Tarnished Tranqulity (Complete) [Book 1]

Maikeru D. Shinigami · 06-12-2009, 01:12 PM

This Story has a Copyright.

It is a personal story on The Grim Reaper and how he came to be with twists and turns throughout the first trilogy. The second trilogy delves further.

The Entire Book is in the post below.

Book Titles :

Spoiler:

Maikeru D. Shinigami · 06-12-2009, 02:18 PM

[Chapters will be placed here when requested]

Soccer Ninja 21 · 06-12-2009, 02:26 PM

Well don't think negitively, the next harry potter could be you! I think you should publish it, if not for the book but the experince. I dislike grammar as well, unless its a formal essay for school I tend to let it was slip away...(like right now!) I enjoy writing to but I never had had the patience for writing a book I've tryed and sorta stoped at page 3...Keep writing it'll be great I know it. I can speak for myself, not every one esle but I'll support 'cha! It seems like my genre too. Oh, the thought of books...

Maikeru D. Shinigami · 06-12-2009, 02:34 PM

Thanks ooh I'm not pessimistic about it ... just doubt it can be THAT popular. Like I said I'm sure I can make a good story but not sure how well I can right it. I'm not a hundred percent sure what genre it would be though. It has a mixture of love, hate, religion, magic, betrayal, mystery, drama, death, twists, etc... I'm not sure there is an element I haven't touched yet it is very wide varied. I think my twists are brilliant although I have to admit I got one of my ideas from the Harry Potter books. The last books twist I came up with I like the most. I also leave the reader ask a question in each chapter and some have the answer at the end of the chapters.

Soccer Ninja 21 · 06-12-2009, 02:37 PM

I love twists! amd genre is the type of book you like. (ex. horror fantasy romance)
wow, sounds like you have put alot into it, that's really cool. I get my inspirtion from Philophers, and Walter Dean Myers. (an author)

Nick Tasogare · 06-12-2009, 02:41 PM

wow, maikeru, havvent seen you forever, i used to mysticnin15/ninjanick15, and i have to say, youre prety good, my friends and i also write a role play

Shinobi: The Saga, Pts. 1 and 2, if your interested

Nick Tasogare · 06-12-2009, 02:43 PM

but the grim reaper uses a scythe, not a sai, elektra uses a sai

Soccer Ninja 21 · 06-12-2009, 02:44 PM

Sorry Kage I gotta go, my computers freaking out. Keep writing I expect to see it in print!

Maikeru D. Shinigami · 06-12-2009, 02:54 PM

Oh yeah duh... I can't believe I put down sai ... I must've been watching the Ninja Turtles around that time or something, lol. Ohh yeah it does get a bit of a horror element in it later on. Yeah I'll put the next chapter or two up soon hopefully.

@Nick : Yeah it has been awhile how's life? Alright I'll check that out later.

Nick Tasogare · 06-12-2009, 02:56 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Maikeru Shinigami

Oh yeah duh... I can't believe I put down sai ... I must've been watching the Ninja Turtles around that time or something, lol. Ohh yeah it does get a bit of a horror element in it later on. Yeah I'll put the next chapter or two up soon hopefully.

@Nick : Yeah it has been awhile how's life? Alright I'll check that out later.

pretty, good, and thanks,

and everyone makes mistakes

Maikeru D. Shinigami · 06-12-2009, 03:05 PM

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Originally Posted by Nick Tasogare

pretty, good, and thanks,

and everyone makes mistakes

Yeah I actually noticed a spelling mistake while looking back trying to find sai. I had spelt ground without the d ... I think I spelt weep wrong too I think I may have to look that up to find the spelling.

Maikeru D. Shinigami · 06-12-2009, 03:06 PM

Hmm nevermind I did spell it right.

Soccer Ninja 21 · 06-12-2009, 03:17 PM

Hey my computer stopped actin' like a spoiled child, yay!

Soccer Ninja 21 · 06-12-2009, 03:17 PM

I'll be looking forward to those new chapters.

Maikeru D. Shinigami · 06-12-2009, 03:43 PM

Yeah I'm working on typing up Chapter 3 right now ... can expect it in a few hours I'd say.

Soccer Ninja 21 · 06-12-2009, 03:45 PM

cooll.

Sage Mode · 06-12-2009, 03:51 PM

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Originally Posted by Maikeru Shinigami

The family was laying on the ground in Hel's Graveyard. Blood, and sweat poured down the man's body as his baby son of only one year sleeps by the tombstone. The mother prays in the corner hoping for some form of miracle.
The Reaper stands over the man and in a sickly voice he speaks, "Your time is up Mr. Pragmer, your time is up."
"You will never get your hand on my family, Reaper never!" the man yelled back at him.

Awesome, man.

Suggestion: I think you're only doing it in the beginning, but in general the verb tenses need to be consistent throughout. So it would read:

Blood, and sweat poured down the man's body as his baby son of only one year slept by the tombstone. The mother prayed in the corner hoping for some form of miracle.

Soccer Ninja 21 · 06-12-2009, 03:55 PM

Good call, Sage, my English teacher goes on alot about that...in my own writing...its hard to be consitaint like that. I always have to be looking back.

(good use of gren too)

Maikeru D. Shinigami · 06-12-2009, 05:10 PM

Chapters have been proofread.

