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Special Jonin Candidate
Join Date: May 2009
Location: Falling down...down...down...deeper into the darkness...
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I couldn't believe it..all my life I have been treated like a freak. I didn't ask for this..who would ask for this?? All I know is I was born different..and because of that I was abandoned by my family; forced to live alone in the world. I don't know where they went, but to tell you the trueth I don't really care. I have lived a long time and if there's one thing I learned it's this...never trust humans. They pretend to be loyal to you then stab you in the back as soon as you let you're guard down. Filthy creatures like them deserved to be slaughtered. There is only one person I can count on in this world and that's ME!!! I can't trust my own kind, I can't trust the humans, I'm all I got.....but I don't care. This war has gone on long enough...over 1,000 years...a war between the humans and the daemons. I've had it...this is the year The Great War will end. I'm coming out of hiding and I'm going to give them hell!!!!! Index: Spoiler:
Characters: Ryaque~ Spoiler:
Seargent Wilks~ Spoiler:
Cinnamon~ Spoiler:
Flara~ Spoiler:
Aquamarine~ Spoiler:
Mikiko~ Spoiler:
Kiyomaru~ Spoiler:
Kye~ Spoiler:
Haruko~ Spoiler:
Jiro~ Spoiler:
Yuki~ Spoiler:
Ryu~ Spoiler:
Kaori~ Spoiler:
Kiyomi~ Spoiler:
Katsuro~ Spoiler:
Aikiri Yamamoto~ Spoiler:
Uncle Daichi~ Spoiler:
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veary good so far! ^^
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This reminds me of elfen lied... But pretty good.
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Reminded my of Elfen Lied a bit, but good nonetheless.
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good story so far...
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nice!!
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yep, wonderful plot so far.
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Special Jonin Candidate
Join Date: May 2009
Location: Falling down...down...down...deeper into the darkness...
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Chapter One: Found.
"Hey man, are you sure we should be in these woods this late at night??" A boy asked his friend as they searched the forest. "Yeah dude, I saw a demon in here last night. It's pretty weak though." The other reasured and kept walking. "But..what if it's not??? You have no idea what that demon could do!!" The boy was getting more paranoid and terrifiyed by the minute. "Listen to me," the second one said, "there is not a daemon alive that can stop us. You know that...wait what is that?" They both stopped and look under a tree. Sleeping there was a red headed, beautiful girl. The both smiled and stepped closer. "Dude, who do you think she is??" The first asked and just kept staring at her. "I don't know man..but she's so pretty....." He bent down to reach for her but then someone grabbed his hand. "Have you two no respect for the sleeping??!!" The girl hissed at them and stood up. The two boys cowered in fear as they realized that the girl they were looking at was not human. "DAEMON!!!!!!" One yelled and used his other hand to reach for his sword, but it was too late. The Daemon broke his arm then took his sword and stabbed him, putting him out of his misery. "No...no....Get away from me!!!!" The last boy yelled and turned to run away, but the daemon was quicker. "You fool...." She said then and lobbed the boys head off. "Filthy humans....they can't ever leave me alone can they??" She then tore off a piece of clothing from one of them and sighed. "Daemon slayers...." She put away the sword and started walking from where the boys came from. This war has gone on long enough...now that I've killed two of their people, more will be coming to see what happened. I need to split before I'm seen. The daemon then ran off and dissapeared. "Sir, what do you think happened here?" A patrol officer asked the person in command. They had stummbled onto the bodies. "The way I see it...this was no ordinary daemon. Have you heard of one named Ryaque?" The lower ranking officer thought for a second then replied. "Yes..she was there when the war started, but didn't she dissapear over 500 years ago??" The leader gave a evil grin. "She's back...and from the looks of these men...stronger then ever. Rally the troops. Tell them to be on the look out for a cat daemon, but no one is to go near it, understand??" He saluted. "Yes, Seargent Wilks." He ran off to carry out the seargents orders. "Ryaque..where ever you go...I'll find you...and I will kill you." He laughed then and walked into the forest.
