Vatas Shadow Pridus: The Story - Page 78

Vatanui AKA Pride · 10-19-2009, 06:35 PM

How was it to you?

shinmarubountyhunter · 10-19-2009, 06:46 PM

it was okay just wating for menrui to get more action

Yori · 10-19-2009, 06:49 PM

Menrui is officially my favorite character now.

Vatanui AKA Pride · 10-19-2009, 06:49 PM

Hmm, all right.
The good features about this chapter was seeing Menrui and Sage(Sort Of) in action.

Vatanui AKA Pride · 10-19-2009, 06:49 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Yori Uchiha

Menrui is officially my favorite character now.

How so, my friend?

Yori · 10-19-2009, 06:53 PM

I like his swagger while fighting, That move that he did was awsome

Vatanui AKA Pride · 10-19-2009, 06:55 PM

You can see clearly that's he an Evasive/Defensive person.
He doesn't attack because he's too lazy too. xDD

takuya · 10-19-2009, 06:57 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Vatanui AKA Pride

You can see clearly that's he an Evasive/Defensive person.
He doesn't attack because he's too lazy too. xDD

Okay he's mine too.He's just like me.xD

shinmarubountyhunter · 10-19-2009, 06:58 PM

my new favorite is sage
who's your's vat

Vatanui AKA Pride · 10-19-2009, 07:01 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by takuya

Okay he's mine too.He's just like me.xD

Lol.

Quote:

Originally Posted by shinmarubountyhunter

my new favorite is sage
who's your's vat

Leon.

The Demon Zabuza · 10-20-2009, 11:39 AM

Quote:

Menrui Tatski
Age/ Gender: Male and 16
Hair: Shaggy and black
Occupation: Sword-for-Hire Special Jonin
Original Clan: The Moonlight Village
Styles and Elements: Water, Wood, and Earth, Light

You take a lot of insperation from the forums, don't you? Anyways, I loved it. Also, the idea that Senso and Menrui might be in a double battle is excitement itseslf.

shinmarubountyhunter · 10-20-2009, 01:22 PM

he also took sword for hire from tbc

Vatanui AKA Pride · 10-20-2009, 02:28 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by The Demon Zabuza

You take a lot of insperation from the forums, don't you? Anyways, I loved it. Also, the idea that Senso and Menrui might be in a double battle is excitement itseslf.

Thanks, and yep.

Quote:

Originally Posted by shinmarubountyhunter

he also took sword for hire from tbc

Of course, genius.

Vatanui AKA Pride · 10-20-2009, 07:33 PM

Chapter Fifty-Four~The Eighth Shinobi

The concrete wall right next to Menrui, who was backed up near it, suddenly collapsed. A large explosion was heard, and the air became heated, as a large section of concrete collapsed on Menrui. The weight of those concrete bricks pressed his to the floor, and Menrui was sent sprawling into the moist floor, as chunks of destroyed concrete buried him alive, as he was lost from view by the concrete as well by the dust cloud that was created by the explosion.

Tenso offered a neutral but cool expression as he watched two figures stepped out of the dust. It was Senso and Allon. Immediately, he watched Senso form a handsign and yelled, "Fire Style-Disking Flame Wave!" Suddenly, fire shot out of nowhere, as sparks flew. Fire had formed into a gigantic disk-like shape, fiercely burning as it quickly moved toward Allon, who stood thirty meters away, glancing at his enemy in certain distaste. As the large fire disk continued burning and moved, crossing a meter or so every ten seconds, it suddenly sped up, covering the rest of the meters in under a second. It moved swiftly at Allon, moving under him, and swiftly scorching his shoes, bit by bit. Immediately, the fire disk exploded, as furious flames shot out of the disk like a long column, directly below Allon, who intercepted with a quickly and graceful cartwheel to the left. Senso grunted, as he glanced to his left to see Tenso, who was spinning a new lance rapidly, one that he had summoned efficiently when Senso and Allon were in the midst of their fight.

"So it's you, brother," Senso observed as Tenso grinned evilly and stopped twirling his lance, and quickly threw it at Senso. Senso, fortunately, evaded it with a duck, as the lance punctured the remaining of the concrete wall near him. Senso then glanced up, as he suddenly heard a whisper. He quickly glanced around, to zoom in to the location of where the whisperer were, and quickly realized that the whisperer was buried alive under the mass of concrete chunks. With some difficulty, Senso quickly pulled the whisperer up, and discovered that it was Menrui.

"Oh thanks a lot for burying me alive." Menrui said with a hint of sarcasm in his voice.

