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Kuroda Taishi
11-29-2009, 06:31 PM
Hey, you could take a break and let people catch up while you do your THING{You know what I am talking about, right?} then do the THING ;) till the Chunin Part 2.

Announcement!!!! Trivia Contest Starting: http://naruto.vfatality.viz.com/forum/showthread.php?p=1872677#post1872677

yondaime
11-29-2009, 06:37 PM
Would it be okay IF I enter? Or should I be like you?

Kuroda Taishi
11-29-2009, 06:37 PM
Would it be okay IF I enter? Or should I be like you?

You're supposed to be helping me, xD

yondaime
11-29-2009, 06:45 PM
You're supposed to be helping me, xD

Yeah, I thought so.... xD

EDIT: Make an Announcement here like type it in BIG BOLD LETTERS xD

Kuroda Taishi
11-29-2009, 06:46 PM
Yeah, I thought so.... xD

And you would probably win if you entered anyways.

yondaime
11-29-2009, 06:52 PM
And you would probably win if you entered anyways.

You got some other fans, Like TDZ, or eagleye. xD and some others. xD

Kuroda Taishi
11-29-2009, 06:56 PM
You got some other fans, Like TDZ, or eagleye. xD and some others. xD

True, True

OtoSeptic
12-01-2009, 09:30 PM
*coming over from the FCC thread~* I didn't read everything yet (long story is loooong XD), but I read the character profiles, some of the first arcs, and skimmed over the later ones, and this is what I have to say so far:

The Good: You gave your characters weaknesses. That's something that a lot of people overlook, so I was glad to see that you thought of that point. You've also put some thought into the characters' relationships, and I'm not getting the sense that you're simply making things up as you go (and if you are, you're fooling me XD), so it's nice to see some planning present.

Things to consider: You said that this is set in the future, and since a lot of the characters have the same last names as canon characters, I'm guessing that they're descendants...? Also, there are a lot of similarities between this story's events and those in canon (e.g., the bell test, and the way Jando outright challenges Raj during it bears a strong resemblance to Naruto and Kakashi); while some slight similarities are good for the sake of establishing parallels, too many just make the story look like it's copying canon. (And as a good rule of thumb, it's generally a good idea to avoid creating O.C.s in the same family/clan as canon characters.) A few readers before me said there was a little too much emphasis on appearances/clothing, and I agree. You don't have to establish EXACTLY how a character looks right away; you can build up the visual over time.

O~ne more thing: whenever a new person starts speaking, begin a new paragraph. Aside from being an important rule, it keeps your text body from looking clunky. :D

I had a few things to pick apart, but overall, it definitely has potential. Keep working at it!

akatsukirocks
12-01-2009, 09:31 PM
i have like 30 paragraphs left to read

akatsukirocks
12-01-2009, 10:25 PM
omg i finally finished it O.O

its really GOOD

yondaime
12-02-2009, 04:43 PM
*coming over from the FCC thread~* I didn't read everything yet (long story is loooong XD), but I read the character profiles, some of the first arcs, and skimmed over the later ones, and this is what I have to say so far:

The Good: You gave your characters weaknesses. That's something that a lot of people overlook, so I was glad to see that you thought of that point. You've also put some thought into the characters' relationships, and I'm not getting the sense that you're simply making things up as you go (and if you are, you're fooling me XD), so it's nice to see some planning present.

Things to consider: You said that this is set in the future, and since a lot of the characters have the same last names as canon characters, I'm guessing that they're descendants...? Also, there are a lot of similarities between this story's events and those in canon (e.g., the bell test, and the way Jando outright challenges Raj during it bears a strong resemblance to Naruto and Kakashi); while some slight similarities are good for the sake of establishing parallels, too many just make the story look like it's copying canon. (And as a good rule of thumb, it's generally a good idea to avoid creating O.C.s in the same family/clan as canon characters.) A few readers before me said there was a little too much emphasis on appearances/clothing, and I agree. You don't have to establish EXACTLY how a character looks right away; you can build up the visual over time.

O~ne more thing: whenever a new person starts speaking, begin a new paragraph. Aside from being an important rule, it keeps your text body from looking clunky. :D

I had a few things to pick apart, but overall, it definitely has potential. Keep working at it!

That was a good review and what is canon BTW?

OtoSeptic
12-02-2009, 07:50 PM
That was a good review and what is canon BTW?

Canon refers to events that happen in the actual manga. What's true to the real story.

Kuroda Taishi
12-02-2009, 08:31 PM
O~ne more thing: whenever a new person starts speaking, begin a new paragraph. Aside from being an important rule, it keeps your text body from looking clunky. :D

Great review! I have been looking for more people to be in depth like yondaime has.


My only response is to this qouted part. The only reason i haven't formated it correctly is because I have it organized this way for my own writing purposes, and I am too lazy to change it all, xD.

god of puppets
12-03-2009, 02:48 PM
Great review! I have been looking for more people to be in depth like yondaime has.


My only response is to this qouted part. The only reason i haven't formated it correctly is because I have it organized this way for my own writing purposes, and I am too lazy to change it all, xD.
one of the greatest excuses ever written...

anyway i found a mistake:

Kuroda Taishi
12-03-2009, 04:04 PM
i have been busy this week with final projects, so the next part will be out tommorow and it will be longer than usual.

akatsukirocks
12-03-2009, 04:07 PM
yay!
im waiting for the third part of the exams

yondaime
12-03-2009, 05:38 PM
i have been busy this week with final projects, so the next part will be out tommorow and it will be longer than usual.

Take your time, the longer, the better xD.

Kuroda Taishi
12-04-2009, 05:47 PM
........The Tsuchikage then prepares to explain what’s involved with the Third Exam, “Now if you have not already surmised…”

A younger looking woman sporting a brown ponytail that shapes her hair into a fan like appearance steps forward and asks him, “May I?”

“Yes go ahead Tatsuki,” he says, stepping back. “I’m Tatsuki Asakura, the proctor for the third exam. Before we begin the third exam were going to have a preliminary round.”

“A preliminary round? What for?” questions Jando.

”Sometimes the first two exams may have been too easy. Because of that too many candidates still remain, so were going to weed out the people who don’t truly belong. As the Tsuchikage stated important guests will be observing the third exam, so we want only the best of the Genin to take the third exam to avoid wasting these guests' time,” explains Tatsuki.

“That is so lame,” mutters Jando.

“Stop complaining,” comments Sakura.

“If you don’t like the rules then leave,” replies the third proctor, “Now the preliminary round is scheduled to begin immediately. Anyone who wishes to quit may do so now.”

“We just got done with the second exam and you expect us to take another one?” asks Ichimaru.

“What are you too tired to compete?” teases Rame Tsu.

“It figures that a slacker like you would complain,” adds Naoko.

“As I said, if you want to quit then just say so,” says Tatsuki.
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Ichimaru and Kenta pressure Yui to quit, “Your leg may still be damaged. Fighting now may make it worse; you need to see a doctor. "

She dismisses them, “My leg is fine and I’m going to participate.”
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Tatsuki sees that no one wants to quit, so she calls out to some ninja, “Okay, release the sorting machine.” A large panel on the wall starts moving upwards and reveals two screens.

Then she explains, “The opponents for each match are selected randomly, and the opponents for the first match are………. Mari Matsumoto and Jando Hyuga. You two stay here, everyone else move to the upper level before the fight begins.”

“Jando? He is not going to win,” comments Rame Tsu as her team makes its way to the stairs.

“Good luck Jando,” says Kuroda before walking away.

“I don’t need luck,” replies Jando.

“Remember, this guy has the Byakugan,” says Kuro to his teammate.

“Yeah, yeah I know,” replies Mari.

“Don’t underestimate him,” warns Hara, “He may look like a pushover, but appearances can be deceiving.”
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The two combatants walk to the center of the expansive room, stopping when they get near the proctor. “I am Jando Hyuga of the Hidden Petal Village,” he announces proudly.

The cute green haired female across from him introduces herself, “I am Mari Matsumoto of the Hidden Grass.”

Tatsuki explains the general rules of the match, “Everyone listen up! These matches will be at full battle intensity. Fighting only stops when one candidate dies or concedes defeat, or when one is rendered unable to continue. Naturally those who are losing are urged to concede defeat promptly to avoid a fatal outcome. Also as proctor I have leeway in judging the matches. I will stop a match if I feel that it is clear that one person is clearly no match for the other. Now are you both ready?”
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In the upper portion of the room it appears that the Genin from the hidden Petal have gathered on one balcony while Genin from the other villages are on the other one. “Looks like your plan worked,” comments Ichimaru as he rests his elbows on the railing next to Kuroda.

“Hey Ichimaru,” says Sakura in a friendly greeting.

“And what plan would that be?” inquires Kayo.

“Jando already explained it to you sensei,” replies Kuroda.

“You mean about giving Ichimaru’s team an extra scroll and helping them to the tower?” she asks.

“Interesting,” comments Yoshikuni leaning up against the wall with his hands in the pockets of his overcoat, “You wanted more people to pass the second stage so that you would be able to observe more fights and figure out how to beat people in later rounds.”

“Is that really the reason?” asks Yui.

“I am a nice guy, but I am not nice enough to risk my own team just to help you guys out if there wasn’t anything for me to gain.”

“Wow Yoshikuni-sensei you figured that out pretty fast,” says Sakura.

“Well he is one of the top Jonin in the village,” says Kenta.

“That’s enough chatting,” says Yoshikuni, “Team 10 should focus on watching the match. One of you may have to fight the winner.”

“I hope it isn’t me,” Kenta thinks to himself, “I wouldn’t want to have to beat up on a hot girl like her.”
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Jando sizes up the girl in front of him. Mari wears a black sleeveless shirt that only has a strap on the left side, she has a long white arm sleeves on both of her arms, for the bottom she wears a skirt about knee length, and some black cowgirl boots. “Well I can’t really tell what type of fighting range she specializes in,” Jando thinks to himself, “So I will just have to go with my instincts.”

“I am ready,” announces Mari.

“Me too,” says Jando.

“Okay, then let’s get this thing started,” says Tatsuki with her devilish smile, “Begin!”

Immediately Jando takes out a kunai and starts charging towards the girl.
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“Typical,” sighs Sakura as she lays her forehead on the rail.

“What is he doing?” asks Yui.

“What do you mean?” asks Kuroda. “Jando is from the Hyuga clan, he has the Byakugan. So why isn’t he using it?” asks Yui.

“The Byakugan is indeed a powerful ability and gives the Hyuga’s a great advantage over other ninja. It allows them to see chakra,” explains Kuroda, “They can see for great distances, making them very useful sensor ninja. They can also see 360 degrees around them, meaning they can fight when they are outnumbered. Finally they have developed a unique form of Taijutsu that can cripple an opponent’s chakra system. However there is one problem.”

“What is it?” asks Kenta.

“Well Jando’s Byakugan is not fully developed, and he isn’t very good at using his clans Taijutsu,” reveals Kuroda.

“So instead he just charges into battle without thinking,” sighs Sakura.
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“Well aren’t you aggressive,” comments Mari as she takes out a kunai to defend. They slash at each other, battling back and forth for a while, but neither of them seems to have an advantage.
__________________________________________________ ____________
“Well this is a surprise,” says Kuroda.

“Yeah they look pretty evenly matched,” agrees Sakura.

“That probably means that she is not a close combat type of ninja,” speculates Ichimaru.
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“Brother, the match started already,” says No as he leans his orange haired head over the rail, “Aren’t you going to watch?”

“Who cares?” replies Rino, “Why would I want to watch a match between those two pieces of trash? I wish they would have just called my name first so I wouldn’t have to waste my time here.”
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“This is not working,” thinks Mari, “He is not doing anything special. I guess if I want to win then I will just have to make the first move.”

Mari jumps back and puts some distance between them and then takes out some shuriken. She whips them at Jando with great accuracy, but at the same time she release bunches of leaves into the air that fall to the ground. Jando is too distracted dodging the shuriken to notice anything unusual.

“Now is my chance!” thinks Jando. He sprints forwards and activates his Byakugan.
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“He has her!” exclaims Yui.

“I wouldn’t be so sure,” says Yoshikuni.

“What do you mean sensei?” asks Kenta.

“Just watch,” comments Ichimaru.
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“Gentle Fist Style!” shouts Jando as he attacks the grass kunoichi with his special Taijutsu. Mari seems to be caught off guard as Jando manages to land some serious blows. After a massive blow to Mari’s chest she falls apart into a pile of leaves. “What the heck?” exclaims Jando, perplexed by what just happened.
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“What was that?” asks Yui.

Ichimaru comments to his team, “That must have been the Clone Jutsu of The Village Hidden in the Grass. She used it right after she threw the shuriken.”
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Jando scans the battlefield for his opponent, “Where did she go?”

Suddenly two brown vines spring out of the ground and latch onto Jando’s ankles. Before he can bend down to cut himself free more shoot out and wrap themselves around him. Then a large tree quickly grows behind Jando. The vines are actually the roots and branches of the tree, and then pull him closer, trapping him against the base. “I can’t move!” exclaims Jando as he struggles to break free.

A light green object starts to grow on the tree in the area above Jando. As more of it emerges it is clear that it is actually. Her body comes out up to her waist, and once her arms are free she takes out a kunai. “It is over, you are not going to get out of my Tree Capture Death.”

“Damn I can’t do anything!” thinks Jando as he continues to struggle, “Wait a minute, something is strange about this Jutsu. The chakra seems weird. I think this is Genjutsu, yeah that has to be it! But I haven’t been able to do anything in Kayo-sensei’s Genjutsu training. What should I do? I guess I have no choice. I have to use the final option.”

As Mari begins to swing her kunai downwards towards his neck, he manages to slip out a kunai and stab himself in the leg.
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“Mari, get out of there!” yells Hara when he sees Jando has escaped from the Jutsu.
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Jando spins around and prepares to strike, “Now you are mine, you got way too close. Gentle Fist!”

He lands dozens of strikes on the grass ninja and she is thrown to the ground. She stands up and tries to perform another justu but her chakra pathways have been closed and she cannot summon any chakra. Jando quickly attacks and knocks her to the ground again.

Tatsuki looks over at Mari who is struggling to get up; she raises her hand up and announces, “The match is over. Mari Matsumoto is no longer able to participate. Therefore the winner is Jando Hyuga.”

Jando celebrates and makes his way to the upper deck.
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“Jando…actually…won…” says Rame Tsu stunned by the result.

“If you can even call that a win, he stabbed himself,” says Naoko.
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Jando gets to the top and rejoins his teammates. “Great job Jando,” congratulates Kuroda, “That is win #1 for Team 3.”

“Yeah Jando, great job,” adds Sakura.

“Wow….thanks,” says Jando surprised by the acknowledgement.

“It is nice to see that you were actually paying attention to me,” says Kayo, “But we are going to have to work on your Genjutsu training. Now let me take a look at your leg.”
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“Wow, that Taijutsu was pretty good from the kid with the weird eyes,” comments No.

“It is called the Byakugan you idiot,” says his older sister, “It is a special Jutsu of the Petal Village.”

“Wow! So what did you think of the match? Did you see how he won?” asks No.

“Why would I care about which piece of trash won in a match between losers?” comments Rino.
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Meanwhile Hara and Kuro have come down and are assisting Mari to the upper deck. “I’m sorry, I lost guys,” she apologizes.

“Don’t worry about it,” says Kuro, “Me and Hara will make sure to win.”

“All right, spin that machine up again, we need our next two competitors,” orders Tatsuki.

The two large panels shuffle through names until they end up on two more random opponents. “Hoshi Ishimaru and Yui Yamanaka please come down so we can start the next match,” says Tatsuki.
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“Are you sure you want to go through with this?” asks Ichimaru.

“I said I want to do it. If I don’t fight I can’t become a Chunin, you are not the only one who wants to move up,” replies Yui.

“She needs to do this for herself,” interjects Yoshikuni, “Just let her do it.”

“Thanks sensei,” says Yui before going off.

“Are you sure about that? She seems like she is injured,” comments Kayo.

“Sometimes you just have to let them experience things on their own, even if they are going to fail,” explains Yoshikuni.
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“Look it is that girl we beat up in the forest,” says Ino, “Is she actually planning to fight? There is no way she can win with a broken leg.”

“Look closely Ino, someone has healed her leg. They must have gotten help from someone, because none of them were medical type ninja,” says Rino.

“I wonder who it was,” comments No.

“Well they did a crappy job of it,” says Ino, “She is walking all funny. This match is going to be more boring than the last one. Her opponent looks even worse than her.”

“She looks pretty young, she probably got scared in the forest. She looks almost haunted,” comments No.
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“Hoshi of the Rock Village reporting,” says Hoshi in a low voice.

“Yui Yamanaka from the Hidden Petal,” says Yui.

“Right then now we can get preliminary match #2 started,” says the spunky proctor, “Ready, Fight!”


To be continued........

yondaime
12-04-2009, 06:19 PM
That was pretty long and good too. Jando is getting better. Here are the mistakes I found.

One of may have to fight the winner.

You forgot to add "them".
I will have to look for the rest.

Kuroda Taishi
12-04-2009, 06:29 PM
That was pretty long and good too. Jando is getting better. Here are the mistakes I found.

One of may have to fight the winner.

You forgot to add "them".
I will have to look for the rest.

fixed, thank you.

yondaime
12-05-2009, 07:32 PM
Here is another one.


They can also see 360 degrees around them, meaning the can fight when they are outnumbered.
Add "y"

I have to read it over again cuz there are still some.

EDIT: I found one more.

“Brother, the match started already,” says No as he leans orange haired head over the rail,

You forgot to add "his" in between those words.

god of puppets
12-06-2009, 10:51 AM
i got some mistakes too, i think ur slipping kuroda :D:

He is doing anything special. I guess if I want to win that I will just have to make the first move.

Kuroda Taishi
12-06-2009, 05:07 PM
Here is another one.


They can also see 360 degrees around them, meaning the can fight when they are outnumbered.
Add "y"

I have to read it over again cuz there are still some.

EDIT: I found one more.

“Brother, the match started already,” says No as he leans orange haired head over the rail,

You forgot to add "his" in between those words.

i got some mistakes too, i think ur slipping kuroda :D:

He is doing anything special. I guess if I want to win that I will just have to make the first move.

all fixed

yondaime
12-06-2009, 05:10 PM
all fixed

Took you too long to fix those. JK JK. So we still need three more members for the Contest.

Kuroda Taishi
12-06-2009, 05:19 PM
Took you too long to fix those. JK JK. So we still need three more members for the Contest.

Yeah.

I sent a pm to god of puppets, but i dont think he has been on yet.

I might send one to FOM too, i think he reads this

yondaime
12-07-2009, 05:18 PM
Yeah.

I sent a pm to god of puppets, but i dont think he has been on yet.

I might send one to FOM too, i think he reads this

He does, but I THINK he is busy these days, because of the Tourney. He is the organizer, so too much work for him.

Rasen_Chidori
12-09-2009, 10:30 PM
Great work on the fanfic, I have some ideas as to why it has to be all girls he marks and what the mark does, but ill PM them so I dont ruin it for others if i am (by fluke) right.

EDIT- Since Kuroda asked me to I will happily post my ideas.

I still suspect that there is more to the blood contract/ritual that has been revealed or implied.

Here is what I think so far,
The mark he carves in is at least in part a varient of the flying thunder god technique. There is probs more but im not sure yet. I'm not sure why it has to be all females but I have an idea. Perhaps a big part of Kuroda's plan involves something only females can acomplish, perhaps a group jutsu that is female specific. I think that the specific point on their body that he marks is very important, perhaps this is why it is all females, perhaps only females have this point for example when Kuroda noticed it took longer to find on the younger girl, perhaps it is a point that develops over time in girls specificly but not in boys. And since the younger girl would obviously be less developed physicaly the point would be less developed as well (and therefore harder to find).

Anyway they are my ideas, great job on the fanfic.

Vatanui AKA Pride
12-10-2009, 05:23 PM
I advertised your fan fic. xDDDD

http://mvbg.wikispaces.com/Vat

Look at the bottom part.

yondaime
12-10-2009, 05:25 PM
Heh heh. I bet Kuroda will like that but not much go there.

Vatanui AKA Pride
12-10-2009, 05:27 PM
Heh heh. I bet Kuroda will like that but not much go there.

I WAS going to update it, and also, my "master plan" is unfolding. xD

This is the first step to it.

And yeah, I was bored. xDD

Vatanui AKA Pride
12-10-2009, 06:01 PM
I WAS going to update it, and also, my "master plan" is unfolding. xD

This is the first step to it.

And yeah, I was bored. xDD

My advertisement of it earlier was small, so check this one out:

http://mvbg.wikispaces.com/Kuroda+Taishi
xDD

god of puppets
12-11-2009, 01:32 PM
i got some mistakes too, i think ur slipping kuroda :D:

He is doing anything special. I guess if I want to win that I will just have to make the first move.wat the hell... did somebody edit this? cuz i no i put more than just these 2 mistakes?

Kuroda Taishi
12-11-2009, 07:04 PM
wat the hell... did somebody edit this? cuz i no i put more than just these 2 mistakes?

Those are the only 2 I ever saw in your post

yondaime
12-11-2009, 09:12 PM
Hey Kuroda, did you see what Vat has done to advertise you Fan Fic?

Vatanui AKA Pride
12-11-2009, 09:13 PM
Hey Kuroda, did you see what Vat has done to advertise you Fan Fic?

Yeah, he saw. I made a page in the Battleground Wiki of his Story, with some character profiles. This is all part of a three-month or so plan. ;) xD

Kurotsuki Shirokarasu
12-11-2009, 09:14 PM
Wow, awesome Vat.

Vatanui AKA Pride
12-11-2009, 09:16 PM
Wow, awesome Vat.

You saw it?

If you didn't: http://mvbg.wikispaces.com/Kuroda+Taishi

yondaime
12-11-2009, 09:22 PM
Yeah, he saw. I made a page in the Battleground Wiki of his Story, with some character profiles. This is all part of a three-month or so plan. ;) xD

Three month plan? Really? Or are you just JK?
Nice job on it BTW, helping others eh?

Vatanui AKA Pride
12-11-2009, 09:37 PM
Three month plan? Really? Or are you just JK?
Nice job on it BTW, helping others eh?

Yeah, partly that, and also because I'm a tad bored.

And it might be two months, three months tops.

yondaime
12-11-2009, 09:46 PM
Yeah, partly that, and also because I'm a tad bored.

And it might be two months, three months tops.

Well, good luck with it is all I could say and I said the other thing. ;)

Vatanui AKA Pride
12-11-2009, 09:56 PM
Well, good luck with it is all I could say and I said the other thing. ;)

Well, Kuroda's helping with it too, xDD

I can't do all this by myself, you know.

god of puppets
12-12-2009, 11:22 AM
Those are the only 2 I ever saw in your postreally? so strange, well you might want to re-read that chapter, just start from the mistake i posted and go down, there should be a few more

yondaime
12-14-2009, 06:51 PM
Hey Kuroda, you are gonna hold off on the Fan Fic until the contest ends right?

Redrose18chick
12-16-2009, 08:20 AM
very good

Redrose18chick
12-16-2009, 08:22 AM
i loved it

NarutoRulez
12-16-2009, 09:56 AM
I have a question: Are you allowed to say the characters last name, even though that name is actually from the series?

If, for example, Kairi Hatake (Kakashi's last name) was part of my story, would that be allowed?

flamie_chan
12-16-2009, 10:03 AM
I really liked it, great read =)

Kuroda Taishi
12-16-2009, 04:45 PM
I have a question: Are you allowed to say the characters last name, even though that name is actually from the series?

If, for example, Kairi Hatake (Kakashi's last name) was part of my story, would that be allowed?


As long as you don't say that Kairi is directly related to Kakashi, then it is fine.

Kuroda Taishi
12-19-2009, 04:58 PM
.......Tatsuki observes as the two fighters size each other up and thinks, “Both of them look like they are about to fall over. This is going to be another boring battle, but I am the proctor so I just have to deal with it. I hope there are some more exciting matches later on.”

Yui’s sky blue eyes focused on her opponent as she shifted into a defensive stance. In her mind she assesses the situation, “She is so young, and she looks like she is in worse shape than I am. However she wouldn’t have got here if she wasn’t any good, so I can’t underestimate her. I just need to end this as soon as possible. I have to keep my distance because of my leg, but my jutsu is a mid range attack. I’ll have to try and draw her in closer.”

Yui starts out by whipping three shuriken at the rock genin. Hoshi immediately reaches for her own kunai to counter, but finds that her pouch is empty. She dives to the right, barely evading the attack. She roles and lands on all fours thinking, “I forgot I used the all earlier in the forest. I guess I will have to depend on my jutsu then."

Another 3 shuriken fly at her, and she dives to the left. When she comes out of her roll she immediately performs a combination of three hand signs. Then she slams her fist into the stone floor, creating a bunch of debris.
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“Is she using an earthquake jutsu?” wonders Rame Tsu.

“No there wasn’t enough power in that,” says Naoko, “It must be for some other purpose.”
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Yui halts her attack to wait and see what her opponent has planned. Hoshi reaches down and pours her chakra over the debris. “Stone Shuriken Jutsu!” says Hoshi as she picks up the pieces of debris and throws them at Yui. By using her chakra Hoshi was able to shape the various pieces into deadly weapons. Yui slips out of the way of the first few projectiles and then begins running in a circle around Hoshi.

Hoshi continues to whip the stone shuriken at her enemy until she finds that she no longer has any debris left to throw. “Now is my chance!” thinks Yui as she slips a kunai into her left hand and charges in.
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“Bad move!” laughs Naga from high above as he slicks back his hair, “Hoshi’s specialty is close combat. This girl has no chance!”
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When Hoshi sees her enemy charging she immediately back flips into the air. While rotating she performs another series of hand signs. She lands on her feet and immediately slams her arms into the ground all the way up to her elbows. As she extracts her arms from the earth they now sharp blades of stone armor over them.
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“The Stone Arm Blades of the Ishimaru clan,” thinks Chiasa as she watches her favorite student in action, “The unique ability that allows the clan to gather stone around their bodies and form it into weapons and armor. This makes them one of the deadliest close combat ninja clans in the world. And Hoshi just happens to be a prodigy. That Petal Genin has no idea what she is in for.”
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Hoshi fluidly positions herself into a fighting form with her left arm below angled to the ground and her right arm lifted above towards the ceiling. As soon as Yui sees the new weapons her emeny has she skids to a halt.
“What in the world is that?” she thinks.
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“Good decision Yui, I don’t think you want to get anywhere near those things,” comments Ichimaru.

“So that is the Tsuchikage’s daughter?” mentions his sensei, “Pretty impressive.”

Masato Ishimaru looks on as his daughter fights, not showing any sign of emotion.
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“The question is, what is your genin going to do now?” says Kayo.
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“I think I will only have one shot at this,” thinks Yui, “I hope I can do it in time.”

She flings the kunai in her hand. As Hoshi deflects it with her left hand, Yui attempts a Jutsu. After making her hand signs as fast as possible she connects her hands into an oval sign and lines up her target, “Mind Transfer Jutsu!”

Her spirit flies out of her body and right at Hoshi. However Yui’s spirit is unable to enter the body of the enemy and she is bounced back into her own. “What happened? Why didn’t it work?” wonders Yui.

She glimpses something to her side, but before she can react she loses consciousness.

“The winner of the match is Hoshi!” announces Tatsuki with her right hand raised up. Two medical ninja rush onto the field with a stretcher and carry Yui off for treatment.
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“Wait a minute what happened?” asks Sakura, “Why didn’t Yui’s Jutsu work?”

"Her technique doesn’t work on clones,” explains Ichimaru, “It was smart of that girl to make a clone to take the attack for her.”

“Basic strategy,” comments Kuroda, “If you don’t know what the enemy’s Jutsu can do, make sure it doesn’t hit you.”
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Naoko leans over to whisper into her best friend’s ear, “I didn’t even see when she made that clone.”

“We will have to watch out for that girl in the next round,” replies Rame Tsu.
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“Great job!” congratulates Naga when Hoshi makes her way up the step and rejoins her team.

“Don’t you think you gave away too many of your techniques?” comments Yamashita.

“Who cares? Hoshi creamed that girl, and she will cream anybody else she fights!” says Naga.

“It doesn’t matter,” replies Hoshi, “I still have other Jutsu I can use.”

