Antwoine: The Wolf of The Shining Moon

Sasuke726 · 10-29-2009, 10:50 PM

Intro:

The night was harsh. The dark sky filled with nothing but the moon. A full one at that. Although the darkness covered a widespread there was one town that glimmered in the darkness however the light was not heavenly it was because it had been set ablaze. The village was going to burn down and it would never be known after its destruction. Next to the village there was a forest filled with tall trees. As the village was consumed by fire nothing would survive the blaze. However there was a woman carrying a child running through the forest..............

"We are gonna make it okay," she said as she stared he son in the eyes. " Dont worry everything will be alright and when we make it away from here we will start anew okay?" The child was no older than 3 months and he was crying through. As the woman was running she heard footsteps behind her. She began to run as fast as she could.

"Where is she?" a deep, raspy, manly unfamiliar voice yelled out.

"She has to be here somewhere," a raspy, whisper-like, evil voice replied.

"Oh no they have found us," the mother whispered, "but we can still make it to the village border and get some help." The mother picked up speed as she saw the light of the village border shining in the darkness. "We can make it," the woman thought. At that moment clouds began to crowd the sky however they did not cover the moon. Then thunder began to sound rain began to fall.

"Im tired of doing this the old fashion way..........." the unfamiliar voice said. The person closed both eyes and used a visual justu to search through the woods for the woman. "I found her." the voice spoke.

"Where?" the second voice replied.

"5 miles ahead about 2 miles from the border. Stop her from getting to the border before she escapes." the first voice said.

"No prob." the second voice responded.

The woman saw the tower in which the border light was up and she also saw a man in the tower. She wanted to yell to get his attention but if she yelled she would give away her position to her pursuers. The only way to get the mans attention was to either get to the tower by crossing a 1 mile plain or making a loud noticeable sound. The woman was almost to the beginning of the plain when she tripped over a log causing the baby to fly out her arms as the woman tumbled to the ground. The woman tried to get up however her leg was seriously injured from the fall. She looked for the baby while managing to sit herself up against a tree. "Where are you. Where is my baby," woman said silently. She could not spot her son though. The darkness and rain clouded her vision from seeing where the baby had landed. The woman heard a rattle in the bushes. "Is that you my son?" the woman said with fear.

"Well, well, well, looks like I just found our little runaway." the second voice declared.

The woman gasped. "What do you want from me?"

"Where is it?" the second voice said.

The woman stood to her feet wobbling but keeping balance enough to stand. "What?"

"How do you want it? Fast and easy............ or slow and painful."

The woman spat in the persons face. "I dont care if you manage to kill me."

"Ha!" the voice said. The person hit the woman knocking her back to the ground. "Its funny your spit is as cold blooded as me."

The woman sees her child after falling to the ground. "Why are you after me?"

"Im not after you..." the second voice replied. A shadowy figure attacks the woman. The woman screams causing the baby to begin crying.

The other person from before shows up. "We have to get it," the second voice said.

"NO!!! Not right now. After a scream that loud and the burning village in the distance are acknowledged the border patrol should be on its way and we dont want to blow our cover. Lets move out now. Besides we will have a second chance. At that point in time you can redeem yourself by finding and destroying it." the first voice states and then he disappears.

There is dog barking heard in the distance. The baby stared the second person in the eyes and stopped crying. The person stared back with his cold, dead, ominous eyes. "We will meet again." the second voice declared and then the person fled from the site. At that time a dog arrived at the scene. Afterward, three shinobi arrived. One of which pointed out the lifeless body of the woman. After acknowledging her being dead they covered her in a body bag and two of the shinobi picked it up. The three shinobi began to disperse until one of them heard a cry. "What is this?" a shinobi said. "A child. Why is there a child on the ground." the man said. The man looked at the child that was wrapped in a blanket and saw some letters. The letters spelled out a name.

"Antwoine.......... so thats your name little guy. Antwoine, well lets get you out of the rain before you catch pneumonia.

Sasuke726 · 10-29-2009, 11:05 PM

can someone read this and tell me if it sucked

Sasuke726 · 10-31-2009, 08:10 AM

can someone tell me if this sucked or not

Ninja of Cao · 10-31-2009, 09:01 AM

It's pretty good.

Sasuke726 · 10-31-2009, 09:04 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Ninja of Tao

It's pretty good.

Yes thanx
if i can get four more people to say its good then ill make the first chapter

Ninja of Cao · 10-31-2009, 09:16 AM

Does my squad counts?
Chin, Kaoru, and Nikito.

Sasuke726 · 10-31-2009, 09:24 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Ninja of Tao

Does my squad counts?
Chin, Kaoru, and Nikito.

yea if u can get them to read it i guess

Ninja of Cao · 10-31-2009, 09:50 AM

They're not real people.

Sasuke726 · 10-31-2009, 09:51 AM

are u serious
well then i guess they dont count

Ninja of Cao · 10-31-2009, 09:58 AM

Well, you can tell your friends to read it. I'm sure they'll think it's good.

Ace adventurer · 10-31-2009, 10:02 AM

I love wolves

jesse uzumaki · 10-31-2009, 10:06 AM

wow nice it's pertty good man.

