Poems

[Luna]

This is for anyone.
Type your poem or poems and get opinions on it/them
It can be any kind of poem
Any mean comments will be deleted
Be nice

[RockyL]

Roses are red
Violets are blue
I have a gun
Get in the van.

P:

[Luna]

I love you
You loved me too
Or was that all a lie



The sweet words
That never hurt
Now they all die



You were so sweet
But now your cold
You've turned to stone


Your once kind voice
Now is sharp as knives
They stab my heart

Now i can see the end
Black as death
It's my hell
Where our love now lies

[Luna]

Originally Posted by RockyL

Roses are red
Violets are blue
I have a gun
Get in the van.

P:

Hehe i like it
It made me smile
Which i needed XD

[RockyL]

That's what I'm here for! =)

[Luna]

Originally Posted by RockyL

That's what I'm here for! =)

Thanks
How was my poem?

[RockyL]

It was pretty good, I don't normally like poetry but I did like that one.

[Luna]

Thanks
I write a lotta poems
Maybe you will like soem of my other ones

[Throw Rasen-Shuriken]

Spoiler:

Echos of the past, ever so haunting,
one thoughts clouded, within the mystery,
the shadows of doubt, brings worry,
the loneliness comes, the coldness,
a silence comes, the quietness taunts,
the shallow seeds of jealousy, could sprout,
within this darkness, the shadows intertwine,
attempting to control, to possess,
though the deeper passion, within ones soul stirs,
this strength, does not choose to yield,
it fights on, trying to break the sorrow,
an ongoing fight, of light and shadow,
once the light, cancels the dark once more,
this new strength, brings courage,
faith returns, ones hope becomes strong,
not allowing itself, to faulter to the hatred,
now it's just waiting, for the truth,
with this, it brings the touch of love ...

Spoiler:

Even if it seems dark,
the darkness does end,
the sorrow will go away,
allowing yourself to heal,
don't allow the doubts to take you,
don't allow them to sadden you,
in the end, there will be away,
things will get better, eventually,
even if, in all this uncertainty,
don't loose yourself to the shadows,
there is always the positive,
situations may appear bad,
though, they all end good,
what you must keep hope of,
one must remember that not all is bad,
in even the darkest of times, there is a light,
through the unknowingness,
there will come an answer,
this answer will contain light,
that light leads to positive fortune,
which all eventually gain ...

Spoiler:

Shades of black within perception,
dark preminitions of unknowness,
perceptions foretold, before they become,
within the secrets of words,
known and felt only by a few,
such words echo within ones mind,
comes forth, from the page,
rolling through visions, images,
flashes of much different text,
it does come forward, playing within vision,
as if none will ever know why,
even in the light of day it's still there,
in the night it haunts and plays on ones mind,
constantly absorbing more knowledge,
bringing forth, new things more forward,
all eventually become known,
after being scrambled, between views,
perceiving what maybe or not,
the strength of such things vary,
depending on the emotions envolved,
in the end, one always gets the feeling,
that it will always hold and tell some truth ...

Spoiler:

The shadows of the night,
shift through the hour of twilight,
as the world calms itself once more,
the silence and peace comes once again,
the light of the day fades,
the light of the moon rises forth,
reflecting the quietness, the silence,
a shadow shifts across the moons surface,
the angel of the moon comes over,
as the moonlight angel flys through the night,
her shadow shifts with the darkness,
bringing the moons light upon the shadows,
the one hope within the silence,
touching other souls, through the night,
with a warm wind blowing gently,
bringing a beautiful shine to her wings,
the breeze ever so slightly, moving life,
there shadows through the night,
with the moons light, breaking the darkness,
the true spirit and love of humans,
with them, reflecting there dim lights,
throughout the night, true peace becomes known.

