Vatas Shadow Pridus: The Story - Page 127

Vatanui AKA Pride · 05-30-2010, 10:29 PM

Here you go, kakashi uzumaki.

Arc: The "Invasion" of the Bird Clan
One: The Beginning
Two: The Entry
Three:Nui Onimusha VS Kama Ikkaku
Four: The Leader of the Light Clan
Five: The Cager
Six: The Jashinist
Seven: Bloody Arm
Eight: Dawn
Nine:The Timid Medic
Ten: Hanataro
Eleven: The Kage of the Bird
Twelve: The AiraKage
Thirteen: The Bijuu of the Light
Fourteen:Kage VS Kage
Fifteen: The Phoenix
Sixteen: Phoenix Dawn, Phoenix Die
Seventeen: Mission Succeeded, Sort Of
Eighteen: The Woman
Nineteen:A New Threat on the Horizon
Twenty: Time To Go

kakashi uzumaki · 05-30-2010, 10:31 PM

Thanks Vat!!

kakashi uzumaki · 05-30-2010, 10:32 PM

and I found a typo on chapter one xD

Vatanui AKA Pride · 05-30-2010, 10:34 PM

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Originally Posted by kakashi uzumaki

and I found a typo on chapter one xD

What is it? xD

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Originally Posted by kakashi uzumaki

Thanks Vat!!

No problem.

Just comment every chapter.

kakashi uzumaki · 05-30-2010, 10:37 PM

I will and make that two typos in the first chapter.xD

Vatanui AKA Pride · 05-30-2010, 10:37 PM

What were the typos?

kakashi uzumaki · 05-30-2010, 10:40 PM

Ill pm them to you later on. I gotta go to bed.
Great chapter btw, it caught my attention.

Vatanui AKA Pride · 05-30-2010, 10:41 PM

Good Night. And thanks for helping fix up the grammar mistakes.

kakashi uzumaki · 05-31-2010, 07:41 AM

Okay. I can't post the quoted chapter but where it says, "Menrui ruffled his hair with his hair" shouldn't it be ruffled his hair with his hand?

then where it says, "One of the four figures grinned, flashing him teeth in the darkness."
shouln't it be , "flashing his teeth in the darkness."

yondaime · 05-31-2010, 12:10 PM

I read from 36-40. It was pretty good, especially the fighting. Sakura Helga seems stronger than I expected. Also, I was expecting Senso and Nui to be stronger than what they have done. Anyways, I found a couple of grammar mistakes. xD

Vatanui AKA Pride · 05-31-2010, 01:38 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by kakashi uzumaki

Okay. I can't post the quoted chapter but where it says, "Menrui ruffled his hair with his hair" shouldn't it be ruffled his hair with his hand?

then where it says, "One of the four figures grinned, flashing him teeth in the darkness."
shouln't it be , "flashing his teeth in the darkness."

Okay, thanks.

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Originally Posted by yondaime

I read from 36-40. It was pretty good, especially the fighting. Sakura Helga seems stronger than I expected. Also, I was expecting Senso and Nui to be stronger than what they have done. Anyways, I found a couple of grammar mistakes. xD

Has Tenso been introduced yet, in any of those chapters? xD

Thanks.

The Demon Zabuza · 05-31-2010, 01:44 PM

NOSTALGIA!

I remember when I was the only person reading it weekly. xD

Hey vat, still want that mystery plot?

Vatanui AKA Pride · 05-31-2010, 01:50 PM

Ah, the wonders of bribing and free advertisement. xD

Long time no see, Mr.Zabuza. Still caught up on my story?

Nuh-Uh. xD I remember takuya was reading; than again, I was blackmailing him. xD

Yes, yes I do.

The Demon Zabuza · 05-31-2010, 02:08 PM

I'll catch up, so I know the characters.

Want me to edit any spelling mistakes I come across?

yondaime · 05-31-2010, 02:15 PM

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Originally Posted by Vatanui AKA Pride

Okay, thanks.

Has Tenso been introduced yet, in any of those chapters? xD

Thanks.

Do you mean Senso?

Vatanui AKA Pride · 05-31-2010, 02:34 PM

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Originally Posted by yondaime

Do you mean Senso?

No, I meant his brother.

EDIT:

@Zabuza: Where are you currently?

Sure, I'll appreciate it. Also, edit any sabotages Zeru edited in, I found a few of them.

yondaime · 05-31-2010, 03:17 PM

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Originally Posted by Vatanui AKA Pride

No, I meant his brother.