"It was uncalled for." Senso replied. He quickly glanced at his opponents, Allon and his brother, Tenso. With a grunt, the battle began. Allon charged outright at Menrui, who yawned from lack of sleep. Tenso remained in the back, rapidly forming handsigns. As Allon came, swiftly, he attempted a upward wide kick at Menrui, who dodged it with ease by drawing his head back. Allon then quickly took the attack position again, and took out a kunai and threw it at Menrui, who had already skittered back several yards. Menrui quickly caught the kunai, and quickly noticed that the kunai was tied to a sparked paper bomb. Instantly, the paper bomb exploded. Allon let out a smug smile, as Senso, who was from behind, kicked him back. Allon did not dodge, and stumbled briefly, as he stood up to see Senso, who were leaping, his fists ready. Swiftly, Allon skittered the right as Senso's fist buried into the concrete where Allon had once occupied.
Before Senso could react, Allon retreated back to Tenso, who grinned broadly and held his breath. A Fire Technique?! Senso realized with dread as Tenso screeched "Fire Style- Grand Fire Tempest!" Immediately, a large fireball, one of a scale unlike any other, appeared. It was twenty-five yards wide in diameter, and burned fiercely, burning anything it touched. Quickly, the enormous fireball sped toward Senso, who realized that he had not the time nor the power to stop this insane and powerful jutsu. "Drat." he muttered as the flames consumed him.

__________________________________________________ _______________

Smoke dangled in the area, everywhere. The Fire Technique that Tenso had recently unleashed had devoured more than five square miles of the area, burning both the floor, as well as destroying the ceiling and floors. Even despite most of its power had been deposed of, small batches of the leftover fire of the huge fireball continued brightly burning. Tenso sat on the dirty chunks of concrete, heavily breathing as sweat drenched him. "That took out a lot of me," he said between breaths, "let's hope my brother and that idiot died." Allon said nothing, continually gazing at the dusty clouds.

Suddenly, the clouds were whisked away, as if an invisible giant hand had rushed them out. The clouds dispersed, and Tenso widened his eyes at what was there. "Can I go to sleep now?" Menrui asked with a deep yawn. He and Senso stood sixty yards from Tenso and Allon. Strangely, they were both unscathed of any recent wounds. A large transparent dome surrounded them, as fire continued to burn at the outer shell of it. Apparently, the dome, which glowed brightly, had protected both Senso and Menrui form the high possible technique. "I-impossible." Tenso muttered.

"What's the matter, Tenso Ukitaro?" a voice came out of nowhere. Everyone heard the voice clearly, as all searched for the source. "Lost your nerve?" asked the man as he strolled out of the shadows. The man had spiky black hair, which reached to below neck level. He had narrow eyes, and a certain uncomfortable atmosphere surrounded him. The man wore gleaming crimson armor, followed with a long red cape decorated with white flames from the bottom up to the waist that had the stains of many blood of men on it. Allon remained silent for a moment, until he finally spoke: "I presume that you are the the Eigth Tsuyoijunni Masuaro, Gokai Kiramono." The man named Gokai Kiramono grinned. "I see that you have heard of me." he said as the sound of swift running could be heard.
"You're surrounded, so you might as give up and kill yourselves to save us the trouble." Gokai said, as twenty, all dressed in pitch black uniforms, stood around Allon and Tenso, ready to attack or defend at any moment.

Tenso grinned broadly. "And if we don't?"

To BE Continued.

Yori · 10-20-2009, 08:20 PM

This is getting good.

Vatanui AKA Pride · 10-20-2009, 08:22 PM

Thanks, what were the best things about this chapter?

Yori · 10-20-2009, 08:25 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Vatanui AKA Pride

Thanks, what were the best things about this chapter?

I liked Tenso Fire Style Technique, and I like how the eighth shinobi appeared

Vatanui AKA Pride · 10-20-2009, 08:26 PM

Thanks, you may be looking up at a fight between them.

This is the "Cold War".

The real action starts in about six or more chapters, with a full-scale invasion.

Yori · 10-20-2009, 08:34 PM

A full scale invasion now that's gonna be epic

Vatanui AKA Pride · 10-20-2009, 08:41 PM

Yep, everyone would be fighting, from Menrui to Toshi, to Vatas to Gokai, to Sage and Ashuuri, all the Kages in the meeting, as well as Allon, Tenso, Senso, and a lot more.

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Yori Cool Hwip Sierra Mist Disciple Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Depends. Where does your girl live? Posts: 16,779 Rep Power: 15 Member's Picture Albums	Re: Vatas Shadow Pridus: The Story Menrui is officially my favorite character now. __________________ That North North, That Up Top, that OVO and That XO...