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awesome!! Can't wait till the next part!!!
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Song to describe my mood: To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. "So long, my luckless romance. My back is turned on you. Should've known you'd bring me heartache. Almost lovers always do..." ~Almost Lover, A Fine Frenzy Spoiler:
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COOL! Keep writeing!
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Special Jonin Candidate
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Location: I'm dreaming.. About me dreaming a dream about you ;)
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good... soo good
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Special Jonin Candidate
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Chapter Two: Old friends or new ememys?
I kept walking through the forest, cursing at myself for leaving the bodies instead of burning them. Damn it Ryaque..you're too soft. Did you forget about what they did to you?? I was on my way to find a certain group of daemons I've known for a while. Cinnamon, Flara, and Aquamarine....usually they would be hard to find but they're getting sloppy....that could get them killed. Just as it got dark I found them. They seemed to be cautious until they saw it was me. "Ryaque!!!," Cinnamon said, "it's so nice to see you again." Flara stood up and waved. "Hey Ry, been awhile." I nodded and smiled. "Yes it has my friends..but I'm afraid I'm in a bit of a fix." Aquamarine stood up and looked worried. "What is it Ryaque??" I looked at her and replied. "The Black Horses are after me. Those pain in the neck humans seem to think they can beat me." Flara laughed. "They obviously don't know who you are...what human would be stupid enough to attack a daemon over 1,000 years old?" Aquamarine giggled. "Obviously the Black Horses are stupid enough." I cleared my throut and get their attention again. "Listen girls...this war has dragged on long enough and many of our kind have been lost. I've come out of hiding for one purpose and one purpose only. I'm ending this war, but I need your help." Cinnamon clencher her fists and smiled. "Count us in Ry, we're with you to the end." I nodded. "Good, now follow me...we'll need more then just four daemons to take out the Black Horse leader." Aquamarine gave a disapproving stare. "Do you mean...we have to find...HIM???" I laughed and turned back toward the darkness. "Yes...we need to find Mikiko. Follow me." They all followed but didn't seem to approve of the idea at all.
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Song to describe my mood: To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. "So long, my luckless romance. My back is turned on you. Should've known you'd bring me heartache. Almost lovers always do..." ~Almost Lover, A Fine Frenzy Spoiler:
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Special Jonin Candidate
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Awesome! I like the name Aquamarine.
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Good so far, but there is a lot of mistakes in there and is Demon and Daemons the same thing?
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Thank you for telling me, I just fixed them all I think, and yes demon and daemon is the same thing, but it's sounds alittle fancier with the 'a' before the 'e.'
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Song to describe my mood: To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. "So long, my luckless romance. My back is turned on you. Should've known you'd bring me heartache. Almost lovers always do..." ~Almost Lover, A Fine Frenzy Spoiler:
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Chapter Three: Not A Daemon But Not Human Either~
All four of us walked in silence, course there really was no need to say anything, but tell that to Cinnamon. "Ryaque...why in the world are we getting Mikiko??" She seemed to have a slight wine to her voice. "Because the humans aren't as good as killing his kind then ours...infact they might not even know werewolves exist." Aquamarine's jaw dropped. "He's a...werewolf?? Didn't they once surve the humans and help capture daemons??" Flara tried to tell Aquamarine to shut up but she wouldn't listen. "How do we know that he won't betray us?? How do we know if he's not already working with them..." She wanted to say more but soon she was staring up at Ryaque from the ground with a large bruise on her face. "Shut up..shut the hell up....you don't know him and you have no right to judge him!!!!" I could feel the anger filling up inside of me...part of