EDIT:

@Zabuza: Where are you currently?

Sure, I'll appreciate it. Also, edit any sabotages Zeru edited in, I found a few of them.

Nope, he hasn't been introduced as of Chapter Forty.

Ace adventurer · 05-31-2010, 03:49 PM

Nice. I envy this story

Vatanui AKA Pride · 05-31-2010, 03:57 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Ace adventurer

Nice. I envy this story

Don't you mean you enjoy it? ;D

You're on Chapter 1, right?

Quote:

Originally Posted by yondaime

Nope, he hasn't been introduced as of Chapter Forty.

Tell me what you think of him once he's introduced.

Ace adventurer · 05-31-2010, 03:59 PM

Yeah!

05-30-2010, 10:29 PM	#2521
Vatanui AKA Pride has a farm... WCA Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: You know what? Dammit, just call me Vat. Posts: 30,646 Rep Power: 19 Member's Picture Albums	Re: Vatas Shadow Pridus: The Story Here you go, kakashi uzumaki. Arc: The "Invasion" of the Bird Clan One: The Beginning Two: The Entry Three:Nui Onimusha VS Kama Ikkaku Four: The Leader of the Light Clan Five: The Cager Six: The Jashinist Seven: Bloody Arm Eight: Dawn Nine:The Timid Medic Ten: Hanataro Eleven: The Kage of the Bird Twelve: The AiraKage Thirteen: The Bijuu of the Light Fourteen:Kage VS Kage Fifteen: The Phoenix Sixteen: Phoenix Dawn, Phoenix Die Seventeen: Mission Succeeded, Sort Of Eighteen: The Woman Nineteen:A New Threat on the Horizon Twenty: Time To Go __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

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05-30-2010, 10:32 PM	#2523
kakashi uzumaki Prodigy Girl Join Date: May 2009 Location: Elmo's World Posts: 8,256 Rep Power: 12	Re: Vatas Shadow Pridus: The Story and I found a typo on chapter one xD __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

05-30-2010, 10:37 PM	#2525
kakashi uzumaki Prodigy Girl Join Date: May 2009 Location: Elmo's World Posts: 8,256 Rep Power: 12	Re: Vatas Shadow Pridus: The Story I will and make that two typos in the first chapter.xD __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

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Vatanui AKA Pride has a farm... WCA Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: You know what? Dammit, just call me Vat. Posts: 30,646 Rep Power: 19 Member's Picture Albums	Re: Vatas Shadow Pridus: The Story What were the typos? __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

05-30-2010, 10:40 PM	#2527
kakashi uzumaki Prodigy Girl Join Date: May 2009 Location: Elmo's World Posts: 8,256 Rep Power: 12	Re: Vatas Shadow Pridus: The Story Ill pm them to you later on. I gotta go to bed. Great chapter btw, it caught my attention. __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

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Vatanui AKA Pride has a farm... WCA Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: You know what? Dammit, just call me Vat. Posts: 30,646 Rep Power: 19 Member's Picture Albums	Re: Vatas Shadow Pridus: The Story Good Night. And thanks for helping fix up the grammar mistakes. __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

05-31-2010, 07:41 AM	#2529
kakashi uzumaki Prodigy Girl Join Date: May 2009 Location: Elmo's World Posts: 8,256 Rep Power: 12	Re: Vatas Shadow Pridus: The Story Okay. I can't post the quoted chapter but where it says, "Menrui ruffled his hair with his hair" shouldn't it be ruffled his hair with his hand? then where it says, "One of the four figures grinned, flashing him teeth in the darkness." shouln't it be , "flashing his teeth in the darkness." __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

05-31-2010, 12:10 PM	#2530
yondaime Jonin Join Date: Apr 2009 Posts: 4,681 Rep Power: 9	Re: Vatas Shadow Pridus: The Story I read from 36-40. It was pretty good, especially the fighting. Sakura Helga seems stronger than I expected. Also, I was expecting Senso and Nui to be stronger than what they have done. Anyways, I found a couple of grammar mistakes. xD

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Vatanui AKA Pride has a farm... WCA Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: You know what? Dammit, just call me Vat. Posts: 30,646 Rep Power: 19 Member's Picture Albums	Re: Vatas Shadow Pridus: The Story Ah, the wonders of bribing and free advertisement. xD Long time no see, Mr.Zabuza. Still caught up on my story? Nuh-Uh. xD I remember takuya was reading; than again, I was blackmailing him. xD Yes, yes I do. __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

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