Ace adventurer · 10-31-2009, 10:07 AM

Nice buddy

kurribu99 · 10-31-2009, 10:10 AM

awsome!!!!!

Sasuke726 · 10-31-2009, 10:57 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by kurribu99

awsome!!!!!

Quote:

Originally Posted by Ace adventurer

Nice buddy

Quote:

Originally Posted by jesse uzumaki

wow nice it's pertty good man.

thanx everybody

Sasuke726 · 10-31-2009, 10:57 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Ace adventurer

I love wolves

yea wolves r my fave animal

Vatanui AKA Pride · 10-31-2009, 11:32 AM

It's pretty good, I like the title.

Sasuke726 · 10-31-2009, 11:35 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Vatanui AKA Pride

It's pretty good, I like the title.

thanx

Vatanui AKA Pride · 10-31-2009, 11:38 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Sasuke726

thanx

You remember our deal.

Sasuke726 · 10-31-2009, 12:24 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Vatanui AKA Pride

You remember our deal.

i already commented

10-29-2009, 10:50 PM	#1
Sasuke726 Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: In your girlfriend's wet dreams, and in your worse nightmares. Posts: 3,427 Rep Power: 8	Antwoine: The Wolf of The Shining Moon Intro: The night was harsh. The dark sky filled with nothing but the moon. A full one at that. Although the darkness covered a widespread there was one town that glimmered in the darkness however the light was not heavenly it was because it had been set ablaze. The village was going to burn down and it would never be known after its destruction. Next to the village there was a forest filled with tall trees. As the village was consumed by fire nothing would survive the blaze. However there was a woman carrying a child running through the forest.............. "We are gonna make it okay," she said as she stared he son in the eyes. " Dont worry everything will be alright and when we make it away from here we will start anew okay?" The child was no older than 3 months and he was crying through. As the woman was running she heard footsteps behind her. She began to run as fast as she could. "Where is she?" a deep, raspy, manly unfamiliar voice yelled out. "She has to be here somewhere," a raspy, whisper-like, evil voice replied. "Oh no they have found us," the mother whispered, "but we can still make it to the village border and get some help." The mother picked up speed as she saw the light of the village border shining in the darkness. "We can make it," the woman thought. At that moment clouds began to crowd the sky however they did not cover the moon. Then thunder began to sound rain began to fall. "Im tired of doing this the old fashion way..........." the unfamiliar voice said. The person closed both eyes and used a visual justu to search through the woods for the woman. "I found her." the voice spoke. "Where?" the second voice replied. "5 miles ahead about 2 miles from the border. Stop her from getting to the border before she escapes." the first voice said. "No prob." the second voice responded. The woman saw the tower in which the border light was up and she also saw a man in the tower. She wanted to yell to get his attention but if she yelled she would give away her position to her pursuers. The only way to get the mans attention was to either get to the tower by crossing a 1 mile plain or making a loud noticeable sound. The woman was almost to the beginning of the plain when she tripped over a log causing the baby to fly out her arms as the woman tumbled to the ground. The woman tried to get up however her leg was seriously injured from the fall. She looked for the baby while managing to sit herself up against a tree. "Where are you. Where is my baby," woman said silently. She could not spot her son though. The darkness and rain clouded her vision from seeing where the baby had landed. The woman heard a rattle in the bushes. "Is that you my son?" the woman said with fear. "Well, well, well, looks like I just found our little runaway." the second voice declared. The woman gasped. "What do you want from me?" "Where is it?" the second voice said. The woman stood to her feet wobbling but keeping balance enough to stand. "What?" "How do you want it? Fast and easy............ or slow and painful." The woman spat in the persons face. "I dont care if you manage to kill me." "Ha!" the voice said. The person hit the woman knocking her back to the ground. "Its funny your spit is as cold blooded as me." The woman sees her child after falling to the ground. "Why are you after me?" "Im not after you..." the second voice replied. A shadowy figure attacks the woman. The woman screams causing the baby to begin crying. The other person from before shows up. "We have to get it," the second voice said. "NO!!! Not right now. After a scream that loud and the burning village in the distance are acknowledged the border patrol should be on its way and we dont want to blow our cover. Lets move out now. Besides we will have a second chance. At that point in time you can redeem yourself by finding and destroying it." the first voice states and then he disappears. There is dog barking heard in the distance. The baby stared the second person in the eyes and stopped crying. The person stared back with his cold, dead, ominous eyes. "We will meet again." the second voice declared and then the person fled from the site. At that time a dog arrived at the scene. Afterward, three shinobi arrived. One of which pointed out the lifeless body of the woman. After acknowledging her being dead they covered her in a body bag and two of the shinobi picked it up. The three shinobi began to disperse until one of them heard a cry. "What is this?" a shinobi said. "A child. Why is there a child on the ground." the man said. The man looked at the child that was wrapped in a blanket and saw some letters. The letters spelled out a name. "Antwoine.......... so thats your name little guy. Antwoine, well lets get you out of the rain before you catch pneumonia. Last edited by Sasuke726; 10-29-2009 at 11:06 PM.