Soccer Ninja 21 · 06-13-2009, 07:22 AM

Nice.

06-12-2009, 01:12 PM	#1
Maikeru D. Shinigami The Grand Vizier Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Funhouse Posts: 43,432 Rep Power: 44 Member's Picture Albums	Tarnished Tranqulity (Complete) [Book 1] This Story has a Copyright. It is a personal story on The Grim Reaper and how he came to be with twists and turns throughout the first trilogy. The second trilogy delves further. The Entire Book is in the post below. Book Titles : Spoiler: The Reaper Trilogy: Book 1 : Tarnished Tranquility Book 2 : Sinister Ambition Book 3 : Focal Atrophy The Licharius Trilogy: Book 4 : Eternal Serpentine Book 5 : Fiery Divergence Book 6 : Immortal Culimination __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. YouTube: Last edited by Maikeru D. Shinigami; 01-06-2012 at 11:03 PM. Reason: All Chapters EDITED!

06-12-2009, 02:18 PM	#2
Maikeru D. Shinigami The Grand Vizier Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Funhouse Posts: 43,432 Rep Power: 44 Member's Picture Albums	Re: My Writing (Fairly Long Read) [Chapters will be placed here when requested] __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. YouTube: Last edited by Maikeru D. Shinigami; 07-24-2012 at 02:24 PM. Reason: Book 1 COMPLETE!!

06-12-2009, 02:34 PM	#4
Maikeru D. Shinigami The Grand Vizier Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Funhouse Posts: 43,432 Rep Power: 44 Member's Picture Albums	Re: My Writing (Fairly Long Read) Thanks ooh I'm not pessimistic about it ... just doubt it can be THAT popular. Like I said I'm sure I can make a good story but not sure how well I can right it. I'm not a hundred percent sure what genre it would be though. It has a mixture of love, hate, religion, magic, betrayal, mystery, drama, death, twists, etc... I'm not sure there is an element I haven't touched yet it is very wide varied. I think my twists are brilliant although I have to admit I got one of my ideas from the Harry Potter books. The last books twist I came up with I like the most. I also leave the reader ask a question in each chapter and some have the answer at the end of the chapters. __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. YouTube:

06-12-2009, 02:41 PM	#6
Nick Tasogare Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Getting at you where you live. Posts: 27,570 Rep Power: 20 Member's Picture Albums	Re: My Writing (Fairly Long Read) wow, maikeru, havvent seen you forever, i used to mysticnin15/ninjanick15, and i have to say, youre prety good, my friends and i also write a role play Shinobi: The Saga, Pts. 1 and 2, if your interested __________________ Was on to check PMs and read about the drama and got hit with the forums rules. Can Herr SRhyse and Frau Muffintop please remove my staff "powers"? ~~The Mod Rules are a joke and everybody knows it lol~~ I don't follow that last rule well enough, and I don't want to endanger the Communist Rule of the People's Republic of NDF. Thanks. /Heil Oh wait, now there's drama so I just have to watch this all blow up.

06-12-2009, 02:43 PM	#7
Nick Tasogare Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Getting at you where you live. Posts: 27,570 Rep Power: 20 Member's Picture Albums	Re: My Writing (Fairly Long Read) but the grim reaper uses a scythe, not a sai, elektra uses a sai __________________ Was on to check PMs and read about the drama and got hit with the forums rules. Can Herr SRhyse and Frau Muffintop please remove my staff "powers"? ~~The Mod Rules are a joke and everybody knows it lol~~ I don't follow that last rule well enough, and I don't want to endanger the Communist Rule of the People's Republic of NDF. Thanks. /Heil Oh wait, now there's drama so I just have to watch this all blow up.

06-12-2009, 02:54 PM	#9
Maikeru D. Shinigami The Grand Vizier Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Funhouse Posts: 43,432 Rep Power: 44 Member's Picture Albums	Re: My Writing (Fairly Long Read) Oh yeah duh... I can't believe I put down sai ... I must've been watching the Ninja Turtles around that time or something, lol. Ohh yeah it does get a bit of a horror element in it later on. Yeah I'll put the next chapter or two up soon hopefully. @Nick : Yeah it has been awhile how's life? Alright I'll check that out later. __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. YouTube:

06-12-2009, 03:06 PM	#12
Maikeru D. Shinigami The Grand Vizier Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Funhouse Posts: 43,432 Rep Power: 44 Member's Picture Albums	Re: My Writing (Fairly Long Read) Hmm nevermind I did spell it right. __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. YouTube:

06-12-2009, 03:43 PM	#15
Maikeru D. Shinigami The Grand Vizier Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Funhouse Posts: 43,432 Rep Power: 44 Member's Picture Albums	Re: My Writing (Fairly Long Read) Yeah I'm working on typing up Chapter 3 right now ... can expect it in a few hours I'd say. __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. YouTube:

06-12-2009, 05:10 PM	#19
Maikeru D. Shinigami The Grand Vizier Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Funhouse Posts: 43,432 Rep Power: 44 Member's Picture Albums	Re: My Writing (Fairly Long Read) Chapters have been proofread. __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. YouTube: Last edited by Maikeru D. Shinigami; 08-30-2010 at 07:20 AM. Reason: Chapters 1-2 taken down.

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