10-19-2009, 06:49 PM	#1544
Vatanui AKA Pride has a farm... WCA Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: You know what? Dammit, just call me Vat. Posts: 30,646 Rep Power: 19 Member's Picture Albums	Re: Vatas Shadow Pridus: The Story Hmm, all right. The good features about this chapter was seeing Menrui and Sage(Sort Of) in action. __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

10-19-2009, 06:53 PM	#1546
Yori Cool Hwip Sierra Mist Disciple Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Depends. Where does your girl live? Posts: 16,779 Rep Power: 15 Member's Picture Albums	Re: Vatas Shadow Pridus: The Story I like his swagger while fighting, That move that he did was awsome __________________ That North North, That Up Top, that OVO and That XO...

10-19-2009, 06:55 PM	#1547
Vatanui AKA Pride has a farm... WCA Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: You know what? Dammit, just call me Vat. Posts: 30,646 Rep Power: 19 Member's Picture Albums	Re: Vatas Shadow Pridus: The Story You can see clearly that's he an Evasive/Defensive person. He doesn't attack because he's too lazy too. xDD __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

10-19-2009, 06:58 PM	#1549
shinmarubountyhunter Cradle Robber Join Date: May 2009 Location: In front of a closet waiting for Vat to get out. Posts: 8,683 Rep Power: 12	Re: Vatas Shadow Pridus: The Story my new favorite is sage who's your's vat __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

10-20-2009, 01:22 PM	#1552
shinmarubountyhunter Cradle Robber Join Date: May 2009 Location: In front of a closet waiting for Vat to get out. Posts: 8,683 Rep Power: 12	Re: Vatas Shadow Pridus: The Story he also took sword for hire from tbc __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

