[Poem] Smile

[Kiseki]

I just wrote this:

Smile

I’ll carry your tears for you.
Breathe in, breathe out.
Love can not kill, but pain can.
I’ll take your pain, so you can love again.
Just make this promise.
That you will smile for me.

Unlimited possibilities to reach out.
The longer it’s been tried, the more hope fades.
However I still love you.
You’re on the other side of the world.
But as I place my hand on my heart,
I can feel you here.

Sometimes you feel like crying.
I’d kiss your cheek and calm you.
If only you would be here...

I’ll carry your pain for you.
Breathe in, breathe out.
Our love is killed, but far from dead.
I’ll take your tears, so you can open your eyes.
You will see there is more to love.
Just make this final promise.
That you will forget me when you smile.

[gama-sennin]

This is really good...But are you sad or something?

[GwynethUchiha]

That was a good poem

[Kiseki]

^ Thank you so much! :3
I made some grammer corrections btw.

This is really good...But are you sad or something?
Thanks gama-kun. Yeah. I feel kinda sad at the moment.
This poem basicly expesses how I feel.

[sasu_girl]

i feel sad too, ugk lefted and he's never coming back T,T

[Kiseki]

Who is ugk?

[sasu_girl]

a very important person to me `~(

[Kiseki]

Ah I see, I'm sorry.
This poem is about a love that's just not meant to be.
Because of the distance and other things.
It's basicly saying: please forget me, be happy with someone else.
I'll have your tears and pain, please don't feel sad, but smile.

[sasu_girl]

Ah I see, I'm sorry.
This poem is about a love that's just not meant to be.
Because of the distance and other things.
It's basicly saying: please forget me, be happy with someone else.
I'll have your tears and pain, please don't feel sad, but smile.
i know, but now i miss him `~(

not in a lover way, but still =(

[Kiseki]

Why don't you try to make a poem too?
Sometimes it helps to get over your feelings! ;)

[sasu_girl]

Why don't you try to make a poem too?
Sometimes it helps to get over your feelings! ;)
nah, i'm good, i don't feel like writing anything this early in the morning >_<

[Kiseki]

This isn't offtopic, please dont try to be funny or so.

[Semog]

It was beautifull. `~(`~(`~(

[Shikamaru Nara]

<33

I was tearing the whole entire time.

[Kiseki]

Awe Michael. Well I cried while writing it. You know why...

[Shikamaru Nara]

Like hell I do.

But it's really a great piece. It conveys your deep thoughts. Most people have trouble expressing that.

[Devroux]

That was cool. And your sig pic is upside down. :lol:

[Bacon]

Twas really heartfelt Kiseki.

[EmoSakura]

This is...............wow. It's really heartfelt, breathtaking, and really beautiful, Kiseki. Grande job. ^^

[9tail]

nice...i can only write depressing/neutral things lately...

[Throw Rasen-Shuriken]

That poem of yours, I get from it the sorrow, loneliness, unsureness of what's to come next, I get the feeling that you were, holding back tears when writing that, also the pain, shows that you, don't know what to do though, just feel like crying to let the pain out that you feel, in some form, some way. A Great sadness that you feel, kind of empty now, you're not sure of what lies beyond this pain.

Though really it does seem deep and emotional, I hope that you are going to feel better, soon ...

[Jonesy]

Kiseki<3

I love it.

[Kiseki]

Aweeeee thanks so much guys :D
I love all your comments! /hands out tissues

[Shikamaru Nara]

:33 /takes tissue.

That poem was really sad.

[Kiseki]

nice...i can only write depressing/neutral things lately...

:33 /takes tissue.

That poem was really sad.
Yeah, reality hits a lot of emotions I guess! D: