Vatas Shadow Pridus: The Story

[Vatanui AKA Pride]

Chapter Fifty-One: The Discussion


News~ Due to some things, our celebration plan didn't came out as planned. Unfortunately, there will only be one chapter today, unless I manage to somehow pull off a miracle.


"Have they arrived yet?" asked the elderly man. "Not yet, sir." the messenger replied simply. The old man sat in a lone wooden chair. The chair was placed in the center of a large room, that was circular, as well as twenty yards in diameter. The walls were painted brightly red, with heads of beasts and woodland animals mounted on. An orange silk carpet led from the way of the giant doors, which were fifteen feet in length and were made in solid gold, and to a long table. The table was made out of cleanly olive wood. The table was hexagonal, made in a hexagon position with twists and turns. Fourteen chairs were placed near it, all occupied by powerful shinobi. The lone and dull wooden chair occupied by the elder was placed beyond them, and was on a higher platform.

The messenger couched before all twelve men and the elder, his head down in a bowing position for respect. "However, there has been a series of explosions set off, in the Underground." "Humph." the old man murmured as he glanced up.
Elderly and wise, he was bald, having a cleanly shaved head that humorously reflected in the light above them, kept lit by expensive chandeliers. The old man was dressed in a black kimono, covered with a white coat. The coat was ancient, and had been passed down from generation to generation. Words written in Japanese were on the coat, having been rumored to contain mystical powers hidden in them.
Five broadswords were hung on the walls behind him, followed with a large shield and mace. To the elderly man's left were a large bookcase, filled to the brink with ten thousands, if not hundred thousands of ancient books. To his right was a single wooden door, with a golden doorknob. Other than the front gigantic doors at the front, this was the only other door, which was kept locked because of mysterious circumstances.

"It may be rogue shinobi, or our enemies in the north." said the long black-haired man with a Chinese accent, who sat to the west-north section of the hexagonal table. The chair which he sat on was carved with the roman numerical "VII".

"Nah, it's probably some weak intruders, so we shouldn't worry about it. Let the guards handle it." a messy-brown hair man muttered, his droopy eyes halfway closed from exhaustion. His chair had the roman numerical "X".

"He may be right, but then again.." a spiky yet long blond-haired woman observed, "The damage done is on too big of a scale, even numerous paper bombs placed at critical areas around the Underground. It wouldn't be our enemies in the north, the Glaciers Yakuza, nor rogue shinobi. This may be the work of....THEM." Her chair had the roman numerical "III".

"You mean those weaklings?" a spiky crimson man with narrowed eyes that spoke of a lust for homicide.

"Do not underestimate them," the long and spiky blonde stated. "The Order of the Illuminus Alliance are formidable enemies." The spiky crimson man frowned slightly. "You sound as if you're afraid of them. Don't get your panties in a twist." Thus followed a moment of glaring between the two, as an uncomfortable aura of silence arose. The messenger glanced at them, still in his crouching position, nervously.

Finally, someone broke the silence: "Let me go, sir." The elderly man glanced up and replied, "Humph?"

It was a man who sat on the chair with the roman numerical "IV". He had a large amount of elbow-length black hair, spiked up everywhere, and accompanied with broad shoulders and a slender body. The man had high cheek bones and bid, bright eyes with the alternative colors of black, orange, grey, and blue. He had lines that traveled from his bottom eyes to his bottom jaw. He wore a regular white robe that was knee length that did not have sleeves. It was worn over by a luscious blood red cape, having sleeves and went to ankle length. "Again, I repeat: I would like to go to the Underground to track down the possible intruders, sir." "You are sure, Sage?" the elder simply asked.
"Yes, I am confident of my decision, Sir Yamamoto Kashikoi Naito Musha."

Yamamoto offered a nod. "Very well. You have ten minutes to prepare."

Sage nodded. "Yes sir."


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Allon, who firmly gripped a black marker, wrote on the walls of the Underground. The words could not be seen to the normal eye, as there were few who could see, much less understand it. The words spoke of dark and twisted things, of destruction and death.

Allon had already finished more than two-thirds of his writing, and following this, he faithfully continued on his mission, for he knew the outcome if he succeeded, and it pleased him.

Meanwhile, he could continue to hear explosions, as well as yells and the sound of blades clashing against one another. Seems like Tenso Ukitaro is still distracting them..

"Hold it." Senso muttered, gripping his lance as it pointed in Allon's direction, the sharp tip pecking at his neck.

"I hereby arrest you in the law of the Crossroads." Senso said.

To Be Continued.

[Vatanui AKA Pride]

I felt this chapter was good, but not really exciting and fast-paced.
The climax of the chapter was the end, when Senso appeared.
This chapter was used mostly as introductions.

[Vatanui AKA Pride]

Originally Posted by Hiro

thanks so i think ill be on for a while tonight, so watcha been up to?

Well, I finished the new chapter.