“He is right Hoshi,” says Chiasa, “You need to plan out your strategy better. I know you are tired, but pay attention to the rest of the matches.”

“Yes sensei,” responds Hoshi.
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“That Rock girl was pretty good,” comments No as he bobs up and down, “That thing with her arms was pretty cool!”

“It did look impressive,” comments his elder sister, “But we won’t have to worry about her.”

“Why not?” inquires No.

“She is obviously a close combat specialist,” explains Rino, “With our techniques; she won’t be able to get near us. You on the other hand will have your hands full. That is if you even make it through this round.”
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Kenta tells Ichimaru, “Yui was not fully healed from her injury; we shouldn’t have allowed her to fight.”

Ichimaru says, “Even if she was at full strength, she still would have lost.”
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The machine picks the next two opponents. “Hmm, it looks like Hara Gaki from the Village Hidden in the Grass, and No Shigure from the Village Hidden in the Rain will fight in the next battle. Please make your way down here so we can start the battle,” says Tatsuki.
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“Yes my turn to fight!” says No as he sprints over and quickly runs down the stairs, excited about the match.
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“It looks like it is my turn,” says Hara.

“Good luck, not that you will need it,” scoffs Kuro.

“I will try to make this fast so you can get your turn,” jokes Hara.

“Thanks I appreciate it,” replies Kuro. Hara jumps off the balcony, landing neatly on the ground nearby Tatsuki.
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“Well it looks like someone wants to show off,” comments Rame Tsu.

“Boys, how typical,” adds Naoka.

Shun steps forward and says, “This is the guy who is supposed to be number one. Too bad he has to go up against that runt. Still, we might be able to see at least one of his moves so pay attention.”

“Right!” reply the girls.
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“No Shigure of the Hidden Rain reporting,” says the small boy still bobbing up and down.

“You seem pretty excited,” comments Hara.

“I have been waiting to fight!” replies No, “I need to show my brother and sister what I can do.”

“Well then I don’t want to keep them waiting,” says Hara, “I am Hara Gaki of the Hidden Grass, reporting for the match.”

“Great, another lame match,” sighs Tatsuki in her head, “Oh well; maybe the Grass kid will be nice and end it quickly.”
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“Come on Hara, show everyone here why you are the number one prospect!” cheers Mari from the upper deck.
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Tatsuki asks, “Are you both ready?” they nod, “Then Begin!”

To be continued....





In other news, Xeinzeru has volenteered her services as an artist. I posted her drawing of Tatsuki Asakura the 3rd Proctor under the character profiles.

yondaime
12-19-2009, 05:12 PM
That was a good chapter, showing Hoshi's skills. I was expecting her to win, since she is a Genin at a young age. Mistakes are listed below.

She lands on her feet and immediately slams her arms into the arm all the way up to her elbows
I think you meant "ground or earth"

“Good decision Yui, I don’t think you want to get anywhere near those things,” comments Ishimaru.

I think you meant "Ichimaru" right here.

Kuroda Taishi
12-19-2009, 05:33 PM
That was a good chapter, showing Hoshi's skills. I was expecting her to win, since she is a Genin at a young age. Mistakes are listed below.

She lands on her feet and immediately slams her arms into the arm all the way up to her elbows
I think you meant "ground or earth"

“Good decision Yui, I don’t think you want to get anywhere near those things,” comments Ishimaru.

I think you meant "Ichimaru" right here.


good spots on the errors. So who do you think will win the next match?

yondaime
12-19-2009, 05:34 PM
You didn't post anything Kuroda, FAIL. xD
EDIT: never mind that, and I THINK Hara MIGHT win because everyone thinks he is the # one, but you can never underestimate your enemy. So I want to see what No can actually do. So I am 50/50, but I THINK Hara might win.

Kuroda Taishi
12-19-2009, 05:37 PM
You didn't post anything Kuroda, FAIL. xD


look again, xD

Ace adventurer
12-20-2009, 10:48 AM
Isn't it against the rules to use stuff from the show?

Kuroda Taishi
12-20-2009, 11:18 AM
Isn't it against the rules to use stuff from the show?

It is against the rules to use characters from the show. However you will notice that I have not done that.

Kakashi Sensai
12-20-2009, 11:19 AM
You used a kekkei genkai [bakuygan], and you used Jando Hyuga, and Ino, and Sakura

yondaime
12-20-2009, 04:23 PM
You used a kekkei genkai [bakuygan], and you used Jando Hyuga, and Ino, and Sakura

You can use them as long as you do not directly relate them to the characters from the show. IF I didn't explain this the right way, go ahead and tell them Kuroda. :D

Kuroda Taishi
12-20-2009, 08:36 PM
You used a kekkei genkai [bakuygan], and you used Jando Hyuga, and Ino, and Sakura

Jando is an original character. Ino and Sakura in my story are not the same as the ones in the show. Using a kekkei genkai is perfectly within the rules.

Vatanui AKA Pride
12-20-2009, 09:11 PM
Jando is an original character. Ino and Sakura in my story are not the same as the ones in the show. Using a kekkei genkai is perfectly within the rules.

We can use Kekkai Genkeis from Naruto itself? :shock:

I never knew that.

Ace adventurer
12-21-2009, 06:54 AM
So can you use jutsus from the show. I'm kinda confuse

Kuroda Taishi
12-21-2009, 07:34 AM
We can use Kekkai Genkeis from Naruto itself? :shock:

I never knew that.

Yes, I checked it with SRyhse when I first started posting the story.

So can you use jutsus from the show. I'm kinda confuse

Yes you can use Jutsu from the show. The only ones I would stay away from are Chidori and Rasengan.

Ace adventurer
12-21-2009, 07:44 AM
Okay.

ShippudenGirl
12-21-2009, 07:12 PM
DAAAAAANNNNNNNGGGGGGGGGGG! You got the whole thing planned out XD I couldn't write that much in one day! Nice man!

Kuroda Taishi
12-21-2009, 07:15 PM
DAAAAAANNNNNNNGGGGGGGGGGG! You got the whole thing planned out XD I couldn't write that much in one day! Nice man!

I didn't write it in a day, xD. I have been working on this for about 2 and 1/2 years, lol.

akatsukirocks
12-21-2009, 08:15 PM
to.... eyes.... hurt....
can't.... read.... new..... chapter......

Kuroda Taishi
12-23-2009, 04:47 PM
...........Hara bends down and shifts into an unusual stance. His mane of hair and posture make him look like a wild beast ready to pounce on his prey. He darts forward with surprising speed. The young rain ninja does nothing, seemingly frozen in place. When in range Hara lunges forward with a powerful strike from his left fist. No somehow slides out of the way and with perfect timing slips out a kunai and jabs it at his opponents chest. Without losing a step Hara rotates on his forward most foot. While spinning he cleanly pulls his own kunai into his left hand and uses it to deflect the incoming blade. He continues his spin, leaping slightly into the air and aiming to bring a heavy foot at his enemy’s head.

As the foot comes towards his head, No is able to duck under it just in time. Then he brings his kunai up high and stabs down at Hara’s back. Hara swings his leg back the other way while retracting it in towards his body. Next he thrusts it outwards intending to strike his heel into the rain ninja’s gut. No foregoes his attack and sucks in his belly while pushing his butt outwards just enough to evade the kick. Hara places his weight on his hands and turns his body face up, then kicks upwards towards his opponents chin. No moves into a back flip that just barely allows him to evade. He continues doing back flips until he lands safely a few yards away.

Hara chooses to halt his attack and instead analyze the situation.
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“This match is a no brainier,” says Rame Tsu, “It is going to be over in a few seconds.”

“That Hara guy is pretty impressive, but he didn’t land a single blow,” comments Naoko, “There is something strange about the orange haired kid. What do you think Shun?”

Shun chooses not to respond, instead focusing on the battle.
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“All of those strikes should have made some contact,” thinks Hara as he assesses his enemy, “I wonder what he is doing to avoid them. Well I guess the only way to find out is to keep attacking.”

Hara changes from his previous stance, this time choosing to stand up while charging in to attack. Before even getting close to his enemy the grass ninja leaps feet first into the air and goes into a dazzling spin of green blur. No watches intently as his opponent comes toward him, preparing for a counterattack. A kunai explodes out from the blur and No raises his own to block the attack. Then as gravity starts to take effect Hara shifts in the air bringing his right foot into a pendulum kick. No steps to the right, easily avoiding the kick. Hara lands on his free hand and immediately goes into a rotation.

His left foot swings around to knock No in the side of the face with a thick heel. Like the previous encounter No is able to duck under the kick and counters with a downward strike of the kunai. This time Hara drops to his back and swipes at the rain ninja’s legs first with a kunai, and the closely followed by his legs. In order to elude the attack No falls into a cartwheel and puts distance in between the fighters again.

“So that is what he is doing,” thinks Hara as he returns to his feet, “Well then I will just have to catch him before I hit him.”
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“Again impressive, but no hits,” comments Naoko as she observes from above.

“I see now,” says Shun.

“You know what the kid is doing to avoid the attacks?” asks Rame Tsu.

“Yes, and I think that Hara has figured it out as well,” replies Shun.
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Hara moves into his original stance, placing his body low to the ground and dashes foreword once more.
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“This is getting boring,” says Jando turning away from the match, “The little guy is just going to dodge again. I thought that grass ninja was supposed to be good.”

“I suggest you watch Jando,” comments Kuroda, “This time is going to be different.”

“Really, how do you know?” asks Sakura eagerly.

“Just watch,” replies Kuroda.
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Hara carries his kunai behind him in his right hand. He brings the weapon to his front and flings it straight at the orange haired boy. No easily deflects it, and the ninja tool is knocked off to the side. Instantly Hara is right in his face, throwing a punch to his gut. Somehow No is able to slip out of the way. Again he counters by stabbing down with the kunai in his right hand.

However instead of evading, this time Hara catches the young boy’s wrist. A smirk slips across the grass ninja’s face, “You can’t dodge me this time!” Hara swings his right leg around and it lands right in his opponent’s gut. No gets knocked back a number of yards until he hits the wall.
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“I told you it would be different,” says Kuroda.
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“Well that was not what I expected,” says Shun.

“You thought he was going to do something different?” inquires Naoko.

“Well I would have done a different move, but his way got the job done,” replies Shun.
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“I get it,” announces Sakura, “He wasn’t able to figure out a way to hit the kid. Also every time after the second move the rain ninja always tried to counterattack in the same way. So instead of trying to hit the kid, he made sure that the kid could not dodge. He caught his arm when he went for the counterattack, and then there was no way to dodge the next strike.”

“Yes, that is all good,” says Kuroda, “However I think he figured out how to hit him, he just chose to do it that way in order to throw people off.”

“So then what is the secret to hitting that kid?” asks Sakura.

“I’ll tell you later,” responds Kuroda, “Look he is getting back up.”
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No braces against the wall to get back to his feet. “You should give up now,” calls Hara from across the room, “I figured out how to hit you. And if you had any good jutsu you would have used them by now. You can’t beat me.”

Without a word No starts forming seals for a Jutsu. “I guess he still wants to fight,” sighs Hara, “I wanted to end this quickly, but I guess it is going to take a little longer than planned."

“Mist Servant Technique!” announces No as a mist begins to creep out across the field. Copies of the rain ninja begin to emerge from the mist.

“A clone jutsu? Not bad,” thinks Hara, “I wonder why he didn’t use it earlier.”
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Ino comments to her older brother Rino, “Our brother is stupid. That technique is useless if there is nowhere to hide.”

“At least he didn’t get knocked out on the first attack,” replies Rino, “Maybe he can actually get the grass ninja to show us one of his jutsu.”

“I guess he is good for something after all,” agrees Ino.
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Hara rushes towards the clones immediately, hacking and slashing at them. He hears the whistle of a kunai and ducks in time for it to fly over his head. He looks around to see where it came from, but instead finds the very clones he thought he just destroyed repairing themselves.

“They are reforming?” questions Hara, “Impossible, no Genin would be able to make a clone that can heal itself, let alone ten of them. Damn, I can’t believe I didn’t notice it sooner.”

He leaps backwards to gain distance and then clasps his hands together and begins to focus. The chakra inside him begins to build up until he shouts, “Release!” The clones disappear and the real enemy is revealed. “Nice Genjutsu,” he calls to his enemy, “but you should have waited to use it until I was more tired out from the fight. It would have been more effective then."

No responds by flinging two kunai at the grass ninja, which are easily sidestepped. Hara glances down and notices where he is standing. “Well if you want to play that game then fine,” he thinks as he begins making seals. No sees this and rushes to attack, throwing two more kunai in order to prevent the jutsu from being completed. Hara is too quick however and he finishes the seals then reaches down towards the ground.

“Leaf Shuriken Jutsu!” calls out Hara as the two kunai fly towards him. He starts grabbing the leaves that were left over from Mari’s clone Jutsu. When they make contact with Hara’s hands his chakra pours over them, and they become flat and razor sharp. With amazing speed he picks them up and hurls them at the enemy. Two of the new weapons make contact with the incoming kunai and slice them completely in half. No tries to evade, but the leaf shuriken are much faster than normal shuriken, and

Hara is able to fire them at a rapid pace. Eventually they catch up with the evasive rain ninja, and slice his skin to pieces. No falls over, bleeding from a multitude of cuts. Tatsuki raises her hand to stop the match, “This one is over, Hara Gaki is the winner.” Hara instantly halts his attack when her arm is raised.
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“I really didn’t think that little Rain ninja would last as long as he did,” says Sakura to Kuroda.

Ichimaru comments, “Those Rain shinobi could be dangerous opponents, I won’t underestimate them again.”

“Were they the ones you fought in the forest?” inquires Kuroda.

Ichimaru nods, “The kid who just lost was pretty decent, but his strategy wasn’t that great. Those other two however are very dangerous.”
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No is carried off the field by two medical ninja and the opponents for the next match are selected randomly. Hara makes his way back to the second level and is greeted by his team. “Nice one Hara,” congratulates Kuro.

“Thanks for making up for my loss,” says Mari blushing.

“No problem,” says Hara, “Thanks for leaving those leaves on the field."

“Good work Hara,” says Mazuma Shiranui the Jonin leader of the group who had been silent up to this point.

“Thank you Sensei,” replies Hara.
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“Looks like the opponents for the next match are Shun Kashi and Kuro Bandou. Both of you get down here,” says Tatsuki.
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Shun silently makes his way down to the battlefield. “Good luck Shun,” says Sakura when he passes by Team 3.

“I don’t need luck,” replies Shun.

“What is his problem?” asks Kenta.

“He is just trying to act cool,” snorts Jando, “Don’t worry; I will put him in his place when we fight in the next round.”

“So you’re rooting for him then?” jokes Kuroda.

“I didn’t say that!” denies Jando.

Tousen slides down the rafters and brags to Kayo, “Hey Kayo, did you know that my Shun is the most talented Petal ninja of the whole bunch. He’s got this match in the bag.”
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Rame Tsu mutters, “Jeez sensei you are such an idiot.”

Naoko says, “Why does he even try? No woman in her right mind would ever go out with him.”
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Hara tells his teammate, “Don’t underestimate your opponent, he looks strong.”

Kuro nods his head, “Right,” and then jumps over the rail and down to the fighting area.


To be continued.....

yondaime
12-23-2009, 09:23 PM
Good chapter, I did not expect No to last that long, but I expected him to at least do a pretty decent job. I would say that was pretty good for HIM. Mistakes are here.


He brings the weapon to his front and flings it straight at the red haired boy.

I THINK you meant "ORANGE"

“Hey Kayo, did you know that my Shun is the most talented Leaf ninja of the whole bunch.

You mean "PETAL"

Kuroda Taishi
12-24-2009, 08:12 AM
Good chapter, I did not expect No to last that long, but I expected him to at least do a pretty decent job. I would say that was pretty good for HIM. Mistakes are here.


He brings the weapon to his front and flings it straight at the red haired boy.

I THINK you meant "ORANGE"

“Hey Kayo, did you know that my Shun is the most talented Leaf ninja of the whole bunch.

You mean "PETAL"

mistakes are fixed

Kuroda Taishi
12-28-2009, 06:24 PM
Attention! The Genjutsu Training Arc has been Updated. I highly suggest you go back and re-read it! Many things have changed. I will also be adding the 3 candidates from the grass village to the character profiles in a few moments.

yondaime
12-28-2009, 08:03 PM
You have a mistake on the "Genjutsu Training Arc". I read more than half of it and I will read the rest tomorrow and here is the mistake.

By forming special seals with our hands we can manipulate the earth, water, fire, wing, and lightning elements.
I take it that you meant wind. xD

NarutoRulez
12-29-2009, 03:09 AM
Umm... So if I wrote a fan fic, I could say... I dunno, "Kairi Hatake is a very skilled young woman, almost as skilled as her father was" but by not mentioning the father's NAME, it wouldn't count as copyright? And I can say the character's last name from a show?

yondaime
12-29-2009, 04:03 PM
Umm... So if I wrote a fan fic, I could say... I dunno, "Kairi Hatake is a very skilled young woman, almost as skilled as her father was" but by not mentioning the father's NAME, it wouldn't count as copyright? And I can say the character's last name from a show?

Yeah, I THINK, but check with Kuroda or a mod.

Kuroda Taishi
12-29-2009, 07:02 PM
Umm... So if I wrote a fan fic, I could say... I dunno, "Kairi Hatake is a very skilled young woman, almost as skilled as her father was" but by not mentioning the father's NAME, it wouldn't count as copyright? And I can say the character's last name from a show?

Yes, that would be fine.

NarutoRulez
01-01-2010, 05:46 AM
Yes, that would be fine.

Awesome! I'll stay away from the Kekkei Genkais though xD!

Kuroda Taishi
01-01-2010, 05:11 PM
.........Tatsuki glances from side to side as the two competitors make their way towards her and thinks, “Finally I think I am going to get a good match this time. although that last one didn’t turn out half bad, but I can tell this one is going to be a real fight.”

“I am Kuro from the Grass Village,” says the dark skinned boy when he arrives. He puts his hands into his camouflaged pants and slouches back into a relaxed position.

“Shun Kashi from the Petal Village,” says the afro sporting ninja when he arrives a few moments later.

“Okay then, the rules are the same as the ones for the other matches,” announces Tatsuki, “Are you both ready?”

“Yeah I am ready,” says Kuro confidently, keeping his hands in his pockets.

Shun sighs and squats down near the floor and replies, “I am good to go.”
The brown overcoat worn by the proctor slides back and reveal a little more of her figure when she raises her arm in the air.

She quickly brings the arm down in a chopping motion and yells, “Begin!” Shun darts forward with impressive speed, still keeping his body close to the ground.

“He is faster than I anticipated,” thinks Kuro as he shifts his right leg back slightly. Shun closes in on his target and prepares to make a heavy blow with his arms, however he notices the change in Kuro’s stance and his plans change.

When he gets in range he lunges forward with his right arm. “Just like I anticipated,” thinks Shun as his opponent attempts to land a faster counter strike with mid-body kick. Immediately Shun goes into his plan swinging his arm off of its attack and bringing it in line with his left arm to block the kick. At the same time his own mid-level kick is launched. Both boys slide back a few meters away from each other.

“Not bad,” compliments Shun as he sees Kuro with his arms raised in defense, “I thought you might expect my change in attack, but I didn’t think you would be fast enough to block it with your hands in your pockets.”

“I was hoping for an easy match this round,” replies Kuro as he shifts into an actual fighting stance, “But it is clear now that you are not going to go down that quickly.”

“That is where you are wrong,” replies Shun as he changes his own position, “I am not going down at all.”

“Well then I will just have to take you down,” pronounces Kuro as he begins a forward charge. Not liking to be on the defense, Shun charges forward as well. They meet each other in the middle and explode in Taijutsu combat. A flurry of kicks and punches are traded between the two competitors. Shun seems to have a slight advantage in speed, but not enough to make a difference. They match each other strike for strike, with neither of them gaining an upper hand.
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“That kid isn’t half bad,” comments Rame Tsu as she observes her comrade from above.

“Yeah, but it looks like Shun is finally going to get serious,” comments her ever present female friend Naoko, “It’s about time too. He shouldn’t have even have bothered with that form of Taijutsu from the start.”
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“I guess it is time then,” thinks Shun as he slides away from his enemy after a powerful exchange.

“Is he going to use a Jutsu now?” wonders Kuro as he rests for a moment. Shun briefly wipes his hands on his baggy black slacks to get the sweat off. Then his hands come together for seals, and chakra builds up inside his body.

“Ninja Art: All-Fours Jutsu!” proclaims Shun when he completes the combo of hand signs.

His body begins to mutate, hands get a little more bone, fingers become slightly longer, fingernails become sharper, teeth become more jagged, his whole body becomes a more animalistic in appearance. Shun’s speed and power are greatly increased.

“What kind of Jutsu is that?” thinks Kuro as he watches the change happen. Shun rushes forward and slashes at the grass ninja’s chest with his newly sharpened nails. Kuro barely has enough time to slide out of the way.

“He is even faster,” thinks Kuro as he brings his arms up to block the follow up kick from Shun. Kuro slides back several meters due to the force and thinks, “He is a lot stronger too. I won’t be able to last long this way.”

The confident grass ninja is put on the defensive, doing all he can to dodge the razor sharp swipes and powerful kicks from his opponent.
When he has a chance Kuro slips three shuriken out of his pouch and throws them in the ground to stop an incoming assault from Shun. He immediately takes out a long green vine from his weapon pouch and slips into hands seals for a Jutsu.

As he signs Kuro boasts, “So you want to be a wild animal huh? Then I will just have to tame you. Vine Spear Jutsu!” The vine in his hand is filled with chakra and straightens out into a long spear shape and becomes as hard as steel. Shun decides to ignore the significance of the new weapon and attacks anyways. However Kuro is able wield the spear with great mastery. He is able to keep the fierce Petal ninja at bay by not letting him anywhere close.

Shun tries to get in close for a slashing attack, but is forced back every time by the spear. He then attempts to breaks the spear, but his efforts have no effect. “That spear gives him a huge advantage over me,” thinks Shun as he tries to plan a strategy, “It is just too long. Every time I try to get in close he forces me back before I can even get near him. I guess I will just have to step it up another level.” Shun flips backwards, putting a lot of distance in between to two fighters, and Kuro chooses not to press forward and attack.

“Big mistake not attacking when you have the advantage,” says Shun as he shifts into a few hand signs, “Shadow Clone Jutsu!” Two identical copies of Shun appear on the field parallel to him. These clones also include the features brought on by the All-Fours Jutsu he used earlier.
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“He is using clones already?” questions Rame Tsu, “I guess this guy is better than he thought.”

“I think he just wants to end it quickly,” replies Naoko, “What do you think sensei?” When no response is given she turns around to see that he is not there. Then she glances down the balcony and sees that Tousen is still down by Kayo Yuhi trying to chat with her. “Why does he have to be such a perv?” she asks.

“Because he is a guy,” comments Rame Tsu blandly.
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“Why didn’t Kuro press the attack?” asks Mari on the opposite balcony.

“You know that his strength with that Jutsu is defense, not offense,” replies Hara as he watches the battle, “And he has been trying to tire the Petal ninja out this entire time.”

“He has?” inquires Mari.

“Yes, while the afro guy has been using a bunch of fancy moves to try and sneak past the guard, Kuro has been using simple and minimum movements to defend. There is only one problem.”

“What is that?” asks Mari.

“That petal ninja does not look tired at all,” reveals Hara, “And now that he made those clones I think Kuro is going to be in trouble.”

“You can do it Kuro!” shouts Mari.
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Shun and his clones charge forward for a renewed offensive. “Damn, how is he still moving so fast?” wonders Kuro as he prepares to defend again.

The three copies work in unison, attempting to get past his guard. They duck, dive, and weave around Kuro, attacking from different angles. Kuro starts to give ground and is forced to retreat backwards.

Then suddenly one of the clones gets past his guard. He tries to swing his spear and destroy him before he can get any closer, but it won’t budge. The second clone has grabbed onto the end of the spear and is holding it in place. Before he can do anything the first clone grabs his legs and binds him and the original Shun begins lining up for a big strike. Kuro wraps his right arm around the spear and swiftly gets in a few had signs as Shun rushes towards him.

Kuro whispers, “Binding Vine Jutsu!” The spear loses its form and turns into a living rope that wraps around the clones and squeezes until they disappear. Kuro flattens himself to the ground to avoid Shun’s strike.
Shun gains distance again and turns around to see Kuro twirling his weapon around in the air and wielding it like a lasso.

“So he can change the form of his vine weapon, and he can do it pretty quickly too,” thinks Shun as he analyzes and plans his next move, “And the rope is still very strong if they were able to destroy those variant clones. I don’t want to get caught by it.”
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“It looks like this match is over,” observes Kuroda from his place in the rafters.

“Really?” inquires Sakura.

“Yes,” confirms Kuroda.

“How can you tell?” asks Ichimaru curiously.

“He is getting impatient,” explains Kuroda, “This match has gone on far too long for him. So he is going to use his best attack.”

“I sensed that as well,” comments Ichimaru, “But how can you be sure the other guy won’t be able to block it?”

“I don’t know if you have seen the attack before, but I would say you have to be at least a Chunin to have a Jutsu that would block it,” explains Kuroda, “And that grass ninja is in perfect position for it to be highly effective. Just look where he is standing.”

Ichimaru looks down at the field and realizes, “Wait a minute, isn’t that…?”
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Shun relaxes for a moment and then tells Kuro, “I had hoped that I could save this attack for a later round, but it seems like you’re a stronger opponent then I had anticipated. Prepare yourself.”

Kuro boasts, “You think you can defeat me? I can defend myself against any attack, so try all you want.”

“Don’t say I didn’t warn you,” comments Shun as large amount of chakra builds up inside him and he performs a complex combination of Jutsu.
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Hara is watching from above and senses something strange about the field. Suddenly he understands and tries to warn his friend, “Kuro get out of there!”
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Surprised to hear his teammate butt in on a match Kuro confidently replies, “Relax, I can handle anything this guy throws at me.”
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Desperately trying to warn his friend Hara shouts, “You don’t understand! You need to move now! He is going to…”
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“It is too late,” says Shun, “There is no escape from my Leaf Tornado Jutsu.”

“Your what?” asks Kuro, who suddenly notices a bunch of small objects rising around him.

“What are those?” inquires Kuro, but then he looks closer, “Leaves?” He looks around and sees a large number of leaves rising up around him. “Those are the ones that Mari had and then Hara threw at the Rain ninja,” thinks Kuro, “When did we get all the way over here? Wait they are starting to swirl? Damn he lured me into a trap!” The leaves start changing into razor sharp forms in a similar to Hara’s Leaf Shuriken.

They spiral around Kuro going faster and faster, and coming closer and closer. Kuro tries escape, but cannot see a clear exit. Then he tries to knock them out of the air with his vine weapon, but they are too small, too fast, and even sharp enough to cut through his steel-like vine. The leaves converge on Kuro and tear his skin to shreds. After the attack Kuro falls to the ground with hundreds of cuts all over his body.

“No, it can’t be over! Not yet!” thinks Kuro as he struggles to move his severely damaged body, “I promised Mari that I would win. And if I lose now I can’t accomplish my dream. I won’t be able to stay with Hara. I won’t be able to follow him, protect him, and help him become the great ninja I know he will be. I won’t be able to be right by his side when he becomes the leader of our village. I have to get up!”

Shun watches as his opponent struggles on the ground. “Courageous, but even if you stand up you won’t be able to do anything. If this were a fight in the real world I would have to kill you so you wouldn’t complicate my mission later on. But this is not the real world, and this match is over,” he thinks as he turns and starts to walk away.

Tatsuki declares, “The winner of this match is Shun Kashi. We need a medical squad out here right away!” A medical team rushes out to treat Kuro. Hara and Mazuma jump down to talk to Kuro before he is taken away.

Hara reminds Kuro, “I told you not to underestimate him, maybe next time you will listen to me.”

“I’m sorry Hara,” whispers Kuro with what energy he has left.

“Don’t worry Kuro, the medics will take good care of you,” says Mazuma as he is carried away.

“That kid’s Jutsu, it looked like one of ours sensei,” says Hara as he and his teacher make their way back up the stairs, “I wonder where he learned it from.”

“It may have looked similar to one of the Jutsu from our village, but there was something strange about it,” comments Mazuma.