10-20-2009, 07:33 PM	#1554
Vatanui AKA Pride has a farm... WCA Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: You know what? Dammit, just call me Vat. Posts: 30,646 Rep Power: 19 Member's Picture Albums	Re: Vatas Shadow Pridus: The Story Chapter Fifty-Four~The Eighth Shinobi The concrete wall right next to Menrui, who was backed up near it, suddenly collapsed. A large explosion was heard, and the air became heated, as a large section of concrete collapsed on Menrui. The weight of those concrete bricks pressed his to the floor, and Menrui was sent sprawling into the moist floor, as chunks of destroyed concrete buried him alive, as he was lost from view by the concrete as well by the dust cloud that was created by the explosion. Tenso offered a neutral but cool expression as he watched two figures stepped out of the dust. It was Senso and Allon. Immediately, he watched Senso form a handsign and yelled, "Fire Style-Disking Flame Wave!" Suddenly, fire shot out of nowhere, as sparks flew. Fire had formed into a gigantic disk-like shape, fiercely burning as it quickly moved toward Allon, who stood thirty meters away, glancing at his enemy in certain distaste. As the large fire disk continued burning and moved, crossing a meter or so every ten seconds, it suddenly sped up, covering the rest of the meters in under a second. It moved swiftly at Allon, moving under him, and swiftly scorching his shoes, bit by bit. Immediately, the fire disk exploded, as furious flames shot out of the disk like a long column, directly below Allon, who intercepted with a quickly and graceful cartwheel to the left. Senso grunted, as he glanced to his left to see Tenso, who was spinning a new lance rapidly, one that he had summoned efficiently when Senso and Allon were in the midst of their fight. "So it's you, brother," Senso observed as Tenso grinned evilly and stopped twirling his lance, and quickly threw it at Senso. Senso, fortunately, evaded it with a duck, as the lance punctured the remaining of the concrete wall near him. Senso then glanced up, as he suddenly heard a whisper. He quickly glanced around, to zoom in to the location of where the whisperer were, and quickly realized that the whisperer was buried alive under the mass of concrete chunks. With some difficulty, Senso quickly pulled the whisperer up, and discovered that it was Menrui. "Oh thanks a lot for burying me alive." Menrui said with a hint of sarcasm in his voice. "It was uncalled for." Senso replied. He quickly glanced at his opponents, Allon and his brother, Tenso. With a grunt, the battle began. Allon charged outright at Menrui, who yawned from lack of sleep. Tenso remained in the back, rapidly forming handsigns. As Allon came, swiftly, he attempted a upward wide kick at Menrui, who dodged it with ease by drawing his head back. Allon then quickly took the attack position again, and took out a kunai and threw it at Menrui, who had already skittered back several yards. Menrui quickly caught the kunai, and quickly noticed that the kunai was tied to a sparked paper bomb. Instantly, the paper bomb exploded. Allon let out a smug smile, as Senso, who was from behind, kicked him back. Allon did not dodge, and stumbled briefly, as he stood up to see Senso, who were leaping, his fists ready. Swiftly, Allon skittered the right as Senso's fist buried into the concrete where Allon had once occupied. Before Senso could react, Allon retreated back to Tenso, who grinned broadly and held his breath. A Fire Technique?! Senso realized with dread as Tenso screeched "Fire Style- Grand Fire Tempest!" Immediately, a large fireball, one of a scale unlike any other, appeared. It was twenty-five yards wide in diameter, and burned fiercely, burning anything it touched. Quickly, the enormous fireball sped toward Senso, who realized that he had not the time nor the power to stop this insane and powerful jutsu. "Drat." he muttered as the flames consumed him. __________________________________________________ _______________ Smoke dangled in the area, everywhere. The Fire Technique that Tenso had recently unleashed had devoured more than five square miles of the area, burning both the floor, as well as destroying the ceiling and floors. Even despite most of its power had been deposed of, small batches of the leftover fire of the huge fireball continued brightly burning. Tenso sat on the dirty chunks of concrete, heavily breathing as sweat drenched him. "That took out a lot of me," he said between breaths, "let's hope my brother and that idiot died." Allon said nothing, continually gazing at the dusty clouds. Suddenly, the clouds were whisked away, as if an invisible giant hand had rushed them out. The clouds dispersed, and Tenso widened his eyes at what was there. "Can I go to sleep now?" Menrui asked with a deep yawn. He and Senso stood sixty yards from Tenso and Allon. Strangely, they were both unscathed of any recent wounds. A large transparent dome surrounded them, as fire continued to burn at the outer shell of it. Apparently, the dome, which glowed brightly, had protected both Senso and Menrui form the high possible technique. "I-impossible." Tenso muttered. "What's the matter, Tenso Ukitaro?" a voice came out of nowhere. Everyone heard the voice clearly, as all searched for the source. "Lost your nerve?" asked the man as he strolled out of the shadows. The man had spiky black hair, which reached to below neck level. He had narrow eyes, and a certain uncomfortable atmosphere surrounded him. The man wore gleaming crimson armor, followed with a long red cape decorated with white flames from the bottom up to the waist that had the stains of many blood of men on it. Allon remained silent for a moment, until he finally spoke: "I presume that you are the the Eigth Tsuyoijunni Masuaro, Gokai Kiramono." The man named Gokai Kiramono grinned. "I see that you have heard of me." he said as the sound of swift running could be heard. "You're surrounded, so you might as give up and kill yourselves to save us the trouble." Gokai said, as twenty, all dressed in pitch black uniforms, stood around Allon and Tenso, ready to attack or defend at any moment. Tenso grinned broadly. "And if we don't?" To BE Continued. __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. Last edited by Vatanui AKA Pride; 05-31-2010 at 04:15 PM.

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Vatanui AKA Pride has a farm... WCA Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: You know what? Dammit, just call me Vat. Posts: 30,646 Rep Power: 19 Member's Picture Albums	Re: Vatas Shadow Pridus: The Story Thanks, what were the best things about this chapter? __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

10-20-2009, 08:26 PM	#1558
Vatanui AKA Pride has a farm... WCA Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: You know what? Dammit, just call me Vat. Posts: 30,646 Rep Power: 19 Member's Picture Albums	Re: Vatas Shadow Pridus: The Story Thanks, you may be looking up at a fight between them. This is the "Cold War". The real action starts in about six or more chapters, with a full-scale invasion. __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

10-20-2009, 08:34 PM	#1559
Yori Cool Hwip Sierra Mist Disciple Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Depends. Where does your girl live? Posts: 16,779 Rep Power: 15 Member's Picture Albums	Re: Vatas Shadow Pridus: The Story A full scale invasion now that's gonna be epic __________________ That North North, That Up Top, that OVO and That XO...

10-20-2009, 08:41 PM	#1560
Vatanui AKA Pride has a farm... WCA Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: You know what? Dammit, just call me Vat. Posts: 30,646 Rep Power: 19 Member's Picture Albums	Re: Vatas Shadow Pridus: The Story Yep, everyone would be fighting, from Menrui to Toshi, to Vatas to Gokai, to Sage and Ashuuri, all the Kages in the meeting, as well as Allon, Tenso, Senso, and a lot more. __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

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