[Vatanui AKA Pride]

Chapter Fifty-Two: Vatas Shadow Pridus VS Tenso Ukitaro


News~ Here is the second chapter to be released on Friday! Fortunately, I had enough time to start on this.


"Turn around slowly," Senso ordered, gripping his lance. "Or you will die." Allon made no sound nor any resistance, slowly turning around. "Take off your hood," Senso said. "Slowly."
Silently, Allon lifted his right hand, and tugged his hood off. Allon had black shaggy hair; his eyes were lit bright, both in a different color, green and silver. He had low cheekbones, and wore a cool neutral expression. Senso widened his eyes in shock. "It's you!" he yelled in astonishment.

Allon replied, "Long time no see, Senso Ukitaro."

He immediately dropped the black marker. The black marker smashed into the concrete with a dull thud, as somehow, paper shot out everywhere. The black marker had been made out of those dozen pieces of paper. Senso widened his eyes once again, as his eyes narrowed. "Paper bombs?!"
Allon grinned. "Correct."

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Tenso, continually crackled as he sidestepped to the right as Vatas's long katana stabbed through the air where he was. With a spin of his blade, Vatas sent the sickle chained to his katana at Tenso. The sickle shimmered in the light emitted from the enormous hole made from the earlier explosion. Tenso quickly ducked, as the sickle passed his head, cutting off half a centimeter of his red spiky hair. He quickly leaped back as Vatas swung his katana low in an attempt to slash at his legs. As Tenso jumped back, in midair, formed a handsign and mumbled, "Fire Style: Exploding Flame Orb!" Immediately, fire suddenly dispersed from out of nowhere, gathering around Tenso's outstretched hand and forming into a small sphere. After a couple of seconds, the flame orb was completed and with a wicked grin on his face, tossed the ball at Vatas, who quickly took countering strategy by forming several handsigns.
As the fiery fire orb rolled toward Vatas, steadily ticking, signally of when it will explode, dispersing its perilous flames.
Quickly realizing what it was, Vatas skittered back and immediately started stringing handsigns together, as the orb ticked loudly, signalling of its detonator. With less than three seconds left on the clock, he continued his handsigns, speedily. Just with one second left, Vatas stopped and murmured, "Darkness Style: Dome of Dusk!" Following that, shadows instantly lingered. Vatas's own shadow moved, raising up along with the shadows near it. The shadows had completed two-thirds of the darkness dome when the flaming orb counting to a zero, and exploded with a bang.


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Smoke hung everywhere, slowly drifting into the large hole which had been made earlier. Laughing like a psychopath, Tenso stood in the midst of the destruction. He had quickly retreated when the fire orb had started its countdown, and way soon out of its range. Tenso gazed at where Vatas stood, waiting for the smoke to vanish, to see if his opponent was dead or not--

Tenso felt a blade against his neck. It was cold, and seemed familiar. He glanced behind him, slowly, and saw Vatas standing before him, in a higher platform as the sound of rushing water from the damaged pipes continued to flow around them. Vatas had survived the explosion, but not on good terms. He was still alive, but half of his clothes had been obliterated, burned in the explosion. The bottom of his black robe had been completely burned away, exposing his slightly sprained ankles. Vatas's left arm was also slightly scorched, as smoke hung from it. The sleeves of his left arm was gone as well. His mask had been almost completely destroyed, as only the upper right section of it was on him, covering his pitch black eyes. "Time to die, Tenso Ukitaro, like you should have, twelve years ago."
Tenso offered a broad smirk as Vatas coldy swung his long katana at Tenso's neck in an attempt to behead him.

Jinsoku Raikou (Swift Lightning), Tenso thought and disappeared, leaving behind a static sound. Vatas's blade sung through the air where Tenso's head had once occupied. Tenso then reappeared behind Vatas, who quickly realized it and swung his blade back, allowing the sickle to fly back as well. However, the sickle never made it. Barely saving himself from an injury, Tenso, who had only one nano-second left, formed a handsign. Fire Style: Kick of Flames!

He brought his leg up and kicked Vatas broadly, from head to knee, as Vatas was sent flying as burns appeared on his skin. His katana was sent flying as well, which flew out of his hand. The sickle, now within less than half a centimeter from Tenso's stomach, flew along with the katana, due to the chains which connected the two.
Vatas crash-landed into a chunk of the ceiling of the Underground that had been destroyed when Tenso had earlier used his oil/fire technique. He smashed through the huge piece of concrete, and finally slid to a stop on the moist floor, barely conscious. Tenso, wearing his smirk, slowly made his way to Vatas. "You are strong, boy--


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~During the First Explosion Set Off~

As the fire sped toward the oil, that had conquered the water, Vatas grunted. He's planing a suicidal death?! He then glanced at Tenso, who was seemingly vacant. Continually taking in his surroundings, Vatas glanced around him, and finally found his target: there was a small hole in the ground, freshly dug. He used an Earth Style technique! Vatas realized. I don't have Earth Techniques to hide deep within the earth, nor Water Techniques to douse the flames, so..! He then gazed as the paper bomb made its way into the flames. I have to stop it!

