Ohako's story - Page 2

Ohako · 01-14-2010, 06:06 PM

Chapter 2 The Adventure begins
" Hmm well well i think that everything, looks like it is finally time to move on and leave these mountains...gah." Has he tumbles down the hill Roarke is ready to set out from his home for the past 10 years and return his masters precious katanas. " Gah stupid clogs *laughs to self* i should be careful right master." Roarke sets off to a small village to find information about Ryo. While walking through the forest hears voices and on instinct takes cover behind a tree. " hmm well well what do we have here?" In the clearing there were two men standing one had a broad sword and the other a small battle axe and laying on the ground was a young red headed girl with a spear laying awhiles away. " What?! was this girl fighting them all by" Roark starts to unbuckle his giant sword and lays it on the ground quietly. " Grr i gotta say Clyde this chick was better then i thought." " Yeah Yeah i know, but come on look at the money she was carrying it was worth it she probably would've beat you if i did not step in Tora." "Hmpf i don't care she gotta lucky, but looks like her luck is gone i am going to finish this now!!!

i_love_kakashi · 01-14-2010, 06:09 PM

This is a very good story Ohako!
^_^ I am going to read it when more chapters come!

Ohako · 01-14-2010, 06:10 PM

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Originally Posted by i_love_kakashi

This is a very good story Ohako!
^_^ I am going to read it when more chapters come!

Hmm o really? thanks

ILK if u noticed I slacked of for about three months lol and decided to start it up again

i_love_kakashi · 01-14-2010, 06:13 PM

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Originally Posted by Ohako

Hmm o really? thanks

ILK if u noticed I slacked of for about three months lol and decided to start it up again

Yep, I really enjoy your story so far keep writing boy!~ lol XD

Ohako · 01-14-2010, 06:31 PM

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Originally Posted by i_love_kakashi

Yep, I really enjoy your story so far keep writing boy!~ lol XD

Thank You and i will lol

Ohako · 01-21-2010, 10:41 AM

Chapter 3: An Ally???
Graaaah!!! Tora swings his axe and the girl with the red hair screams. Ching! "What?!?" "Well well it is not nice to pick on beautiful girls hmm." In the background Clyde thinks to himself..." Wow this guy is good, his speed was amazing and blocked it perfectly well looks like Tora will be finished soon." "Y-you punk you will pay for stepping into someone elses business.. who do you think you are?" "Hmm well the name's Roarke." "What I don't care who you are I did not ask for your name gah i am going to kill the both of y-" Smack! Out of nowhere the handle of spear hits Tora clear across the face and he is sent to the ground knocking his axe out of his hand. "We have not finished our fight yet' yelled the red haired girl. Roarke just stands there amazed. "You i will kill you!!! Tora shouts as he struggles to his feet, but in that short time the red~haired girl already knocked out Tora by hitting him in the back of the head with her spear." "Oh well done indeed but you didn't kill him." said Roarke. "I am in no position to end his life." " Hmm well i was a bit careless well best be on my way." Roarke sheaths his sword and walks over to the tree to get his giant sword. "Wait yelled the girl, I owe you thanks for saving my life and what do you mean you were careless?" "Well, says Roarke, there no need to thank me i was only walking by and decided to join since it was 1 against 2 and his friend escaped meaning there could still be trouble for you so i guess i could escort you to the closest town since i need to go there anyways." "Really??? thank you i will repay you somehow in town and Roarke my name is Meleena.

Raiden · 01-21-2010, 10:42 AM

*is wearing the darkest robes you've ever seen, on my hands I'm wearing Silver Steel Gauntlets, I have a hood over my hood hiding my face, but you can still see my Jaw, witch to your surprise it looks like a Jaw bone, over my head is a bright yellow halo, as I walk I leave a trail of blood behind me*
Very good Kun Killer

Ohako · 01-21-2010, 10:45 AM

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Originally Posted by Raiden

*is wearing the darkest robes you've ever seen, on my hands I'm wearing Silver Steel Gauntlets, I have a hood over my hood hiding my face, but you can still see my Jaw, witch to your surprise it looks like a Jaw bone, over my head is a bright yellow halo, as I walk I leave a trail of blood behind me*
Very good Kun Killer

thanks Rai and interesting description you got there.

Raiden · 01-21-2010, 10:54 AM

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Originally Posted by Ohako

thanks Rai and interesting description you got there.

