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Yoshi-Chan 06-26-2009 04:13 PM

My Poems
 
okay well I like writing, and i like peoples comments about my poems. So here are some of my poems!:

The Outcasts

All alone,
No one there,
By themselves,
Plotting,
Always plotting,
Pretentious seconds,
Ticking away,
Needless to nobody,
Needn't to care.
If you showed a speck of kindness,
Maybe you'd be spared,
For tonight the Outcasts take revenge,
Taking your souls,
Because you made them like this,
Uselessly beaten,
Horridly picked on,
Tonight the Outcasts take your life.

Welcome to My Land of Missfits. ( i spelled misfits wrong)

Welcome to my land of missfits,
where everyone is welcome to stay,
Come to the missfit town,
Listen to the Missfit band play,
Welcome to my land of missfits,
You can be the Mayor of this little town,
throw a ball,
and dance round and round,
or be alone and dont make a sound,
The choice is yours in this land,
In the meadows the fawns lay,
And the bunnies may,
eat the lush greens,
If you catch one,
Sure you can brush him,
Or go to the rivers,
and take a swim,
For you see in this town,
In this land,
You can be free,
To run in the breeze,
Or sit on your nees,
So now my friend,
I welcome you to my land of missfits.


(this one is about a vampire, its kinda older than the others) So Alone...

I am so alone
No one's there
Day after day
Night after night
Always by myself
Why dont they like me
No one does
I am so alone
On the run from everything
For they shun me
For what He made me
And so for that I am so alone
But one day
I wish I could find u
And maybe we could be
...Friends?


okay thats all im gonna post for now, so tell me what u think!

Mini 06-26-2009 04:15 PM

Re: My Poems
 
.Great Poems I Write Some Two.

Kuroda Taishi 06-26-2009 04:16 PM

Re: My Poems
 
I would ask a mod to move this over to the Fan Forge section Yoshi-Chan

mangagirl 06-26-2009 04:16 PM

Re: My Poems
 
great and cool!!

Yoshi-Chan 06-26-2009 04:25 PM

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thankx

Lou!e 06-26-2009 04:26 PM

Re: My Poems
 
*Points at yoshi* You are an outcasters! :p LOL me too.

Anbu-Phoenix 06-26-2009 04:28 PM

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those were great you are very talented

Life AKA Death 06-26-2009 04:28 PM

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i like writing poems to but mine urs i think r a little better

Yoshi-Chan 06-26-2009 04:29 PM

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Quote:

Originally Posted by Anbu-Phoenix (Post 390582)
those were great you are very talented

thanks, i try to be.^_^

Spark 06-26-2009 04:33 PM

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awesome poems

Yoshi-Chan 06-26-2009 04:37 PM

Re: My Poems
 
Quote:

Originally Posted by Lewis4 (Post 390569)
*Points at yoshi* You are an outcasters! :p LOL me too.

yeah, i am!

Yoshi-Chan 06-26-2009 04:37 PM

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Quote:

Originally Posted by Spark (Post 390620)
awesome poems

thankz

Yoshi-Chan 06-26-2009 04:55 PM

Re: My Poems
 
okay this one i wrote when i was extremely bored

Over the Rainbow

There is a land they say,
Some where way over that rainbow,
But have u ever heard of anyone who's been there?

One day,
I hope we will find that place,
But I hope there is no chace,
Or race,
But peace,

At least,
Have people to share,
Those things over that rainbow,

But we arrive back at the one major problem,
How the heck do we get over the fricken rainbow?

Lou!e 06-26-2009 06:09 PM

Re: My Poems
 
Quote:

Originally Posted by Yoshi-Chan (Post 390800)
okay this one i wrote when i was extremely bored

Over the Rainbow

There is a land they say,
Some where way over that rainbow,
But have u ever heard of anyone who's been there?

One day,
I hope we will find that place,
But I hope there is no chace,
Or race,
But peace,

At least,
Have people to share,
Those things over that rainbow,

But we arrive back at the one major problem,
How the heck do we get over the fricken rainbow?

I like rainbows.

Yoshi-Chan 06-26-2009 06:38 PM

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me too.

Lou!e 06-26-2009 06:57 PM

Re: My Poems
 
Gay rainbows!

animelover 06-27-2009 08:24 AM

Re: My Poems
 
nice poems, i may write one too

Anbu-Phoenix 06-27-2009 08:27 AM

Re: My Poems
 
Quote:

Originally Posted by Yoshi-Chan (Post 390800)
okay this one i wrote when i was extremely bored

Over the Rainbow

There is a land they say,
Some where way over that rainbow,
But have u ever heard of anyone who's been there?

One day,
I hope we will find that place,
But I hope there is no chace,
Or race,
But peace,

At least,
Have people to share,
Those things over that rainbow,

But we arrive back at the one major problem,
How the heck do we get over the fricken rainbow?

thats really good

madara' 06-27-2009 08:34 AM

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Awesome.

Yoshi-Chan 06-27-2009 09:28 AM

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thankz


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