Vatas closed his eyes, realizing that he had less than a nano-second to stop it from reaching the fiery fire, which he couldn't by normal means. Concentrating as hard as he could, he only thought of the priority of stopping the paper bomb. And he disappeared. It all happened in less than a distance. To the normal eye, it seemed as if the boy had suddenly vanished, along with the flying paper bomb. In truth, Vatas was moving at the speed of light, even if only for a little. He knew there was a limit on doing this, and if he overcame if, he would certainly die. Yet he continued, and grasped the paper bomb, and threw it elsewhere, aimed at Tenso's hole.

However, something else had happened, as the fires, now some reaching up to the height of the tall ceiling, touched the ceiling dimly. One part the flames touched, however, had a paper bomb on it, one that the flames had touched.

And another explosion was set off.


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~Present Time~

"--You have poor reactions." Tenso finished and stabbed his lance into Vatas's stomach. Vatas grunted in pain, yet did not scream in agony, as blood shot out and splashing into the wet concrete. "Now, I am going to play with ya." Tenso said and grinned a wicked as well as disturbing smile. "My, my you surely have a strong will." Tenso murmured and skewered Vatas in the legs with his lance. Vatas continued glaring, although he was in great pain.
"You are very powerful, and skilled, to have been able to use Jinsoku Raikou (Swift Lightning) at such a young age." Tenso muttered and lifted his lance up, now dripping with blood. He brought the lance down and skewered both of Vatas's shoulders, as the young preteen finally yelled in pain. "Say, have you known the bes to kill someone if through the head? If you stab them anywhere in the lower body, they could still survive. A stab through the chest or heart could still survive. But in the head, without regeneration or revival, a person could never survive." Tenso brought his lance down, as someone appeared.

"Yo," Menrui muttered, "Could you keep the noise down please?"

To be Continued..

[Vatanui AKA Pride]

Phew, finally completed.

[Yori]

That fight is epic!

[Vatanui AKA Pride]

Thank you, get ready for Menrui VS Tenso later.
What was the best part about the fight?

[Yori]

"Yo," Menrui muttered, "Could you keep the noise down please?"


Lol I liked that part. Jinsoku Raikou (Swift Lightning) Is cool too

[Vatanui AKA Pride]

Lol, so it's been figured out that Jinsoku Raikou allows the user to move at the speed of light, and yeah, it was a good ending, in my opinion, at least.

[Yori]

It was a good ending, Can't wait for the next

[Vatanui AKA Pride]

I wonder if you realize what part of the next chapter would be about, from just reading the next chapter title.

[The Demon Zabuza]

...Ouch.

I am guessing that the 12 are incredably strong ninja. If it is ranked in power, then four will pwn all. Allon has no chance. I wonder if he is stronger than Nui....

And Yamamoto? Bleach flashback!

[Vatanui AKA Pride]

Well, I couldn't think of a better name for an old man. xD

And yes, you are right, the twelve are all powerful shinobi.
Allon may lose to Senso, but remember, he's a taijutsu and sensor type ninja.

And btw, Sage was created by Sage of Six Paths(SoSP). xD

[The Demon Zabuza]

I wonder who Sage will find. Allon and Senso or Vat and Tenso? Since it's Menrui and Vat against Tenso, I think it will be Senso and Sage against Allon. I think he is stronger than Tenso from what we've seen.

And Zabuza want's a character!

[Vatanui AKA Pride]

Don't forget Nui and Toshi.

And technically, Vatas is out of the battle, he's too injured to fight.

And if you want a character, you have to PM me about him. Include his name, physical description, personality, and jutsus.

[The Demon Zabuza]

Originally Posted by Vatanui AKA Pride

Don't forget Nui and Toshi.

And technically, Vatas is out of the battle, he's too injured to fight.

And if you want a character, you have to PM me about him. Include his name, physical description, personality, and jutsus.

I thought that since Senso let them in, the 12 would know about Nui. Even if they weren't told, I would be surprised if one wasn't a sensor, so they would know that they were with an official guard. But Sage might not know that... That would be intersting, a Biju Kage vs fourth elder.

But he did weaken Tenso. That was what I meant.

[Vatanui AKA Pride]

Originally Posted by The Demon Zabuza

I thought that since Senso let them in, the 12 would know about Nui. Even if they weren't told, I would be surprised if one wasn't a sensor, so they would know that they were with an official guard. But Sage might not know that... That would be intersting, a Biju Kage vs fourth elder.

But he did weaken Tenso. That was what I meant.

I'll tell you one thing: One of the four are in the Twelve.

And oh.

[takuya]

Nice chapter.I liked the fights.I also like the details you use and suspense.We finally get to see Menrui fight.If we have seen him before I don't remember.

[Vatanui AKA Pride]

Thank you for finally posting.

[takuya]

Originally Posted by Vatanui AKA Pride

Thank you for finally posting.

Shuddap.