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devapath
10-23-2009, 06:00 PM
there arent any pics so bare with me

ok so it takes place in the future, the year 2666.
the world is in chaos now that the evil god/leader Kaz orders the execution of hybrids do to the fact that he wants to segregate the humans from the "superior" vampires and of course yuuto the main character is a hybrid. it starts when he was 2 years old
chapter 1

*knock on door* cop1: open up
yuuto: mommy is that daddy?! did he come home from the war?!
his mother(whispering): no get back in your room and lock the door.
*door shatters, the police enter the room. they grab yuuto and his mom and drag them out onto the front lawn"
cop2:looks like its your unlucky day.(he grins with a sick look in his eyes)
cop1: line them up for execution.
the tie there feat blind fold them and tie there hands behind there backs and line the two of them agaist the wall, they raise there machine guns
sargant: dont waist your amo on them use throwing knives, its only suitible for animals
all cops:sir yes sir
*they put up there guns and materialize knives and they throw the knives*
*blood spatter flying through the air in that dramatic way in most manga and anime*

chapter 2
the recipient of all but two knives is pandemonium father of yuuto, his hands are outstretched. one blade is going straight thru his right hand, he caught one by the blade and the hand is driping with blood, another goes thru his bicep and one in his chest, the others are stuck in the wall(how lame that they miss a stationary target) he pulls the blades out of his body and drops them on the floor
pandemonium(with head down): grrrrrr.......
lifts head and yells: you bastards what the f--- is your problem?! picking on women and children, you disgust me!
cop1 leans over to the others: isn't that pandemonium?!
cop2: yeah we were told never to fight him
sergant: i dont care who he is, there is 4 of us and one of him
pandemonium: hey! dont ignore me you sick bas----s!
he charges them and strikes cop three with phoenix fist(his fist consummed in fire) cop three bursts into flames after contact
pandemonium is holding them all of with ease *female scream of pain* pandemonium looks over and sees a katana sticking thru his wife/yuuto's mother.
chapter 3
the katana burst through yuuto's mom's stomach
yuuto wakes up in a cold sweat, (he is grown up)
yuuto: what the heck?! that seemed so vivid but i heard my parents died in an accident! what is going on?
scene switch to kazarian
random goon: kaz-sama we have found the grave of pandemonium
kaz(grinning): good. the information locked away could end this 100 year war between humans and vampires
(thinking) i just hope that yuuto-kun doesnt become a threat
later that day yuuto is talking with his friend kiyoshi
yuuto: i am serious! it seemed so real
kiyoshi: ..you just got back from war, of course you would dream of murder
yuuto: no you dont get it okay, kiyo-senpai
kiyoshi: tch dreams mean nothing. its just like life
yuuan: i-i guess i will just go to visit there graves maybe that will make me feel better about them
he arrives at the cemetary. to see a group of vampires stealing his fathers corpse
yuuto: YOU PSYCHOPATHS!
he chases them, he almosts catches them when a person from the shadows grabs him.
chapter 4
yuuto: let go of me!
he pulls away and has shadow demons surrounding him
yuuto:who are you
*silence*
yuuto: answer me or you are gunna wish you werent born
mystery man: you were much cuter when you were little. i am kisho. your god father
yuuto: i dont care who you are to me cuz you let them take my fathers corpse!
kisho sensei: relax you have 32 days to retrieve him before it becomes a problem
yuuto: what... do you mean
kisho: deep within your fathers preserved mind is knowledge of the rebel army, knowledge that would end the war in the worst possible way if it gets to kazarian
shadow creatures disapate
yuuto:...go on
kisho: when he died he had a seal placed on him to eternally hold his body, more importantly his mind, intact. i tried all i could but faild to crack the code, however i did seal his thaughts. even the most skilld would need 32 days to crack the code
yuuto: i dont get it why didnt kazarian just take his body when he died?!
kisho: because he was gravely wounded by you
yuuto: me? you must be confusing me with someone else
kisho: no you have the mark to prove it. now tell me how long have you had that double cross on your cheek
(it is over his left eye and it is basicly a cross with a small line above the regular line)
yuuto(touching his mark): a-as long as i can remember
kisho: that was the only way he could stop you from taking him and the entire world out of the picture.(flashes back to what happened after his dream stopped) when he had you assigned for execution he personally wanted to witness it, your father stopped it, only to watch your mother get killed he unleashed his fury on kazarian but to no avail. when he died you lost all control yourself and you uinleashed your anger in such a way that it was too powerful for kazarian, his only option was to seal your power with that symbol
yuuto thinking:that dream... saying: shut up, shut up, shut up! they died in an accident. it was a car crash thats all it was! a car crash!
kisho: then why did they take your fathers body?
*the small line on the cross starts to fade from his face, and he cries blood*
yuuto: shut uuuuuuuuuuuuup
kisho:son of a...
