I'm Sorry

NarutoxSakura4ever · 08-16-2010, 08:33 AM

This is a poem that I wrote last night, I don't know maybe it's not really a poem! So anyway, please tell me what you think and no it doesn't apply to anyone I just wrote it! Anyway here is goes, (Oh and please tell me if I should move this if I have this in the wrong area!)

I'm sorry for hurting you time and time again,
I'm sorry for not being good enough,
I'm sorry for constantly putting myself before you,
For being so selfish,
I'm sorry we couldn't last,
I'm sorry that you had to put up with,
This immature little girl
I'm sorry for causing you to fall for me,
I'm sorry for not keeping my promises to you,
I'm sorry for being so weak,
I'm sorry for making you cry,
I'm sorry for that no matter what, I can never be with you...

ItachiAnbu · 08-16-2010, 09:45 AM

On one hand, the poem seems to be a good reflection of what you as the author felt at the time, and therefore it serves its purpose.

On the other hand, it's waaaaaaaaaaaaaaay too depressing for my tastes. Maybe you should try writing about happy things?

Kitties and daisies and cupcakes and cuddles and friends... these are happy, physical subjects. Rejection, failure, lonliness, selfishness, weakness, and tears; these are depressing. So, while it may be good poetry, it's not my personal favorite.

As a writer, I prefer to write haiku. That way I can depict vast subjects that are normally impossible to describe within the confines of the english language. It's the format that helps create a more open-ended feeling. If you like writing, I reccomend it.

Shikamaru Nara · 08-16-2010, 09:47 AM

Wow, I just made a poem thread too. Btw, good poetry, I'm going to rep you for a good poem.

NarutoxSakura4ever · 08-16-2010, 05:27 PM

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Originally Posted by Shikamaru Nara

Wow, I just made a poem thread too. Btw, good poetry, I'm going to rep you for a good poem.

Thanks! ^_^

NarutoxSakura4ever · 08-16-2010, 05:28 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ItachiAnbu

On one hand, the poem seems to be a good reflection of what you as the author felt at the time, and therefore it serves its purpose.

On the other hand, it's waaaaaaaaaaaaaaay too depressing for my tastes. Maybe you should try writing about happy things?

Kitties and daisies and cupcakes and cuddles and friends... these are happy, physical subjects. Rejection, failure, lonliness, selfishness, weakness, and tears; these are depressing. So, while it may be good poetry, it's not my personal favorite.

As a writer, I prefer to write haiku. That way I can depict vast subjects that are normally impossible to describe within the confines of the english language. It's the format that helps create a more open-ended feeling. If you like writing, I reccomend it.

Okay then, next time I'll try making a happy one then!

Leaf/Mist Shinobi250 · 08-16-2010, 05:33 PM

*Claps* Good poem Narisa-chan.

NarutoxSakura4ever · 08-16-2010, 05:34 PM

Thank you. It kind of just came to me...! ^_^

Leaf/Mist Shinobi250 · 08-16-2010, 05:37 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by NarutoxSakura4ever

Thank you. It kind of just came to me...! ^_^

Really? I hope you write more poems Sis.

NarutoxSakura4ever · 08-16-2010, 05:38 PM

Yeah I will.

RealNinja · 08-16-2010, 06:04 PM

Wats going on sis liked the poem. But you will never catch me apologise. Wanna hear mine.

(clears throat)
When you look at me wrong I will stab you.
When you bump in to me without apologizing I will stab you.
When you cut in front of me in line I will stab you.
When you think about disrespecting me I will stab you.
I will stab you.

Tell me what you think .

NarutoxSakura4ever · 08-16-2010, 06:06 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by RealNinja

Wats going on sis liked the poem. But you will never catch me apologise. Wanna hear mine.

(clears throat)
When you look at me wrong I will stab you.
When you bump in to me without apologizing I will stab you.
When you cut in front of me in line I will stab you.
When you think about disrespecting me I will stab you.
I will stab you.

Tell me what you think .

Very violent...! Lol

Leaf/Mist Shinobi250 · 08-16-2010, 06:12 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by RealNinja

Wats going on sis liked the poem. But you will never catch me apologise. Wanna hear mine.

(clears throat)
When you look at me wrong I will stab you.
When you bump in to me without apologizing I will stab you.
When you cut in front of me in line I will stab you.
When you think about disrespecting me I will stab you.
I will stab you.

Tell me what you think .

I am getting this hint that you...like to stab people? Lol

RealNinja · 08-16-2010, 06:13 PM

You know I tried to be good but I keep getting derepped and infractions. Now I dont care. From now on I am going to walk that thin line from being banned and not being banned.

NarutoxSakura4ever · 08-16-2010, 06:27 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Leaf/Mist Shinobi250

I am getting this hint that you...like to stab people? Lol

Ding Ding!

RealNinja · 08-16-2010, 07:53 PM

Hey Hey Hey I do not only those who have it coming to them. I dont stab fam.

NarutoxSakura4ever · 08-16-2010, 08:51 PM

Oh okay! XD

Kiseki · 08-17-2010, 02:27 AM

Thumbs up, very beautiful :3

Lady Tsunade · 08-17-2010, 03:10 AM

Nice :]

Sounds like its about Sakura xD

NarutoxSakura4ever · 08-17-2010, 06:28 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Kiseki

Thumbs up, very beautiful :3

Thank you!

Quote:

Originally Posted by Lady Tsunade

Nice :]

Sounds like its about Sakura xD

Thank you too!!!