Oh Rai, the name from long before, I was killed some time ago, after sometime in the afterlife I became the new Grim Reaper for this part of the Void

Maikeru D. Shinigami · 01-21-2010, 09:10 PM

I had to reply to this first:

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Originally Posted by kakashi_sempai

it to long i cant read the much

Are you serious? The prologue is 409 words long, how hard is it to read that? I've written double or more of that in messages on MySpace. In fact, I probably did 9 or 10 times just today. These are more like scenes than chapters really.

And I mean that with no offense to Ohako whatsoever, the story is interesting and the organization is better than most on here.

Ohako · 01-22-2010, 08:24 AM

lol nice comment and Thank You Maikeru

Raiden · 01-22-2010, 08:26 AM

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Originally Posted by Ohako

lol nice comment and Thank You Maikeru

Hmmmm

Ohako · 01-22-2010, 08:45 AM

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Originally Posted by Raiden

Hmmmm

hmm hey Rai i will have a new chapter up later but probably not today

Leji_Hyuga · 01-30-2010, 12:10 PM

good start

Ohako · 01-31-2010, 12:09 PM

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Originally Posted by Leji_Hyuga

good start

Thanks Leji i am too busy to write another chapter now but i will soon

kakashi uzumaki · 02-01-2010, 05:35 AM

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Originally Posted by Ohako

Chapter 2 The Adventure begins
" Hmm well well i think that everything, looks like it is finally time to move on and leave these mountains...gah." Has he tumbles down the hill Roarke is ready to set out from his home for the past 10 years and return his masters precious katanas. " Gah stupid clogs *laughs to self* i should be careful right master." Roarke sets off to a small village to find information about Ryo. While walking through the forest hears voices and on instinct takes cover behind a tree. " hmm well well what do we have here?" In the clearing there were two men standing one had a broad sword and the other a small battle axe and laying on the ground was a young red headed girl with a spear laying awhiles away. " What?! was this girl fighting them all by" Roark starts to unbuckle his giant sword and lays it on the ground quietly. " Grr i gotta say Clyde this chick was better then i thought." " Yeah Yeah i know, but come on look at the money she was carrying it was worth it she probably would've beat you if i did not step in Tora." "Hmpf i don't care she gotta lucky, but looks like her luck is gone i am going to finish this now!!!

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Originally Posted by Ohako

Chapter 3: An Ally???
Graaaah!!! Tora swings his axe and the girl with the red hair screams. Ching! "What?!?" "Well well it is not nice to pick on beautiful girls hmm." In the background Clyde thinks to himself..." Wow this guy is good, his speed was amazing and blocked it perfectly well looks like Tora will be finished soon." "Y-you punk you will pay for stepping into someone elses business.. who do you think you are?" "Hmm well the name's Roarke." "What I don't care who you are I did not ask for your name gah i am going to kill the both of y-" Smack! Out of nowhere the handle of spear hits Tora clear across the face and he is sent to the ground knocking his axe out of his hand. "We have not finished our fight yet' yelled the red haired girl. Roarke just stands there amazed. "You i will kill you!!! Tora shouts as he struggles to his feet, but in that short time the red~haired girl already knocked out Tora by hitting him in the back of the head with her spear." "Oh well done indeed but you did kill him." said Roarke. "I am in no position to end his life." " Hmm well i was a bit careless well best be on my way." Roarke sheaths his sword and walks over to the tree to get his giant sword. "Wait yelled the girl, I owe you thanks for saving my life and what do you mean you were careless?" "Well, says Roarke, there no need to thank me i was only walking by and decided to join since it was 1 against 2 and his friend escaped meaning there could still be trouble for you so i guess i could escort you to the closest town since i need to go there anyways." "Really??? thank you i will repay you somehow in town and Roarke my name is Meleena.

great chapters o-kun....where'd u get the names from??

Ohako · 02-01-2010, 01:05 PM

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Originally Posted by kakashi uzumaki

great chapters o-kun....where'd u get the names from??

Hmm if you mean the bandit's and Meleena they were totally random names i came up with lol or maybe there is some meaning behind them

kakashi uzumaki · 02-01-2010, 01:29 PM

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Originally Posted by Ohako

Hmm if you mean the bandit's and Meleena they were totally random names i came up with lol or maybe there is some meaning behind them

lol well they have good names. Cant wait till next chater o~kun

Ohako · 02-01-2010, 01:31 PM

Thanks KU but it be awhile till the next chapter i have a essay to write

kakashi uzumaki · 02-01-2010, 04:01 PM

awwww

......alright, good luck with the essay!