“Keep your eye out for that ninja in the later rounds Hara.”

“Yes sensei,” replies Hara.
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“How was he?” asks Mari when they returned.

“He will live,” replies Mazuma.

“Maybe it is not such a bad thing that you lost earlier,” says Hara.

“What do you mean?” inquires Mari.

“My gut tells me that those first few fights were a fluke. The real matches are about to begin and they are going to be just as dangerous as the one Kuro just had. I think the rest of the people left are a lot stronger than we thought.”
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“Well brother it seems that there are some decent fighters here after all,” says the tall, blonde, female rain ninja.

“Getting scared Ino?” replies her elder brother.

“I’m not scared brother. With my Jutsu no one is going to get close to me,” responds Ino.

“Whatever you say sister,” replies Rino.
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Shun gets back up to the balcony and Tousen starts bragging to Kayo, “Wasn’t Shun just amazing in that last match Kayo? I told you he would win. Yes I trained that boy myself.”

Rame Tsu yells at him, “Don’t take credit for something you didn’t do sensei!”

“Yeah Shun learned and perfected that Jutsu all on his own,” adds Naoko.

Tousen shrinks back into his own world, “Why they always have to act like my mother? Why can’t they just be good students and help their sensei out?”

“Because you are a pervert!” they both yell.

“Was I speaking out loud just now?” wonders Tousen slightly confused.

“No Sensei,” explains Rame Tsu, “Sadly we just know you a lot better than we would like to.”
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The machine is started again stops on two more names. “The next two competitors are Naoko Fei and Ino Shigure. Please make your way down to the battlefield,” announces Tatsuki.
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Shun returns to his spot on the balcony and says, “Good luck Naoko.” Rame Tsu reminds her, “Remember the last Rain Ninja used Genjutsu attacks.”

“Okay, right,” says Naoko and then she jogs down the steps eager to fight.
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Rino tells Ino, “Don’t be foolish with your attacks like our brother.”

She responds, “I’m not an idiot! I know how to properly wield the attacks of the Hidden Rain Village.” She takes the umbrella from her back, pops it open, and uses it to float down to the battlefield.


To be continued....

yondaime
01-01-2010, 05:59 PM
That was a good match. Probably my favorite match so far. xD Plus, I didn't find any mistakes.

takuya
01-01-2010, 10:55 PM
When they say because you are a perverted, the b in because needs to be capitalized.

god of puppets
01-02-2010, 01:00 PM
this is from the the part before the new one:

time Hara drops to his back and swipes at the rain ninja

EDIT: ok this posted wrong but after this u wrote and the something something bla bla blaa etc....

anyway the the was supposed to be then

Rasen_Chidori
01-03-2010, 09:06 PM
“That kid isn’t have bad,” comments Rame Tsu as she observes her comrade from above

I think you meant half.

Kuroda Taishi
01-07-2010, 06:10 PM
........Ino lands gracefully on her toes and smoothly places the umbrella on her back in one swift motion. Naoko teases, “Nice umbrella; it matches all of your clothes, and it makes for a pretty fancy entrance. Yet a matching outfit is not going to help you at all in the battle.”

“How would you know?” inquires the feisty rain ninja, “If we're basing the match on sense of fashion you are clearly the loser. You look like your brother dressed you.”

“My outfit is designed to give me the maximum advantage in battle, not for boy chasing. If you were any kind of decent kunoichi you would have done the same,” counters Naoko.
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Rame Tsu shouts down to her friend, “Naoko, the Rain ninja can use their umbrellas to attack, so watch out!”
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“I know,” replies Naoko with a wave of her hand.

Ino warns her opponent, “Don’t underestimate me Petal Ninja! Just because I’m not from one of the great shinobi villages, doesn’t mean I can’t kick your ass.”

The proctor’s lips curve up into a smirk as she thinks, “Spirited little girls aren’t they? Seems like this is going to be another entertaining match.”

The tall blonde rain ninja places her hand on her hip and leans into a feminine pose announcing, “Ino Shigure from the Hidden Rain Village reporting for duty.”

The sporty petal ninja across from her adjusts the tight black glove on her hand and says, “I’m Naoko Fei of the Petal Village, and I am ready to fight.”

“Well then why don’t we get this match underway,” says Tatsuki, “Ready, begin!”

The match commences and Ino charges straight at Naoko. She has a height advantage and launches a punch from a distance a little further away than a similar sized opponent would. Naoko has good reaction time and uses her left hand to deflect the punch up above her head. Then she counters with a forceful punch to the enemy’s abdomen. Ino slides back across the floor clutching her belly. Naoko goes right on the offensive darting forward and leaping into the air for a spinning kick. With amazing speed Ino draws out her umbrella and bats the kick to the side. Ino immediately continues into an attack, taking two steps forward and swinging violently. Naoko brings both of her arms up to her side and braces to get hit. The umbrella smashes into her side and hurls her across the room.

Naoko crashes on the floor and rolls across it for a while until she is able to skillfully get back on her feet. However Ino is right on her again swinging her umbrella with a controlled fury. Naoko ducks, dives, and dodges out of the way, barely escaping from getting pounded into the ground.

“Damn, what is with this girl?” thinks Naoko, “I have never heard of a umbrella being used this way before. From the power she is putting behind her swings it should be broken by now. It must be made of a different material then a normal weapon. She is using it more like a kanabo.”

Ino brings the umbrella up over her head again and slams down the weapon. This time Naoko does not dodge, instead she stays in place and catches the end with both of her hands. Then she lowers her hands, twists her hips, and then swings the umbrella around and releases it.
Ino goes flying across the room, but lands gracefully on her feet.
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“Nice move Naoko!” cheers Rame Tsu.
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“Well it looks like that way is not going to work anymore. Then I guess I better move on and try this,” thinks Ino as she tosses her umbrella into the air and starts making hand signs.

“It looks like she is changing strategy,” thinks Naoko as she takes out a kunai and gets into a defensive stance. The umbrella opens up and floats in the air, and then begins rotating.

“Rain of Needles!” shouts Ino when she finished her hand signs. Numerous poison tipped needles shoot out of the umbrella in all directions. Then Ino motions with her hands and guides the needles towards Naoko.
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“Watch out! Those have poison on them!” warns Rame Tsu.
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The first wave comes and she is barely able to dodge them. Naoko sprints forward attempting a direct attack, but she cannot get close enough and is forced back by the poisoned needles constantly being shot at her.

Naoko flings her kunai at Ino to distract her for a moment and then takes out a string of kunai and uses a Manipulating Attack Blades to control the kunai with invisible chakra strings. Ino tries to dodge and attack at the same time, and Naoko also does the same. Yet Naoko’s attack is faster and more direct and eventually hits the target in the shoulder. The umbrella collapses and drops out of the sky. Ino expertly catches it, spins around, and reopens it so that it shields her from view. While behind the cover the tough rain kunoichi plucks the kunai from her shoulder and then begins forming seals. Naoko continues attacking with her chakra string controlled kunai, but they just bounce off the umbrella.

Then Ino lifts the weapon above her head when she completes the final seal, “Fog Clone Jutsu!”

A fog excretes from her body and spreads out around her. Then it begins moving up and forming into twenty or so clones. All the copies simultaneously put the umbrella back in its place on Ino’s back and then charge forward to attack. Naoko extracts some shuriken from her pack and chucks them at the clones, however the weapons simply pass right through. The confident petal kunoichi summons one of her kunai back to her hand and attempts to slash through her opponents, but the results are the same.

“What is this?” thinks Naoko as she continues to attack, “It is similar to that Jutsu the other rain ninja used, but it isn’t the same. Plus she called it a different name. I am fairly sure it is not a Genjutsu, but then why are the clones not destroyed when I hit them?”

Ino secretly throws kunai at Naoko and hits her four or five times in various spots.

Naoko thinks to herself, “She has to be somewhere around here. Maybe I can draw her out with that Jutsu.”

So she jumps back out of range of attack and gathers chakra on her feet to run up and stand on the wall. Some shuriken fly at her, but she is so far away she can dodge them while still making seals for her Jutsu. Naoko squats down and then jumps and amazing distance. While in the air she adjusts the glove on her right hand and then slams it into the earth when she lands.. The ground rumbles and then shatters apart in a large circle around her. As the clones get blown away an umbrella is thrown into the air, and more poisoned needles are shot at Naoko. They hit her before she is able to dodge them.

The real Ino reveals herself when the dust settles and Naoko charges at her for another attack. Naoko trips and collapses onto the ground from the poison before she can even get close.

Tatsuki steps in front of Ino before she is able to land her own kunai attack. Tatsuki declares, “The match is over. You are the winner Ino Shigure.” Ino grunts, dissatisfied that she didn’t get to finish her opponent off. “We need to get the poison out of this girl right away,” says Tatsuki. Some Medical ninja rush out to bring Naoko to the hospital for treatment.
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When Ino returns to the balcony Rino comments, “You almost blew the match sister.”

Ino replies, “I knew what I was doing the entire time, I had it all under control. Just make sure that you win your own match.”

“I’m not going to lose to anyone here,” retorts Rino.
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“Wow Naoko actually lost,” comments Ichimaru on the opposite balcony.

“That is because she left herself open to counterattack on her last move,” replies Kuroda.

“Well she really didn’t have much choice,” says Ichimaru, “That Jutsu was the best way to get rid of those clones.”

“The best way for her you mean,” interjects Sakura.

“Exactly,” says Kuroda.

“Well now that we have seen it, we all can come up with a counter,” says Ichimaru.

“And we have to watch out for that needle attack,” says Sakura, “That other rain ninja has an umbrella as well, and I am sure he knows it as well.”
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Tatsuki starts the selection machine again and when it settles on the next two names she announces, “The competitors for the sixth match are Sakura Nagana and Yamashita Uzuki.”
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Sakura starts to make her way down to the battle field when Kuroda whispers, “I’ve been waiting to see just how much you have improved over the past year.”

Sakura blushes and replies, “I have been waiting to show you. I won’t disappoint you.”

“Good luck Sakura,” says Kayo.

“Thanks Sensei!” she replies as she eagerly runs down the steps.


To be continued....

yondaime
01-07-2010, 08:36 PM
Nice chapter. I can't wait to see how much Sakura improved. Maybe some new jutsus eh? xD Here are the mistakes.

If were basing the match on sense of fashion you are clearly the loser.

You forgot to add { ' } in-between we and re. we're.

I don't know about this one. I didn't get it.

Naoko crashes on the floor and rolls across it for a while until she is able to skillfully get back on her seat.

I THINK you MIGHT have meant her "feet".

Kuroda Taishi
01-08-2010, 10:36 AM
Nice chapter. I can't wait to see how much Sakura improved. Maybe some new jutsus eh? xD Here are the mistakes.

If were basing the match on sense of fashion you are clearly the loser.

You forgot to add { ' } in-between we and re. we're.

I don't know about this one. I didn't get it.

Naoko crashes on the floor and rolls across it for a while until she is able to skillfully get back on her seat.

I THINK you MIGHT have meant her "feet".


Yes I meant feet, I have no idea why I typed seat, xD

yondaime
01-08-2010, 07:43 PM
Yes I meant feet, I have no idea why I typed seat, xD

Yeah, I was wondering too why you put seat. xD Hey, what are you planning for the next match? xD

Kuroda Taishi
01-09-2010, 11:17 AM
Yeah, I was wondering too why you put seat. xD Hey, what are you planning for the next match? xD

i think people will be very surprised by what Sakura does

yondaime
01-09-2010, 08:20 PM
i think people will be very surprised by what Sakura does

Hmm. Maybe a new jutsu or use her summons. Maybe something new. xD Can't wait.

god of puppets
01-11-2010, 03:16 PM
nice job kuroda! keep up the good work, and post more of the story!

god of puppets
01-11-2010, 03:19 PM
o could for the characters that are dead can you put deceased next to their name, and in a different color? i think it would just make it more clear

Kuroda Taishi
01-14-2010, 07:07 PM
......On the opposite side Yamashita starts to make his way down when Naga reminds him, “That Sakura girl is on that Petal Ninja’s team. Don’t forget what happened to us earlier. Now is the time to get some revenge.” Yamashita gives a disapproving grunt and walks past.

Hoshi says, “Naga you’re a fool. Yamashita is not going to kill her unless it’s absolutely necessary.”

“What? Why not?” he asks.

“Because he is not stupid like you,” she replies.

Naga argues, “Even though that guy beat us in the forest it doesn’t mean he can beat us in a match.”

“You are such a fool. Yamashita recognizes that the petal ninja is far superior to him, and doesn’t want to anger him by killing one of his friends,” explains Hoshi.

“Whatever, he only beat us one time. He’s not so tough. I want another chance to take him out,” says Naga.”

Hoshi thinks to herself, “Idiot, you have no idea just how strong that guy really is. Be careful Yamashita.”
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Both combatants arrive on the battlefield and stroll to the center where the proctor is waiting. Tatsuki glances at the both of them and thinks, “Now this should be an interesting match. They both seem so focused.”

“I am Sakura Nagana from the hidden Petal,” announces the pink haired girl. Yamashita shifts his gaze to the upper level where a dark haired young man is lazily leaning over the rail but his eyes are intensely focused upon his female opponent. After a few moments he returns his attention to the cute kunoichi in front of him.

Ignoring the proctor awaiting his name he speaks directly to Sakura, “I don’t want to have to kill you, but I will if you force me to. I suggest you surrender so you don’t get hurt.”

Sakura laughs and replies, “Don’t underestimate me Rock Ninja. I’m a lot stronger than I look.”

Yamashita responds, “I recognize that your teammate is superior in skills to me, but I seriously doubt that you have even a portion of his power. I know this because if there were two Petal Genin with such strength, then my village would have known about it.”

Tatsuki observes the tense situation thinking, “What kind of game is he playing at?”

Sakura studies the mummy man for a few minutes then smirks and admits, “You are right I am no where near Kuroda skill wise, but I’m more than a match for the likes of you.”

Yamashita’s reaction is hidden by the bandages covering his face. After a moment of analysis he turns and raises his voice, this time directing his comments towards Kuroda. He says, “I don’t know why you left me alive in the forest; maybe it was so I could be a test for your teammate here, but it really does not matter anymore. I have my own reasons for wanting to win this match, and fear of you won’t stop me from using my full abilities.”
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“What are you doing Yamashita?” thinks Hoshi, “This is not like you at all.”
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Kuroda looks on, not giving a response. “Hey Kuroda what is going on?” inquires Jando, “Is that one of the guys that attacked us on the first day? Why didn’t you say anything?”

“I have no idea what that guy is talking about,” says Kuroda dismissively. Ichimaru gives a curios glance to Kuroda, but doesn’t ask anything.

“So, yet another thing that you didn’t tell me about,” thinks Kayo as she stares at her students backside, “What really happened in that forest?”
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Sakura turns her head and looks to Kuroda for instructions.
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Kuroda tilts his head forward, giving her the go ahead.
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She turns back to Yamashita with a smile across her face. “Well then it seems that you’re not going to back down. So let’s get this match over with. I am Yamashita Uzuki of the Hidden Rock,” says the rock ninja.

“Well that was an interesting exchange,” comments Tatsuki, “Hopefully your match will be just as stimulating. Begin!”

Sakura takes out a kunai and charges at Yamashita. Yamashita gets into a defensive stance and takes out his own kunai. Sakura plants her feet down to stop and throws her kunai at him. The rock ninja easily knocks the projectile away and watches as Sakura plants her hand on the ground and makes a large cloud of smoke appear.

“Summoning Jutsu!” yells Sakura as she calls out the twins Apollo and Phoebus to aid her in the fight. The butterfly dance around above her head and then shoot off high into the air.

Carefully tracking their movement, Yamashita thinks, “Hmm a summoning Jutsu. I had better get rid of those things quickly before I get into trouble.”

So he reaches behind into slips out two shuriken and flings them directly into the flight path of the twins. The butterflies skillfully float out of the way and the weapons zip past harmlessly. Meanwhile Sakura has made her way directly in front of Yamashita and lands a powerful shuffle kick to Yamashita’s chin.

As he flies in the air Yamashita thinks, “So those butterflies are just there to distract me, then I will refocus my attack on the girl.”

He twists in the air and lands on his feet, then blasts off straight at Sakura. She ducks out of the way as his kunai slices horizontally and cuts into the ends of her flowing pink hair. Yamashita rotates his body and his heel comes around to smack her in the temple. She barely brings her arms up in time to block the kick, and she jumps away as his kunai slices at her again.

“Wow this guy is actually pretty good,” thinks Sakura as she dodges his attacks, “But Kuroda is counting on me to win, so I can’t disappoint him.”

She takes a shot when she sees a hole in his defense, and goes for a kick to his chin again. Yamashita smirks under the cover of his bandages thinking, “Just as I planned, she fell right for it.” He slides a large knife-blade out of hiding and aims right for her incoming leg.

Suddenly Sakura flies up into the air, and the Rock Ninja’s attack misses.
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“Nice move Sakura,” compliments Kuroda, “Very inventive.”

“She is flying!” exclaims Kenta.

“No she isn’t Kenta,” says Ichimaru, “Look closely at her arms.”

Kenta leans over the rail a bit, trying to focus his sight; “Wire?”
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“Damn I should have noticed that earlier,” says Yamashita, “I should have seen it based on the way she was dodging my assault. She must have tied that wire to those butterflies when she summoned them.”

“Thanks for the save,” says Sakura as she floats suspended in the air.”

“Of coarse Lady Sakura,” replies Phoebus.

“What should we do now?” asks Apollo.

“Can you hold me up here for a while?” asks Sakura.

“It won’t be a problem for me,” replies Apollo.

“Good, then it is time for me to go on the offensive again,” she says as she grabs the line attached to Apollo and hoists herself up so she can reach into her weapons pouch. She begins hurling shurikens down at her enemy.

While dodging the rain of shuriken coming down from above, Yamashita attempts to cut the wire attaching Sakura to her butterfly by throwing his own shuriken. However Apollo and Phoebus keep switching the weight bearing duties to each other, causing the wire to loosen right in time and make his counter attack miss. Yamashita stops attacking and focuses on dodging while he prepares a new strategy.
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“This battle is getting crazier by the minute,” comments Jando.

“Yeah, I didn’t even know Sakura could use a summoning Jutsu,” adds Kenta.

“When exactly did she learn to do that?” inquires Ichimaru, “She has never even shown a sign of knowing a summoning Jutsu when I was on missions with her.”

“Good, then it looks like she did a great job of keeping it a secret,” replies Kuroda.
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Yamashita rolls to the left and two shuriken land right where he was before. Finally done with his preparations he hurls two kunai into the air, once again aimed at the wire. Phoebus releases her hold on the weight and lets it fall to her brother. However Yamashita makes a motion with his hands and suddenly his kunai change direction.

“He is controlling them with wire!” shouts Phoebus, “He is going after Sakura!”

Apollo attempts to pull the girl to safety, “Damn I don’t have enough strength left.”

Sakura quickly cuts the strings connecting her to Apollo and Phoebus in order to escape. Yamashita redirects his flying weapons again and catches Apollo and Phoebus off guard. They disappear in a puff of smoke. As soon as she lands Sakura performs a Shadow Clone Jutsu and creates two clones. They all charge toward Yamashita simultaneously.

He tries to redirect his kunai and shuriken towards them, but one of them grabs and cuts the strings. Yamashita takes out his large blade again and tries to defend himself thinking, “So those aren’t just illusions, they are actually real manifestations. They are probably the same type of clones that the other petal ninja used.”

He slashes at the first attacker, but she dives out of the way, and fist comes out of his blind spot and smashes into his face. He stumbles backwards and regains his balance just in time to earn another punch in the face. Yamashita flies back a few feet and tumbles on the ground. He slowly picks himself back up, anticipating an attack that does not come.

“Ready to give up yet?” says Sakura as she and her clones each take out a kunai.

Yamashita decides, “I’m not going to defeat her with my Taijutsu alone. She works to well with her clones, and I don’t have the ability to match them with my own clones. I guess I will have to use my Ninjutsu to win.”

“Well? Have you decided yet?” inquires Sakura. The fur and bandage clad ninja doesn’t reply, and instead starts working on hand seals. “I guess that is a no. Oh well, it is your decision,” says Sakura before sending her two clones in to attack.

But before they can make it to him Yamashita slams his chakra covered palms into the ground shouting, “Earth Style: Split Earth Turn Around Palm!”

The ground around Sakura and her clones starts swirling and sucking them into the ground. The clones are pulled towards the center and are destroyed.
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“What the heck is that?” asks Jando.

“It seems like some whirlpool of earth,” deduces Ichimaru, “Everything is being pulled to a central area.”
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Sakura tries to swim her way out, but is unsuccessful. “If I get pulled to the center I am a goner,” she thinks. She quickly ties a string to her kunai and throws it up so it sticks into the ceiling. Then she attempts to pull herself out.

“She might be able to pull herself out if I don’t do something,” thinks Yamashita, “I have to be quick and time it perfectly, otherwise I will disrupt my Jutsu.”

In one smooth motion Yamashita slips his right hand for a kunai and hurls it at the wire, and then replaces his hand on the ground. The wire is cut and his Jutsu remains intact. “Good, it worked,” he thinks to himself.

“Damn I was close to escaping!” thinks Sakura as she gets sucked back towards the center.

“I’m not going to let you escape so easily,” proclaims Yamashita.

Sakura decides, “I have no choice, if I don’t do something quickly I’m going to die. I can’t be a disappointment to Kuroda. He gave me this chance to prove myself. I wanted to save this for a later fight, but it is time to bring out the big guns. This is going to take up all of my remaining chakra.” As her head starts sinking into the earth Sakura thrusts her palm into the air and a huge cloud of smoke appears.

This time a large white and black butterfly with four red spots appears. Its body is three times the size of Sakura and its wings spread out over twenty feet.
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“Man that thing is huge!” exclaims Kenta.

“Whoa, when did Sakura learn to summon that?” asks Jando.

“I have no idea,” replies Kuroda, “This is a surprise to me.”

“Well then she probably learned it recently,” speculates Ichimaru, “And it most likely used all of her remaining chakra to summon it.”
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Down on the other end of the balcony Rame Tsu comments, “Well it looks like someone has been training.”

“Jealous Rame Tsu?” asks Shun.

“No, I just wish I had known sooner that Sakura was this good. Then maybe I could have been on an all kunoichi team,” she replies.

“A team composed of beautiful women. Now that would be a dream team!” says Tousen in a dreamlike state as he imagines it.

Rame Tsu slaps her hand to her face muttering, “Why do you always have to make everything so perverted Sensei?”
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“Great, I seriously underestimated this girl. My Jutsu won’t be able to contend with that huge thing, and I doubt a simple kunai or shuriken will harm it,” thinks Yamashita.

The large butterfly grabs hold of Sakura and extracts her from the swirling earth. When her head is free Sakura informs Yamashita, “This is my friend, her name is Parnassius. Parnassius, I seem to be a little stuck, would you mind lifting me out of here?”

“As you command Sakura,” says Parnassius. Yamashita tries to make his Jutsu pull Sakura down faster. “Oh no you don’t!” says Parnassius as she flaps her massive wings to pull Sakura out. Sakura pops free of the mud and then jumps on top of her might friend. Yamashita cancels his Jutsu and jumps back to think of his next move.

“You should have surrendered when I gave you the chance,” says Sakura, “Now, why don’t you show him what you can do Parnassius.”

“As you wish Sakura,” replies the butterfly as she builds chakra around her flapping wings, “Wind Scythe Jutsu!” The air swirls around her wings then shoots forward in a giant gust. Yamashita crosses his arms in front of his chest for defense, but hundreds of tiny air streams slice at his body and send him flying. When he slams into the wall a number of his ribs crack.

Sakura explains, “Parnassius’ wings are so big it makes her attacks more powerful than any normal wind attacks. That wasn’t even her fully powered attack. This fight was over the second she appeared on the field.” Yamashita tries to stand up, but the damage is too much for him to overcome.

Tatsuki declares, “Yamashita can no longer continue. The winner is Sakura Nagana. Can we get a medical team out here; I think I heard some ribs break.” Medical ninja rush Yamashita off the battlefield in a stretcher.
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Naga comments to Hoshi, “Yamashita would have won the match if he had used his Jutsu right away.”

Hoshi just laughs, “Naga you really are stupid aren’t you?”

“What do you mean by that?” he replies. She doesn’t bothering to explaining.
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Parnassius flies Sakura over to the balcony and disappears when she jumps off. “Congratulations on your victory Sakura. I am very impressed that you were able to summon such a large butterfly, especially since you had such little chakra left,” says Kuroda.

Sakura blushes and replies, “I practiced the Shadow Clone Jutsu everyday since you taught it to me. It barely takes any of my chakra to use it now. I knew I had just enough left to summon Parnassius.”


To be continued....

Thunderstorm101
01-15-2010, 12:02 PM
Before I begin my response to your story synopsis, I would like to make one thing perfectly clear. I am a bit of a grammar nazi. I am also an avid reader. I have read everything from Harry Potter to Moby Dick to the Twilight Quartet (to any Twilight fans who may read this: four books do not a saga make). As such, I am in a position to recognize such things as Mary Sues, bad plots, and lame plot devices. I will not be doing that here.

I have not, and will not pretend to have read your fanfiction. I am merely pointing out the mistakes in your advertisement of it in this forum. You were pointed out to me by a friend, who briefly considered reading your story, before seeing the poor representation that you gave to it. Actually, she despises original characters in all of their forms and avoids them like the plague. I am usually willing to give them a chance, if the summary is sufficiently grammatical.

However, your summary was, shall we say, lacking. You made common mistakes such as the persistent lower-case first-person pronoun. I am unaware of the nature of your first language, but in English, we capitalize the word "I" when referring to ourselves. You also omitted the apostrophe from your conjunctions. "Thats", I regret to inform you, is not, in fact, a word in the English language. I believe that you meant "that's", the conjunction of "that is". Omission of apostrophe is one of my most hated pet peeves.

Your inconsistent capitalization of the word "team" also grates upon the nerves. There is no problem with your typing "Team 3", and no problem with "team 3". However, you should choose one and use it consistently. Otherwise you appear to have poor skills in both typing and writing in general. I understand that English may be your second language, but please, buy some reference materials.

Though I suspect that I would discover further errors should I continue on and read the remainder of your post (the section under the spoiler warning), I have other things to do today, and do not wish to spend the requisite time to point them all out. I have only one more slight and common mistake to point out, with a helpful tip.

There is a hard and fast rule regarding the usage of numbers in prose, provided that those numbers are not a part of the title of something (such as a team designation eg. Team 3). Should the number be ten or less, it is to be typed out in full. Should the number be 11 or greater, it is to be typed out in numerical form. All numbers in a sentence should match the first, so if the number "four" is typed out, and in the same sentence, the number "five-hundred ninety-six" is used, it must be written in full. If the first word is a number, it must be written in full word form, no matter how long it is. Three billion, five-hundred seventy million, nine thousand, three hundred thirty-three must be typed in full, if it is the first word. If it is not, 3,570,009,333 is far easier to comprehend.

It is my hope that there are no hard feelings toward simple constructive criticism. I am simply notifying you of common errors that often cause a loss in potential readership. If you wish to return the favor for any of my future posts, I will be duly grateful. You may notice that I have not mentioned your spelling errors. I would prefer to assume that these, you can find yourself.

Dwayneturtle1
01-15-2010, 02:09 PM
I like Turtles ^.^

historygeek5
01-15-2010, 02:12 PM
I dunno its good! But i enjoy fanfics with cannon charators or like if the cannon charators had a child. But this is my fave non-cannon charators. I give you two thumbs up!

Kuroda Taishi
01-15-2010, 02:13 PM
I dunno its good! But i enjoy fanfics with cannon charators or like if the cannon charators had a child. But this is my fave non-cannon charators. I give you two thumbs up!

Thanks. Sadly we are not allowed to post fanfics with cannon characters on this forum, so you have to make up new ones.

historygeek5
01-15-2010, 02:25 PM
i know. But some of my freinds who don't post here saw it

yondaime
01-15-2010, 06:21 PM
I like Turtles ^.^

This would be considered as spamming and I would delete that post IF I were you.

Dwayneturtle1
01-15-2010, 06:23 PM
Sorry :( It's my way of saying Hi

yondaime
01-15-2010, 06:47 PM
Good chapter. I wasn't suspecting Sakura to summon that. I found a couple of mistakes so here they are.

