Broken

Khiakara · 06-29-2012, 04:32 PM

Prologue

The dark shifting trees glanced at me... What the...? I must be caught in some jutsu, Kia thought to herself. The trees came closer trying to engulf her, swallowing her whole. She tried pulling herself from what was happening.. With hand gestures... She closed her eyes. "Release!" She opened her eyes...

Thick laughter grew into the air. "That's not going to work sweety"

Kia smirked though she felt panic rise inside her. Calmly she said, "who are you?"

"The air..." The man said smoothly.

Yeah sure.... she thought to herself. "okay, yeah and I'm grass." she mocked him sarcastically. "WHO ARE YOU!!" she ask loud and assertive. She looked around but she was in complete darkness. Where am I? Kia shook her head. I don't want to play head games with this guy!

"I'm Uruko" the man said... "it's time for you to die!

Kia looked frantic. "Kia where are you! Kia" her friends where calling her.

"I'm..." hands clasped her throat as her hole body felt like it was becoming squeezed....How in the hell am I going to get out of here? Kia gulped, Alive?

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This is my first fan fict please post a comment if you like it! xD

Shikamaru Nara · 06-29-2012, 04:59 PM

Kinda brief, but I like the story line! (Thus far. Kinda suspenseful.)

Khiakara · 06-29-2012, 05:00 PM

Thanks um prologues are normally brief to grasp the reader. Thank you xD

Shikamaru Nara · 06-29-2012, 05:01 PM

Still kinda short imo.

06-29-2012, 04:32 PM	#1
Khiakara Freshmen Academy Student Join Date: Mar 2012 Location: In your mind Posts: 12 Rep Power: 0	Broken Prologue The dark shifting trees glanced at me... What the...? I must be caught in some jutsu, Kia thought to herself. The trees came closer trying to engulf her, swallowing her whole. She tried pulling herself from what was happening.. With hand gestures... She closed her eyes. "Release!" She opened her eyes... Thick laughter grew into the air. "That's not going to work sweety" Kia smirked though she felt panic rise inside her. Calmly she said, "who are you?" "The air..." The man said smoothly. Yeah sure.... she thought to herself. "okay, yeah and I'm grass." she mocked him sarcastically. "WHO ARE YOU!!" she ask loud and assertive. She looked around but she was in complete darkness. Where am I? Kia shook her head. I don't want to play head games with this guy! "I'm Uruko" the man said... "it's time for you to die! Kia looked frantic. "Kia where are you! Kia" her friends where calling her. "I'm..." hands clasped her throat as her hole body felt like it was becoming squeezed....How in the hell am I going to get out of here? Kia gulped, Alive? ..... This is my first fan fict please post a comment if you like it! xD

06-29-2012, 04:59 PM	#2
Shikamaru Nara Super \| ɹoʇɐɹǝpoW Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: New York Posts: 43,792 Rep Power: 42 Awards Showcase Total Awards: 1 Total Points: 4	Re: Broken Kinda brief, but I like the story line! (Thus far. Kinda suspenseful.) __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

06-29-2012, 05:00 PM	#3
Khiakara Freshmen Academy Student Join Date: Mar 2012 Location: In your mind Posts: 12 Rep Power: 0	Re: Broken Thanks um prologues are normally brief to grasp the reader. Thank you xD

06-29-2012, 05:01 PM	#4
Shikamaru Nara Super \| ɹoʇɐɹǝpoW Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: New York Posts: 43,792 Rep Power: 42 Awards Showcase Total Awards: 1 Total Points: 4	Re: Broken Still kinda short imo. __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

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