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This is a One Piece fanfic.
Story: Spoiler:
Chapters: Spoiler:
Other Info: Spoiler:
Themes: YouTube:
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Doesn't viz own OP?
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It's not about the characters or storylines. The only thing it has is some of the locations and devil fruits, which SRhyse said was fine. It also has marines and pirates, which, is a part of history, and SRhyse said was fine. If it were Naruto, it'd be different.
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Op can't even claim the rights to devil fruits, any ways. Same with Marines and pirates.
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Indeed, I only had five islands I wanted to keep, since it's hard to imagine the OP world without Loguetown, Enies Lobby, Marineford, Impel Down and Sabaody Archipelago, which SRhyse also said was fine. Figure I'll try to do as much as I can without breaking rules.
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Interesting... A lot can be done with your DF alone. I look forward to reading it.
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That's why I chose that fruit.
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Ooo! I like it!
I can't wait to read. :3 |
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Chapter One: Skylar and Ramona
Narrator: In North Blue, there is a town called Levi Village. A peaceful town, aside from the loud kids, constant storming and random bear attacks. Yes, truly it is a marvelous place, much like heaven is described in a story book. Besides for the swarms of bugs and the pissy mayor. In this town, there is a child prodigy. Random Girl: I can't find my underwear. Narrator: Um, not that kid. Anyways, this kid is a child prodigy, the son of one of the greatest pirate captains who ever lived. Also, the nephew of the most honorable Fleet Admiral in history. If you don't take into account that he killed his own brother, stole money from the Navy HQ, framed it on a marine, and cheated on his wife. Yes, truly an honorable Fleet Admiral, and noble family. Aside from the fact that they steal from civilians and like to eat fish. Wait, I didn't have to hide that part. Ah, the hell with it. This is a child prodigy, a true genius of the era. Skylar: I swear I didn't steal your underwear. Narrator: When he's not perving at least. Pretend you didn't see that. Anywa--- Pirate: Argh, my name is Captain Jack Sparrow, and why is the rum always gone? Narrator: Johnny, I already told you. Pirates of the Caribbean 4 is on set 47. Jack Sparrow: And which set is this? Narrator: Set #69. Jack Sparrow: -chuckles- You said--- Narrator: For gosh sake, start the opening song. [insert opening theme] [insert badass imagery] [insert obligatory cameo] [end opening theme] Skylar was running through the Forest, with a girl running closely behind him. "I swear I didn't steal your panties, this pair of underwear is mine," he yelled, before tripping over a branch. He turned onto his back where he saw Ramona glaring at him. Ramona punched Skylar on the top of the head and saw a pair of pink frilly panties fall on the floor. "Do you expect me to believe that this pair of underwear is yours? Do I look stupid to you? BAKA! It even has my name on it." Skylar was trying to think of an excuse, which was obvious from the chin rubbing and "hmm" sound. He then snapped his fingers, "I got it," he said out loud. "You see, I was in your room earlier and thought I saw a bunny rabbit on the floor. So, I picked it up, and carried it in my arms. It turned out that it felt too soft and small to be a rabbit, so I thought it was my pair of Oliver the Radioactive Super Bunny underwear. I apologize for my stupidty." Ramona hit him on the top of the head again, "BAKA! If you're going to make excuses at least make a good one. This is a squirrel, not a rabbit. Care to explain that to me too?" Skylar looked dumbfounded as he thought to himself. He then replied, "Well, squirrels and rabbits look a lot alike, it's a mistake anyone can make." "BAKA!" Ramona yelled again. "How the hell does a rabbit look anything like a squirrel. They're two totally different animals, and look nothing alike." Skylar looked up at her, "So it's a squillabbit?" "No, just a squirrel," she said in frustration. "It's not a rabbit at all." "Ah, well that solves the mystery of the missing rabbit. So, have you found your underwear yet?" Skylar asked. Ramona put her hand over her head and said, "I give up." Just as she said that, a loud boom was heard from the forest, so Skylar stood up. "Sounds like the bell for dinner," he said running into the forest, toward the boom, which was in a complete opposite direction from his house. Ramona spoke under her breath, "Your house is the other way," she sighed," Why me? I guess I shouldn't stay by myself here," she started running after Skylar, "Hey, wait up." At the end of their run, they found themselves standing in front of a cave, "Of course, it's got to be him," Ramona spoke putting emphasis on 'him', "We should go back." "Nah," Skylar responded, "I want to see what made the noise," he finished before running into the cave. Ramona sighed once again before speaking, "I'm coming too," she said following him closely into the dark cave. Next time on Rocky Raiders. Gerald Ricardo, Son of the Mayor
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Skylar is like coloring outside the lines...
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Was it funny?
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It was.
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It's a mixture of a squirrel and a rabbit.
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Yes, yes... I've just never run into an occasion when I've had to think about that. It was first.
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Skylar likes to make excuses.
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It was great that he made the thinking face in front of her. I do that when I have to think of excuses too...
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I thought it would be funny.