After a few moments he returns his attenuation to the cute kunoichi in front of him.
You meant "attention"

Is that one guys that attacked us on the first day?
I would say "Is that the guy that attacked us on the first day?"

You should look at Thunderstorm's criticism, it might help you.

Tsukinomai
01-15-2010, 07:12 PM
Looks, like a good story.

Cyl
01-15-2010, 08:36 PM
Well I can't quote it because it's too big but lol.

yeah you have Hokage instead of Koukage!

And I will read later arcs when I am less busy.

Awesome story man.

Bloodyuchiha
01-16-2010, 08:10 AM
I liked it

Kuroda Taishi
01-16-2010, 04:15 PM
Good chapter. I wasn't suspecting Sakura to summon that. I found a couple of mistakes so here they are.

After a few moments he returns his attenuation to the cute kunoichi in front of him.
You meant "attention"

Is that one guys that attacked us on the first day?
I would say "Is that the guy that attacked us on the first day?"

You should look at Thunderstorm's criticism, it might help you.

Mistakes have been fixed.

Well I can't quote it because it's too big but lol.

yeah you have Hokage instead of Koukage!

And I will read later arcs when I am less busy.

Awesome story man.


can you remember which arc that mistake was in?

Shika'sgurl
01-16-2010, 05:06 PM
Parnassius is awesome!!! And i finally caught up!!!!!!!

Finally!!! All. Caught. Up!!!!!!! And that butterfly, gigantic!!

Cyl
01-16-2010, 05:07 PM
Mistakes have been fixed.




can you remember which arc that mistake was in?


The Introducing Kuroda Arc. xD

EDIT: I see you fixed it.

Kuroda Taishi
01-16-2010, 06:33 PM
The Introducing Kuroda Arc. xD

EDIT: I see you fixed it.

Yeah, I found the one in that arc. But there could be more, lol

yondaime
01-20-2010, 05:52 PM
I found a mistake on "Escort Brothers Arc" on the third paragraph I think.

Kayo made Kuroda set the brothers down since they we behaving well, but it is now looking like a bad idea.

I think you meant "were".

EDIT: Another one on the same Arc in the same paragraph.

They have started to fight each other again and they are becoming so are loud that a group of bandits can hear them from miles away.

You don't need that "are" in there.

Kuroda Taishi
01-21-2010, 04:52 PM
.......“That was an amazing match Sakura!” says Kenta.

“Thanks a lot Kenta. I worked really hard to perfect my Jutsu,” replies Sakura.

“Well you certainly earned your victory Sakura,” says Kayo as she rubs her shoulders.

“Thanks a lot sensei, I couldn’t have gotten the chakra control down without your training,” she responds.

“It looks like Team 3 is two for two,” comments Jando.

“I guess that means we have to win our matches Kenta,” says Ichimaru.

“Yeah, I almost forgot we still have to fight,” admits Kenta, “But everyone left is so strong.”

“Have some more confidence Kenta,” encourages Yoshikuni, “You are strong in your own way.”

“Yeah, I guess you are right Sensei,” replies the boy.

“Sakura you should sit down now,” suggests Kuroda, “If you don’t you will probably pass out from using up too much of your chakra.”

“I do feel a little light headed,” admits Sakura as she puts her back against the wall and slides down into a seated position and shuts her eyes.

“I guess she used more chakra than she thought,” comments Ichimaru.

“Sakura is not one to give up easily,” replies Kuroda, “Once she sets her mind to something she doesn’t give up on it easily.”

“I guess that is what it takes to be a chunin,” responds Ichimaru.

“Is she going to be all right sensei?” asks Kenta.

“She is just exhausted from her match,” explains Kayo, “Besides, you should be focusing on yourself.”

“Kayo is correct,” adds Yoshikuni, “You need to focus.”

“Sorry Sensei,” says Kenta.

“Is she really going to be okay?” whispers Jando.

“She should be fine after a while,” replies Kayo, “She just needs a little rest.”

“Finally showing concern for someone else Jando?” mocks Kuroda.”

“Just be quiet,” replies Jando harshly.
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“Wait a minute, what are you doing?” asks a boy wrapped in bandages, being carried out of the room.

“We’re taking you to the medical area to treat your injuries,” replies one of the medical ninja carrying him.

“Healing my wounds can wait until later. Take me back up to the rafters,” demands Yamashita.

“But your wounds are serious, they need to be tended to immediately,” counters the medical ninja.

“I don’t care about my injuries, I need to watch the rest of the matches,” responds Yamashita.

“I’m sorry sir I cannot allow that,” says the medical ninja. Yamashita starts to move around and get out of the stretcher. “What are you doing?” exclaims the medical ninja.

“I told you already, I need to see the rest of the matches,” explains Yamashita as he wills himself to stand up, “If you are not going to take me there I will do it myself.”He stumbles over to the stairs and struggles up, leaning heavily on the railing. After a few hard steps abruptly a portion of his weight is taken from him. “Thank you Hoshi,” he says. She slips under his arm and helps support him up the rest of the steps.

“You are supposed to be the smart one Yamashita,” says Hoshi, “You are just going to make your injuries worse. What are you doing?”

“That should be obvious,” replies Yamashita, “Our team is the only one who can properly recognize when Kuroda uses that Jutsu. Naga is incompetent, plus he might be in a match with the guy. So that leaves me as the only one who is qualified.”

“Aren’t you forgetting about someone?” she asks.

“Do you really want me to say it?” responds Yamashita.

“Say what?” she asks.

“You are scared shitless of the guy. You can’t even look at him. And when we were near him earlier you could not stop yourself from shaking. I can still smell the urine from when you pissed yourself,” whispers Yamashita.

“I didn’t think anyone noticed,” admits Hoshi.

“All of the Jonins noticed, and so did your father,” he reveals, “It is nothing to be ashamed of, especially at your age. Being afraid of a dangerous person is smart, it will keep you alive longer. Anyways sensei already informed me that the Tsuchikage ordered me to stay and watch his match no matter what happened, so I have to do it.”

“I am sorry Yamashita,” says Hoshi when they reach the top of the stairs and stop for a breather.

“I would have done it regardless of whether it was an order,” he replies.

“Are you two on a date?” jokes Naga when they arrive.

Hoshi blushes and Yamashita ignores the remark asking, “Why hasn’t the next match started yet?”

“Tatsuki seems to be in one of her moments of deep thought,” comments Chiasa.

“You look like crap,” says Naga, “Shouldn’t you been in the hospital ward?”

“Be quiet and prepare for your match,” orders Yamashita.
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Tatsuki finally starts the selection machine again, “Let’s move on to the next match. It looks like this time the fighters are Rino Shigure and Kenta Akamichi. Please you’re your way down to the field quickly.”
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Kenta tells Ichimaru, “Man there is no way I am gonna win. We already lost to the Rain Team back in the forest.”

Ichimaru tells him, “If you really don’t want to compete you should just forfeit the match. That way you don’t get injured further and we can move on with the rest of the matches.” Kenta walks down to the battlefield still deciding what he should do.
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Yoshikuni asks Ichimaru, “Why did you tell Kenta to give up.?”

Ichimaru says, “There is no point in going into a battle if you already know you’re going to lose.”

Yoshikuni asks, “So you fought that guy in the Forest of Lost Souls?” Ichimaru nods.
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Rino and Kenta make their way to the center when Rino recognizes Kenta from the forest. “Well, well I thought we left your team for dead in the forest. There must have been some pretty weak teams out there if you guys were able to get a scroll. Maybe my sister was right about killing you earlier, but no matter I can finish the job now,” taunts Rino.

Kenta takes a big gulp of air and says, “I am Kenta Akamichi from the Hidden Petal.”

“Rino Shigure of the Hidden Rain,” says his opponent.

Tatsuki says, “All right you two begin the match.” Rino starts out by grabbing his large umbrella off of his back and launching himself straight at Kenta. Kenta is barely able to roll out of the way of the attack. Rino charges again, but again Kenta rolls away to a safe distance.

Rino prepares for another attack, but Kenta raises his hand and announces, “I surrender.” Rino launches his attack anyway. Tatsuki steps in and catches Rino’s umbrella with a single hand.

Tatsuki warns Rino, “If you attack another opponent like that again I will disqualify you.”

Rino just scoffs and says, “This was a waste of my time. I could have just stayed up there.” Then he walks up back to where his sister is standing.
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Kenta makes his way back to the upper level. Ichimaru starts to get worried and thinks, “Man there are only four people left, and one of them is Kuroda. I don’t want to have to fight my friend, especially after he helped me out in the forest.”
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Rame Tsu tells Shun, “Look at this; I’m the only female left. I’m gonna prove that female shinobi are superior to the males. So I will have to face Kuroda, Ichimaru, or that rock ninja. My brain tells me that I want to go against that rock ninja, because he seems like an easy win and I will be guaranteed to get into the next round. And I am curious to see a match between the Kuroda and Ichimaru. After all they are best friends. But my gut is telling me that Kuroda is the strongest ninja left, and if I want to prove myself I have to fight him.”

“Well your gut is wrong,” says Shun.

“Really? You think Ichimaru is stronger?” asks Rame Tsu.

“No, that is not what I meant,” explains Shun, “You said Kuroda is the strongest one left. But in reality he has been the strongest all along.”

“What are you saying?” she asks.

“I am saying that ever since the start of these exams Kuroda has been the one on top. He has been one step ahead of everyone else the entire time. He is the one to beat, not Hara or Hoshi or even me,” says Shun.

“Well then maybe he should fight Ichimaru, so I can see what he truly is capable of,” she replies.

Tousen states his opinion, “Some of the greatest battles ever have been between best friends. It means a lot more when you defeat someone who you have a deep connection with.”

Kayo steps in and says, “That’s not true Tousen. The best battles are between those people that truly love each other.”

Tousen declares, “Yes, yes of coarse you are right Kayo. How could I forget about the power of love? Kayo your beauty is only out shined by your wisdom.”

“Sensei, you’re so pathetic,” grumbles Rame Tsu.
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“So it is down to the last four,” says Mari. “Something wrong Hara?” inquires the intimidated Masuma Shiranui.

“Yes, something is troubling me,” reveals Hara.

“What is it?” asks Mari.

“I have been getting this strange feeling ever since these matches began,” explains Hara, “Like something has been going on behind the scenes the entire time. And I think I just realized the source.”

“So you noticed it too did you?” asks Mazuma.

“What are you guys talking about?” asks Mari.

“That guy over there with the bangs,” says Hara dipping his head towards the petal ninja, “There is something going on with him.”

“You mean the guy who made the scene at the first exam? Kuroda Taishi?” asks Mari.

“Yes, that is the one,” confirms Hara.

“Hey sensei didn’t you say you have seen him before?” asks Mari.

“Yes,” verifies Mazuma, “His team was the one that attacked me back in the Grass Country.”

“Did you notice anything significant about him back then?” inquires Hara.

“To be honest I never really even got close to him. It was the mist ninja that I had the most contact with,” explains Mazuma, “However there is something else. When I passed by him earlier I got the strange feeling that I had been in close contact with him before.”

“Well that is strange,” comments Mari, “But I still don’t understand why you guys are so suspicious of him.”

“Well first of all, he has been acting very suspicious. He has looked like he has been intensely focused on all of the matches, but the ones he truly was interested in were his teammate with the butterflies and the rock kunoichi,” reveals Hara, “For the rest of the matches, including my own, he looks like he is focused on the fight, but really he is only looking with one eye. His other eye has been scanning around the entire room and analyzing everyone and everything in it. The next suspicious thing is where he has looked. Excluding his own team he has examined every single person in the room; everyone except for the Tsuchikage. He is making a significant not to pay attention to the man.”

“That doesn’t seem too suspicious to me,” says Mari, “Considering what happened between the Tsuchikage and the former Koukage.”

“That is true,” admits Mazuma, “He is too young to have any real connection to the Koukage. However he might have been present at the execution and is afraid of the Tsuchikage.”

“I sense that it is more of a grudge than it is fear,” says Hara, “It feels like something would explode if he looked at the man.”

“Okay so is that all that is bothering you?” asks Mari, “I mean that really is not that much.”

“Yes, that alone is not noteworthy,” agrees Hara, “However there is one final piece. It is the fact that save for the proctor, every single Rock Ninja in the room has had their eyes on him from the start.”
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“Hey Kuroda,” says Sakura after waking up from her short rest.

“Yes Sakura,” he replies.

“Can I ask you a question?” she asks.

“That depends on the question,” he replies mildly.

Sakura whispers into his ear, “What are you going to do if you have to fight Ichimaru? He is your best friend after all.”

Kuroda replies, “Well for now it doesn’t matter, because the proctor has already started the machine and the next fight is between Ichimaru and Rame Tsu.”

Ichimaru sighs, “Man I was kind of hoping to go last.”
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“Yes! Finally it is my turn to fight!” yells Rame Tsu before she jumps over the railing and flips down to the combat area.

“Looks like somebody is ready to go,” comments Jando.

“Just my luck,” complains Ichimaru, “Why do I have to fight the crazy girl?”

“Better than having to fight your best friend in the first round,” comments Kuroda.

“Yeah, I guess you are right,” replies Ichimaru.

“Good luck Ichimaru,” says Kenta.

“Thanks Kenta,” he replies.

“You had better get down there,” advises Sakura, “Or else she might get mad.” “Have fun buddy,” says Kuroda.

“Yeah, yeah,” comments Ichimaru as he passes by on his way towards the stairs.
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“Another spunky one,” thinks Tatsuki as she glances at the fighter for the next match, “But her opponent on the other hand looks irritated. Well at least this fight should be better than the last one. Hopefully it will be longer too.”
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In the back of the arena standing near the Tsuchikage stands the proctor of the second exam. “Well this thing is almost over,” says Kenji Takimasu as he stifles a yawn.

“It is not like you have anything better to do,” comments the first exam proctor who is standing uncomfortably next to him.

“I can think of a few things,” he counters.

“Don’t even think of it,” warns Chiaki Enjoji.

“Hey Chiaki, you see that petal Genin walking down the stairs for the next match?” he asks.

“Yeah, what of him?” she asks.

“I like him. There is something about him,” says Kenji, “He kind of reminds me of somebody, I just can’t figure out who.”

“That is because he seems just like you, you idiot,” she thinks to herself.
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Ichimaru finally arrives at the center where Rame Tsu is impatiently tapping her foot. “Finally decide to show up?” she asks.

“I thought it might be a good idea,” he says dryly.

Rame Tsu says, “I’m not going to go easy on you Ichimaru.”

Ichimaru replies, “I wouldn’t expect you to. You’re always going on about the superiority of females, so why would this be any different?”

“Good, it seems you actually learned something,” she replies, “Considering your academy days I am impressed.”

“I’m glad you think so highly of me,” he mutters under his breath.

“If you are both ready then we can begin the match,” announces Tatsuki.


To be continued....

yondaime
01-21-2010, 05:35 PM
Good chapter, but I didn't like that Kenta gave up. I found a couple of mistakes and I have to go, so I only have 1. Here it is.

admits Sakura as puts her back against the wall

You forgot a "she" in-between there.

Kuroda Taishi
01-22-2010, 12:19 PM
Good chapter, but I didn't like that Kenta gave up.

Yes, I didn't like that I had to do that either. But I had a few reasons for doing it. The match between Kenta and Rino just sort of happened, because I needed other people to fight specific people. I made Kenta forfiet becuase they had already fought before and I really couldn't think of a way to make the fight exciting. I didn't want to give Kenta any new jutsu because he is not a main character and I want his development to take longer. Also I didn't want to show any of Rino's Jutsu yet because it makes him more mysterious and intimidating for the next round.



In other news: Xeinzeru has completed another character picture and it is posted in the character profiles section on the first page.

yondaime
01-22-2010, 07:08 PM
I like the new drawing. You seem like you got a new artist. ;D

Rasen_Chidori
01-25-2010, 05:05 PM
The story just keeps getting better and better! Good work Kuroda :D

Kuroda Taishi
01-26-2010, 06:06 PM
Character profile for Mazuma is now posted

Shika'sgurl
01-27-2010, 07:48 PM
So Shun admitted that Kuroda was the strongest Petal ninja?

You know what? It was a good thing that Ichimaru and Kuroda didn't have to fight each other. But then again, i would like to see them battle. Good chapter! ^^

yondaime
01-28-2010, 07:11 PM
Yeah, Kuroda should make them battle for FUN once.

takuya
01-28-2010, 07:45 PM
Yes, it'd be interesting to see a battle between friends. We'd also get to see more of Ichimaru's skills.

Kuroda Taishi
01-30-2010, 05:23 PM
..........“So what should my strategy be in this match?” ponders Ichimaru as he analyzes the situation, “Kuroda, Sakura, and Jando have all seen my Shadow Paralysis Jutsu before and know how it works. On the other hand Shun, Rame Tsu, and the Genin from the other villages don’t know about it. So the best thing for me would be to not use it and keep it a secret as long as I can. However Rame Tsu is no pushover, it is going to be tough to beat her without my Jutsu, especially when she is all pumped up like that.”

“What the hell, where did she go?” exclaims Ichimaru when he realizes his brown haired kunoichi has disappeared from his view.

“If you weren’t such a slacker you would have had your eyes on me the whole time!” shouts Rame Tsu as she appears right in front of him and puts all her weight into a punch.

Ichimaru brings his arms up just in time to brace for the impact and protect himself from major damage. “Damn she is faster than I remember,” thinks Ichimaru, “And stronger too.”

He slides back on his heels a number of feet until coming to a stop. She is immediately right on top of him, attacking with her Taijutsu. She brings her leg up for a high foot sweep aimed at his head. Ichimaru is able to lean back just far enough so that her shoe passes by his nose. She comes around full rotation and leaps up into a jumping spin kick. Rame Tsu’s bare thigh passes over his head when he ducks. She lands on his side with her back towards him, and then quickly drops into a squat and thrusts backwards with a powerful horse kick.
With perfect timing to avoid a hit, Ichimaru does a back handspring.

“Damn it looks like cloud boy learned some new moves,” thinks Rame Tsu as she goes into the attack again, “He is a lot more flexible and agile than I recall.” She moves into a flurry of punches and kicks, but Ichimaru is able to dodge the majority of them.
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“Wow Ichimaru is keeping up with her,” remarks Sakura, “I have never seen him move like that.”

“Yes, he is doing fairly well,” comments Kuroda.

“He is never going to win this way,” says Jando, “He hasn’t attacked her once, and she has hit him a bunch of times.”

“He is just biding his time until he can find a good opening,” explains Kuroda, “Rame Tsu is keeping him off balance by not letting off her attack. It is a good strategy against someone like Ichimaru. However she will either get tired or slip up and he will be ready.”

“That is Ichimaru for you,” adds Kenta.
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Rame Tsu lunges forward for a powerful blow, but she puts too much strength into her attack and steps too far. Ichimaru ducks under the punch and gets in close to deliver a sturdy punch to her gut. “Damn, I messed up,” she says as she slumps over his back.

“Sorry about that,” apologizes Ichimaru, “Hitting a girl is not exactly my idea of fun, but I really didn’t have much of a choice.”

Suddenly Rame Tsu’s eyes snap open and she says in a sly voice, “Sorry to hear that.” She grabs hold of his head and hlods it in place as she jerks her knee up into his chin and sends him flying.

“Stupid boys always trying to act cool and think girls are weak,” she mutters as she brushes some hair out of her eyes.

“So she was playing dead, not bad,” thinks Ichimaru as he floats in the air, “Well at least now I have a second to think.” He twists in mid-air and is able to pull out some shurikens with his left hand. He flings them at her just before he hits the ground and rolls back onto his feet. The brown eyed kunoichi is able to slip out a kunai from her trusty backpack and deflect the weapons away.

“So I didn’t knock you out,” she comments.

“It looks like we both know how to play dead,” replies Ichimaru as he takes out a kunai and backs up a few paces.

“Damn, I was hoping to take him out with that last attack,” thinks Rame Tsu as she tries to come up with a new strategy, “I don’t think plain Taijutsu is going to cut it anymore. Plus, now he has a kunai and will be ready for that. Well then now is as good of a time as any.”

She stabs her kunai into the ground then reaches back with her right hand and opens up one of the larger pockets on her backpack. She takes out a strange curved blade with a circle as the handle.

“What is that?” wonders Ichimaru, “It is too big to be a kunai, but that handle is too irregular for it to be used as a sword.”

“Here have a taste of my Demon Wind Shuriken!” she yells as she rotates a full 360 degrees. As she spins the weapon unclasps, revealing four blades on opposite sides and then she whips the shuriken at him. Ichimaru is barely able to dodge it and then it flies across the rest of the battlefield and wedges itself in the wall.

“A large shuriken?” asks Ichimaru as he goes over tries to remove it from the wall, but it is stuck.

Meanwhile Rame Tsu has taken out another shuriken of the same type and prepares to throw it. “This one is a little different,” she explains, “Go Demon Wind Shuriken, Windmill of Shadows!” The shuriken is thrown at Ichimaru and it cuts into the edge of his green vest before flying past and missing the rest of his body. But then a second shuriken appears out of nowhere and strikes Ichimaru in the chest.

Luckily he is able to quickly use a Replacement Jutsu and the windmill shuriken slices through a large piece of debris from the floor that was created in an earlier match before it plants itself in the wall like the previous two. Ichimaru comments, “I see, you hid the second shuriken in the shadow of the first and that’s why I was not able to detect it as quickly.”
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“Wow she is really serious!” comments Kenta, “She almost cut him in half.”

“This is a match to the death,” Sakura reminds him.

“People have died before while taking the Chunin exams,” adds Kayo.

“Yeah, just take a look back at the second exam,” says Kuroda, “A lot of people did not make it out of there.”

“Yeah I remember, but I thought it would be different this time,” says Kenta.

“Why because they are from the same village?” asks Jando.

“Yeah, that’s what I meant,” replies Kenta. “You have to be willing to kill at all times,” says Yoshikuni as he places a hand on Kenta’s shoulder,

“Even if that person is from your own village or even your own team. A ninja must be prepared for any situation and capable of doing whatever it takes to complete the mission. Right now that mission is getting to the next match.”
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Rame Tsu takes out another shuriken and prepares to attack, but Ichimaru uses a Clone Jutsu to create replicates of himself on both sides. “That same trick won’t work twice,” he says.

Rame Tsu retorts, “Having those clones won’t make a difference. Go Demon Wind Shuriken, Windmill of Shadows.” The shuriken slices through the clone on the left and it fades away. A second shuriken slices through the other illusion and it also disappears.

Then a third shuriken comes and Ichimaru is surprised, “What a third shuriken?” He leaps out of the way barely avoiding it, but then when it is a foot past him it changes into a cloud of smoke and a black and brown clothed girl appears and throws a kunai at his back.

The kunai hits him in the chest, but passes right through his body and the illusion fades away. Rame Tsu is astonished, “What? All three of them were clones. When did he do that?” She scans around the room looking for him, “Where did he go, and how did he switch places with the clone without me noticing?”

She is unprepared when one of the shurikens in the wall turns into Ichimaru. She spins her head around just in time for him to land a punch to her jaw and temporarily paralyzes her.

She drops to the ground with a thud and stutters, “I can’t move.”

Tatsuki looks at her then declares, “Rame Tsu is unable to continue, Ichimaru Nara is the winner.”
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“Yeah, great job Ichimaru!” cheers Kenta from the balcony.
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“How did you do that?” asks Rame Tsu as she lies on the ground.

Ichimaru reveals, “When I used that Escape Jutsu earlier I simultaneously did a Clone Jutsu and a Transformation Jutsu. Then I just acted like I was one of your shurikens that hit the wall. I figured if you could hide one shuriken in the shadow, then you would probably be able to more. It was just a matter of waiting for you to get close enough for me to attack.”

Rame Tsu just laughs and comments, “Looks like you have really grown up from that lazy trouble maker you were back in the academy.”

“Well I had to if I wanted to beat someone like you,” he replies.

“Thanks for the compliment, but I’m still not going to go out with you,” she says with a smirk.

Surprised he replies, “What? But I never…”

Rame Tsu calls for Shun, “Hey Shun, can you bring me back to the balcony? I want to watch the last match.”

“Sure,” says Shun as he leaps down and then walks over and picks her up, “I also want to see just how good Kuroda has become.”

Ichimaru shakes his head and thinks, “Girls, I will never understand how their minds work.”
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He makes his way back up and stops by Kuroda to talk. Kuroda comments, “It was wise of you not to reveal your more advanced Ninjutsu in the preliminary rounds, because I know that your father must have taught you some of the famed Nara Clan’s Jutsu by now.”

Ichimaru agrees, “Yeah, but if I had a different opponent I might have had to use it. But now it’s your turn to fight. I’m looking forward to seeing you in action.”
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Tatsuki yells at Kuroda, “Hey you hurry up and get down here.” Kuroda looks down to see that his opponent Naga Takeuchi is already standing there.


To be continued.....

KIBAFAN321
01-30-2010, 06:19 PM
Wouldn't that count as... like murder if they kill some one in the chunin exam? Oh, I can't wait 'till Kuroda fights with Naga! 8D

Kuroda already fought with Naga and the other Rock ninjas and he won. So wouldn't that mean that Kuroda already has won?

Kuroda Taishi
01-30-2010, 06:35 PM
So Shun admitted that Kuroda was the strongest Petal ninja?

You know what? It was a good thing that Ichimaru and Kuroda didn't have to fight each other. But then again, i would like to see them battle. Good chapter! ^^



yes Shun admitted it.

Yeah, Kuroda should make them battle for FUN once.

Maybe they will in the next round of matches.

Yes, it'd be interesting to see a battle between friends. We'd also get to see more of Ichimaru's skills.

He does have some extra skills.

Wouldn't that count as... like murder if they kill some one in the chunin exam? Oh, I can't wait 'till Kuroda fights with Naga! 8D

Kuroda already fought with Naga and the other Rock ninjas and he won. So wouldn't that mean that Kuroda already has won?

No it wouldn't be murder. Gaara killed those rain ninja in the forest in the Naruto series and never got in trouble for it.

It could mean Kuroda has the match in the bag, but you never know.

KIBAFAN321
01-30-2010, 08:17 PM
Ah, you got a point there, Kuroda.

Edit: Shika didn't answer! xD:
Why can't you give me a definite answer? XD

yondaime
01-30-2010, 08:32 PM
Good chapter, but Ichimaru didn't use his good jutsus which is alright at that situation. I was expecting Rame Tsu to use other jutsus that were different from the show, but it is alright too. Here are the mistakes I found.


ponders Ichimaru as he analyses the situation,

It is supposed to be and "i", "analysis".

“Damn it looks like cloud boy learned some new moves,” things Rame Tsu as she goes into the attack again

It is "thinks" second paragraph BTW.


“He is a lot more flexible and agile then I recall.”


It is "than". second paragraph too.

takuya
01-30-2010, 09:03 PM
I think you mean analyzes, analysis is something you get when you do an experiment or something along the lines of that.

Kuroda Taishi
01-31-2010, 08:16 AM
Ah, you got a point there, Kuroda.

Edit: Shika didn't answer! xD:
Why can't you give me a definite answer? XD

because I don't want to give away what will happen in the next part, xD

Good chapter, but Ichimaru didn't use his good jutsus which is alright at that situation. I was expecting Rame Tsu to use other jutsus that were different from the show, but it is alright too.

Rame Tsu is similar to a TenTen type character. She really only has the one Jutsu. I haven't worked out a good Jutsu to give her later, and she won't get it for a while when I do think of it.

I think you mean analyzes, analysis is something you get when you do an experiment or something along the lines of that.


yes I meant analyzes

HaiJoylikeduh
01-31-2010, 02:48 PM
I like it(:

Kuroda Taishi
02-05-2010, 04:19 PM
.....“Well then I had better get down there,” says Kuroda as he takes a seat on top of the railing.

“Good luck Kuroda,” says Kenta.

“What are you doing? The stairs are over there,” points out Jando.

“The stairs are so inconvenient,” replies Kuroda as he now stands a top of the rail.

“Stop fooling around and go fight your match already,” scolds Kayo.

“As you wish Sensei,” says Kuroda as he stifles a yawn, “Sakura, some assistance please?”

