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MizukiUchiha11 08-17-2009 07:00 PM
~ Read ! ~ Uhz .. my poem to encourge ok just read it please !
 
Uhz .. yeah my poem to support the beta war system thingy for the wars ok just tell me if its good or not ....


I'm the fire ,
your the soul ,
Together we can do the untold ,
Defeat the bad guys ,
Win the fight ,
Defend our villages with all our might .



~ Mizuki Uchiha !

So yeah ....

MizukiUchiha11 08-17-2009 10:27 PM
Re: ~ Read ! ~ Uhz .. my poem to encourge ok just read it please !
 
some1 read and tell me if good .......

Sasori12 08-17-2009 10:48 PM
Re: ~ Read ! ~ Uhz .. my poem to encourge ok just read it please !
 
Good job! :mrgreen:
I'm not a good critic though, I'm far 2 nice.

MizukiUchiha11 08-17-2009 11:06 PM
Re: ~ Read ! ~ Uhz .. my poem to encourge ok just read it please !
 
Thankyou !

Shkin 08-17-2009 11:20 PM
Re: ~ Read ! ~ Uhz .. my poem to encourge ok just read it please !
 
good. fire and soul. nice. i am encouraging you to lengthen it a bit (maybe another stanza). =D i see good poet. hang on to the image of fire and soul fighting the bad guys. defending the village...will rep you for this. =D

MizukiUchiha11 08-18-2009 05:34 AM
Re: ~ Read ! ~ Uhz .. my poem to encourge ok just read it please !
 
*bows* Thankyou ...

[Shikamaru] 08-18-2009 05:36 AM
Re: ~ Read ! ~ Uhz .. my poem to encourge ok just read it please !
 
Sorry to say, perhaps you'd better take a writing class. My apologies, you asked for honesty.

MizukiUchiha11 08-18-2009 05:39 AM
Re: ~ Read ! ~ Uhz .. my poem to encourge ok just read it please !
 
Shut up ! I just randomly came up with it in the car i can write some totally better ! I won an award 4 some of mine ! Maybe I'll post some humm........ ? Oh wait yeah thankz 4 the honesty now I no not to enter something I put in for a class asinment or contest !

Mizuki

Sasori12 08-18-2009 01:24 PM
Re: ~ Read ! ~ Uhz .. my poem to encourge ok just read it please !
 
Quote:
Originally Posted by MizukiUchiha11 (Post 925717)
Shut up ! I just randomly came up with it in the car i can write some totally better ! I won an award 4 some of mine ! Maybe I'll post some humm........ ? Oh wait yeah thankz 4 the honesty now I no not to enter something I put in for a class asinment or contest !

Mizuki
The dude is just giving his opinion, I think writing class is alittle harsh, because I thought it was a good poem, I aplod his honesty. Besides constructive criticism is good.

MizukiUchiha11 08-18-2009 01:39 PM
Re: ~ Read ! ~ Uhz .. my poem to encourge ok just read it please !
 
Quote:
Originally Posted by Sasori12 (Post 929002)
The dude is just giving his opinion, I think writing class is alittle harsh, because I thought it was a good poem, I aplod his honesty. Besides constructive criticism is good.

No I ment something I Make out on the spot im not gonna enter it ...

(un)Godly Hiroku 08-18-2009 01:40 PM
Re: ~ Read ! ~ Uhz .. my poem to encourge ok just read it please !
 
i thinks its pretty cool
im not a good critic either though but i actually thought it was kinsa funy

MizukiUchiha11 08-18-2009 01:42 PM
Re: ~ Read ! ~ Uhz .. my poem to encourge ok just read it please !
 
Thankyou goody un watever but I see you have 1 rep power ! Yayz !

Row Inuzuka 08-18-2009 01:44 PM
Re: ~ Read ! ~ Uhz .. my poem to encourge ok just read it please !
 
Thats really awesome. Your good at this

MizukiUchiha11 08-18-2009 01:46 PM
Re: ~ Read ! ~ Uhz .. my poem to encourge ok just read it please !
 
Quote:
Originally Posted by Row Inuzuka (Post 929266)
Thats really awesome. Your good at this
Its not my best though its my about easyiest and for the forum one ...

Thankyou everyone ..

Zarah 08-18-2009 01:51 PM
Re: ~ Read ! ~ Uhz .. my poem to encourge ok just read it please !
 
I'm a horrible critic. I'm far too honest
Spoiler:
Its horrible but good if you're just starting poetry
Great job!!:)

MizukiUchiha11 08-18-2009 01:57 PM
Re: ~ Read ! ~ Uhz .. my poem to encourge ok just read it please !
 
Quote:
Originally Posted by Zarah (Post 929360)
I'm a horrible critic. I'm far too honest
Spoiler:
Its horrible but good if you're just starting poetry
Great job!!:)

LOL ! No But thankyou 4 honestly But I just came up with it outta no where in the car .... I'm a real poet but I dont post my poetry only my Weakest ones here ... I only enter mine in class assinments or contests ....

SakuraGirl 08-18-2009 03:33 PM
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love it really good

akatsukiangel16 08-18-2009 04:00 PM
Re: ~ Read ! ~ Uhz .. my poem to encourge ok just read it please !
 
from writer to writer, i say that was pretty good, keep at it!

Sasori12 08-18-2009 08:00 PM
Re: ~ Read ! ~ Uhz .. my poem to encourge ok just read it please !
 
Quote:
Originally Posted by MizukiUchiha11 (Post 929186)
No I ment something I Make out on the spot im not gonna enter it ...
O! ok. :mrgreen:

Sasori12 08-18-2009 08:02 PM
Re: ~ Read ! ~ Uhz .. my poem to encourge ok just read it please !
 
Quote:
Originally Posted by Zarah (Post 929360)
I'm a horrible critic. I'm far too honest
Spoiler:
Its horrible but good if you're just starting poetry
Great job!!:)
The best critick's are honest, if not a little 2 harsh.


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