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EmoSakura 09-12-2012 02:10 PM

Butterfly
 
In the ever-massed skies,
I see a small yet vibrant thing.
It soars and floats in the wind,
With no care yet great fear.

It doesn't fly to the clouds,
Not to the moon, not to the sun.
If it wants to be something great,
Why won't it go higher?

It seems so transparent,
So delicate, so fraile.
But the sun doesn't burn right through it,
And its tiny, innocent self.

I almost missed it land,
I would've thought it dropped dead.
Or even gain some amount of strength,
To fly at a greater rate.

I wanna grasp it,
And see why I'm so attached.
To its colorful wings,
That seem to form rainbows.

Maybe they aren't real,
Maybe it's only an illusion.
But watching it made me realize,
That I'm not alive.

This is my first non-rhyme poem. Hope you enjoyed it. >.<

Devroux 09-12-2012 03:01 PM

Re: Butterfly
 
Every time my poems didn't rhyme, my teacher would yell at me and say I was doing it wrong. D:

Teach me, because this one is good, albeit tamer than others you've posted. :lol:

WishfulFairie 09-12-2012 03:04 PM

Re: Butterfly
 
Beautiful

@dev
Since when did poems have to rhyme?

Devroux 09-12-2012 03:10 PM

Re: Butterfly
 
Quote:

Originally Posted by WishfulFairie (Post 6249583)
Beautiful

@dev
Since when did poems have to rhyme?

Exactly. Whenever I tried to make a non-rhyming poem, I was told I was doing it wrong. I just don't know how it was wrong. ._.

WishfulFairie 09-12-2012 03:11 PM

Re: Butterfly
 
I guess she just doesn't like the way it sounds?
All I know is that poems have to be rhythmic. They have a certain flow.
It's like; you're not going to make a happy poem sound bland


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