“Yes of course,” she replies as she steps over to him, places a finger on his chest and gives a slight push. Kuroda doesn’t try to catch his balance, and drifts off the rail.

“What the hell are you doing?” yells Ichimaru as he reaches over the rail to try and catch his friend. Kuroda smiles as he falls to the ground, and he stretches his right arm out to his friend’s. Their fingertips barely brush each other, and Kuroda seems to float in place for a moment.

“Don’t be so concerned Ichimaru, I can land on my own two feet this time,” says the boy clad in black before he plummets to the ground. On the way down he twists in the air and then lands neatly on the ground with seemingly no effort.

“What a show off,” complains Jando.

“You could have warned me Sakura,” sighs Ichimaru as he resumes his previous viewing position. Sakura shrugs in return and settles in next to him.
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Kuroda stuffs his hands in his pockets and slowly walks to the center. All the eyes in the room are on Kuroda, and the anticipation grows with every step he takes.
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“Okay Kuroda,” thinks Shun, “It is time to show me what you can really do.”
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“Here it comes,” says Mari to her team.

“Maybe we will see what is so special about this guy,” comments Hara.

“Just watch and wait,” advises Mazuma.
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“Can you feel it?” asks Hoshi.

“Feel what?” replies her teacher.

“Something big is going to happen,” explains the young Genin.

“So what are you going to do now?” wonders Yamashita.
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Kenji catches a yawn and then looks over to see Chiaki biting her lip. “What has you so nervous?” he inquires.

“Maybe if you stopped gaping at me and paid attention you would know,” she replies harshly without looking at him.

“But you are much more interesting than anything going on here,” responds Kenji as he relaxes his arms behind his head.

Ignoring his remark she explains, “The troublemaker we have been dealing with is making his debut.”

“Nothing about him stands out to me,” says Kenji.

Remaining silent next to them the Tsuchikage thinks, “So Petal Ninja, are you going to show me that special Jutsu of yours?”
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Naga yells at Kuroda, “Hurry up you; I want to get this started so I can get my revenge for earlier.”

“So eager to lose?” thinks Kuroda, “Oh well, who cares. Right now I need to decide what kind of show I am going to give everybody.”

Tatsuki watches the final petal ninja and is hit by a wave of something sinister. “What is this feeling?” she thinks as she starts sweating severely, “I’ve never felt anything like this before. This chill is so paralyzing. Something bad is about to happen.”

Kuroda glances at the proctor when he arrives and notices the change in her demeanor. “Interesting,” he thinks to himself.

Trying to ignore her uncomfortable feeling Tatsuki announces, “All right, this is the last of the preliminary matches. The winner will go on to the third exam. Now that you are both here, begin!”

The match starts, Kuroda hops back a few paces distances himself from Naga. Naga laughs and starts to gloat, “I don’t know what kind of Jutsu you were using in the forest, but I suspect you had help from someone else and you really are not that powerful. My Barrier Jutsu combined with Yamashita’s Jutsu would have certainly killed you if…..”

But Kuroda cuts him off by charging forward with unimaginable speed. He punches a hole in Naga’s chest with only a hand. Then he rips out Naga’s heart and crushes it with his hand. Blood splatters everywhere. It all happens so fast that it takes a second for everyone to realize what happened. Naga falls to the floor dead.


To be continued....

Rasen_Chidori
02-05-2010, 05:09 PM
.........wow, that was fast!

Kuroda Taishi
02-05-2010, 07:08 PM
I might have the next part out on Sunday or Monday since this one was shorter.

yondaime
02-05-2010, 07:15 PM
That was short, but good. I didn't really suspect that. I was hoping that Kuroda wouldn't show off his jutsu too much so people wouldn't be suspicious, but it looks like something big is about to happen next. Good Job.

Kuroda Taishi
02-07-2010, 05:45 PM
.....“Naga watch out!” warns Yamashita, but he is too late. His warning goes unheard as his comrade’s limp body hits the cold hard earth.
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Mari Matsumoto lets out a screech and then faints, Mazuma is aware enough to catch her before she cracks her skull on the rail.
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Everyone is stunned, and Tatsuki just stands there looking staggered.
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Chiasa Inuzu immediately forms her hands together into one of the twelve traditional seals. The wall behind her shoots out and covers her in rocks, then instantly drags her in. A moment later her Body Flicker Technique makes her reappear beside Naga. She checks his vital signs and then looks over at Kuroda’s blood stained hand.

She yells at him, “You murderer! You ripped his heart out and crushed it. There no possible way for us to even try to revive him.”
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Sensing danger Kayo uses her own version of the Body Flicker Technique. A mound of leaves gathers around her before she vanishes and appears next to Kuroda a second later. She pushes Kuroda back protectively and says, “Don’t say anything, I will handle this.” She takes out a kunai and points it at Chiasa.
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Sakura seems unfazed by the recent events, but Jando is as stunned as everyone else. Ichimaru finally comes to his senses and whispers to Yoshikuni, “Sensei, aren’t you going to do anything?”

“No,” responds Yoshikuni, “I’ll let Kayo handle her own student’s affairs.”

Ichimaru sighs, “But Sensei…”

“Just watch Ichimaru,” he replies confidently.
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“What about you Tousen?” inquires Shun overcoming the brief shock, “Aren’t you going to step in?”

“Every smart man knows never to step in on a cat fight,” responds Tousen.

“This is no time for jokes,” says Rame Tsu who is still breathing heavily.

“Who is joking?” says Tousen in an out of character serious manor, “I will jump in if I am needed, but I trust Kayo will be able to resolve the situation on her own.”
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“If I were you I would stand down,” warns Kayo with a deadly look on her face, “I wouldn’t want to have to…”

But suddenly Kuroda steps forward in front of her and orders, “Get out of my way Kayo!” She is forced to move due to effects of the contract she is bound to.

Kuroda then looks at Chiasa and tells her, “Naga was advised that death was a possibility in this exam, just as we all were. It was his decision to stay even after he was offered a chance to leave.” Chiasa starts to get angry.

Kuroda goes on in his uncaring and diminishing tone saying, “Besides it’s not my fault he died. He should have been defending himself instead of running his mouth. I was well within my rights to kill him as stated in the rules of the match. Besides the proctor could have stopped the match at any time if she had only realized that he was clearly out of his league.” Tatsuki grabs her hand and tries to stop it from shaking, only slightly aware of the confrontation a few feet away.

This final comment pushes Chiasa over the edge, “You!” and she charges at Kuroda with a kunai in hand. He prepares to defend himself, but the Tsuchikage steps in and grabs Chiasa’s arm stopping her in the middle of her attack.

“Stand down Chiasa! I shouldn’t have to remind you that these are our allies. The purpose of the Chunin exams is to promote cooperation between the various shinobi nations, not conflict. Besides the boy is correct; he did not violate any of the rules.”

Distraught and angry she tries to argue with him, “But Lord Tsuchikage…”

“That’s enough Chiasa, I’ve made my decision. The winner of this match is Kuroda Taishi,” says the Tsuchikage.

“Yes my lord,” she says as she ceases her actions, but her violet eyes stay glaring at the young petal ninja.

Kuroda nods his head in respect and walks back over to Kayo who is wearing a disapproving expression on her face. A large medical squad rushes into the room and begins to take care of the fresh corpse on the ground.
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“You see why I didn’t act?” asks Yoshikuni Dosu to his student.

“Yeah, I understand,” replies Ichimaru, “You knew that the Tsuchikage would jump in to prevent anything really bad for happening.”
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“You see Rame Tsu, the situation is resolved,” announces Tousen Nohana.

“No thanks to you pervert,” grumbles Rame Tsu. He faints and talks to himself, “She still thinks I am a pervert. Can’t a ninja get a break?”
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After main floor is cleared the Tsuchikage and all three proctors gather in the center of the room. “If all of the winners would please come down to get information on the next stage,” says Tatsuki.
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Sakura, Ichimaru, Shun, and all the others and their teachers walk down the steps and gather in front of the proctors. Now the Tsuchikage takes the lead and says, “With the final match completed, let’s move on. I extend my congratulations to all of you who have made it into the finals. I will now explain about the third stage of the exams. The third exam will be one on one matches like the preliminaries, but they will not be held for another month. We do this in order for preparations to be made for the guests as well as for giving the participants time to analyze what took place during the preliminaries and develop strategies. This in turn will provide for superior quality matches for the crowd, and show the judges how well you can plan and strategize.”

Tatsuki steps forward again finally looking recovered from earlier and says, “You will each need to draw numbers. This will determine who you will fight first in the next round. It will be conducted tournament style.”

Ichimaru raises his hand and asks, “Wait, does this mean that only one of us is going to become a Chunin?”

“No,” answers the Tsuchikage, “Each participant will be evaluated on their performance in the tournament and becoming a Chunin will not necessarily depend on if they win.”

“So we don’t even need to win in order to move up to the next rank?” inquires Ino.

“Correct,” responds Chiaki Enjoji.

“So we could all become Chunin?” asks Jando.

“Yes,” says Kenji.

“How ridiculous,” comments Rino.

“Not at all,” responds the Tsuchikage, “While it is true that all of you could be judged to be of the Chunin level, it is also a possibility that none of you will become Chunin.”

“What? None of us!” says Shun genuinely surprised.

“Everything depends on your performance in one month,” states the Tsuchikage, “So use your time wisely.”

Everyone goes up and starts picking numbers. Hoshi draws number 1, Jando 2, Sakura 3, Ino 4, Ichimaru 5, Hara 6, Rino 7, Kuroda 8, and Shun 9. A board with the matches on it is set up for them to see who they are fighting. Kuroda and Shun both realize they will have to fight in an extra match.

The Tsuchikage dismisses everyone, “Your Senseis will tell you when and where the matches will be held. Good luck to you in your preparations.”
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Later in Rock Village Leader’s office Tatsuki Asakura is called forth, “Please explain to me what happened during the preliminaries. Why did you not interfere in the last match?”

She hesitates, “I….. I’m sorry Lord Tsuchikage. I was not fully prepared to deal with the situation. I didn’t expect to see a Genin with such powerful abilities.”

He warns her, “Just make sure that it does not happen again in the next exam. We don’t want anything to occur before the Koukage and an audience.”

“Yes sir,” she says relieved before bowing and leaving the room. Then he calls for his daughter Hoshi.

“Yes father?” she says stepping forward out of the darkness. He asks her,

“That move that the boy used to kill Naga. Was it the same one that Yamashita was describing about their encounter in the forest?”

She tells him, “No that was not it, not even close. When he attacked us in the forest it was almost impossible to tell where Kuroda was until he had already been and passed. His movements were sort of like someone using a Body Flicker, but the two were almost incomparable.”

“What do you think Yamashita?” says the striking leader as he sits back in his chair.

“I agree with her evaluation,” replies Yamashita as he steps up next to Hoshi, “In the forest I wasn’t even able to blink and he was gone, and I had no idea where he would appear next. However when he stuck Naga down I was able to catch a glimpse of it. I saw him take the first step forward, and I could tell where he was headed. I even tried to warn Naga, but my words were too slow.”

“I see,” says the Tsuchikage as he rubs his chin, “Well I have ensured it so that Hoshi won’t have to fight him until the final round. I have also assigned some ninja to spy on him so we can learn the secret of his technique.”

Hoshi remarks, “I wouldn’t bother. Kuroda didn’t use the technique when everybody was watching, so I doubt that he will use it in the later rounds in front of thousands of onlookers. Also, I was disabled before he used the technique, so even if we do fight, he won’t use it on me. He doesn’t need to.”

The Tsuchikage dismisses Hoshi and Yamashita and then ponders, “This is all very strange. Just who is this Kuroda Taishi? I need more information. Maybe I will be able to glean some from the Koukage when she arrives to watch the third exam.”
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Chunin Exam Part 3 Training Month

Team 3 arrives back at their hotel and Kayo corners Kuroda in a private room. She starts yelling at him, “What in the world were you thinking? Do you realize what you’ve just done? Your actions could have jeopardized the treaty between the Rock and Petal Villages.”

He quickly replies, “Quiet down Sensei. I knew exactly what I was doing the entire time and everything was under control until you decided to interfere.”

She retorts, “Don’t be foolish, you would have gotten yourself killed if I didn’t.”

He leans back lazily against the wall and reminds her, “I shouldn’t have to remind you that I am stronger than you are.”

To be continued...

Rasen_Chidori
02-08-2010, 04:00 AM
Every smart man knows never to step in on a cat fight

Hahaha, Damn Straight

Kuroda Taishi
02-08-2010, 12:28 PM
Hahaha, Damn Straight

Like that one huh? xD

god of puppets
02-08-2010, 01:24 PM
Like that one huh? xD
kuroda, i know u porbably already no and u probably dont care, but the old tower/thorn village is gone now

Kuroda Taishi
02-08-2010, 05:09 PM
kuroda, i know u porbably already no and u probably dont care, but the old tower/thorn village is gone now

Hasn't it been gone for a while?

takuya
02-08-2010, 05:14 PM
Kuroda is badass as hell.

yondaime
02-08-2010, 05:23 PM
Nice chapter, it looks like Kuroda is getting a bit cocky... xD The story is getting even more exciting. I found this mistake.


We do this in order for preparations to be made for the guests as well as for the giving the participants time to analyze what took place during the preliminaries and develop strategies.

You don't need that extra "the" in there.

Kuroda Taishi
02-08-2010, 06:24 PM
Kuroda is badass as hell.

Think so? Which part?

Nice chapter, it looks like Kuroda is getting a bit cocky... xD The story is getting even more exciting. I found this mistake.

It might calm down for a bit, but it will get that back up there when the official Stage 3 begins.

takuya
02-08-2010, 06:29 PM
I don't know, how about the part he ripped out someone's heart with a single punch!xD That's just scary as hell.

yondaime
02-09-2010, 05:07 PM
I don't know, how about the part he ripped out someone's heart with a single punch!xD That's just scary as hell.

I don't think it was a punch, I believe it was more of just moving so fast that he(Kuroda) prepared himself to rip out his heart by grabbing it from the outside and thus breaking through Naga's ribs and ripping out his heart.

Kuroda Taishi
02-09-2010, 07:22 PM
I don't think it was a punch, I believe it was more of just moving so fast that he(Kuroda) prepared himself to rip out his heart by grabbing it from the outside and thus breaking through Naga's ribs and ripping out his heart.

I wouldn't call it a punch i would call it a strike. His hand was flat like it would be for a chop. Then he stabbed it into the body like it was a knife and ripped the heart out.

yondaime
02-10-2010, 03:04 PM
I wouldn't call it a punch i would call it a strike. His hand was flat like it would be for a chop. Then he stabbed it into the body like it was a knife and ripped the heart out.

That is what I meant and I never said it was a punch. I think it was takuya.

takuya
02-10-2010, 05:40 PM
Yeah, blame it all on me!xD Seriously, blame it on me. I did say it was a punch, though.

Kuroda Taishi
02-10-2010, 07:08 PM
That is what I meant and I never said it was a punch. I think it was takuya.

I know, I was just adding additional explination to your comment.

yondaime
02-10-2010, 07:10 PM
I know, I was just adding additional explination to your comment.

Oh, ok and will there be any fighting in the next chapter? :)

Kuroda Taishi
02-12-2010, 06:16 PM
........Not at all fazed she responds, “You may be stronger than I am, but you wouldn’t have been able to kill all of the Rock Village Chunin and Jonin that were in the room. Not to mention the ninja from the other villages, and of course the Tsuchikage. Plus even if you were that strong I doubt that you would reveal your strength. I’ve noticed you don’t like to use your true powers unless there are no witnesses.”

Kuroda comments, “Very good Sensei, you have been paying attention. You’ve learned quite a bit about me.”

She goes back into her rant, “Now I have to deal with all the fallout from this and then I have to explain it all to the Koukage when she arrives, and it will be virtually impossible for me to lie to her about what happened.”

Kuroda questions, “What do you mean when the Koukage arrives?”

“You didn’t know? Hmm I thought someone would have told you, or you would have found out on your own. Well the Koukage will be attending the Third exams as a sign of good faith between our two nations,” explains Kayo.

“Well thanks for the info Sensei,” says Kuroda as he moves for the exit, “I might have done something foolish without it.”

“Where are you going?” she says as she maneuvers to block him, “I am not done with you yet.”

“I am tired of your lectures,” he says casually, “Unless you wish to extend our relationship into something more intimate I advise you to move your body out of the way.” Irritated that she cannot tell if he is joking or not she regretfully lets him leave.

He walks down the hall and notices a familiar young female sitting on the stairs leading to the lower level. “You didn’t need to wait for me Sakura,” he says.

“I didn’t think you were going to be that long,” she replies coyly, “You usually don’t like to listen to her lectures for too much time.”

“An excellent observation,” he compliments, “So I assume there is something you wanted to discuss?”

“Yes,” she nods. He grabs her hand and says, “Walk with me then.”
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They make their way down to the main floor and take a seat in a secluded corner. “So were you disturbed by my actions in the match?” he inquires.

“I wasn’t shocked that you would kill an enemy, but the manor that you did it in was surprising,” she admits.

“Yes, I guess I could have toned down on the blood,” he jokes.

“I meant that you killed that Rock Ninja so quickly and easily, instead of dragging it out,” she says.

“I hadn’t planned on such a display,” reveals Kuroda, “But I was becoming rather annoyed with him, so I acted on a whim.” “

So are you planning to do anything else like that while we are here?” asks Sakura.

“I haven’t decided yet,” replies Kuroda, “But don’t worry, I won’t drag you into it if I do.”

“I’m not afraid to stand by your side,” she states.

“A bold proclamation,” he responds, “Well then, I think it is time I filled you in on some of the things that happened that first night in the Forest of Lost Souls.”
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On the first day after the end of the preliminaries Team 3 sets out to prepare for their upcoming matches. Kayo Yuhi brings them out to a large open area with a stream running by. She sits them down to go over the training plan for the day. “Today you are going to start out by learning about chakra natures,” announces Kayo.

“Chakra natures?” inquires a puzzled Jando.

“Yes, chakra natures. Every person who wields chakra has a hidden connection with the elements. As you grow and learn to use your chakra better you would eventually discover your own chakra element. Or in our case a teacher would explain to you about it. There are five elements: Earth, Lightning, Wind, Fire, and Water,” explains Kayo, "When you get stronger you can learn to tap into your own element and combine it with your Jutsu to make it more powerful.”

“Wow that is so cool!” remarks Sakura.

“Now as you grow stronger and become Chunin and Jonin you will be able to learn a second element,” reveals Kayo, “And if you are especially gifted you might even be able to learn a third.”

“Wait a minute sensei, I have a question,” says Jando.

“Go ahead,” she replies.

“If Genin are only supposed to have one element, how come Kuroda has two?” he asks.

“I don’t have two,” comments Kuroda.

“Yes you do,” counters Jando, “You can use that Earth Jutsu and Ice Jutsu.”

Kuroda sighs, “Well first of all an Ice Jutsu would be made up of Water and Wind element, so by your logic I would have three elements.”

“See, how come he has so many Sensei?” asks Jando.

“However, just because I can use an Earth Jutsu does not mean I have the earth element,” explains Kuroda.

“Umm....what?” asks Jando utterly baffled.

“Yeah, can you explain that Kuroda?” asks Sakura.

“Do you mind Sensei? I wouldn’t want to intrude,” says Kuroda.

“Go ahead,” she says, “I’ll be sure to jump in and correct any mistakes.”

Kuroda smirks at her remark and then begins, “When you add your element to a Jutsu it strengthens the power of the Jutsu and can also give it added special effects based on the element. Let me use that ninja Funimo who we encountered in the land of snow as an example. He used a Jutsu called the Swallow Blizzard that basically fired small icicles in the shape of birds. And let’s say I somehow learned the same jutsu and we both fired it at each other. Assuming that our aim, chakra power, and number of icicles were the exact same the attacks would just cancel each other out. Now if Funimo had water or wind chakra and combined it with his jutsu, then it would overpower mine. The wind element gives a cutting property, so the icicles would be sharper and more deadly. The water element would allow him to manipulate the water better, so he could create the icicles faster and they would be more durable. And if he happened to have both elements, then his Jutsu would be very difficult to deal with.”

“So a Justu with a chakra element incorporated into it is superior to one without it,” surmises Sakura.

“For the most part yes,” says Kayo, “There are some exceptions, but you don’t need to worry about those at this point and time. Now if you consider that an element infused jutsu beats one that does not have an element, what do you think happens when you have two element infused jutsu?”

“Wouldn’t they cancel each other out?” asks Jando.

“Yes, and no,” says Kayo, “Each element has a specific strength and weakness. You’ll notice that earlier I listed the elements out, and I did so in a specific order. The first element was Earth; it is weak against the second element of Lighting, and strong against the final element of Water. Lightning is obviously strong against Earth, but it is weak against the third element of Wind. And the pattern continues like that until it comes full circle. If an element goes up against itself, or something that it is not specifically strong or weak against then they will cancel each other out. That is why most ninja choose their second element to be a complement of their first.”

“What do you mean by that Sensei?” inquires Sakura.

“Well let’s say that my original element was earth. I would choose my second element to be wind. That way I would be able to protect myself against an opponent who used Lightning element,” explains Kayo.

“Wow that makes sense,” comments Jando. “Sensei, how do figure out what our base element is?” asks Sakura.

“Well in our village there are special chakra trees that we make into paper. You pour your chakra into them, and depending on the outcome you can determine your chakra nature. Earth will turn the paper to soil, Lightning will crumple the paper, Wind will cut the paper, Fire will burn the paper, and Water will soak the paper. I have no doubt they have trees here in the Hidden Rock that would do the same, but I doubt we can get access to them,” says Kayo.

“I guess we will have to wait until the exams are over to figure out what element we have,” sighs Sakura.

“Actually I believe your element is Fire,” reveals Kayo.

“How do you know that Sensei?” asks Jando.

“Some ninja have the ability to sense the chakra of other ninja. They can also determine their chakra nature. I have a slight affinity for this, but I have never been able to extend it to its true potential,” reveals Kayo, “For instance Sakura’s fire nature is fairly clear to me, but I cannot determine yours or Kuroda’s nature.”

“Well if we do not know our chakra natures, how are we going to train today?” asks Jando.

“We are not,” reveals Kayo.

“What!!!!!!” exclaims Jando.

“You are still Genin. Most Chunins still have trouble using their basic element. You are not advanced enough yet,” explains Kayo.

“Then why did you tell us about it?” asks Sakura.

“Well first of all you need to be aware of it. If you do become Chunins, then you might go on a mission where an enemy ninja can use their chakra nature. So you need to be able to recognize that. It is also possible that some of the other candidates in the exam can already use their chakra natures. Secondly I told you so that you could experiment on your own. As your Sensei I have a good idea of what you are capable of, but there is always the possibility that you will go beyond my expectations,” explains Kayo, “And finally I told you about chakra natures because it goes hand in hand with the main lesson of today.”

“And what is that?” asks Jando.

“All advanced Jutsu are composed of two things. Nature manipulation and shape manipulation. Shape manipulation is the changing of the shape and movement of chakra, it involves governing the size, range, and purpose of a jutsu. You may not have known what it was called, but you have already been using shape manipulation,” says Kayo.

“We have?” asks Sakura curiously.

“Yes, when you make your Shadow Clones Sakura, or when Jando uses his special Taijutsu, or when Kuroda shapes his ice into various weapons it is all the result of shape manipulation. The better you are at shape manipulation, the more effectively you can use your chakra. The best example is a medical ninja, because you have to be very skilled at controlling your chakra in order to use medical ninjutsu,” says Kayo.

“Okay, but I still don’t understand how it works,” says Jando.

“Shape manipulation is based on two principles, molding and controlling. Molding your chakra is the essence of making your Jutsu. It should be obvious that Kuroda is the best at controlling chakra,” says Kayo.

“Thanks for the complement,” says Kuroda slyly.

“Why is he the best?” demands Jando.

“I don’t doubt you Sensei, but could you explain it a little more?” asks Sakura.

“Yes I was going to anyways,” she replies, “As an example, let’s say you were all doing a clone Jutsu and you all had the same amount of chakra. Kuroda would be able to make the most clones, Sakura would make the middle amount, and Jando would make the least. This is because Kuroda can control his chakra more effectively. It takes Jando a lot more chakra to make one clone than it does Kuroda, because he does not waste as much chakra in the process.”

“Okay I get it,” says Sakura, “So what about molding? What is that?”

“Molding concerns the quality of what the Jutsu. This time we will say that you are each making one clone and you can use as much chakra as you need. Kuroda’s clone will look better and more realistic, because he is superior at molding the chakra into the shape he needs it to be,” says Kayo.

“Okay okay, Kuroda is good. So how are we supposed to get better?” asks Jando.

“Well I have previously taught you how to walk up trees by molding the chakra to the bottom of your feet. Now we are going to extend that to the next level,” explains Kayo.

“What is the next level?” asks Sakura.

“Walking on water,” reveals Kayo. She stands up and goes over to the nearby stream. She places her hands together in the traditional sign and concentrates the chakra onto her feet. Then she steps out onto the water and walks around for a while, then returns to her students.

“Amazing!” remarks Sakura.

“I want to try!” proclaims Jando standing up.

“You might want to let me explain it first,” warns Kayo.

“Oh yeah,” says Jando sitting down.

“Your chakra molding has already been improving due to the tree climbing, you are much better than when you started out. This will add to that, but it is more focused on controlling your chakra. If you can master this, then you will see the results in your Jutsu,” says Kayo, “For instance, Sakura if your chakra control was better you would not have been exhausted after your match and passed out. And Jando you will be able to sustain your Byakugan for a longer period of time. Now, water walking is not different from tree climbing because one is a liquid and one is a solid surface. The difference is that one object is stationary and the other is in motion. Even if you are standing on a clear undisturbed pond, the water is still in motion. In order to walk on water you not only have to concentrate chakra to your feet, but you also have to regulate the amount of chakra in order to remain buoyancy. This is chakra control. Eventually you will become good enough so that you don’t even need to actively think about it.”

“Hey Kuroda where are you going?” asks Sakura.

“I’m going to take a look around the village,” he replies.

“What, you are too good to train with us?” snidely remarks Jando.

“I don’t need to train,” replies Kuroda.

“Don’t you want to walk on water?” asks Sakura.

“I already know how,” calls Kuroda as he steps on to the stream and walks across to the other side, “I will come back and check on you later.”

“That jerk, when did he learn to do that?” complains Jando as he slams his fist into the ground.

“Come on Jando, it looks like we have some catching up to do,” says Sakura.
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“So Kayo-sensei is able to sense the chakra natures,” ponders Kuroda as he lazily walks back towards the main part of the Hidden Rock Village, “I wasn’t aware of that. I guess she is more talented than I thought. However she did say she wasn’t able to sense my chakra nature, which has me intrigued. Either her abilities are lacking or I am unconsciously able to hide it. But it isn’t like I need her to tell me my nature; I already know what it is.”

Kuroda uses his peripheral vision to spot a figure about twenty feet away hiding behind a garbage can. He tracks two more to their hiding spots without giving any indication that he is aware of their presence. “Well, it looks like the Tsuchikage has already put some tics in my hair,” he thinks as a smirk grows on his face, “This day might not be as boring as I thought.”


To be continued...

Rasen_Chidori
02-12-2010, 06:32 PM
“Well, it looks like the Tsuchikage has already put some tics in my hair,” he thinks as a smirk grows on his face, “This day might not be as boring as I thought.”

Lol, someone is about to get owned

yondaime
02-12-2010, 07:09 PM
Nice chapter Kuroda. I wonder what Kuroda's chakra element is..... xD I found one mistake.


“Actually I believe your element is Fire,” reveals Sakura.

I think you meant Kayo.

Kuroda Taishi
02-12-2010, 07:13 PM
Nice chapter Kuroda. I wonder what Kuroda's chakra element is..... xD I found one mistake.


“Actually I believe your element is Fire,” reveals Sakura.

I think you meant Kayo.

Nice catch!

Shika'sgurl
02-13-2010, 04:40 PM
Wow nice chapter Kuroda! I didn't even know that you can have a jutsu tha didn't have to have anything to do with your chakra nature.

Kuroda Taishi
02-13-2010, 05:38 PM
Wow nice chapter Kuroda! I didn't even know that you can have a jutsu tha didn't have to have anything to do with your chakra nature.