Spoiler:

Angels descend, on the silent winds,
whispers of much emotion come,
clouding the thoughts of all,
hatred may come, from such doubts,
from those that are uncaring, by few,
though, the light may be there,
it can hold hope for some,
but at times, ones mind strays,
leading to doubts and uncertainty,
though as the breeze blows gently,
it can push out such negativity,
allowing clarity of ones own mind,
also for those within confusion,
when things seem lost, but are not,
there is and will always be a way,
a way, to flutter back from the darkness,
feathers, scatter upon the landscape,
gently embracing the truth of life,
life goes on for much of time,
so in the end, decisions must be made,
always leading to either, good or bad,
though eventually, things do and will change.

Spoiler:

As an angel whispers on the wind,
her light brings harmony to all,
her silent light that watches,
through the pain and grief,
it dims with the darkness,
though never vanishes,
the hope she holds will continue on,
in the dark silence, the light is bright,
many thoughts haunt and echo,
in the slightest of night,
the sun may be gone,
though it's light is still there,
even within the darkest of times,
it will always rise once more,
it's golden embers, spark the landscape,
bringing new life and dreams to more,
it will be everlasting, constantly,
even though in the shadows,
it seems that all is lost ...

Eh, none of them really follow the rules of normal type poetry, they're lucky to rhyme at best. But most of these came up when things have gone down for me through the years.

[moonwatcher]

Nice trs!

[BoxHead]

I'm gonna move this to the Fanfiction section since that's where user created writing of any kind is.

[Shinagami]

Just kind of wrote this on the spot.. It's pretty raw and unpolished, but here goes.

You love everyone.
Except me.
But I know you wanted me,
like I wanted you,
because it wasn't a one time thing.
But the worst kind of want
is the kind that never works.
No matter how bad you want it to.
Or how hard you try.
It just doesn't.
And that's what sucks.

[Vatanui AKA Pride]

"Refrigerators
Impenetrable, awesome
Chilling, preserving, unyielding
As is the Terminator
So, what's better than cool? ICE-COLD."

[ItachiUchiha62]

Open your eyes again,
Be my friend again.
Wake up and hold my hand,
find it in you the strength to stand.

Stop looking so pale,
I'm praying and crying but to no avail,
Why are you doing this to me?
Can't you see?

You're my best friend,
why are you making me watch your end?
You're not supposed to go.
Just when your newfound happiness was begining to show.

Are you going to heaven for your little baby?
I guess life really is a maybe.
Just know that I love you, I always have and always will.
And two years after losing you, you're my best friend still.

[Luna]

Originally Posted by Throw Rasen-Shuriken

Spoiler:

Echos of the past, ever so haunting,
one thoughts clouded, within the mystery,
the shadows of doubt, brings worry,
the loneliness comes, the coldness,
a silence comes, the quietness taunts,
the shallow seeds of jealousy, could sprout,
within this darkness, the shadows intertwine,
attempting to control, to possess,
though the deeper passion, within ones soul stirs,
this strength, does not choose to yield,
it fights on, trying to break the sorrow,
an ongoing fight, of light and shadow,
once the light, cancels the dark once more,
this new strength, brings courage,
faith returns, ones hope becomes strong,
not allowing itself, to faulter to the hatred,
now it's just waiting, for the truth,
with this, it brings the touch of love ...

Spoiler:

Even if it seems dark,
the darkness does end,
the sorrow will go away,
allowing yourself to heal,
don't allow the doubts to take you,
don't allow them to sadden you,
in the end, there will be away,
things will get better, eventually,
even if, in all this uncertainty,
don't loose yourself to the shadows,
there is always the positive,
situations may appear bad,
though, they all end good,
what you must keep hope of,
one must remember that not all is bad,
in even the darkest of times, there is a light,
through the unknowingness,
there will come an answer,
this answer will contain light,
that light leads to positive fortune,
which all eventually gain ...

Spoiler:

Shades of black within perception,
dark preminitions of unknowness,
perceptions foretold, before they become,
within the secrets of words,
known and felt only by a few,
such words echo within ones mind,
comes forth, from the page,
rolling through visions, images,
flashes of much different text,
it does come forward, playing within vision,
as if none will ever know why,
even in the light of day it's still there,
in the night it haunts and plays on ones mind,
constantly absorbing more knowledge,
bringing forth, new things more forward,
all eventually become known,
after being scrambled, between views,
perceiving what maybe or not,
the strength of such things vary,
depending on the emotions envolved,
in the end, one always gets the feeling,
that it will always hold and tell some truth ...