Shinagami · 06-06-2012, 09:34 PM

Good poem

08-16-2010, 08:33 AM	#1
NarutoxSakura4ever Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: I'm around.... :) Posts: 5,672 Rep Power: 9	I'm Sorry This is a poem that I wrote last night, I don't know maybe it's not really a poem! So anyway, please tell me what you think and no it doesn't apply to anyone I just wrote it! Anyway here is goes, (Oh and please tell me if I should move this if I have this in the wrong area!) I'm sorry for hurting you time and time again, I'm sorry for not being good enough, I'm sorry for constantly putting myself before you, For being so selfish, I'm sorry we couldn't last, I'm sorry that you had to put up with, This immature little girl I'm sorry for causing you to fall for me, I'm sorry for not keeping my promises to you, I'm sorry for being so weak, I'm sorry for making you cry, I'm sorry for that no matter what, I can never be with you... __________________ I SUPPORT NARUSAKU! Do you have a problem with that? TOO BAD! To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

08-16-2010, 09:45 AM	#2
ItachiAnbu Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: May 2009 Location: Imagine Posts: 3,122 Rep Power: 9	Re: I'm Sorry On one hand, the poem seems to be a good reflection of what you as the author felt at the time, and therefore it serves its purpose. On the other hand, it's waaaaaaaaaaaaaaay too depressing for my tastes. Maybe you should try writing about happy things? Kitties and daisies and cupcakes and cuddles and friends... these are happy, physical subjects. Rejection, failure, lonliness, selfishness, weakness, and tears; these are depressing. So, while it may be good poetry, it's not my personal favorite. As a writer, I prefer to write haiku. That way I can depict vast subjects that are normally impossible to describe within the confines of the english language. It's the format that helps create a more open-ended feeling. If you like writing, I reccomend it. __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

08-16-2010, 09:47 AM	#3
Shikamaru Nara Super \| ɹoʇɐɹǝpoW Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: New York Posts: 43,780 Rep Power: 41 Awards Showcase Total Awards: 1 Total Points: 4	Re: I'm Sorry Wow, I just made a poem thread too. Btw, good poetry, I'm going to rep you for a good poem. __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

08-16-2010, 05:33 PM	#6
Leaf/Mist Shinobi250 Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: In between the Light and Darkness called Twilight. Posts: 4,402 Rep Power: 9	Re: I'm Sorry Claps Good poem Narisa-chan. __________________ "Courage is the magic that turns dreams into reality." Richter Abend "May our hearts be together, and the love & bond that we share last forever..." Me Currently Playing: Monster Hunter 3 Ultimate (3DS) Fire Emblem Awakening (3DS) Witch and Hero (3DSware) Unchained Blades (3DSware) Naruto X Sakura \|\/\|/\\|/\| `____" \|(^^)\| /(^^)\ [/\|II\|\] [//II\\]

08-16-2010, 05:34 PM	#7
NarutoxSakura4ever Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: I'm around.... :) Posts: 5,672 Rep Power: 9	Re: I'm Sorry Thank you. It kind of just came to me...! ^_^ __________________ I SUPPORT NARUSAKU! Do you have a problem with that? TOO BAD! To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

08-16-2010, 05:38 PM	#9
NarutoxSakura4ever Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: I'm around.... :) Posts: 5,672 Rep Power: 9	Re: I'm Sorry Yeah I will. __________________ I SUPPORT NARUSAKU! Do you have a problem with that? TOO BAD! To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

08-16-2010, 06:04 PM	#10
RealNinja Banned Join Date: Aug 2010 Location: with your mom Posts: 1,339 Rep Power: 0	Re: I'm Sorry Wats going on sis liked the poem. But you will never catch me apologise. Wanna hear mine. (clears throat) When you look at me wrong I will stab you. When you bump in to me without apologizing I will stab you. When you cut in front of me in line I will stab you. When you think about disrespecting me I will stab you. I will stab you. Tell me what you think .

08-16-2010, 06:13 PM	#13
RealNinja Banned Join Date: Aug 2010 Location: with your mom Posts: 1,339 Rep Power: 0	Re: I'm Sorry You know I tried to be good but I keep getting derepped and infractions. Now I dont care. From now on I am going to walk that thin line from being banned and not being banned.

08-16-2010, 07:53 PM	#15
RealNinja Banned Join Date: Aug 2010 Location: with your mom Posts: 1,339 Rep Power: 0	Re: I'm Sorry Hey Hey Hey I do not only those who have it coming to them. I dont stab fam.

08-16-2010, 08:51 PM	#16
NarutoxSakura4ever Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: I'm around.... :) Posts: 5,672 Rep Power: 9	Re: I'm Sorry Oh okay! XD __________________ I SUPPORT NARUSAKU! Do you have a problem with that? TOO BAD! To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

08-17-2010, 02:27 AM	#17
Kiseki That Sexy Koala Join Date: Jun 2010 Location: Where you live. Obviously. Posts: 13,438 Rep Power: 25 Member's Picture Albums	Re: I'm Sorry Thumbs up, very beautiful :3 __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. Luna Pink Hikari & Kiseki are the sexy Quad-force <3

08-17-2010, 03:10 AM	#18
Lady Tsunade Old. Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Reality <3 Posts: 9,569 Rep Power: 11	Re: I'm Sorry Nice :] Sounds like its about Sakura xD

06-06-2012, 09:34 PM	#20
Shinagami Genin Join Date: Feb 2010 Location: In the darkness, navigating by starlight. Posts: 209 Rep Power: 7	Re: I'm Sorry Good poem __________________ ♥ Time has fallen asleep in the afternoon sunshine. ♥ "The world isn't perfect. But it's there for us, doing the best it can. And that's what makes it so damn beautiful." ~Roy Mustang あなたがさよならを言わずに去った </3

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