That is just my explination of chakra for the purposes of my story.

kazuki_65
02-13-2010, 06:00 PM
Are you allowed to put clans that masashi made already(like Yamanaka, Yuhi, etc. Cause you just put that in there(your fanfic))?

Kuroda Taishi
02-13-2010, 06:12 PM
Are you allowed to put clans that masashi made already(like Yamanaka, Yuhi, etc. Cause you just put that in there(your fanfic))?

Yes you can use the clans, but you cannot use the actual characters like Choji or Shikamaru.

Shika'sgurl
02-14-2010, 05:17 PM
That is just my explination of chakra for the purposes of my story.
Oh well, then never mind about that....but it's still a good explination! :mrgreen:

Rasen_Chidori
02-17-2010, 10:09 PM
When is the next chapter coming out Kuroda? Can't wait to see what will happen next!! Hope it is soon.

Kuroda Taishi
02-18-2010, 04:00 PM
.....“I lost them already? This group is worse than the last few,” thinks Kuroda as he rests on top of a building and looks around at the scenery.

For the past week he has been leading the Rock Village ANBU squads that have been following him on pointless chases for entertainment. After losing his trackers midway through the day he has been attempting to infiltrate various secure areas of the village. Additionally he has spent a portion of time gathering information and rumors about any strong ninja he might be able to use for his plans. “I don’t really feel like doing anything today. I suppose I should go check on Sakura and Jando and see how their training is progressing,” he thinks.

Kuroda jumps down to the street and begins to make his way over to the training grounds Kayo has designated. While he walks through the streets he notices a peculiar shop advertising about its world class blacksmith and he decides to check it out. Before he reaches the door he spots some large umbrellas the backs of two individuals dressed in rain coats, so he decides to follow them instead.

“What do you want Ino?” asks the annoyed male with short black hair.

“I want your help,” replies Ino, “You are supposed to be my brother Rino.”

“Yeah, what of it?” scoffs Rino.

“I need a training partner to prepare for my match,” explians Ino, “And you are the only other Rain Ninja around.”

“I’m busy,” replies Rino, “Go train with your other brother.”

“I’m not going to learn anything if I train with a weakling like No,” she complains.

“Not my problem,” replies Rino as he randomly stops and leans up against a wall.

“But you are not even doing anything,” she counters, “You need to train too.”

“Don’t put me in the same class as yourself sister,” warns Rino, “I don’t need to train to beat anyone in the competition. Not even that Kuroda guy.”

“Fine then, can’t you help me train so i can get stronger?” pleads Ino.

“If you have to rely on other people to get stronger, then you don’t deserve to be a ninja,” says Rino coldly, “Now get lost, I don’t want to be bothered by you anymore.” Ino hesitates for a moment then regretfully walks away, leaving her brother to his solitude.
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Hoshi Ishimaru slumps down to one knee to catch her breath. “Okay, I guess it is time you take a break,” says her mentor Chiasa Inuzu as she comes over and hands the girl a canteen of water. Hoshi accepts the water and sits down to gulp some of it. Chiasa walks back over and sits down on a stone bench.

The two appear to be in a large open training area surrounded by mountains. A number of manmade structures seem to be carved into various places on the mountains, functioning as housing and lookout rooms. Currently they are located in the middle of a giant circular stone pitch.

“You are training her all wrong Sensei,” says a mummified figure as he walks up behind her.

“Yamashita, you are out of the hospital,” says Hoshi very surprised,

“Aren’t you still injured?”

“Who could even tell, considering all the bandages he wears,” jokes Chiasa, “But what I want to know is how you gained access to the Hisho Shinki Mountains? This is a secret and private training area belonging to the Ishimaru clan.”

“Lord Tsuchikage gave me safe passage,” states Yamashita, “That should have been obvious.”

“Why would he grant you access?” asks Chiasa.

“Hoshi needs a training partner,” explains the young rock ninja, “You are too tall to give an accurate representation of any of the opponents she might come up against.”

“True,” admits Chiasa, “But are you sure you are up for it? You are still injured after all; don’t deny it I can tell.”

“I’ll be fine, once we change your training tactics,” he replies.

“You said Chiasa-sensei was training me wrong, what did you mean?” asks Hoshi.

“I was observing you for a while and I noticed you were focusing on her Taijutsu,” he responds.

“Taijutsu is her greatest strength,” states Chiasa.

“I realize that,” replies Yamashita, “And so does everyone else after watching her match. You should be able to get past your first opponent with ease, but after that it will be harder. That female rain ninja will use her long range Jutsu to keep you at bay, and if the pink haired girl wins she will defiantly use that massive summoning Jutsu and prevent you from getting close. You need to work on strategies for beating opponents who fight from far away.”

“I was going to work on that later, but I guess you are correct about her first opponent. He didn’t seem too impressive in his match, and I don’t think he was holding anything back,” states Chiasa.

“That makes sense,” comments Hoshi, “So how are you going to train me?”

“Don’t ask me,” says Yamashita, “That is for Chiasa-sensei to figure out.”

Chiasa sighs and thinks to herself, “You are always thinking Yamashita, but you never seem to come up with the answer. I guess it is up to me then. So how are we going to do this?”
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“So he got away from your men again?” asks a strong voice coming from a man sitting in a large stone chair.

“Yes my lord,” says the mask clad ANBU member kneeling before him, “I apologize.”

“This is no longer amusing,” comments the Tsuchikage.

“Perhaps if we had a larger contingent to follow him then maybe...” suggests the ANBU ninja.

“No, that would just make you more noticeable and Kayo Yuhi might become aware of your presence,” replies the Tsuchikage.

“Yes, my apologies,” says the black ops member, “Your orders then my lord?”

“Continue with your tracking and observation, and do better this time,” orders the Tsuchikage, “He is only a Genin after all.”

“As you wish my lord,” says the ninja before he vanishes into thin air.

Masato Ishimaru sighs and takes off his white hat that symbolizes his status as a Kage and places it on the desk before sitting back. “How irritating that some little kid is causing so much trouble for me,” he thinks.
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A few days later after a hard day of training Ichimaru bumps into Shun as he is walking into the hospital. “Hey Shun, are you checking up on Naoko?” asks Ichimaru.

“Yeah, she was supposed to be released from the hospital today and my Sensei asked me to escort her home,” explains Shun, “But the nurses said she took off on her own a hour ago.”

“Ha, typical,” laughs Ichimaru, “That girl would never let herself be taken care of by a guy. But it is surprising to hear that she is being released so soon. Did they get all the poison out?”

“It was an effective poison, but also a common one,” explains Shun, “They already had an antidote, and she just needed to rest a few days to make sure it cleared her system. What about Yui? She got hurt doing her match, but it didn’t look too bad.”

“You are right, the injuries she obtained in her fight with that rock ninja weren’t too bad, and they treated them pretty easily,” confirms Ichimaru,
“It is her leg that was the problem.”

“Her leg? I did notice she seemed to be favoring it a little,” admits Shun.

“That tall guy from the rain squad broke it when we were in the Forest of Lost Souls. That is the reason it took so long for us to finish,” explains Ichimaru.

“I see,” nods Shun.

“Actually if it hadn’t been for Kuroda we wouldn’t have finished at all,” admits Ichimaru.

“Kuroda?” remarks a puzzled Shun, “What did he do?”

“His team showed up and helped us get to the tower,” says Ichimaru.

“He helped you? Interesting,” comments Shun.

“Not really, he just wanted to add more people to the mix because he knew there would be one on one matches. Anyways the thing is Yui’s leg started healing on its own. That is why she decided to fight in her match. The only problem is that it didn’t heal correctly. So the nurses had to re-break her leg and put it in a proper splint.”

“Well that is unfortunate, but seeing as she didn’t win her match, it doesn’t really matter how long it takes her to heal,” states Shun.

“It is a good thing Rame Tsu didn’t beat me up too bad, or else I might be in trouble,” jokes Ichimaru.

“She is still pretty pissed that you beat her, so you might want to watch your back on the street,” jokes Shun, “Anyways you are still in big trouble since you drew Hara of the Grass village as your first opponent.”

“Don’t remind me,” sighs Ichimaru, “I still haven’t figured out what I am going to do against him. And what about you? You have to go up against Mr. Exploding Heart Technique.”

“Kuroda Taishi,” nods Shun, “That guy is a lot different than I remember from the academy days.”

Ichimaru sighs and says, “Kuroda has changed so much in so little time. I feel like I barely even know him anymore.”

“I’ve always known that you and Kuroda were a lot more skilled then you let on, but I never expected anything like this. He killed that Stone Ninja in mere seconds,” says Shun.

“Yeah I know, I wasn’t expecting that,” replies Ichimaru.

Shun asks “Ichimaru, what will you do if you meet Kuroda in the later rounds?”

Ichimaru says, “To tell you the truth I don’t even think I will make it past the first round, but if I did happen to win and ended up against Kuroda I would probably surrender.”

“You would surrender?” asks Shun.

“Well for one thing I don’t want to fight my best friend, but from a logical stand point, there is no use in fighting a battle I can’t win.”

“Don’t fight a battle you can’t win huh? I guess it is the logical thing to do, but I don’t know if I could give up so easily,” says Shun.

“I’m not saying that you should. I mean it’s not like he is going to try and kill you, like he did that Stone Ninja,” says Ichimaru.

“What makes you say that?” asks Shun.

“Like I said earlier back in the forest my team only had one scroll and we were pretty beat up. Kuroda found us and gave us an extra scroll we had, then he helped us get to the tower safely. He did this because he recognizes that by insuring that more Petal Ninja passed the exam, the more that can become Chunin, and the stronger the Hidden Petal Village can become,” explains Ichimaru.

“I see,” says Shun, “Well thanks for talking with me Ichimaru. I’ll see you when the finals start.” Ichimaru watches Shun until he disappears around the corner and then he goes inside the hospital doors. Shun slips his hands in his pockets and walks down the dirty brown road.

Suddenly Shun stops and slams his fist against the wooden fence that runs parallel to the road. “Why? Why me?” cries Shun as he falls to one knee, “Everyone around me is getting stronger: Ichimaru, Jando, Yui, Sakura, even Rame Tsu and Naoko. And most of all: Kuroda. So how come I am the only one who isn’t?”
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On one uneventful day Kuroda is running around the village and happens to stumble into Tousen Nohana. “Oh, excuse me Tousen-sensei, I didn’t see you there,” says Kuroda.

“Oh, I think I’m in love!” responds the robust blonde haired ninja.

“Umm….I don’t understand Sensei,” says Kuroda curiously.

“Oh Kuroda, I didn’t see you there. How are you today? Hey shouldn’t you be training for the third exam? That Shun of mine is going to be tough to beat!” babbles Tousen as he fiddles with his grey combat vest.

“I decided to take the day off today,” says Kuroda slightly amused, “Speaking of Shun, shouldn’t you be helping him to train?”


To be continued...

yondaime
02-18-2010, 06:46 PM
Nice chapter. we got to know some more about the characters like Shun. Shun and Ichimaru had a nice talk eh??? xD I found a mistake.


Not really, he just wanted to add more people to the mix because he knew there would be one on one matches.

You forgot to add those larger letters.

Kuroda Taishi
02-18-2010, 07:41 PM
Nice chapter. we got to know some more about the characters like Shun. Shun and Ichimaru had a nice talk eh??? xD I found a mistake.

The next few things will give a view of all of the candidates and their training.


Also, I made 2 new threads concerning the story, so check my profile to find them.

Rasen_Chidori
02-19-2010, 01:52 PM
Good chapter, I think that it is good that we are gonna see more of some of the other characters.

Wow, Rino is really confident. It will be good to see if he is as good as he thinks.

Also I found a mistake.

“Okay, I guess it is time you take a break,” says her mentor Chiasa Inuzu as she comes over and hands the girl a cantina of water.

I think you meant canteen there.

Kuroda Taishi
02-19-2010, 04:56 PM
“Okay, I guess it is time you take a break,” says her mentor Chiasa Inuzu as she comes over and hands the girl a cantina of water.

I think you meant canteen there.

Good catch!

Have you checked out the new threads yet?

master kage mode
02-19-2010, 05:14 PM
my fav thread

Daolon Wong
02-19-2010, 05:53 PM
This fanfic is full of hax

Kuroda Taishi
02-19-2010, 05:56 PM
This fanfic is full of hax

How so?

takuya
02-19-2010, 07:36 PM
He's most likely speaking of how powerful most of the character seem, such as Kuroda being unbeatable and able to thrust his hand hard enough to rip through a person's chest.

Rasen_Chidori
02-20-2010, 03:15 AM
Good catch!

Have you checked out the new threads yet?

You mean the character creation contest thread?
I saw that one, I created a character as well I'll post it when I finish it.

HyperChick!
02-20-2010, 03:16 AM
This is really awesome :D one of my fave fanfics so far wooo

i wuld help draw da characters bt i havnt gt a computer -.-
ive gt a pda bt its rubbish grr

Rasen_Chidori
02-20-2010, 05:17 AM
You mean the character creation contest thread?
I saw that one, I created a character as well I'll post it when I finish it.

I posted my character.

Slack 40
02-20-2010, 09:43 AM
nice i like it

Kuroda Taishi
02-20-2010, 09:58 AM
You mean the character creation contest thread?
I saw that one, I created a character as well I'll post it when I finish it.

No, go to my profile page and look up my recently created threads

master kage mode
02-20-2010, 04:36 PM
make my own fanfic

Rasen_Chidori
02-20-2010, 11:21 PM
No, go to my profile page and look up my recently created threads

Ha, I found them.....
I feel pretty stupid now, lolz

Kuroda Taishi
02-24-2010, 03:53 PM
....“Well you see, I ran into that guy Kenji Takimasu,” explains Tousen.

“You mean the second exam proctor?” asks Kuroda.

“Yeah, that’s the one. He told me about this great place where I could meet the most gorgeous ladies. They were all really nice and friendly, we had a great time in there,” explains Tousen as he slaps the younger ninja on the back. Kuroda looks behind Tousen and sees that he just exited a brothel and catches Kenji walking out.

Kuroda thinks to himself, “No wonder Rame Tsu and Naoko are always calling him a pervert.”

“I have decided that I am going to speak to the Koukage about getting one of those in our own village,” announces Tousen. Kuroda senses that the rock ninja following him have finally caught up.

“Well Sensei you really should be helping Shun to train. I mean Kayo-sensei has been spending all her time helping all of my team train for the third exam,” says Kuroda.

“My dear Kayo! Oh what kind of man would I be if I did not follow her excellent example? See you later Kuroda,” he says as he runs off merrily to find his students.

Kuroda shrugs and spots Kenji again as he walks into a restaurant nearby so he decides to follow. Before entering the establishment Kuroda pays a man for his cloak and covers his head with the hood, and he also goes a step further by using a Transformation Jutsu to make him appear as a young dark haired girl with rosy red lips. Kenji goes near the back of the establishment and sits down in a booth alone, so Kuroda takes the one next to his and orders a bowl of ramen and a cup of tea.

After a while a familiar female joins Kenji in his booth. “It’s nice to see you again Chiaki,” says Kenji in a low voice that Kuroda is barely able to pick up.

“Don’t start with that sweet talk of yours Kenji. I don’t want to hear it and that’s not why I’m here,” She responds rather harshly.

“Chiaki, you don’t have to have your claws out all the time. I remember when you used to be a gentler woman,” he responds taking a sip of his tea.

She picks up a fork and twirls it in her hands, “That was a long time ago.”

“It’s not as long as you think, I remember when...” he starts to reminisce.

Chiaki stabs her fork into the table, “I don’t wish to take a look back at our past relationship Kenji!”

Kenji reaches his hand over and gently brushes her cheek with his fingers, “It doesn’t have to be the past.”

At first she is touched by the moment, a peaceful aura surrounds her, almost as if she is different person, but quickly her attitude changes back to the violent nature it usually bears. She grabs his hand and squeezes down tightly, “I said I wasn’t here for that.”

“Ok, ok, as you wish, but can we talk about it later?” he asks. Chiaki gives him a look that only lasts for a second, but her answer is clear.

She releases her hold on his now blue hand, “Now, what was the outcome? Were you able to get any useful information?”

“No,” answers Kenji.

“Nothing at all?” questions Chiaki.

“Well I did learn a lot, just nothing about the kid. Nohana has been on a limited amount of missions with him, and nothing significant happened on them,” explains Kenji.

“Damn, we haven’t had any luck with this at all,” says Chiaki.

“I admit that I thought he would talk more, especially after I took him to that brothel,” sighs Kenji.

“Yeah, but I thought we might be able to get this one, especially since he is such a pervert,” says Chiaki.

“Well we still have Yoshikuni Dosu and if we want to risk it, Kayo Yuhi,” suggest Kenji.

“I don’t believe we would get anything out of either of them. We would just alert them to what we are up to. Damn now I have to go back to the Tsuchikage and report that we haven’t learned anything. He’s not going to be happy especially with all the other bad news,” says Chiaki.

“Other bad news?” asks Kenji.

“Yeah,” she answers, “It seems he’s been giving his tails the slip.”

“What? He has been able to get away from our ANBU trackers?” exclaims Kenji surprised.

“Yeah, but I don’t get it,” she says, “How could a Genin be doing this? I hear that one minute they are right behind him, and then the next minute they receive reports that he is halfway across the town.”

“Wait a second I just remembered something,” interjects Kenji.

“Something good?” asks Chiaki.

“Well I couldn’t get much out of him, but Tousen did mention that they were on a mission in the Land of Tea, and something happened,” explains Kenji.

“Something? That’s it?” she asks.

“That’s all I could get out of him,” he answers.

“I guess it is worth looking into, I think I’ll take a trip and check it out,” she says.

“You’d better make it quick, the third exam is only a few weeks away,” he warns.

With this the disguised Kuroda gets up and starts to walk out. But when he passes by Chiaki and Kenji’s booth he stops and turns to them. He whispers, “If you’re looking for information on that boy, you are looking in all the wrong places.”

Kenji and Chiaki both take out kunai under the table. “So you were listening in on our conversation?” asks Chiaki.

“I thought that’s what you had been doing, and I was going to capture you and question you about it when you left,” says Kenji.

“I guess I wasn’t being as sneaky as I thought,” responds Kuroda.

“So who are you? You don’t look like you’re from around here,” says Chiaki.

“It doesn’t matter who I am. All that matters is what I know about the boy,” he says.

“Are you saying you have some information on him?” asks Kenji.

“I know everything there is to know about him,” Kuroda responds as he pulls up a chair to their table. He leans back and crosses his arms across his new features. His face is obscured by his hood, but his red lips are still visible.

“So what do you want then?” asks Chiaki moving into a more relaxed position.

"Before we begin I want to talk about you first,” says the transformed Kuroda.

“So it is an information exchange then? What do you want to know about our village?” inquires Kenji.

Kuroda’s female lips change into a smile, “Cute and smart, I can see why you like your boyfriend so much.”

“He is not my boyfriend,” quickly states Chiaki, “We are just working together on this assignment. I have no other relation to him.”

“Really? I’m sorry I just assumed because of the way you two were acting around each other,” says Kuroda, “And from that look you gave him.”

“I have no idea what you are referring to,” denies Chiaki.

“Let’s move on from this topic,” adds Kenji.

“Oh, it seems I’ve stumbled onto a sore subject,” comments Kuroda as his lips curve upwards even more, “Care to share what happened between you two.”

“It really is not any of your business,” replies Kenji.

“You are mistaken, we have no connection beyond our allegiance to this village,” stiffly denies Chiaki.

“Such a shame,” says Kuroda, “You two do look really great together. It saddens me to see such an obvious passion denied because of some past mistakes.”

Sick of the current subject Chiaki changes the topic and asks, “What do you want?”

“What do I want?” repeats Kuroda falsely acting confused.

“Yes, what do you want in exchange for the information?” asks Kenji.

“It is very simple, I only want three things,” says Kuroda.

“Three things, and what would those be?” asks Chiaki.

“For starters I want a kiss,” reveals Kuroda.

“A kiss?” asks Kenji making sure he heard correctly.

“Will that be a problem?” asks the disguised Kuroda.

“I still cannot fathom why every woman seems to be attracted to you Kenji,” sighs Chiaki, “Well go ahead and kiss her.”

“You seem to be confused. I’m sorry I should have been more specific. I don’t want a kiss from him I want one from you,” reveals Kuroda as his red lips form a devious smirk.

Taken aback by the request Chiaki stutters, “I’m really not into that sort of thing.”

“I guess you really don’t want the information,” teases Kuroda.

Kenji intervenes, “Listen, isn’t there something else that...”

“No,” interrupts Kuroda, “I want a kiss from her or I won’t tell you anything.”

After a moment of indecision Chiaki leans forward, “Fine I will do it.” She leans in towards the cloaked girl and slowly inches toward her face.

But when she is only a few centimeters away Kuroda says, “Just kidding! I can’t believe you were actually going to do it!” Chiaki scowls and sits back. “Oh, don’t look so disappointed, we can do it next time,” teases Kuroda.

“Okay you have had your fun, now what are the other two things you want,” insists Kenji.

“Well I just wanted to tell you two things. The first thing is that I’m only going to tell you one thing about that boy. The second thing is...” says Kuroda as he lowers his hood revealing the female face of his transformation, “I am that boy” a cloud of smoke appears and Kuroda is transformed back into his normal form. Then he quickly darts out of the restaurant.

Chiaki and Kenji pursue him outside, but then he disappears in the middle of the street. “Damn it! It was him the whole time,” says Chiaki.

“He is good,” admits Kenji, “How the hell did he know we would be meeting there?”

“Just who is that boy, that Kuroda Taishi?” wonders Chiaki.
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Tousen Nohana walks out of the forest and sees two figures in combat by a stream. One figure is a girl in a white dress with blue borders and designs and pink hair. The other is a boy with short black hair in a white and grey ensemble. There is also a woman supervising them from the comfort of an old wooden log. Tousen walks up behind the dark haired woman who is wearing a white blouse.

“Come by to spy on the competition?” jokes Kayo Yuhi.

“Good idea, maybe I should do that while I am here,” replies Tousen, “But I don’t see Kuroda anywhere.”

“He likes to train on his own,” she explains, “Care to join me?”

“Actually I was wondering if you would join me?” he responds, “Some place a little more private.” Kayo’s striking red eyes look up at him and she raises a suspicious eyebrow. “Just for a friendly conversation between Petal Jonin,” assures Tousen.

Curious, Kayo stands up and calls to her students, “You two take a short break; I will be back in a moment.”

“Okay Sensei,” yells back Sakura.


To be continued...

yondaime
02-24-2010, 06:06 PM
It was a good chapter, especially when Kuroda tricked Chiaki into kissing him. ^_^... xD I found two mistakes.


His face is obscured by his hood, but his read lips are still visible.

You meant "red"

“Really? I’m sorry I just assumed because of the way you two we acting around each other,” says Kuroda,

I think you meant ''were''

Kuroda Taishi
02-24-2010, 09:20 PM
It was a good chapter, especially when Kuroda tricked Chiaki into kissing him. ^_^... xD I found two mistakes.

She never actually kissed him.

Rasen_Chidori
02-24-2010, 09:51 PM
HA! Kuroda made them look pretty stupid!

yondaime
02-25-2010, 05:58 PM
She never actually kissed him.

I know.... :( xDDD

Kuroda Taishi
02-25-2010, 06:01 PM
HA! Kuroda made them look pretty stupid!

Just a little bit, xD

Zaori Momochi
02-28-2010, 07:42 AM
Wow, this story seems really cool!

Rasen_Chidori
02-28-2010, 07:45 AM
You have to go up against Mr. Exploding Heart Technique, Nods Shun

FEAR KURODA THE HEART EXPLODER!!!!!!! lolz:D

Zaori Momochi
02-28-2010, 07:49 AM
FEAR KURODA THE HEART EXPLODER!!!!!!! lolz:D

Woah someone gets their heart exploded?

Rasen_Chidori
02-28-2010, 02:49 PM
Woah someone gets their heart exploded?

Well...technically crushed.

Kuroda Taishi
02-28-2010, 09:30 PM
I am thinking about doing something special the week after next, because that is when I am going on spring break. I will let you know if I decide to do it.

Rasen_Chidori
02-28-2010, 09:39 PM
I am thinking about doing something special the week after next, because that is when I am going on spring break. I will let you know if I decide to do it.

Sounds cool, when is the next chapter coming out Kuroda?

Kuroda Taishi
02-28-2010, 09:51 PM
Sounds cool, when is the next chapter coming out Kuroda?

Wednesday or Thursday like usual

Rasen_Chidori
02-28-2010, 10:25 PM
Cool, I love reading this story...almost as much as reading the Naruto manga!! Keep up the great work Kuroda.

Zaori Momochi
03-03-2010, 03:51 PM
Wednesday or Thursday like usual

So which is it?

Kuroda Taishi
03-04-2010, 06:14 PM
....Tousen leads the way back into the forest until they arrive in a small hidden grove. “So what did you want to talk about?” asks Kayo.

“It is about your student Kuroda,” says Tousen as he rests against a tree, “I came here to warn you.”

Trying to act casually Kayo replies, “You want to warn me about Kuroda?”

“Yes, I think he might be in danger,” says Tousen.

“In danger? What makes you think that?” she replies.

“Even though the Tsuchikage managed to keep the peace I don’t think the Rock ninja are too happy about what happened to their Genin called Naga,” speculates Tousen.

“Well that was pretty apparent,” comments Kayo, “But what has gotten you so serious?”

“Some of them have started asking questions about Kuroda,” reveals Tousen.

“Asking questions?” she repeats, “Like what?”

“Who he is, how old he is, if he is even really a Genin,” he says, “At first I thought it was just innocent curiosity, until this afternoon.”

“Why did something happen?” inquires Kayo.

“If my memory serves me correctly you are familiar with Kenji Takimasu,” states Tousen.

“You could say that,” she confirms, “I have encountered him on a few missions before, both as an ally and an enemy.”

“Well today he invited me out for a few drinks, said he wanted to show his allies the hospitality of the Rock Village,” he explains, “But his real objective was to gather information on Kuroda. He was looking for anything and everything: medical history, mission data, and even family records.”

“So what did you tell him?” asks Kayo.

“Well I told him the truth,” admits Tousen.

"What?” says Kayo very surprised.

“And the truth is I don’t really know that much about him,” he explains, “I have only been on one mission with him, but other than that the only thing I know is he is an orphan right?”

“Yes, that is right,” confirms Kayo, “I have never talked to him about it, but from my understanding his parents died right after he was born and he has pretty much been on his own since then.”

“Well then I doubt they will find much information on him if we don’t even know a lot,” says Tousen, “But it still worries me that such a high ranking ninja like Kenji is digging for information.”

“Well so far no one has approached me or Kuroda,” says Kayo, “So it is likely that the Tsuchikage is the one who is behind the inquires and he is trying to tread lightly.”

“Just be careful, even in our own village there are groups that don’t always agree with the leader of the village. And some of them are still holding on to grudges of the past. One of them may act out on their own initiative and attack him. That Chiasa Inuzu for example, she seemed like a real hot-head,” he says.

“More like an overprotective mother,” corrects Kayo, “Thanks for the warning though.”

They make their way back to the training area, and see that Kuroda has joined the other members of Team 3. “Looks like Mr. Popular is back,” comments Tousen. “

Well unless you really plan on staying and spying you should probably go or else it might look suspicious,” advises Kayo.

“If you get into any trouble you know how to contact me,” says Tousen as he strolls off.

“I will,” she replies.

As the uniquely styled blonde haired Petal Jonin disappears Jando and Sakura stand and resume their training. Kuroda walks over to join his teacher on the old rotting log. “I didn’t think you were that easy Sensei,” comments Kuroda.

“What?” she says confused. He laughs and picks a leaf out of her hair.

“Don’t be ridiculous,” she says when she understands his comment, “He just wanted to talk.”

“If you say so,” jokes Kuroda, “So what did he want to talk about?”

“About you actually,” she reveals.

“Trying to squeeze information out of you?” presumes Kuroda.

“No he wanted to warn me,” she says, “It seems the Rock Village has been asking questions about you.”

“Is that all?” he replies.

“I take it that you already knew,” she says.

“I have been playing games with their ANBU forces for the past few weeks,” he states with a rather bored expression on his face.

“So that is what you have been up to. You should have told me,” she criticizes, “You need to be more careful. You are taking too many risks. If the ...”

