hopefully.

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Oh yeah duh... I can't believe I put down sai ... I must've been watching the Ninja Turtles around that time or something, lol. Ohh yeah it does get a bit of a horror element in it later on. Yeah I'll put the next chapter or two up soon hopefully.

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Yeah I actually noticed a spelling mistake while looking back trying to find sai. I had spelt ground without the d ... I think I spelt weep wrong too I think I may have to look that up to find the spelling.
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Hmm nevermind I did spell it right.
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Hey my computer stopped actin' like a spoiled child, yay!
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I'll be looking forward to those new chapters.
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Yeah I'm working on typing up Chapter 3 right now ... can expect it in a few hours I'd say.
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The family was laying on the ground in Hel's Graveyard. Blood, and sweat poured down the man's body as his baby son of only one year sleeps by the tombstone. The mother prays in the corner hoping for some form of miracle.
The Reaper stands over the man and in a sickly voice he speaks, "Your time is up Mr. Pragmer, your time is up."
"You will never get your hand on my family, Reaper never!" the man yelled back at him.
Awesome, man.

Suggestion: I think you're only doing it in the beginning, but in general the verb tenses need to be consistent throughout. So it would read:

Blood, and sweat poured down the man's body as his baby son of only one year slept by the tombstone. The mother prayed in the corner hoping for some form of miracle.
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Old 06-12-2009, 03:55 PM   #18
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Good call, Sage, my English teacher goes on alot about that...in my own writing...its hard to be consitaint like that. I always have to be looking back. (good use of gren too)
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Chapters have been proofread.
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