10-29-2009, 11:05 PM	#2
Sasuke726 Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: In your girlfriend's wet dreams, and in your worse nightmares. Posts: 3,427 Rep Power: 8	Re: Antwoine: The Wolf of The Shining Moon can someone read this and tell me if it sucked

10-31-2009, 08:10 AM	#3
Sasuke726 Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: In your girlfriend's wet dreams, and in your worse nightmares. Posts: 3,427 Rep Power: 8	Re: Antwoine: The Wolf of The Shining Moon can someone tell me if this sucked or not

10-31-2009, 09:01 AM	#4
Ninja of Cao Racistic My lil' Fuhrer Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Närke, Sweden. Posts: 5,690 Rep Power: 12 Member's Picture Albums	Re: Antwoine: The Wolf of The Shining Moon It's pretty good. __________________ Thou ancient, Thou free, Thou mountainous North. Thou quiet, Thou joyful beauty. I greet Thee, most beautiful land upon earth, Thy sun, Thy sky, Thy meadows green. Thou art enthroned upon memories of great olden days, when honoured Thy name flew across the earth. I know that Thou art and wilt remain what Thou wast, Yes, I want to live, I want to die in the North. Hotmail: To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. Tinychat: To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. YouTube: To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. Spoiler: Rest in peace, Hugo Chavez

10-31-2009, 09:16 AM	#6
Ninja of Cao Racistic My lil' Fuhrer Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Närke, Sweden. Posts: 5,690 Rep Power: 12 Member's Picture Albums	Re: Antwoine: The Wolf of The Shining Moon Does my squad counts? Chin, Kaoru, and Nikito. __________________ Thou ancient, Thou free, Thou mountainous North. Thou quiet, Thou joyful beauty. I greet Thee, most beautiful land upon earth, Thy sun, Thy sky, Thy meadows green. Thou art enthroned upon memories of great olden days, when honoured Thy name flew across the earth. I know that Thou art and wilt remain what Thou wast, Yes, I want to live, I want to die in the North. Hotmail: To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. Tinychat: To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. YouTube: To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. Spoiler: Rest in peace, Hugo Chavez

10-31-2009, 09:50 AM	#8
Ninja of Cao Racistic My lil' Fuhrer Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Närke, Sweden. Posts: 5,690 Rep Power: 12 Member's Picture Albums	Re: Antwoine: The Wolf of The Shining Moon They're not real people. __________________ Thou ancient, Thou free, Thou mountainous North. Thou quiet, Thou joyful beauty. I greet Thee, most beautiful land upon earth, Thy sun, Thy sky, Thy meadows green. Thou art enthroned upon memories of great olden days, when honoured Thy name flew across the earth. I know that Thou art and wilt remain what Thou wast, Yes, I want to live, I want to die in the North. Hotmail: To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. Tinychat: To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. YouTube: To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. Spoiler: Rest in peace, Hugo Chavez

10-31-2009, 09:51 AM	#9
Sasuke726 Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: In your girlfriend's wet dreams, and in your worse nightmares. Posts: 3,427 Rep Power: 8	Re: Antwoine: The Wolf of The Shining Moon are u serious well then i guess they dont count

10-31-2009, 09:58 AM	#10
Ninja of Cao Racistic My lil' Fuhrer Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Närke, Sweden. Posts: 5,690 Rep Power: 12 Member's Picture Albums	Re: Antwoine: The Wolf of The Shining Moon Well, you can tell your friends to read it. I'm sure they'll think it's good. __________________ Thou ancient, Thou free, Thou mountainous North. Thou quiet, Thou joyful beauty. I greet Thee, most beautiful land upon earth, Thy sun, Thy sky, Thy meadows green. Thou art enthroned upon memories of great olden days, when honoured Thy name flew across the earth. I know that Thou art and wilt remain what Thou wast, Yes, I want to live, I want to die in the North. Hotmail: To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. Tinychat: To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. YouTube: To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. Spoiler: Rest in peace, Hugo Chavez

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Ace adventurer Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: In the fanfiction, village, or forum games section Posts: 2,252 Rep Power: 0	Re: Antwoine: The Wolf of The Shining Moon I love wolves __________________ To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. A FORUM dedicated to gaming. WOW To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts. Check it out

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jesse uzumaki Special Jonin Candidate Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: where you want me? in your dreams or with you? Posts: 2,341 Rep Power: 0	Re: Antwoine: The Wolf of The Shining Moon wow nice it's pertty good man.

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kurribu99 Chunin Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: if i tell u i would have to slap u with a fish......... Posts: 1,125 Rep Power: 8	Re: Antwoine: The Wolf of The Shining Moon awsome!!!!! __________________ 7 tailed jinchuriki subordinate of the new world! Moonlight Ninja never give up! forum fam: forum bro:ninja of tao, xenoato adopted: mangagirl forum cuz: ShikaTemaTobiDei forum sis: rose93, teralife, Ninja Pink, akatsukiangel16, temari48 little niece: vino NARUFLU!!!!!!! Spoiler: IMA FIRIN MEH LAZARZ!!!!!!!

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