01-14-2010, 06:06 PM	#21
Ohako Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Watching Bakuman Posts: 3,102 Rep Power: 9 Member's Picture Albums	Re: Ohako's story Chapter 2 The Adventure begins " Hmm well well i think that everything, looks like it is finally time to move on and leave these mountains...gah." Has he tumbles down the hill Roarke is ready to set out from his home for the past 10 years and return his masters precious katanas. " Gah stupid clogs laughs to self i should be careful right master." Roarke sets off to a small village to find information about Ryo. While walking through the forest hears voices and on instinct takes cover behind a tree. " hmm well well what do we have here?" In the clearing there were two men standing one had a broad sword and the other a small battle axe and laying on the ground was a young red headed girl with a spear laying awhiles away. " What?! was this girl fighting them all by" Roark starts to unbuckle his giant sword and lays it on the ground quietly. " Grr i gotta say Clyde this chick was better then i thought." " Yeah Yeah i know, but come on look at the money she was carrying it was worth it she probably would've beat you if i did not step in Tora." "Hmpf i don't care she gotta lucky, but looks like her luck is gone i am going to finish this now!!! __________________ O~kun GF:Jhokage613 I LOVE MY MOMMY, GAARA'S GIRL <3 Glaring buddy and sweet little sis~Animelover E is for Erza ~DOLLARS~ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

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i_love_kakashi Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: On the street corner Posts: 9,803 Rep Power: 10	Re: Ohako's story This is a very good story Ohako! ^_^ I am going to read it when more chapters come! __________________ KGT IS MY HUSBAND Even if he doesn't know it anymore.. ♥ ♥ ♥

01-21-2010, 10:41 AM	#26
Ohako Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Watching Bakuman Posts: 3,102 Rep Power: 9 Member's Picture Albums	Re: Ohako's story Chapter 3: An Ally??? Graaaah!!! Tora swings his axe and the girl with the red hair screams. Ching! "What?!?" "Well well it is not nice to pick on beautiful girls hmm." In the background Clyde thinks to himself..." Wow this guy is good, his speed was amazing and blocked it perfectly well looks like Tora will be finished soon." "Y-you punk you will pay for stepping into someone elses business.. who do you think you are?" "Hmm well the name's Roarke." "What I don't care who you are I did not ask for your name gah i am going to kill the both of y-" Smack! Out of nowhere the handle of spear hits Tora clear across the face and he is sent to the ground knocking his axe out of his hand. "We have not finished our fight yet' yelled the red haired girl. Roarke just stands there amazed. "You i will kill you!!! Tora shouts as he struggles to his feet, but in that short time the red~haired girl already knocked out Tora by hitting him in the back of the head with her spear." "Oh well done indeed but you didn't kill him." said Roarke. "I am in no position to end his life." " Hmm well i was a bit careless well best be on my way." Roarke sheaths his sword and walks over to the tree to get his giant sword. "Wait yelled the girl, I owe you thanks for saving my life and what do you mean you were careless?" "Well, says Roarke, there no need to thank me i was only walking by and decided to join since it was 1 against 2 and his friend escaped meaning there could still be trouble for you so i guess i could escort you to the closest town since i need to go there anyways." "Really??? thank you i will repay you somehow in town and Roarke my name is Meleena. __________________ O~kun GF:Jhokage613 I LOVE MY MOMMY, GAARA'S GIRL <3 Glaring buddy and sweet little sis~Animelover E is for Erza ~DOLLARS~ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. Last edited by Ohako; 09-03-2012 at 10:37 AM.

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01-22-2010, 08:24 AM	#31
Ohako Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Watching Bakuman Posts: 3,102 Rep Power: 9 Member's Picture Albums	Re: Ohako's story lol nice comment and Thank You Maikeru __________________ O~kun GF:Jhokage613 I LOVE MY MOMMY, GAARA'S GIRL <3 Glaring buddy and sweet little sis~Animelover E is for Erza ~DOLLARS~ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

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Ohako Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Watching Bakuman Posts: 3,102 Rep Power: 9 Member's Picture Albums	Re: Ohako's story Thanks KU but it be awhile till the next chapter i have a essay to write __________________ O~kun GF:Jhokage613 I LOVE MY MOMMY, GAARA'S GIRL <3 Glaring buddy and sweet little sis~Animelover E is for Erza ~DOLLARS~ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

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kakashi uzumaki Prodigy Girl Join Date: May 2009 Location: Elmo's World Posts: 8,256 Rep Power: 12	Re: Ohako's story awwww ......alright, good luck with the essay! __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

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