Spoiler:

The shadows of the night,
shift through the hour of twilight,
as the world calms itself once more,
the silence and peace comes once again,
the light of the day fades,
the light of the moon rises forth,
reflecting the quietness, the silence,
a shadow shifts across the moons surface,
the angel of the moon comes over,
as the moonlight angel flys through the night,
her shadow shifts with the darkness,
bringing the moons light upon the shadows,
the one hope within the silence,
touching other souls, through the night,
with a warm wind blowing gently,
bringing a beautiful shine to her wings,
the breeze ever so slightly, moving life,
there shadows through the night,
with the moons light, breaking the darkness,
the true spirit and love of humans,
with them, reflecting there dim lights,
throughout the night, true peace becomes known.

Spoiler:

Angels descend, on the silent winds,
whispers of much emotion come,
clouding the thoughts of all,
hatred may come, from such doubts,
from those that are uncaring, by few,
though, the light may be there,
it can hold hope for some,
but at times, ones mind strays,
leading to doubts and uncertainty,
though as the breeze blows gently,
it can push out such negativity,
allowing clarity of ones own mind,
also for those within confusion,
when things seem lost, but are not,
there is and will always be a way,
a way, to flutter back from the darkness,
feathers, scatter upon the landscape,
gently embracing the truth of life,
life goes on for much of time,
so in the end, decisions must be made,
always leading to either, good or bad,
though eventually, things do and will change.

Spoiler:

As an angel whispers on the wind,
her light brings harmony to all,
her silent light that watches,
through the pain and grief,
it dims with the darkness,
though never vanishes,
the hope she holds will continue on,
in the dark silence, the light is bright,
many thoughts haunt and echo,
in the slightest of night,
the sun may be gone,
though it's light is still there,
even within the darkest of times,
it will always rise once more,
it's golden embers, spark the landscape,
bringing new life and dreams to more,
it will be everlasting, constantly,
even though in the shadows,
it seems that all is lost ...

Eh, none of them really follow the rules of normal type poetry, they're lucky to rhyme at best. But most of these came up when things have gone down for me through the years.

Awesome Poems!!

Originally Posted by Vatanui AKA Pride

"Refrigerators
Impenetrable, awesome
Chilling, preserving, unyielding
As is the Terminator
So, what's better than cool? ICE-COLD."

Hehe cool i mean, ice cold lol

Originally Posted by ItachiUchiha62

Open your eyes again,
Be my friend again.
Wake up and hold my hand,
find it in you the strength to stand.

Stop looking so pale,
I'm praying and crying but to no avail,
Why are you doing this to me?
Can't you see?

You're my best friend,
why are you making me watch your end?
You're not supposed to go.
Just when your newfound happiness was begining to show.

Are you going to heaven for your little baby?
I guess life really is a maybe.
Just know that I love you, I always have and always will.
And two years after losing you, you're my best friend still.

Wow.... this one is amazing
And so sad
But still awesome

Originally Posted by Shinagami

Just kind of wrote this on the spot.. It's pretty raw and unpolished, but here goes.

You love everyone.
Except me.
But I know you wanted me,
like I wanted you,
because it wasn't a one time thing.
But the worst kind of want
is the kind that never works.
No matter how bad you want it to.
Or how hard you try.
It just doesn't.
And that's what sucks.

It's good
It could be better, but like you said its unpolished
It's still good though

[Nick Tasogare]

I'm not really a poet, more of a songwriter, but I guess lyrics are sort of poetry lol

One of the ones I have on my deviantart.

Spoiler:

"Smile"

I know you're sad, I know you're down,
But you know you're friends will always be around,
So take care of that frown -
Sittin' there on your face,
It seems so out of place, yea,
It is such a disgrace,
You take care of everyone 'cept you,
But now it's your turn to...

