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Cade
01-16-2010, 11:23 PM
This is the fanfic that I gave you a preview of.I'll posts character information later.Also check here for contiuous updates.I hope you enjoy it.If you find any grammar or spelling errors please let me know.Also I'll take some critisism.

Characters:
Name:Huang Li
Age:38
Huang Li is pretty much the main character of the story.Huang is very serious about most things.Occasionaly Huang helps out his fellow Wong School students.

Name:Ti Hoang
Age:33
Ti Hoang is Huang's best friend.She is one of the insturctors of the Wong School.

Name:Shen Li
Age:7
Shen is Huang's son.Shen learned most of his martial arts from his dad.

Name: Jin-Wei Hoa
Age:28
Jin-Wei is also one of Huang's friends.He is also the instructor of the Wong School

Name:Trung Ho Lien
Age:43
Trung is pretty much the "bully" of the Sarutoba Martial Arts group.He usually likes to go everywhere and picks on people.He pretty much also get beats up a lot by Huang,Ti Hoang,and Jin-Wei.

More important characters to be added to this list.


Chapter 1:Pilot
The sun,shining brightly with its rays beaming down on to a small Chinese town called Wexzhuen.It was an ordinary day for an outdoor Chinese bar with its roof shading the customers.The sound of chatting echo through the whole bar onto the streets of passer-bys.Everything seemed so normal,until a gang of men dressed in a black samurai robe attire appeared.There were about 15 of them standing with a serious look on their faces.A short fat bald man marched out in the front."How may I help you",the owner asked."I want your bar.Everyone must leave now,"The fat bald man shouted.Two men stepped behind the fat bald man in a defensive stance.The fat bald man's name was Trung Ho Lien.The two men behind him names were Shoiw Liu Wong and Yung Hieu Sho.Both of the men looked identical like twins except they weren't related at all."We c-c-can't do that sir," the owner said with a half studder in the sentence."Give the effen bar to me now,"Trung said.Customers were angered about this and stood up to these group of men.The men in black prepared to fight with their fearsome fighting stance.To Be Contiuned.

Chapter 2:The Brawl
Many customers and employees charged at these group of men.Three men cornered Yung rising above him.Yung was prepared.Yung jumped above with a smirk on his face then lashed out using only less than 30% of his power.All three men literaliy flew into the air crashing through the tables.Shoiw on the other hand was having a slugfest.Two men bolted towards Shoiw.Shoiw smiled.Shoiw easliy stepped aside and stuck his foot out as the two men charged towards him.Both men came tumbling down to the ground injured.More than five people were coming towards Trung.Trung struck out with a upward palm hitting one man's chest which sent him flying into the other four men.As for the rest of the men in black,everything was going easy.The owner of the resturant laying out on the hard wooden table was breating frantically."S-Sarutoba Martial Arts Group,you won't g-g-get away with this,"the owner said weakly.Trung walked up to the table where the owner was lying at.A fat meanacing grin rose across Trung's face.Trung slowly took out his sword as Shoiw and Yung held the owner down.There was no energy left for the owner to scream.Trung raised the sword into the air."QWISSSH!!!!"The next day Huang and his son Shen walked outside on the Wong School's patio.The Wong School,know for its astonishing martial arts students,rivaled with the Sarutoba Martial Arts Group for years."Pa, do you think I could be a master some day,"Shen asked."Only time will tell,"Huang said.Jin-Wei and Ti-Hoang,the wong School instructors,walked out onto the patio. From the Wong School entrance a man who seemed to be in a rushed marched into the Wong School patio."Jin-Wei,Ti Hoang,I need your help.My father has been killed and the restuarant has been over,"the man yelled."What, you mean the famous Yen's Restuarant," Huang said."Yes!The Sarutoba Martial Arts Group had taken it over yesterday!""I'll send some people over there,"Jin-Wei said.To be contiuned.

Cade
01-19-2010, 07:36 PM
No one came yet.

yondaime
01-20-2010, 05:12 PM
It was okay, I didn't like how the characters were introduced. Also, it was kind of short. Plus, I found a mistake in there.

The the fat bald man's name was Trung Ho Lien.

You added an extra "the".

Cade
01-21-2010, 06:34 PM
Yes thanks for pointing that out.There will be more chapters added later.I have a test to do tomorrow.

yondaime
01-22-2010, 07:10 PM
I want to read it now, but I got to go so I will read it next time. ;D

Cade
01-23-2010, 08:08 PM
Oh ok.

yondaime
01-23-2010, 08:16 PM
It was alright, they are short. I found a couple of mistakes.

Trung Struck out with a upward palm hitting one man's which sended him flying into the other four men.

You did NOT state what part of the man Trung hit. I will let you find the others.

Cade
01-23-2010, 08:17 PM
Thanks.Do you want to be the editor.xDAlso,does a fan-fic chapter is supposed to have a certain length?

yondaime
01-24-2010, 04:58 PM
Thanks.Do you want to be the editor.xDAlso,does a fan-fic chapter is supposed to have a certain length?

No prob. No it is not, but the longer it is the better it usually is. IS this your first time? xD

Cade
01-25-2010, 06:12 PM
Prettty much,yeah.

yondaime
01-28-2010, 07:12 PM
Prettty much,yeah.

IF you want help, I can help you once in a while, because I can't guarantee that I will be on everyday. :mrgreen:

shinmarubountyhunter
01-30-2010, 10:42 AM
This story is interesting I wonder how the wong school will retaliate

Leji_Hyuga
01-30-2010, 11:03 AM
interesting

Cade
02-13-2010, 02:13 PM
Sorry for the wait. I'll make more chapters sometime next week.