The Guide to Good stories

[Ace adventurer]

[no offense] I think the forum should have better stories and here is a guide to see the light
p.s I will use example names


Dialouge
Long chat:
You should not have your dialouge close together like this: "Hello young pupil. I'm your sensai for today"Announced Soso " Hmm I see. You look nice " john told Soso
Add Action in the middle like this: "Hello young pupil. I'm your sensai for today"Announced Soso glancing down at the genin. " Hmm I see. You look nice " john told Soso giving Soso a glare in return.
See! That makes more sense to the reader


Story Sense by talk:
When ever you have dialouge make sure you explain the events unlike this: "Hello young pupil. I'm your sensai for today"Announced Soso glancing down at the genin. " Hmm I see. You look nice " john told Soso giving Soso a glare in return
You do not know what's happening right. Well I edit it and it makes more sense like this: Today Was the day every genin start their mission's. Soso a sensai walked towrds a small energetic kid "Hello young pupil. I'm your sensai for today"Announced Soso glancing down at the genin. " Hmm I see. You look nice " john told Soso giving Soso a glare in return. See how that made more sense.


Types of Talk:
here are some types of talk


Called
Announced
Boomed
Shouted
Hollered
Screamed
Cried
Sobbed
Mumbled
Yelled
Muttered
Sighed
Bellowed
Told
Explained
Asked
Wondered
Questioned
sneered
ordered
begged
commanded

As you can see there is no said. Why? Because said is dead. Only use it when you run out of talks to use

Also if you want it to be like their talking right now here is the list of present time talks


Call
Announce
Boom
Shout
Holler
Scream
Cry
Sob
Mumble
Yell
Mutter
Sigh
Bellow
Tell
Explain
Ask
Wonder
Question
sneer
order
beg
command



Creativity skills

Similies make Smiles:
Basically similies are just comparing one thing to another with like or as [which you probally know] Put similies in the right place like this: On a sunny, warm, cheerful day I strolled out side, and looked at the sky. I was as happy as a lark. Not like this: On a sunny, warm, cheerful day I strolled out side, and looked at the sky. I was as fast as a cheetah.
Confused right. That would lose the reader completly. Now do you want to do that?


Don't be a idiot. Use idioms [you are not a idiot]:
Idioms are sayings [which you probally know] AGAIN PUT THEM IN THE RIGHT PLACE! If you want a good story make sure the idiom is related to the main idea of the paragraph. Here are some examples of an idiom



I'm on cloud nine
I woke up on the wrong side of the bed
You're barking up the wrong tree
Don't push my buttons
Frog in your throat
cat got your tounge
spill the beans
cut the cheese
Bull in a china shop
Bolt out of the blue [or just out of the blue
make up some idioms your self! ;)


Juicy words: If you are doing a description use juicy words to grab the readers attention like scorching hot, or blood red. There comparing something to something else except putting them together like scorching hot, or blood red. Okay.


I'll edit it for more tips

[cherryflower]

here's a few more types of talk.
sneered
ordered
begged
commanded
explained

But you need to add something about different styles. Like third person onmisent, first person, second person, thrid limted onmisent, ect.. all the examples you have are the same writeing style. some people might write in third person objective, and some might write in second person. and that means some people will not find this guide useful.

but other then that. pretty good. you need to write something about punctuation too.

[cherryflower]

You do not know what's happening right. Well I edited it and it makes more sense. : Today Was the day every genin start their mission's. Soso, a sensei, walked towrds a small, energetic kid

"Hello young pupil. I'm your sensei for today," announced Soso, glancing down at the genin.

" Hmm I see, you look nice, " John told Soso, giving Soso a glare in return. See how that made more sense.

You could also use more desribeing words here is a full edited version. with no pointing out mistakes in red version I did. also Sine if the things I edited I didn't do in red like the new paraghraph every time another person speaks.

Today, on this bueatiful morning, was the day every genin begin their missions. Soso, a brown haired sensei, dashed towrds a small yet energetic kid.

"Hello young pupil, I'm your sensei for today," announced Soso, his sharp eyes glancing down at the young boy.

"Hmm I see, you look nice, " John replied, his dark eyes giving Soso a deathly glare in return.

there. other than that. everything is perfect!

[Ace adventurer]

I did not edit it yet and I will include that stuff to

[cherryflower]

Okay! ^^

[The Eater of Charkra]

Ok this I will try to aply this to my writing. Read the story of my character(Johnny Uchiha)and say waht you think. Link located at in the sig part.

[Ace adventurer]

Okay!

[Ace adventurer]

Ok this I will try to aply this to my writing. Read the story of my character(Johnny Uchiha)and say waht you think. Link located at in the sig part.
*nods* okay I will but I will be pushy and hard. If there is a mistake I'll give you a tip

[Ace adventurer]

Here is the link to the editors: http://naruto.viz.com/forum/showthread.php?t=33105

[yondaime]

This MIGHT help some members who have their own Fan Fics.

[Chidori stream]

This maybe usefull

[Ace adventurer]

This MIGHT help some members who have their own Fan Fics.
thanks but I prefer differ from the MIGHT

[Chidori stream]

thanks but I prefer differ from the MIGHT
He is right. This might help people.

[Ace adventurer]

hmph!

[cherryflower]

Okay, But don't forget the different speaker voice things, And Metaphores, and Hyperboles, also It would be a good Idea to talk about the format of the text like for example there should be a new paragraph when ever a new person is speaking.

[Ace adventurer]

Thanks Cherry I will include that stuff

[cherryflower]

Your welcome. For two years I had a veary picky grammer teacher.... -_-"

[NarutoFan12]

This is just great! I really needed something like this... This will help me greatly.