“Save the lecture for someone who cares Sensei,” he yawns.

“If you were really as smart as you think you are you might listen to what I have to say once in a while,” she says, “All the raw talent and intelligence in the world can’t make up for years of experience.”

“Just because I don’t listen doesn’t mean I don’t hear Sensei,” replies Kuroda, “Now enough of this, tell me how Sakura is coming along with her training.”
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With only ten days remaining until the third stage of the Chunin exams officially begin, everyone is stepping up their training. The tremendous howl of a fierce warrior is followed by the blur of brown, green, and tan. A figure moves out of the path of the powerful kick and it snaps a small tree in half. Then a swift and solid punch flies in and hits Kuro Bandou right in the gut. The dark skinned grass ninja buckles over.

“Nice one Hara,” cheers Mari Matsumoto as she runs up to congratulates the victor of the sparring match. Hara extends an arm to his comrade and pulls him back to his feet.

“Good match,” compliments Hara, “You almost got me a few times.”

“Yeah, but you lured me into a trap with that last go around,” replies Kuro.

“Good work Kuro,” says an elder grass ninja in mostly green and black apparel.

“Thank you Mazuma-sensei,” responds Kuro.

“Well it looks like Hara passed this test as well,” says Mari, “So what is next?”

“I think it is time we started actually preparing you for your first match,” declares Mazuma.

“Isn’t that what we have been doing the whole time?” questions Mari.

“No,” says Hara, “I have been preparing for opponents that I might face in the later rounds.”

“Yeah, just know I was imitating that Shun kid who beat me,” reveals Kuro.

“Oh, well that explains a lot,” comments Mari.

“Yes, but now I need to teach Hara how to beat a ninja who fights with his head and not his fists,” announces Mazuma.
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The back of Shun’s heel whips around and connects with the skull of a short haired brunette carrying a large shuriken. Rame Tsu crashes onto the ground a few feet away. “Okay that is enough for today,” declares Tousen Nohana.

Naoko drops down from her hiding spot in the trees and goes to check on her friend. “What the heck Shun?” she complains, “I know you are trying to train hard for your match, but you didn’t have to go that far. You could have really hurt her.”

“You shouldn’t have come out of hiding!” yells Shun as he charges toward Naoko with a kunai in hand.

“Shun what are you doing? The match is over,” says Naoko.

“Stand down Shun!” orders Tousen. Shun ignores the order and closes in on his target. Naoko looks up again and suddenly realizes that he doesn’t intend to stop. As he lunges forward with his kunai she closes her eyes and tries to bring her arms up for a defense. When she doesn’t feel the pain of a sharp object piercing her body she opens her eyes. The kunai is inches away from her body. Tousen has a solid grip on Shun’s arm and is holding him from advancing.

“It is over Shun, stand down now!” commands Tousen. The message finally seems to get through and Shun relaxes. “Go home and get some rest,” says Tousen.

“The day isn’t even over yet Sensei, and I’m not tired at all. I need to keep training,” argues Shun.

“You are overworking yourself. You may think you can train forever, but you cannot. Plus Naoko only recently got out of the hospital. She can’t go as hard as you can,” says Tousen, “Now go back to the hotel and get some rest.” Shun angrily stalks off and even punches a hole in a tree.

“Thanks for the save Sensei,” says Naoko with genuine appreciation.

Rame Tsu sits up holding her head and mutters, “Wow, my head hurts.”

Tousen checks her out to make sure she is okay then announces, “You’ll be fine after you get some rest.”

“Alright Sensei,” she replies.

“What was up with Shun today?” asks Naoko.

“Listen,” says Tousen with his rare serious tone, “I want you both to make me a promise.”

“What kind of promise?” asks a suspicious Naoko.

“I want you both to promise me that you won’t train with Shun unless I am there to supervise you,” says Tousen.

“Why not?” inquires Rame Tsu, “I know he was a bit off today, but he is just under a lot of pressure.”

“It is more than just a little off. It is more like desperation,” corrects Tousen, “And it wasn’t just today. And it wasn’t just today, ever since the preliminaries he has been getting more and more unstable.”

“Yeah, I noticed it when I got back,” admits Naoko.

“He is not himself. What makes him so strong is his self control. It gives his fighting style a contained fury. But he has been steadily losing control of himself. And today he almost went out of control. He would have seriously injured you if I hadn’t stepped in,” says Tousen.

Rame Tsu asks, “Do you really think that...”

“Yes I do,” says Tousen, “So will you promise me?”

They look at each other and then say together, “We promise Sensei.”


To be continued...

Rasen_Chidori
03-04-2010, 10:19 PM
Nice chapter, I couldn't find any mistakes.
Shun is going a bit nuts......starting to remind me a bit of a certain Uchiha.

Kuroda Taishi
03-05-2010, 05:01 PM
Nice chapter, I couldn't find any mistakes.
Shun is going a bit nuts......starting to remind me a bit of a certain Uchiha.

lol yeah, but there are some big differences.

Shika'sgurl
03-05-2010, 06:32 PM
Ya, Shun's being a little crazy right there... and yes there is a lot of differences between Shun and a certain Uchiha...... Good chapter there Kuroda!!!

Nice KT!! But you know what i think???? I think that Shun is "afraid" of losing to Kuroda so he wants to train as much as he can.

Kuroda Taishi
03-05-2010, 06:34 PM
Nice KT!! But you know what i think???? I think that Shun is "afraid" of losing to Kuroda so he wants to train as much as he can.


Yes, exactly!

Rasen_Chidori
03-05-2010, 08:38 PM
There are a lot of differences, in fact the only things that remind me are,

Shun seemed willing to injure a comrade in order to get stronger and to prove his strength to himself.
(Naruto vs Sasuke hospital roof)

Also Shun says “Everyone around me is getting stronger: Ichimaru, Jando, Yui, Sakura, even Rame Tsu and Naoko. And most of all: Kuroda. So how come I am the only one who isn’t?”, this reminds me of what Kakashi says to Jiraiya after he breaks up the Naruto, Sasuke fight about how Sasuke felt he was standing still while everyone around him was catching up and surpassing him.

Hockey Otaku
03-05-2010, 09:11 PM
3+ Sentence written response to Introducing Kuroda Taishi Arc:
I don't really like Kuroda. Ichimaru is a cool name and I'll probably like him more than I like Kuroda. Maybe I like him because he's a Nara..hmmm...

AphroditeUchiha
03-06-2010, 12:50 PM
i like it, it seems interesting. i think if you develop a complex plot all throughout, it could get really fun to read. Bon chance!

Zaori Momochi
03-06-2010, 12:59 PM
i like it, it seems interesting. i think if you develop a complex plot all throughout, it could get really fun to read. Bon chance!

How much did you read? It gets better the more you go into it.

Hatake Tsuchi
03-06-2010, 02:49 PM
This is great .

yondaime
03-06-2010, 05:33 PM
Nice chapter. I seem to be late to read it. Heh heh...... I found one mistake.


Well today he invited me out for a few drinks, said he wanted to get show his allies the hospitality of the Rock Village

I think you forgot to put "to" in between the red words.

Zaori Momochi
03-07-2010, 04:04 PM
I am thinking about doing something special the week after next, because that is when I am going on spring break. I will let you know if I decide to do it.

Are you going to make an announcement about this?

Chindori
03-07-2010, 04:09 PM
Your story is awesome. You should make another one

Kuroda Taishi
03-07-2010, 05:43 PM
Okay so I am on Spring Break this week and I am not doing anything special. So I was thinking that I might post a new section each day for this week only. What do you all think?

Hatake Tsuchi
03-07-2010, 06:00 PM
I have to say this was really creative and i have to say i love the idea


Kuroda's flying thunder god technique works by his being able to instantly transfer himself to one of his "special kunai" which will have been previously marked with the required special seal or jutsu formula. Kuroda must be able to see the sealing mark in order to transfer to them. Kuroda can also mark his "associates" with a variation of the special seal during a secret rutual. He must still be able to see the mark on the body in order to transfer to it (This requires his associate to expose the skin of where the mark was placed. The mark on a human can only be seen by Kuroda or when it lights up momentarily for the transportation process). Kuroda has also adapted his ability so that whenever a person who has the seal mark on thier body is in immediate danger of being killed he will be transported in front of the attack.

Kuroda Taishi
03-07-2010, 06:14 PM
There are a lot of differences, in fact the only things that remind me are,

Shun seemed willing to injure a comrade in order to get stronger and to prove his strength to himself.
(Naruto vs Sasuke hospital roof)

Also Shun says “Everyone around me is getting stronger: Ichimaru, Jando, Yui, Sakura, even Rame Tsu and Naoko. And most of all: Kuroda. So how come I am the only one who isn’t?”, this reminds me of what Kakashi says to Jiraiya after he breaks up the Naruto, Sasuke fight about how Sasuke felt he was standing still while everyone around him was catching up and surpassing him.

Wow, I didn't even realize the first one.

This is great .

Thanks

Your story is awesome. You should make another one

I haven't even finished this one yet, xD

I have to say this was really creative and i have to say i love the idea

Thanks, I adapted it from Minato's Jutsu and came up with my own version.

takuya
03-07-2010, 07:44 PM
Okay so I am on Spring Break this week and I am not doing anything special. So I was thinking that I might post a new section each day for this week only. What do you all think?I have to say I'd love it.

HaiJoylikeduh
03-07-2010, 07:45 PM
IT's nice.

Dwayneturtle1
03-07-2010, 07:45 PM
What is this Topic about? I wanna join it :p

Kuroda Taishi
03-07-2010, 08:07 PM
IT's nice.

Thank you

What is this Topic about? I wanna join it :p


This is my fanfic. You can't really join it, but you can comment in the thread about it.

Dwayneturtle1
03-07-2010, 08:32 PM
Coooool! thanks

Rasen_Chidori
03-07-2010, 09:01 PM
Okay so I am on Spring Break this week and I am not doing anything special. So I was thinking that I might post a new section each day for this week only. What do you all think?

Sounds great, that would be awesome.

Deidara Iwatoshi
03-08-2010, 12:48 PM
Like I said before, awesome fanfic! I need to catch up on this.

yondaime
03-08-2010, 06:25 PM
That would be cool, but I might miss some of them and read some other time, cuz I have testings come in up.

Master of the Six Paths
03-08-2010, 06:34 PM
Nice KT, You added in a lot of details :lol: Keep writing please.

Kuroda Taishi
03-08-2010, 06:48 PM
......Hoshi scans the area around her for the soon to be coming onslaught. As she is looking to the left two long brown chains of stone come speeding towards her front. She does a double back handspring to avoid them. The chains lash into the ground, striking small holes into the surface. Another chain whips at her from the right and she jumps over it into a tuck and roll. She stands up and prepares for another strike when she feels the tip of a blade on her neck.

“Game over princess,” declares Yamashita.

“Damn it, how did you get behind me?” asks Hoshi. “You were too focused on dodging. You have to pay attention to everything going on around you,” says Yamashita.

“Do you really think my opponents will be this good?” she asks.

“Maybe, maybe not,” says Chiasa Inuzu as she steps forward, “Either way, this solid training that will help you become an even stronger shinobi.”

“Okay Sensei,” she replies.

Chiasa responds, “Good, now if you are ready we can start again.”
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Ichimaru stumbles on his feet and barely manages to avoid a set of fangs that crash into a nearby tree. He turns to the left and only just raises his kunai up in time to block a different set of incoming fangs. He struggles to keep the hissing snake from advancing and taking a piece out of his shoulder. Ichimaru hears the brush of some leaves behind him and releases the snake while stepping out of the way. A third snake darts out of hiding, but it smashes right into the one he was just entangled with.

Ichimaru quickly slices their bodies in half before they can recover and attack again. Suddenly a tall man in a long brown overcoat jumps out of the forest and charges at him. Ichimaru decides to meet him head on, and he charges as well. However something shoots out from behind the young ninja and wraps itself around his waist. Ichimaru tries to cut the snake off, but before he can the man in front of him holds a kunai to his neck.

“You did better this time, but you still need work on maintaining full awareness of everything going on,” says Yoshikuni Dosu as he lowers his kunai from his student’s neck.

“I don’t understand,” states Ichimaru, ‘How are you still controlling the shadow snake?”

“He isn’t,” calls a voice from behind, “I am.” The snake releases its grip and retracts and Ichimaru turns around to see a copy of his master walking up. He turns back and sees the other Yoshikuni dissolving into mud and comments, “You said you weren’t going to use any clones in this exercise.”

“I lied,” replies Yoshikuni, “Never trust the word of your opponent. Even if they seem like they are being truthful, but they can always be holding back a key detail.”

“Sensei I don’t think this training is the thing I need to be doing to prepare for my upcoming match,” says Ichimaru, “Honestly you are too tall and too much of a mid-range fighter. If I could practice with Kuroda I think it would be a lot more beneficial.”

“Kuroda has his own match to worry about, and you need to focus on what I am teaching you,” responds the wise teacher, “I think we need a change of location though. There won’t be this many places to hide in the stadium.”
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Soon the sky becomes dark and the day ends. The people of the village and all of their guests settle down and go to bed. The next few days fly by fast and soon the time for training dwindles down to zero. The night before the Third Exam most of the participants can’t sleep, and stay up wondering, plotting, and thinking about what will happen the next day. On top of a tall blue water tower stands a lone figure. He stands as unmoving as a statue as he stares down at the village.

Rino’s stillness and his solid grey rain coat could cause him to be mistaken as a gargoyle. Even though it is not raining, or expected to rain, he holds one of his light blue umbrellas open above his head. “Only one more night,” thinks Rino, “Just this one last night until the third exam begins. Once I destroy all of my opponents I will prove the strength of the Hidden Rain, and then I can leave this hell hole."
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“Where are you dragging me to Kenta?” complains Ichimaru, “I’m supposed to fight tomorrow. I should already be sleeping.”

“It isn’t even that late Ichimaru,” says Yui, “Don’t be such a girl.”

“Relax, we will be there in a minute,” proclaims Kenta.

“Do you know where we are going Sensei?” asks Ichimaru.

“You will be fine,” replies Yoshikuni.

“Your teammates are trying to do something special for you. Just stop resisting and enjoy it,” orders Yui.

“Okay we have arrived!” announces Kenta as they stop in front of a large stone building seems to have been built ages ago, but looks brand new.

“Okay, so where exactly are we?” inquires Ichimaru.

“Well since I’m not in the Chunin exams anymore, and Yoshikuni-sensei only needed my help with your training for a few hours of the day I have been making my way around this village,” explains Kenta, “I’ve been combing up and down the streets, searching for the best restaurant in town. And this is it: The Yellow Lion Gourmet Restaurant!”

“It even has a full course buffet,” adds Yui.

“You expect me to eat a huge dinner tonight?” complains Ichimaru, “If I do that I won’t be able to move tomorrow.”

“But this might be your only chance to ever eat at a five star restaurant in the Hidden Rock Village!” exclaims Kenta.

“Plus the meal is free,” adds Yui, “Yoshikuni-sensei is buying.”

Ichimaru says, “This is really nice, but...”

“Just be quiet and get inside,” interrupts Yoshikuni as he pushes Ichimaru towards the entrance.
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A gust of wind blows and cool night turns a bit chillier. A young man wearing white and grey robe-like garments stands before the still waters of a stream. Jando stands in complete concentration, just waiting until he is confident the moment is right. He gathers the chakra around the soles of his feet and then steps out onto the water. He takes one step, then another, then another, and another until he is standing in the middle of the stream.
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Hidden deep in the forest nearby the Hidden Rock Village is a small but lively waterfall. At the foot of the waterfall there is a ledge that allows passage underneath. A boy with dark brown skin sits Indian style on the ledge. The only clothes he wears are a pair of black swim trunks. The ice cold water pours down on his head and flattens his usually puffy hair to his back. Shun sits completely still; contemplating the fight that he will have the next day. His right arm begins to shake, and it is not from the water temperature. He grabs the arm with his left hand, but it refuses to stop. Shun screams out into the night.
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“Your training went well?” asks the elder man sitting in the stone chair.

“Yes father,” replies the young girl wearing a beaten and battered set of tan training robes.

“Yamashita Uzuki was helpful?” inquires the man as he sets a large white hat with a brown symbol in front down on the large table before him.

“Yes father, thank you for allowing him into the Hisho Shinki Mountains,” responds the young girl.

“I thought you would prefer sparring with him rather than one of your cousins,” says the Tsuchikage.

“Thank you father,” she repeats.

“Did you sustain any injuries?” he inquires.

“Nothing other than a few scrapes and bruises,” answers Hoshi. Masato Ishimaru gets up from his chair and walks around the table to inspect his daughter more closely. He gently lifts her chin up so their black eyes meet for a moment, then he turns her head side to side.

“You are a member of the Ishimaru clan, you should keep your head held high even if you are tired,” he lectures.

“I apologize father,” she says, “I will remember in the future.”

Masato looks into her eyes again and then returns to his throne and says, “Just because we are one with stone doesn’t give you an excuse to go around with dirt on your face. If your mother were alive she would be very disappointed to see her beauty presented like this,” says the Tsuchikage, “Take a warm bath before you go to sleep, and make sure you have a maid assist you. I don’t want my only daughter looking filthy in front of the crowd tomorrow.”

“Yes father,” replies Hoshi.
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Hara sprints through the forest hunting make believe prey. His long hair waves all around as he runs, jumps, and leaps into the trees. His movements are completely natural, every step is perfect. If anyone were to catch a glimpse of him they would not be able to tell the difference between him and an animal of the forest. This is his element, this is his home, and this is where he belongs. Hara is a free spirit, he is a wild beast, he is a hunter. He is ready and waiting to hunt his prey.
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Kuroda looks down on the village from atop the highest peak of the closest mountain to the village. The location gives him a full view of the entire village. “So tomorrow is the day,” he thinks, “Who knows, maybe something interesting will actually happen. I wouldn’t want the Koukage to get bored after all.” A strong gust of wind blows and Kuroda vanishes, leaving no trace that he was ever there.
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Chunin Exam Part 3 Round 1


To be continued....

yondaime
03-08-2010, 07:05 PM
Nice chapter. I wonder if Kuroda will do something surprising! `;) I found some mistakes.


Another chains whips at her from the right and she jumps over it into a tuck and roll.

You don't need that "s" in there.

He turns to the left and only just raises as kunai up in time to block a different set of incoming fangs.

I think that should be "his".

Rasen_Chidori
03-08-2010, 09:39 PM
Cool chapter, I think the next few chapters will be very interesting.

I found a mistake.
“Your training went well?” asks the elder man sitting in the stone chair. “Yes father,” replies the young girl wearing a beaten and battered set of tan training robes. “Yamashita Uzuki was helpful?” inquires the man as he sets a large white had with a brown symbol

I think you meant hat there.

Kuroda Taishi
03-09-2010, 11:05 AM
Check these out: http://naruto.vfatality.viz.com/forum/showthread.php?t=46232

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Zaori Momochi
03-09-2010, 03:19 PM
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Kuroda Taishi
03-09-2010, 07:29 PM
Chunin Exam Part 3 Round 1

Early the next morning Kuroda wakes and is summoned to a large red carriage outside the hotel. He enters and finds the 8th Koukage sitting inside. In addition to her regular attire she has on the white formal Kage robe and traditional Koukage hat.

She starts off complaining, “Kuroda, Kuroda, Kuroda, I have only just arrived and I already have to deal with the situation that you have created. What were you thinking?”

Kuroda tries to defend himself, “I was only following the rules Lady Katonae.”

“You know that’s not what I’m talking about,” she says, “I could care less whether you killed some Rock Genin in a match, but was it necessary for you to provoke a Jonin?”

“If the Tsuchikage wasn’t there you would have been killed,” she finishes.

“But the Tsuchikage was there Lady Katonae,” Kuroda points out.

“That’s no excuse Kuroda,” she says, “I don’t know why you did it, but you had better not do anything else that will make the situation worse than it already is. Now, I have somewhere to be so please get out.”

“Yes Lady Katonae,” he says while exiting.

“And make sure that everyone arrives at the arena on time,” she yells out the door before closing it. The Koukage’s carriage drives off and leaves Kuroda in the dust. He goes back inside to wake the rest of his team.
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Later on, the Koukage arrives at the arena where the third exam matches will be held and meets the Tsuchikage at one of the side entrances. “Greetings Lady Koukage,” he says.

“Good morning Lord Tsuchikage,” she responds.

“I trust your journey here was safe and uneventful,” he says.

“Yes, there were no problems,” she confirms. “Good, good, now would you like a tour of the facility before going to our seats and waiting for the matches to start?” he asks.

“I trust all the proper security measures have been taken,” she says.

“Of coarse, I wouldn’t want to jeopardize the relationship of our two lands, by letting any unwanted people freely roam around,” he responds.

“Then I would love a tour,” she says, “I’ve been stuck in that carriage for a while and could use a good stretch of the legs.”

“Then follow me,” he says.

As the Tsuchikage guides her around the arena they talk about various topics and then she brings up more important matters. “Sorry if I am putting a damper on the mood, but I must inquire to if we will have any problems during the upcoming matches,” she says.

“Are you referring to what happened during the preliminaries?” he asks.

“Yes,” she answers.

“Then the answer is no. Though the outcome was an unfavorable, it was not unexpected. I wouldn’t let something like that compromise the commencement of these exams,” he explains.

“I see, you are very wise Lord Tsuchikage,” she says.

“Come now Lady Koukage, no need to flatter me. My subordinates do that enough already, as I’m sure yours do,” he says. They continue on the tour until finally they reach their seats at the highest point of the arena.
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A few hours later Team 3 arrives at the arena, most of the seats are filled with people from various nations and countries. They enter inside and move towards the center where a bunch of people are standing. “Looks like we are the last ones here,” says Kuroda.

“Sensei, we’re not late are we?” asks Jando.

“No, in fact were early,” she answers.

“I guess everyone was just itching to get started,” comments Sakura.

They walk over to everyone else and stand next to Shun, Yoshikuni, Ichimaru, and Tousen. Kuroda stands and talks with Ichimaru. “Ichimaru, I’m surprised to see you. I didn’t think you would be here this early,” comment Kuroda.

“Yeah, well I usually wouldn’t be, but Yoshikuni sensei thought it would be a good idea. So here I am,” says Ichimaru. The proctor Tatsuki Asakura sees that every one of the participants has arrived and sends a signal up to the Tsuchikage.
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The Tsuchikage stands up from his seat atop the arena. The crowd becomes silent and he begins to speak. “It seems that all of our contestants have arrived, and the arena is almost full, so I see no reason to wait until the official starting time. As of this moment I declare that the third stage of the Chunin exams shall begin.” Cheers from the crowd erupt, as everyone is eager to see the matches.
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“All right you heard him, let’s get this thing started. The first match is between Hoshi Ishimaru and Jando Hyuga. Everyone else can go wait in the contestant viewing box up there, but your trainers must go take seats with the rest of the audience,” announces Tatsuki. Everyone starts to file up to the viewing area when.

“I would like to forfeit my match,” announces Shun.

Tatsuki comments, “Are you sure? Look, it isn’t even your turn yet so you should wait and take the time to make sure you really don’t want to fight.”

Kuroda interjects, “Shun, what are you doing? Why are you forfeiting? I was really looking forward to our match.”

Shun replies, “I have decided that I don’t want to risk getting killed by a member of my own village just to become a Chunin.”

Kuroda asks, “What makes you think you would have to put your life on the line?”

Shun admits, “I’m afraid, afraid that if I fight you, I will be killed just like that Stone Ninja Naga.”

Kuroda tells Shun, “Don’t be foolish. I only killed Naga because he deserved to die. I would never kill a member of my own village unless he gave me a good reason to.”

“Remember the day you almost killed Jando?” he asks.

“Yes, but what does that have to do with this?” says Shun.

Kuroda explains, “That day I said that Jando didn’t deserve to die, but if Jando had ever tried to do something like that to you again, then you would have every right to take Jando’s life. I believe that ninja who don’t learn from their mistakes are the first to die on the battlefield, and therefore those who don’t learn from their mistakes, should suffer the consequences from them.”

“I understand, so you meet Naga in combat before?” assumes Shun.

“Yes, in the Forest of Lost Souls. I battled and defeated him, but then spared his life because I knew he would be too weak to become a Chunin. I also warned him about running his mouth instead of paying attention to his enemy. When he did not head my warning in the preliminaries, I punished him for it.”

Shun says, “I am now certain you would not attempt to kill me without good reason, but nevertheless I am still going to forfeit.”

Kuroda questions, “So there is another reason you don’t want to fight?”

Shun explains, “Ever since we graduated from the academy I have seen a drastic improvement in your skills. I myself have also improved, but not nearly to the same degree. And as Ichimaru told me, there is no point in fighting a battle I have no chance of winning.”

“Wise words as expected from Ichimaru, but both of you should remember that this is merely an exam. In real situations sometimes you are forced to fight battles you can’t win,” says Kuroda.

Tatsuki asks, “So Shun Kashi, you still want to forfeit?”

“Yes,” he answers.

“Fine then, I will remove you from the board,” she turns towards Kuroda,
“Since Shun has forfeited your match, we will move you up and now you will be fighting Rino Shigure.”

Kuroda says, “I have no problems with that.”

“These Petal ninja keep dropping like flies,” comments Rino, “I’ll win this tournament by default if you cowards keep quitting.”

Tatsuki sighs, “Now that all of that is over, everyone but the first two competitors needs to go to the viewing area.”
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“Wake up sir, the first match is about to start,” says a servant as he nudges his master.

“What already?” complains the man dressed in an expensive looking purple outfit as he awakens, “I thought we still had a while?”

“The Tsuchikage decided to start early,” explains the servant.

“That Masato is always changing plans at the last second,” complains the wealthy man, “Who is in the match anyways? I don’t even know.”

“A young boy from the Hyuga clan of the Petal Village,” answers the servant, “He is up against Hoshi.”

“Hoshi?” asks the wealthy man, “Who in the world is that?”


To be continued...

Rasen_Chidori
03-09-2010, 09:19 PM
Wow.....I didn't expect Shun to forfeit.....nice story twist right there.

Kuroda Taishi
03-10-2010, 06:28 PM
........The servant responds, “She is…”

“Hoshi Ishimaru, she is the daughter of the Tsuchikage,” interjects another wealthy looking man dressed in blue and gold robes sitting a few spots over.

“Oh yes, I remember now that he has a child,” comments the first noble, “Wait a moment, is that her over there in the brown and black outfit?”

“Yes that is her,” confirms the second noble.

“But just look at her, she is so young. Is Masato mad? Does he really expect a youngling like that to be ready for the Chunin exams?”

“Don’t underestimate Lady Hoshi,” comments a female Rock Ninja sitting in the row above.

“Hoshi was the only Genin from our village to make it into the finals,” sighs the ninja next to her.

“What how can that be?” inquires the first noble.

“Hoshi has been in training since she could walk,” interjects a husky ninja in the row below.

“She is the spitting image of her mother, and has all of the talent that her father does,” adds the lanky man sitting next to him.

“She was originally one of the favorites to finish first in the exam. She may be young, but she has all the skills to do it,” says the woman from earlier.

“Some people say she is the second coming of the Tsuchikage himself,” adds another ninja as he is taking his seat.

“She has our whole village supporting her,” says the husky ninja.

“She is the pride of the Hidden Rock Village!” exclaims a youthful man.

“Go Hoshi! You can do it!” yells a young villager, “Beat that guy into the dirt!”

“Well I guess it is a good thing you woke me up,” says the noble garbed in purple, “I want to see if she lives up to her reputation.”
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Kuroda gets to the viewing area and now can see the full fighting stage. There are some trees and a large pond on the outside with a few boulders in the center. Kuroda is so preoccupied he forgets that Jando and Hoshi are about to start their match. He only realizes it because Sakura asks, “Do you think that Jando can win?”

“Huh? Oh, sorry I wasn’t paying attention. No, Jando won’t win. Frankly I didn’t expect him to win his preliminary match,” answers Kuroda.

“Yeah, there is no one left that Jando could beat,” agrees Ichimaru.