me wanted to kill her right there, but I knew there was no point in killing her. She was young..she didn't know what drove me over the edge...but if she wants to stay alive she'll learn quickly. Cinnamon helped Aqumarine up and gave me a dirty glare. "She doesn't know what happened Ryaque...cut her some slack." I didn't say a word..I just walked on. It had been three days and still no sign of Mikiko, but then again werewolves were masters at hiding. Aquamarine suddenly froze and sniffed the air. "Humans..and a lot of them." She took out her sword and grinned. "I was starting to get hungry." Flara already was off to get them and Aquamarine followed close behind. "Sorry Ry, but it's lunch time.." Cinnamon then disappeared as well. I shook my head and sighed. "So young and arrogent....if you wait food comes to you..." A man stepped out of the forest and raised his sword. "So you did come back..eh Ryaque?" Seargent Wilks seemed overly pleased with himself. "What are you planning this time?" I let my claws out and prepared to fight. "Why should I tell a filthy beast like you?" Wilks laughed and pointed his sword at me. "You're the 'filthy beast' you daemons have hidden like cowards in the darkness..it's my job to end you all." He charged forward and swung. The next thing he heard was a big thud. His sword had hit a tree while I was long gone. "Smart little thing..I'll give her that." A officer came up and saluted. "Sir we've lost sight of all the daemons, sir." Seargent Wilks drew his sword from the tree and glared. "Do you know where they are heading?" The officer shook his head. "No sir..they dis..." He never got to finish. His head fell to the ground along with his body shortly afterward. "Fool....they are too dangerouse to lose." I met up with Flara, Aquamarine, and Cinnamon a few minutes later. Flara wiped away some gore from her mouth and smiled. "Ry, you missed one hell of a feast." Cinnamon laughed and cleaned her sword. "Villagers, all weak and defence less; it was just too easy." Aquamarine stayed silent but nodded. She must be alittle upset about earlier still..."Hey Ry, where were you?" I smiled and looked off in the distance. "I met up with an old friend...but come we must find Mikiko before the full moon." Aquamarine finally spoke up. "Why?" Flara slapped her in the back of the head. "A werewolf is uncontrolable on the full moon stupid." I snickered alittle when flush marks appeared on Aquamarine's face. "Come...he should be close." Flara had taken the lead and look around. "Ry, there is something up ahead...it's big." I stepped forward and smiled. "It's his cave. You three stay out here...I'll be back shortly." I walked into the darkness and left my friends alone to themselves. I hadn't walked far before I heard something. "Ryaque.....it's been so long...." I would reconized that soothing, but somehow annoying, voice anywhere. "Mikiko..." A man jumped down from somewhere at the top of the cave and smiled. "In the flesh, but what's a beautiful cat daemon like you doing in a cave with me...alone??" He seemed to like the last part..'alone.' My expression didn't change..I simply answered. "I need you're help...." He smiled and wrapped his arm around my shoulders. "Say no more I'm with ya cutie." Aquamarine stood up and look worried. "Did you hear that?" Cinnamon, who was laying on the ground, opened her eyes. "What is it now Miss Paranoid?" Aquamarine didn't seem to notice the insult. "I just heard someone yell...from inside the cave...The next second I walked out; Mikiko was clenching his arm and followed, swearing at me. "So...you've got the girls together eh?" Flara glared at him. "Okay listen dog, you're here just because Ryaque said we needed you, which I think is a bunch of bull...you over step the line once..and I mean ONCE..and you're going to find yourself with a heart full of silver. Got it?" Mikiko seemed alittle fazed but none the worse for wear. "Yes ma'm." I cut in before any more threats could be said. "Now everyone..one more person to get then we're going to pay Seargent Wilks a friendly little visit..."
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Song to describe my mood: To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. "So long, my luckless romance. My back is turned on you. Should've known you'd bring me heartache. Almost lovers always do..." ~Almost Lover, A Fine Frenzy Spoiler:
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Oh cool! I like... aquamarine the best. ALso Mikiko is a good character!
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Thanks Cherry.
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Your welcome! ^^
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