Flaming Dark Moon.

[kay]

Here it is my story!{ first few chapters at least} ,some people say its crap and some say its awesome say it letting you make the call here it is:
http://kaiamar01.deviantart.com/#/d47ell7
if it's crap then its crap and if its good its good anyways tell me your opinion please.

[Kiseki]

I've read some of it, looks good. However, the *'s are annoying.
You might want to edit that. For some reason I keep tripping on it all the time
Anyway.. I'll read the rest later. I'd say you could share it here.
Funny enough I work on a new fanfic too, with moon in the title.
Lets hope we're not gonna make the same story

[kay]

Originally Posted by Kiseki

I've read some of it, looks good. However, the *'s are annoying.
You might want to edit that. For some reason I keep tripping on it all the time
Anyway.. I'll read the rest later. I'd say you could share it here.
Funny enough I work on a new fanfic too, with moon in the title.
Lets hope we're not gonna make the same story

yeah I know I just wanted the first few chapters to show the way i depict actions or description so i marked it for people+ I know the begining seems like a high school drama but it was just to sort of give a background to the story and bios of charcthers before I get to the action parts.
and lol I doubt that hopefully if the story goes the way i want it to it will take some major plot turns along the way XD

[Kiseki]

That is cool. Its always good to have refreshing moments every chapter.
You seem to be able to do that. Sounds good to me if you updated it here on the forum.

[kay]

I will once I get some more constructive ideas from the people I spred out the story to probably in the next few days thnx for your help anyway i apriciate it

[Kiseki]

I will PM you some idea's once I've read it all! =)