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Old 10-04-2009, 12:02 PM   #1
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This story has been in my head in awhile and decided to write it here is the prologue. Just so u know this prologue is also found in Rai's Amintrox thred. Hmm the prologue may sound a little edgy because i used this as a bio for a thread.
let me know what you think. main character: Roarke

This Roarke has no home and travels by himself. When Roarke was young his parents were killed in a village raid. Roarke was adopted by a friendly Swordsman that wields fives blades in all. His name was Ike, he saved Roarke from the village raid, but was unable to save his parents. Roarke's goal at that point was to learn how to protect ppl precious to him. Ike and Roarke lived on a mountain and ike would slowly teach Roarke how to fight. Ike was a skilled blacksmith and his idea was the best weapon for you to wield is the weapon you make your self. Ike taught Roarke how to make his own swords. From that day Ike would teach Roarke how to use multiple weapons in combat. Roarke then became very skilled in that style and in hand to hand combat. Ike and Roarke would travel the land helping people and doing work for free. Their missions would be a vareity of tasks from assinations of evil tyrants to just catching everyday thieves. Roarke became very confident in his skill and he he thought he was unstoppable. One day, when roarke was 16, there mission was to take out a skilled assasin named Ryo who used the rare multiple weapon style. That day Roarke woke up early and decided to take him out himself. He found the assasin in a abandonded house where they fought. Roarke was doing well against. He was feeling very confident but for one second he dropped his guard and from his sleeve he pulled a hidden blade, a small jagged dagger. Slicing Roarkes chest Roarke fell to the ground dropping his blades at that time Ryo quiclky kicked all Roarkes blades away. he was very short on breathe and could barely move ryo was about to impale him with his katana. Roarke closes his eyes but feels nothing he opens his eyes and sees blood on the floor he looks up to see ike with a katana through his chest. With his last once of strength he cuts ryo leaving a almost fatal wound. Ryo was breathing hard but from my masters limp hand he took the katan that cut him and then fled with his remaing strentgh swearing he will kill Roarke. He blamed the death of ike on himself and could not forgive himself. His goal now was to revenge his master Ike. It has been has been three years...
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Old 10-04-2009, 12:03 PM   #2
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hey you finally made one

(and i actually read it all the way)
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Old 10-04-2009, 12:08 PM   #3
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lol thanks KU the prologue is kind of long lol
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Old 10-04-2009, 12:11 PM   #4
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yeah i see...but well will you make chapters?
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Old 10-04-2009, 12:12 PM   #5
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yeah i see...but well will you make chapters?
Hmm i will if ppl want me to i already have the whole story planned out in my head
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Old 10-04-2009, 12:16 PM   #6
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Hmm i will if ppl want me to i already have the whole story planned out in my head


are you serius?
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hmm yes lol like i said this story been in my head for awhile
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Old 10-04-2009, 12:34 PM   #8
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hmm yes lol like i said this story been in my head for awhile


and you are going to finally going to let it out right?

well good intro
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and you are going to finally going to let it out right?

well good intro
well if ppl want me too i will
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Old 10-04-2009, 01:12 PM   #10
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wow wow, so good
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wow wow, so good
Hmm u like it hmm maybe i will put in the 1st chapter expect it the 1st chapter later today or tomorrow
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well if ppl want me too i will

they will.....just dont make it too sad ..
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Chapter 1 Remembrance and Motivation

To think it has been three years master, Roarke thinks to himself. It was a stormy as it his every year on the day Ike was killed. All i remember from that day was giving you a proper burial in mountains we lived in. The pain i felt was like losing my parents again, but this time i had no one to lean on. My master told me to never seek revenge for it is never the answer. My only goal in life was to protect people precious to me and so far i have failed at that. I knew master would never want to be like this, for the past three years i have trained myself and helped people every year i come to this spot to remember my master and i drop off one blue lily every time i visit. This year was different i became wiser and more stern i still haven't forgiven myself for what happened that day, but i finally found some information on Ryo. Ryo has trained himself after taking my master's katana that night, and i my goal is not really for revenge since i learned that was i fueled by hatred. Ryo lives a while away and never seeked me out even though he wants me dead, but now i plan to find him and return the katana to its rightful master.
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it to long i cant read the much
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it to long i cant read the much
LOL sorry i got carried a way in the prologue but it is kind of edgy and i just released the first chapter it is a little shorter lol
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Cool story O-kun, I think its kinda nice how your the narratar of it...i like this line mostly:

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Cool story O-kun, I think its kinda nice how your the narratar of it...i like this line mostly:

you can picture that and feel the drama in it. Very good, keep going.
Hmm thanks anime-chan yes i will continue
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I'll be waiting for it O-kun! way to go big brother..
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I'll be waiting for it O-kun! way to go big brother..
Hmm yep i might have time for chapter 2 tomorrow
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To think it has been three years master, Roarke thinks to himself. It was a stormy as it his every year on the day Ike was killed. All i remember from that day is the giving was giving you a proper burial in mountains we lived in. The pain i felt was like losing my parents again, but this time i had no one to lean on. My master told me to never seek revenge for it is never the answer. My only goal in life was to protect people precious to me and so far i have failed at that. I knew master would never want to be like this, for the past three years i have trained myself and helped people every year i come to this spot to remember my master and i drop off one blue lily every time i visit. This year was different i became wiser and more stern i still haven't forgiven myself for what happened that day, but i finally found some information on Ryo. Ryo has trained himself after taking my master's katana that night, and i my goal is not really for revenge since i learned that was i fueled by hatred. Ryo lives a while away and never seeked me out even though he wants me dead, but now i plan to find him and return the katana to its rightful master.
yay a new chapter!!!
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