“Look it's starting,” says Sakura.
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Hoshi steps to the center in her normal ninja attire, only it looks practically brand new and she doesn’t have a spot on her. Jando on the other hand has sweat and dirt all over his worn out clothes. Tatsuki repeats the general rules of the match, “Remember, this match is at full battle intensity. Fighting only stops when one candidate dies or concedes defeat, or when one is rendered unable to continue. If you are losing I urge you to concede defeat promptly to avoid a fatal outcome. Also as proctor I have leeway in judging the matches. I will stop a match if I feel that it is clear that one person is clearly no match for the other. Now are you both ready?” they both nod, “Then let the first match of the third stage of the Chunin exams begin.”

Jando waists no time and immediately activates his Byakugan. Hoshi comments, “You posses the Byakugan. I know all about your abilities. Historically the Hyuga clan has not been very effective against the ninja of the Hidden Rock Village, and you are not even very good at it. I should have no problem defeating you.”

Jando warns, “Don’t be so cocky. I will show you the true power of the Hyuga clan.”
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A woman enters the seating area of the arena and walks down the stairs to one of the lower bleacher rows. Almost all of the makes take a moment to check out the attractive female as she goes by. White bandages cover almost every inch of her body that isn’t concealed by her black clothes. Her black and scarlet hair combined with her outfit only serve to increase her natural beauty. However the hardened warrior expression on her face serves to deter any man thinking about approaching her.

Chiaki Enjoji spots the light brown bandana man she was searching for, enters his row, and sits down in the free spot next to him. “That’s quite an entrance you made,” comments Kenji Takimasu as he observes the match.

“How would you know?” she mocks, “You have been looking forward this whole time.”

“I can always tell when you enter a room,” he jokes, “So when did you get back?”

“Obviously I only got in a few minutes ago,” she says in a demeaning tone, “Otherwise I would have met you before the tournament started.”

“A private meeting, that sounds like it would have been fun,” jokes Kenji.

“Stop with the lame flirting and tell me what happened while I was away,” orders Chiaki.

“Nothing significant,” he replies, “Just the same exact thing that was happening while you were here. I made no progress with my part, and the ANBU didn’t do any better in tracking him.”

“Well I guess that means the Tsuchikage will have to try his hand,” she says.

“How did your investigation go?” inquires Kenji.

“It was basically a dead end,” she replies, “I went to the Tea Country and was able to find out what the mission was. It seems someone was using ninja skills to cheat in the gambling halls. The Petal ninja were hired to deal with the problem.”

“So what happened?” asks Kenji.

“Apparently the mission was successful,” explains Chiaki, “I wasn’t able to find out who the cheater was or what happened to them, but evidently the person hasn’t been back since the Petal ninja left.”

“And Kuroda?” inquires Kenji.

“No one I interrogated noticed anything unusual about him,” reveals Chiaki, “He just seemed like an ordinary Genin to them. But I guess nothing special would happen in that situation. It seemed like a standard C rank mission.”

“And that would be where you are wrong,” says a deep male voice from in front of them.

“Unwanted guests always seem to be listening in on our conversations,” comments Kenji, “But I guess I shouldn’t expect anything less from Mazuma Shiranui.”

“So what does the Grass village think they know that we do not?” inquires Chiaki.

“Well you two should be well aware that the Grass Village specializes in information dealing,” replies Mazuma.

“So is it an information exchange you want then?” asks Kenji.

“I think it would be mutually beneficial,” comments Mazuma.

“Fine then, tell me what you meant when you said I was wrong,” requests Chiaki.

“Well everything you were saying is the exact same that I heard, however I have some contacts that allow me to dig a little bit deeper and I wanted to find out exactly what happened to the cheater,” explains Mazuma, “But then something interesting happened as I was digging.”

“And what would that be?” asks Kenji.

“I hit a roadblock. Everything about that mission has been classified as top secret in the Hidden Petal Village,” reveals the Grass ninja, “I went through all my best channels and not even they could uncover anything. The records have been sealed. Now, what the hell could have occurred on a C rank mission that would make the details so secure?”

“Well I can assure you that whatever happened, it didn’t involve the people of the Tea Country,” says Chiaki.

“So that means the only people that do know what took place are the bandit, the people on the mission, and the leaders of the Hidden Petal,” deduces Mazuma.

“Well it seems I have been played,” says Kenji, “I guess Tousen Nohana is not as dumb as he lets on.”

“So tell me Mazuma, what interest does the Grass Village have in Kuroda Taishi?” asks Chiaki.

“You can never have too much information,” replies Mazuma, “What exactly does the Hidden Rock want with him? I can’t really believe you would really go to so much trouble over what happened in the preliminaries.”

“His actions throughout the entire exams have been peculiar,” explains Chiaki, “My superiors thought he warranted further investigation. It seems they were spot on with their concerns.”
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Jando runs toward Hoshi eager for a quick victory, but instead of charging to battle with her own Taijutsu she quickly uses a Jutsu. Two clones rise up from the ground in front of her. Jando smirks and says, “Clones won’t work on me. When you create a clone you evenly distribute the chakra between them, but my Byakugan allows me to see which one of you is the original.”

She says, “You right, but it won’t matter if you know who I am, unless you can get past my clones.”

“No problem! My Gentle Fist Style Taijutsu allows me to target the chakra points of my opponents, and it is even more effective on clones,” he reveals.

Jando attacks the closest clone, jabbing his fingers with high accuracy into the designated spots. He easily lands a number of hits, and then spins around to attack the second clone who was sneaking up behind him. Again he is able to effectively use his special Taijutsu on the clone. The clones charge at the same time and he hits them with an impressive combination to force them back. “What is going on? They should have destabilized by now,” thinks a highly confused Jando.

Hoshi, who was sitting back and watching the whole time, laughs and explains, “Those aren’t ordinary clones, they are my village’s trademark Boulder Clones. They can only be destroyed by using a lightning based Jutsu or with extremely powerful Taijutsu. Your style of Taijutsu is useless.”

“What? No impossible,” exclaims Jando, “It doesn’t matter what the base material is, my Gentle Fist should be able to destroy any clone.”

“Sorry, their chakra points are protected by stone. Even the famed Hyuga clan cannot penetrate the armor with chakra,” says Hoshi. The clones charge forward again. Jando tries to fight back, using all new moves that he has never even thought of before, but it is to no avail. The clones are only held back temporarily and rush in harder every time they are pushed back.

Jando blocks a leg aiming for his face with his forearms, but that opens up his defense and the second clone lands a blow to his gut. It then grabs his head and pulls it down, smashing it into a rising knee. Then the other clone twirls into a spinning back kick that hits Jando smack in the face and launches him. Jando lands completely unconscious a few yards away. Hoshi ends her Jutsu and the two clones fall apart into a pile of stones.

Tatsuki declares, “The winner of the match is Hoshi Ishimaru!” The crowd erupts with cheers and clapping, and chanting for the daughter of the Tsuchikage. Hoshi exits the arena quietly, uncomfortable with all the attention.

Tatsuki calls for the next two competitors, “All right we need the competitors for the second match down here. That’s Ino Shigure from the Village Hidden in the Rain, and Sakura Nagana from the Village Hidden in the Petals.”


To be continued...

yondaime
03-10-2010, 06:43 PM
Nice chapter, but short. I wasn't expecting Shun to forfeit. I was really looking forward to that match, but Shun took all the fun out of it. xD BTW, I found a mistake.

“What makes you think you would have to put you life on the line?”

It is "your"

EDIT: Nice, you posted another one while I was reading, eh? :p

Kuroda Taishi
03-10-2010, 06:57 PM
EDIT: Nice, you posted another one while I was reading, eh? :p

yessir, xD

yondaime
03-10-2010, 06:58 PM
I wasn't too impressed with the second chapter, since Jando lost so easily. Nice though, and I was looking forward to the information exchange. xD `;)

Kuroda Taishi
03-10-2010, 09:10 PM
I wasn't too impressed with the second chapter, since Jando lost so easily. Nice though, and I was looking forward to the information exchange. xD `;)

I have something planned for Jando way down the road, and I didn't want to give him any new abilities or Jutsu. So my options for this battle were limited.

Rasen_Chidori
03-10-2010, 11:55 PM
Cool chapter, bit of a bummer that the fight was so short, but as you have said, you had your reasons.

Damn, I was wrong about Jando winning......

Actually I thought that Hoshi would likely win, since she is currently an important character in the storyline being the only rock ninja left plus the Tsuchikages daughter, but Jando wasn't at this point in the story an important character.

Kuroda Taishi
03-11-2010, 09:37 AM
but Jando wasn't at this point in the story an important character.

No, he is more of a side character at the moment.

jurrasenshuriken
03-11-2010, 12:09 PM
whens the next part coming:) I'm anxious , I really am`:))

Kuroda Taishi
03-11-2010, 02:11 PM
whens the next part coming:) I'm anxious , I really am`:))

Another section will be posted tonight. Then another tomorrow. Then back to the regular postings next week.


Also check this out: http://naruto.vfatality.viz.com/forum/showthread.php?t=49406

Zaori Momochi
03-11-2010, 04:27 PM
Nice chapters.



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I will check this out.

Kuroda Taishi
03-11-2010, 06:11 PM
.......“That was impressive,” comments a wealthy noble covered in purple, “A quick and solid victory.”

“I see that Masato’s legacy has a secure future,” comments another noble dressed in blue and gold.

“Give her about ten years and she will probably become the next Tsuchikage,” says a female Rock Ninja in the row above.

“Yeah, good Job Hoshi,” yells a spectator.

“The Ishimaru clan is the best,” cheers another.

“Hoshi is going to win it all!” yells a villager.

“She will wipe the floor with all of the others,” cheers the young boy next to him.

“I don’t know about that,” comments the first noble,” Hara Gaki of the Hidden Grass is in this tournament as well.”

“I’ve heard rumors that there is another boy who might be even better than Hara,” comments the second noble.

“Really who is it?” inquires the first noble.

“I don’t know his name, I just heard he is in the last match,” he replies.
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Ino makes her way down by jumping over the rail and floating down on her umbrella. Ichimaru notes, “Something is different. Now she has that second umbrella with her.”

“Right, I’ll watch out for that. Thanks Ichimaru,” Sakura says before turning to Kuroda and asking, “Is there anything special you want me to do?”

“Not really,” replies Kuroda, “Just don’t get hurt and win the match.”

“Right, I will,” she says with a look of joy on her face as she runs off to the stairs.
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“Look, Sakura is coming onto the battlefield,” exclaims Rame Tsu as she points out over the railing.

“I wish that was me out there,” sighs Naoko, “But hopefully she will fare better against that Rain Kunoichi than I did.”

“Is that who she is up against?” inquires their sensei Tousen Nohana who is sitting in a seat by them, “This match just got a little more interesting.”

“You had better not be thinking any perverted things about Sakura,” warns Rame Tsu.

“Wait, that is not what I meant at all,” argues Tousen, “Don’t get the wrong idea.”

“You had better not be lying,” warns Naoko.

“No really, I just meant that we might be seeing a different type of battle considering the participants,” he explains.

“Hey sensei, can I ask you something serious?” inquires Naoko as she sits back down in her seat next to him.

He leans back with his arms behind his head and says, “If this is about the maturation of the female body then...”

“She said she wanted to talk about something serious, why in the world would she ask a pervert like you about that?” yells Rame Tsu.

“I happened to have trained as a medical ninja for a while!” responds Tousen, “But anyways what did you want to say Naoko?”

The usually outspoken female says, “Well...I just....wanted to...”

“Just spit it out already,” urges Rame Tsu.

“Fine! I wanted to know if you told Shun to withdraw from his match because of what happened during training,” says Naoko.

“I had nothing to do with it,” reveals Tousen, “Shun made the decision all on his own. I had a suspicion that he would. Otherwise I would have talked with him and given him a reality check. And if I thought he was truly too far gone I would have spoken with the Koukage when she arrived.”

“Well that is a relief,” admits Naoko, “I was getting worried about him.”

“You caring about a boy? I didn’t think it was possible,” he jokes.

“Shut up you perv!” she retorts as her face glows bright red, “That is not what it is! I was just showing concern for a teammate!”
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When Sakura arrives in the center of the field Tatsuki says, “All right both of you are here, so lets get this started.”

Ino yawns, “Look at you, what a horrible Kunoichi you are. You’ve got no style at all. That outfit is horrible, and your entrance, what kind of girl just walks down to the battlefield?”

Sakura shoots back, “Ha, showing off with that fancy umbrella of yours is just a sign that your ninja abilities are lacking.” Ino is offended and starts to attack.

“Hey I didn’t say you could start yet,” yells Tatsuki. Ino pauses in frustration and waits, her anger growing. “Okay, you can start now,” says Tatsuki with a smirk.

Ino quickly forms some hand signs and uses her Fog Clone Jutsu. A fog spreads out from her body and a squad of clones appears and hides the original within them. Sakura remarks, “I have seen that Jutsu so many times before I can hardly count them all. I know you’re going to hide underground while I waste my energy attacking your clones. You’ll have to do better than that if you want to beat me!”

Sakura creates a Shadow Clone and tosses it an end of a string filled with kunai. Her clone runs about 20 feet away and then they run parallel to each other and cut straight through the Fog Clones with the improvised weapon. When Ino pops up from the earth to attack she gets hit. Ino’s upper arm is sliced by one of the kunai and she is forced to release the Jutsu. The clones sink down into the fog and then the fog clears away.

“Damn, she got me. I guess she is better than I thought. Okay then I’ll have to use this,” Ino thinks to herself. She removes both of the umbrellas from her back, taking one in each hand.

Then she throws both of her umbrellas into the air shouting, “Have a taste of this: Rain of Needles!” The umbrellas float and spin in the air and a hundred poison tipped needles shoot out of both of them, aimed right at Sakura.

The pink haired kunoichi drops her string and rolls out of the way. Sakura is surprised at the speed of the attack and almost gets hit by a barrage of the tiny projectiles. Ino keeps firing streams of needles while Sakura and her clone narrowly dodge them. She tries to use a Jutsu, but there is not enough time for her to complete it and dodge Ino’s attacks. “Crap, I don’t have anytime to do a Jutsu while I’m dodging these needles,” thinks Sakura, “I need a diversion.”

Sakura decides to use her clone as a shield, and it steps in front of her blocking all the needles while she uses her Summoning Jutsu to call Parnassius. The giant colorful flying insect pops out of a cloud of white smoke. The main body is white and the wings are white and black with four red spots. “You called Sakura?” says the butterfly.

“Yeah I decided that there is no point in saving for later seeing that all the others already know about you,” says Sakura as she jumps on top of her summon.
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“Woah that thing is huge!” exclaims an onlooker.

“Since when can a Genin summon something that big?” questions an older looking spectator.

“So that is what you were telling me about,” comments Naoko Fei as she watches Sakura fly high into the air on the back of her summon, “I was a little doubtful when you told me, but your description of the size is spot on.”

“I had no reason to lie,” replies Rame Tsu watching next to her.

“It looks like Sakura has gotten a lot better since the academy days,” says Naoko.

“You should be less impressed with the Jutsu and more impressed with what she actually summoned,” states Tousen as he carefully studies the creature.

“What do you mean Sensei?” inquires Rame Tsu.

“Well there are a lot of different ninja animals that sign summoning contracts with humans. In most cases specific animals tend to be aligned with certain clans and villages and the contracts are passed down through the ages,” he explains, “But in all my years as a ninja I have never heard of anyone summoning a butterfly.”

“Well I guess you finally have something to talk about with Kayo-sensei,” jokes Rame Tsu.

“Don’t give the pervert any ideas Rame Tsu,” says Naoko.
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“That thing,” thinks Ino, “I better get rid of it before it hits me with that wind attack. Otherwise this match will be over.” Ino redirects her attack at Parnassius, but for some reason the butterfly doesn’t even try to dodge the needles, and lets them hit her.

“Your poison won’t affect her, she is immune. And all those needles aren’t enough to cause any serious damage,” explains Sakura. And indeed the butterfly looks unaffected by the tiny weapons. “Now Parnassius get rid of her,” orders Sakura.

“Right,” confirms Parnassius, “Wind Scythe Jutsu!”


To be continued.....

yondaime
03-11-2010, 08:34 PM
Good chapter, but it would have been better IF you finished it. xD I found one mistake.


“Shut up you perv!” she retorts as he face glows bright red,

It is "his"

takuya
03-12-2010, 04:34 AM
Wouldn't that be her, yondaime? As her face glows bright red?

Kuroda Taishi
03-12-2010, 02:01 PM
Good chapter, but it would have been better IF you finished it. xD

Cliffhanger bro, xD

Zaori Momochi
03-12-2010, 04:20 PM
I wonder how Ino will deal with this.

Kuroda Taishi
03-12-2010, 05:50 PM
.....Parnassius moves her body into a vertical position in the air and flaps her massive wings. Very powerful gusts of air are sent at Ino. Ino attempts to lessen the effect of the attack by moving her umbrellas in the way and spinning them to create a semi-sheilding effect that redirects the wind away from her. However the wind attack rips right through the umbrellas. It sends the Rain ninja’s umbrellas flying back at her and Ino ends up accidentally shooting off needles at herself.

As she picks the needles out of her body Ino thinks, “It’s a good thing I built up an immunity to the poison I use, or else this match would be over.”

Parnassius aims a second Wind Scythe at Ino and lands a direct hit before she is able to react. The kunoichi flies back and tumbles across the earth about 40 feet. Ino attempts to stand up, “No I can’t lose. Not to her,” but she is unable to lift her body to a stand.

“She’s done, this one is over,” thinks Tatsuki as she watches the girl struggle.

“Okay I’m calling the match,” declares the proctor.

Sakura halts her attack and the crowd waits for the decision of the judge. “The winner of this fight is Sakura Nagana,” declares Tatsuki before she speaks into an earpiece, “We need some Medical Ninja up here, one of the candidates has lost a lot of blood, she needs to be cared for immediately.” The Medical core rushes out onto the field and takes Ino away on a stretcher.
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Back up in the candidate waiting area Rino is frustrated that his sister lost. Not noticing he is speaking out loud he says, “Sister you fool. How could you lose to someone from one of the Five Great Shinobi Nations? What a disgrace. You are utterly useless. No matter, I’m still here, and I won’t lose. I’ll avenge your loss and defeat everyone else.”

All the other prospects seem to take Rino as a serious threat. “That guy was pretty serious, I’ll have to watch out for him later,” thinks Hara.

“That guy didn’t even have to fight in the preliminaries, so I don’t know what he is capable of. He could be a very dangerous opponent,” thinks Hoshi as she watches him from the corner of her eye.

Ichimaru yawns, “Man is that guy serious? So what if she was from one of the Five Great Shinobi Nations. I mean plenty of strong ninja have come from various ninja villages, and not only the five big ones. But still you should watch out for him Kuroda.”

“He won’t be a problem,” says Kuroda to his longtime friend.
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“Damn it Yamashita, look what you did,” complains Chiaza Inuzu as they enter into the seating area of the arena, “We were already late for Hoshi’s match and now it looks like we missed the 2nd match as well.”

“Why does it matter?” argues Yamashita, “That Jonin we talked to said Hoshi had an easy victory.”

“Just like you predicted, I know,” she replies as they make their way to the front seats, “But it was important for us to see the second match so we could come up with a firm strategy for Hoshi to use for the next round. And look that Petal ninja has her butterfly out and might have use a different technique than last time to win.”

Yamashita takes his seat and watches as Sakura leaps to the ground and then waves to her summon before it disappears. He comments, “Hoshi is not incompetent, I’m sure she was paying close attention and thinking up a strategy while she watched. Plus there are hundreds of other Rock Ninja here that we can talk to if we want the details.”

“Why is it that someone who always has a plan drops everything he is doing when he sees a certain cute girl with green hair?” she inquires.

“No comment,” he replies, “Now stop dwelling on me and focus on the 3rd match. Hoshi is smart, but she is not as good a strategist as the next two.”

She responds, “Which one of us is the Sensei again?”
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“Well now that was very interesting,” comments the Koukage as she leans back in her chair.

“To be honest it was a little boring,” admits the Tsuchikage, “They both basically used the same tactics as they did in the preliminaries.”

“Yes well I was not present at that time, and this is my first time seeing Sakura use that particular summoning,’ she replies.

“Is that so?” replies Masato raising an eyebrow.

“It is always intriguing to see a young one use a new skill, and at such an unexpected time,” says Michiyo.

“An unexpected time?” he inquires.

“In the Hidden Petal we keep very detailed records of the progress of our ninja throughout their lives,” explains the Koukage, “This gives us the ability to predict what skill level they will be at in the future. Based on Sakura’s file I didn’t think she would be at this level for a while.”

“An interesting system,” comments the Tsuchikage, “We have something similar here. Maybe we can trade information to further develop each of our methods.”

“I will assign someone to meet with a representative of yours later this evening,” she replies.

“I look forward to it,” he says before returning his gaze to the center of arena.
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Sakura walks up the steps and returns to Kuroda’s side. “Congratulations Sakura, it was a well fought battle,” he says.

“Thank you Kuroda,” she says blushing.
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“The next fight is scheduled to be between Hara Gaki and Ichimaru Nara. Will the two of you please make your way down here,” announces Tatsuki.
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Hara rejoices, “Finally. Now it’s my turn to show what I can really do,” he leaps over the rail and down to the arena, “Wohoo!”

Ichimaru sighs and comments, “Jeez, it figures. Why do I keep having to fight the people who are most energetic?”

Kuroda laughs and says, “Well you can always use your strategy and forfeit. But then we wouldn’t be able to have our match, and I was really looking forward to it.”

Ichimaru retorts, “Well I wouldn’t say that I am looking forward to fighting you, but I wouldn’t want to disappoint my best friend.”
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“Hey you! Get down here already,” yells Tatsuki impatiently.
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Ichimaru sighs again, “I think I’ll take the stairs.”

“Good luck Ichimaru,” wishes Sakura.

He puts a hand up and waves as he walks away, “Thanks.”
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“Go Ichimaru! Make Team 10 proud!” yells Yui Yamanka from the stands.

“Yeah go Petal Village!” cheers Kenta Akimichi as he chows down on some cobs of corn.

“Stop eating that and focus on cheering on Ichimaru!” orders Yui.

“But this corn is from the finest farms of the Rock County. I purchased them from the most famous vendor in the area. Here try one,” says Kenta pushing one at her.

She ignores him and yells again, “You can do it Ichimaru!”

“Yui should know better than to try and tear Kenta away from high quality food,” thinks Yoshikuni as he sits next to his two students.

“Come on Sensei, cheer with me,” urges Yui.

“I think you are doing enough for the both of us,” he replies.
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When Ichimaru arrives Tatsuki asks, “What took you so long?” He yawns, “I came as fast as I could.”

“Hmph, well do I need to review the rules of the match again?” asks Tatsuki. They both shake their heads. “Ok, then begin,” she says.

After they both get into a defensive stance they start to chat. Hara tells Ichimaru, “I was watching your last match with that girl. I have a keen eye for observation, and I noticed that during the battle you had every move planned. That makes you a strategist.”

“Your smarter than you look,” comments Ichimaru.

“There is only one way to beat someone like you, and that is by not giving you the time to strategize,” says Hara.


To be continued....

kakashi uzumaki
03-12-2010, 06:04 PM
Great story!!!

trackstar
03-12-2010, 06:15 PM
awesome i love your story great chapters!!!!!!!

yondaime
03-12-2010, 07:13 PM
Nice chapter, I am looking forward to Ichimaru's match. As I suspected and said in the other thread, Hara's strategy is to not give Ichimaru a chance to come up with a strategy. I found some mistakes.

It sends Rain ninja’s umbrellas flying back at her and Ino ends up accidentally shooting off needles at herself.

You need to put "the" in between those words.

Here is the other one. I think you forgot to add some words. I lost you after the red words.

“Why is it that someone who always has a plan drops everything he is doing when he certain cute girl with green hair?”

Rasen_Chidori
03-12-2010, 08:40 PM
Nice chapter,

Well, I am 50% on my predictions for who will win... This next match should be very interesting.

Kuroda Taishi
03-13-2010, 04:40 PM
Great story!!!

Thanks

awesome i love your story great chapters!!!!!!!

Thank you.

Nice chapter, I am looking forward to Ichimaru's match. As I suspected and said in the other thread, Hara's strategy is to not give Ichimaru a chance to come up with a strategy. I found some mistakes.

It sends Rain ninja’s umbrellas flying back at her and Ino ends up accidentally shooting off needles at herself.

You need to put "the" in between those words.

Here is the other one. I think you forgot to add some words. I lost you after the red words.

“Why is it that someone who always has a plan drops everything he is doing when he certain cute girl with green hair?”

Fixed

Nice chapter,

Well, I am 50% on my predictions for who will win... This next match should be very interesting.

Yes it will.

yondaime
03-13-2010, 07:36 PM
Could you post the next chapter now, because I am bored and I am looking forward to this chapter.

Kuroda Taishi
03-13-2010, 07:45 PM
Could you post the next chapter now, because I am bored and I am looking forward to this chapter.

nope, xD


1. I'm posting it wednesday
2. I haven't even started the editing on it, xD

yondaime
03-13-2010, 08:04 PM
nope, xD


1. I'm posting it wednesday
2. I haven't even started the editing on it, xD

Nooooo.

1. Nooooo school day. xD
2. That is what I am here for. xD

Kuroda Taishi
03-13-2010, 08:12 PM
Nooooo.

1. Nooooo school day. xD
2. That is what I am here for. xD


No you edit my errors. xD

I am editing and adding stuff to the parts I already have written.


by the way I found this awesome site, so I will be posting Pics of characters soon.

yondaime
03-14-2010, 03:52 PM
No you edit my errors. xD

I am editing and adding stuff to the parts I already have written.


by the way I found this awesome site, so I will be posting Pics of characters soon.

Huh? You mean the whole characters, or some? What is the site anyways?

Kuroda Taishi
03-14-2010, 05:59 PM
Huh? You mean the whole characters, or some? What is the site anyways?

Rame Tsu

http://img202.imageshack.us/img202/5112/97150222.jpg

site: http://hapuriainen.deviantart.com/art/Naruto-character-creator-128745915

Zaori Momochi
03-15-2010, 12:51 PM
So that is what Rame Tsu looks like. I kinda had her pictured that way. Where is her backpack though?

yondaime
03-15-2010, 03:02 PM
Rame Tsu

http://img202.imageshack.us/img202/5112/97150222.jpg

site: http://hapuriainen.deviantart.com/art/Naruto-character-creator-128745915

Nah, I like the pics that people draw for you..... xD I bet you like the starting character pic..... xD

Kuroda Taishi
03-15-2010, 06:36 PM
Nah, I like the pics that people draw for you..... xD I bet you like the starting character pic..... xD

These are just base models, that I would like to get an artist to touch up and make more Naruto style and more custom,

Here is one for Hoshi:
http://img535.imageshack.us/img535/7050/x12o.jpg

yondaime
03-15-2010, 07:10 PM
These are just base models, that I would like to get an artist to touch up and make more Naruto style and more custom,

Here is one for Hoshi:
http://img535.imageshack.us/img535/7050/x12o.jpg

Whoa! Long hair.... xD Be a little more creative with them.... Maik is using the same thing..... You haven't replied to me statement about you liking the first pic of the character before you start. xD

Kuroda Taishi
03-15-2010, 07:18 PM
Whoa! Long hair.... xD Be a little more creative with them.... Maik is using the same thing..... You haven't replied to me statement about you liking the first pic of the character before you start. xD

The system is limited in what you can customize, plus the only two I have posted so far are basically exactly what I want them to look like minus the face and height.

Yes, I liked the starting template, xD

yondaime
03-16-2010, 05:56 PM
The system is limited in what you can customize, plus the only two I have posted so far are basically exactly what I want them to look like minus the face and height.

Yes, I liked the starting template, xD

Oh, okay. Although it makes it easier for an artist to draw the characters now, because the artist could use the characters as a reference and put more detail. Heh heh.... Thought so..... BTW, When are you going to post the new chapter? I remember you said Wednesday.

jurrasenshuriken
03-17-2010, 05:31 AM
give us the chapter darn it`:)

Kuroda Taishi
03-17-2010, 03:30 PM
I have to work on a paper and a speech tonight, so the chapter will probably be pushed back to tomorrow.

trackstar
03-17-2010, 04:26 PM
I have to work on a paper and a speech tonight, so the chapter will probably be pushed back to tomorrow.


no please say it isnt so!!
i cant wait for it is it a long chapter?

yondaime
03-17-2010, 05:47 PM
Alright, just make sure it is a good one. xD