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Chapter 2: Gerald Ricardo, Son of the Mayor
Narrator: Previously on Rocky Raiders. Ramona chased Skylar down because he stole her panties. Skylar tried to defend himself by saying he thought her panties were his Oliver the Radioactive Super Bunny underwear, but Ramona of course didn't buy that. It didn't help Skylar's case that the panties had a squirrel on them. Though he did try to pass it off as a squillabit, which probably doesn't exist. Anyways, as the two enjoyed their time outside they heard a loud boom sound and ran to see where it was. We now pick the story back up at a random cave in the middle of the forest in Levi Village. [insert opening theme] [insert badass imagery] [insert obligatory cameo] [end opening theme] Ramona ran into the cave after Skylar as they passed through a tunnel. Ramona asked Skylar, "What are you running for? Whatever made the sound can't get out any other way." Skylar stopped in the middle of the tunnel as Ramona stopped behind him. Skylar rubbed his chin with his thumb and made a sound which showed that he was thinking about something. He then returned to running through the tunnel and answered, "The boom sound might have made another exit somewhere in the cave." "Wow, he actually said something smart," Ramona thought to herself. A few moments later, they heard another boom sound, except louder since they were getting closer. It made the tunnel shake as the two of them tried to keep their balance. After running for another twenty or so second, they arrived at a clearing portion of the cave where a villager was standing in the middle of the clearing. The area around them looked like a small dome aside from the entrance that Skylar and Ramona had came from, as well as a giant hole in one of the walls. When they reached the cave, Skylar stopped and shouted out, "Hey, Gerald, what are you doing?" "I'm blowing shit up, what does it look like I'm doing?" Gerald responded. "Why are blowing things up down here?" Skylar replied, "You're going to attract some attention if you keep making such loud noises." "Oh and do you suggest that I go blow things up in the middle of the town where I could hurt someone?" Gerald shot back, "Honestly Skylar, I wonder if you ever use that brain of yours to actually think." "That's kind of harsh man," Ramona said to him before thinking to herself, "Though I do understand why you might think that." "It's fine Ramona, I can preserve the peace between me and him," Skylar nodded to Ramona before pointing his finger at Gerald and exclaiming, "I want to fight you!" Ramona's face went blank as she almost fell down. She thought to herself, "That's what you call peace? Violence is the opposite of peace. Gerald doesn't fight people, there's no way he'll accept." "Okay," Gerald answered. "I'm having a really off day," Ramona said to herself in response. Gerald then placed his last pack of firecrackers in the hole he made to keep them safe.Gerald then pulled out his dual cleavers, held one by his side and pointed the other toward Skylar, "Let's get this started." Skylar placed his dagger in his mouth and pulled out a cutlass as he held it out in front of himself. He lunged forward swinging his cutlass down at Gerald. Gerald blocked the attack by holding his cleavers out between him and the cutlass. He then forced his cleavers forward to push Skylar's cutlass backwards. Skylar knew he wouldn't be able to get a strike in that position, so he jumped back and out of Gerald's way. Gerald then took the offense as he ran forward as he swung the cleaver in his right hand at Skylar's neck. Skylar ducked under the attack but Gerald was ready for that as he swung his other cleaver down at Skylar. Skylar held off the attack momentarily by blocking it with his cutlass. The force pushed him across the the cave floor as he kept his feet on the ground and slid. Gerald turned around and went to put his cleavers away as he said, "Enough of this, you can't beat me Skylar. I'm the son of the mayor, I have more access to skills than you do. If you want to have more skills try being born into a family like mine." Skylar stood back up to his feet, "No, I'm not done yet," he replied as he ran forward with his cutlass in one hand and dropped his dagger into the other. Skylar swung his cutlass horizontally at Gerald's chest. Gerald managed to block the attack by quickdrawing the cleaver on the left side of his body and using it as a shield. As soon as he did though, Skylar went to stab Gerald in the chest. Gerald pulled out his other cleaver quickly and blocked that attack as well. The two of them struggled to try to gain an edge. Moments later, Skylar took that edge as he pushed Gerald's cleavers out of the way with his blades and kneed him in the chest. Gerald slid across the ground on his feet but wasn't harmed much. Gerald opened his vest to show that he was wearing a sort of metal armor under it. It wasn't exactly iron, but it was strong enough to him from feeling any real pain but not to hurt Skylar's knee really either. Gerald looked at Skylar and complimented him, "Not bad." "Not too bad yourself there," Skylar responded as he lifted up his cutlass, "But this strike will finish it." Gerald nodded and the two of them then rushed forward. Gerald placed one of his cleavers away while Skylar dropped his dagger to the ground. The two of them ran at each other and raised their blades to strike at each other though. As they did though, a guy suddenly appeared between them. He knelt down and extended his palms out toward the two of them. As he did, Skylar and Gerald flew backwards across the cave, crashing onto the ground. Gerald and Skylar rubbed their heads as Gerald shouted out, "What the hell was that all about?" "My apologies," the guy began, "I had to break up the fight because you two could have killed each other. Which one of you can tell me where I can find a member of the Ricardo family?" "I'm Gerald Ricardo," Gerald replied as he got up to his feet and dusted off his pants, "What do you want?" "My name is Charles Levi," the guy introduced himself, "I'm here to speak to your father; to relieve him from his duty as mayor of this town." Next time on Rocky Raiders. The Unpaid Debt.
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Bastards! I saw y'all view. D:
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The first chapter is humorous, but the problem is, it's not quirky OP humor and reminds me of Gintama instead
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