The Ultimate Ninja

nzk10 · 01-21-2011, 01:03 AM

This is my first fanfic, and its unfinished as of yet. please give comments, and constructive criticism, and general suggestions. As it is my first, please dont insult it too much. And remember, I just started, so even though it's only a few paragraphs, i think that it shows some promise and could be expanded greatly. Ok, here it is:

"Tsunade?"
"Yes, what is it, Sakura?"
"Well," said Sakura, "I was thinking of a way with which we can greatly
increase the Leaf's military strength."
"What is it?" said an intrigued Tsunade.
"Well, if we were to force all of the varied ninja clans to teach each
other their hidden jutsu, we could create the ultimate ninja to possess
every single ability of the Leaf. For instance, we could use the Nara
clan's Shadow jutsu to immobilize an opponent, while using the Inuzuka's
Man-Beast Clone jutsu to attack, without the need for a comrade present.
Or, the Aburame's bugs could learn to utilize the Man-Beast Clone, and then
one man multiplies into hundreds of thousands of men, similar to the shadow
clone jutsu, but much more numerous."
"I see..." said Tsunade. "Shizune!"
"What is it, Hokage?"
"Go inform the clan leaders to assemble here. Now!"

Devroux · 01-21-2011, 05:53 PM

You have to have an original fanfic. That means nothing like Naruto names and stuff.

nzk10 · 01-22-2011, 05:59 PM

sorry

01-21-2011, 01:03 AM	#1
nzk10 Freshmen Academy Student Join Date: Jan 2011 Posts: 12 Rep Power: 0	The Ultimate Ninja This is my first fanfic, and its unfinished as of yet. please give comments, and constructive criticism, and general suggestions. As it is my first, please dont insult it too much. And remember, I just started, so even though it's only a few paragraphs, i think that it shows some promise and could be expanded greatly. Ok, here it is: "Tsunade?" "Yes, what is it, Sakura?" "Well," said Sakura, "I was thinking of a way with which we can greatly increase the Leaf's military strength." "What is it?" said an intrigued Tsunade. "Well, if we were to force all of the varied ninja clans to teach each other their hidden jutsu, we could create the ultimate ninja to possess every single ability of the Leaf. For instance, we could use the Nara clan's Shadow jutsu to immobilize an opponent, while using the Inuzuka's Man-Beast Clone jutsu to attack, without the need for a comrade present. Or, the Aburame's bugs could learn to utilize the Man-Beast Clone, and then one man multiplies into hundreds of thousands of men, similar to the shadow clone jutsu, but much more numerous." "I see..." said Tsunade. "Shizune!" "What is it, Hokage?" "Go inform the clan leaders to assemble here. Now!"

01-21-2011, 05:53 PM	#2
Devroux Bronze V 4 lyfe Join Date: May 2010 Location: All Pizza Posts: 18,990 Rep Power: 27	Re: The Ultimate Ninja You have to have an original fanfic. That means nothing like Naruto names and stuff. __________________ 卐 DΣVR To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. Uχ Δ\|✝ΣR 卍 To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

01-22-2011, 05:59 PM	#3
nzk10 Freshmen Academy Student Join Date: Jan 2011 Posts: 12 Rep Power: 0	Re: The Ultimate Ninja sorry __________________ PSN: nzk10 Add me if you want a fight! My fanfic!!! To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. Comment on how to improve it, it's the actual first rough draft of the very beginning. I have no experience in fanfics, so help is dearly appreciated.

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