Smile,
Go ahead and smile,
Take a look at all that's good,
And turn away while I shove all that's bad under the hood.
So go ahead and smile today,
Yea yeaaaaaa, yea yeaaaaaa, yea yeaaaaaaaaaa, yea yea.

I know you're down, I know you're out,
So take a pillow, yea, go on and shout,
And just let it all out -
Clear the thoughts from your head,
Let the drama stay dead,
And all those hurtful things that were said,
They don't matter now, it's all 'bout you,
So let me help you.

Just smile,
Nothin' can hurt you now,
There's only good, there's only good in
Your heart,
So let it show through, let it show through with a...

Smile,
Go ahead and smile,
Take a look at all that's good,
And turn away while I shove all that's bad under the hood.
So go ahead and smile today,
Smile,
Go ahead and smile,
Take a look at all that's good,
And turn away while I shove all that's bad under the hood.
So go ahead and smile today,
Yea yeaaaaaa, yea yeaaaaaa, yea yeaaaaaaaaaa, yea yea.

[Luna]

Originally Posted by Nick Tasogare

I'm not really a poet, more of a songwriter, but I guess lyrics are sort of poetry lol

One of the ones I have on my deviantart.

Spoiler:

"Smile"

I know you're sad, I know you're down,
But you know you're friends will always be around,
So take care of that frown -
Sittin' there on your face,
It seems so out of place, yea,
It is such a disgrace,
You take care of everyone 'cept you,
But now it's your turn to...

Smile,
Go ahead and smile,
Take a look at all that's good,
And turn away while I shove all that's bad under the hood.
So go ahead and smile today,
Yea yeaaaaaa, yea yeaaaaaa, yea yeaaaaaaaaaa, yea yea.

I know you're down, I know you're out,
So take a pillow, yea, go on and shout,
And just let it all out -
Clear the thoughts from your head,
Let the drama stay dead,
And all those hurtful things that were said,
They don't matter now, it's all 'bout you,
So let me help you.

Just smile,
Nothin' can hurt you now,
There's only good, there's only good in
Your heart,
So let it show through, let it show through with a...

Smile,
Go ahead and smile,
Take a look at all that's good,
And turn away while I shove all that's bad under the hood.
So go ahead and smile today,
Smile,
Go ahead and smile,
Take a look at all that's good,
And turn away while I shove all that's bad under the hood.
So go ahead and smile today,
Yea yeaaaaaa, yea yeaaaaaa, yea yeaaaaaaaaaa, yea yea.

wow it's awesome!!
I love it!!
And it actually makes me think of myself...
It describes me well...

[Luna]

I miss you
You're gone
Why didn't you take me along

I miss you
I'de kiss you
If you hadn't left me alone

Why did you go
Was the kindness you showed me
Just a show?

After all the "i love you's"
And all the kind words
Is it really all over?

I miss you
But i wish you
A happy life
Without me

[Ryaque]

Through the Open Door

The door was open; the room dark.
Calling out, I didn't believe your lie.
I saw, on the floor, was my heart.
Falling to my knees, "no you can't die!"

Eyes open, I know you see.
Screaming, my tears fall.
You lye there, slipping away from me.
Blood on my hands, "how could you end it all?!"

Breath shallow, you're about to die.
I beg, knowing soon we'll have to part.
My love, it's time to say good-bye...
Broken, I whisper, "you murdered my heart."

[Luna]

Originally Posted by Ryaque

Through the Open Door

The door was open; the room dark.
Calling out, I didn't believe your lie.
I saw, on the floor, was my heart.
Falling to my knees, "no you can't die!"

Eyes open, I know you see.
Screaming, my tears fall.
You lye there, slipping away from me.
Blood on my hands, "how could you end it all?!"

Breath shallow, you're about to die.
I beg, knowing soon we'll have to part.
My love, it's time to say good-bye...

Broken, I whisper, "you murdered my heart."

I know i already read it
And told you i loved it
But still
I LOVE IT!! <3