chapter 5
yuuto's eyes go white. he starts bleeding from his mouth and nose as well as his eyes
yuuto:raaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah
he goes from a scronny guy to body builder size, the swift change causes his skin to tear. his hair is floating(to you dbz fans i said floating not standing up) the blood starts dripping upwards now
kisho: crap!
a small amount of light in the form of a line forms on his hand
kisho:resrain!
as he places it on to yuutos face where theline disapeared
yuuto:....*girgle*...*spits up blood*...need... blood... in my bag 1 pint
kisho takes it out and gives it to him
*yuuto shoves his fangs in the bag and his the tube like fangs to suck the bag dry, within a few seconds he is backto normal*
kisho: are you about finished?!
yuuto (grinning): nope.
kisho: dont even joke. do realize that if you do that and dont have blood near by to replenish your blood supply you will die?
yuuto (looking down): i had no idea
kisho: you are really lucky. now from the looks of it you need training, so for the next week and a half you will train and then gather comrades you can trust. you got that?
yuuto: alright
kisho: now more importantly i have some things that i want to give you
yuuto:?!
sceen cuts to kisho's shack
kisho:in this box
*he hands it to yuuto, yuuto proceeds to opens it*
yuuto: !!! this is...
kisho: your fathers outfit(a blood stained martial arts head band with the word 'fearless' (in jap. of course) on it, a fishnet tee shirt and a gothic looking body armor trench coat)
chapter 6 day one
kazarian scene
kazarian: take the body to the memory extraction lab. oh and were there any problems?
goon: only some guy chasing after us but he got grabbed. i didnt stay to see who it was
kazarian:evil:: were they one of ours?
goon: well uh...
kazarian: dammit! it has to be kisho, the immortal human
training scene
yuuto:*pant**pant*pant* this trench ways 2 tons do i have to wear it while i train?
kisho: shut up! your father didnt complain this much
yuuto(immediately catches his breath): alright lets continue
*he starts sparring with kiyoshi*
kiyoshi front flips over yuuto and grabs his throat in the air. he lands on his feet and crowches, his hands are behind him strangling yuuto
kiyoshi: assassins strangle hold
yuuto (thinking)how can i get out?... i got it!
*he flips over kiyoshi's back and his face meets kiyoshi's knee*
next scene
kisho:that was a pretty nasty hit are you sure your okay
yuuto: i am fine. *he slurps up the last of his soup then hands over his empty bowl* more please
kisho:heh, just like your father
*yuuto smiles*
chapter 7.
day two: the assassin
kazarian scene
kazarian: i have to get rid of them both soon. commander get me the assassin Altair(jk idk what to call him yet)
commander yes sir
scene jump to training grounds
kiyoshi: is that all you can muster?
yuuto:*pant**pant*not even close,
(he charges and disappears, he reappears behind kiyoshi)
kiyoshi gasps and gets knocked out in a single blow
kisho: good but now you have to spar with me:)
yuuto(thinking) this is easy
training ground ten seconds later
yuuto is broken and bloody on the floor. *yuuto groans*
kisho: come on get up that wasent even 1/16 my strength and my max strength is 1/1000000 the strength of kazarian's
yuuto:ugh... cut me some slack i didnt even use my hidden power
kisho with a serious look: no havent you realized it tears up your internal organs? and to repair your body you need blood. do we have alot of that?
yuuto sitsts up and says:unh.. that depends, can pick of some humans?
kisho:no, that is not option!*sigh* you know what? lets just teach you how to use that without killing yourself
outside kazarians throne room
commander: watch your tongue when your talking with kazarian-sama
assassin: tch how can i watch my tongue? its inside my mouth
*walks in the throne room*
scene of kazarians castle
*nuclear explosion*
(assassin some how alive)
kazarian: what was that crap coming out of your mouth?*walks over to assassin and picks him up* heh i like you. your hired
assassin:......greeeat......*passes out*
training scene
kisho: alright first thing is first, you need to draw out the power without breaking the seal.
yuuto: heh this will be easy *he sits down and begins to meditate*
the line begins to fade slightly
kisho: STOP!
*yuuto stops*
ksho: dont force it out. you have to let it flow out okay
yuuto: allright lets do this again
he starts meditating and his hair starts to float up, but his muscles dont grow *the top and bottom lines dissapear this time* his hair fades black.
kisho & kiyoshi: *gasp* ...end of chapter
chapter 8 the failed attempt
*yuuto opens his eyes* they are all black except a small white dot for the pupils his muscles grow slightly but not as much as before *he starts to loose control*
kisho: seal *he slaps the two lines back on to seal the power*
yuuto is out cold
kiyoshi:shock::....what was that
yuuto wakes up. he mumbles: an...attempt at...greatness
kisho: you did good, for the second try. you dont have any internal damages do you?
yuuto: no-unng *he grabs his stomache*
kisho:kiyo-san take yuuto to the hut and give him some blood. oh, and make sure he doesnt go into bloodlust
kiyoshi: whats blood lust?
kisho: its a state of mind usually after a potentially faital wound, the vampire looses all emotion and becomes a killing machine until their heart becomes stabalized by the transfussion of blood. if he gets in this state then drop him and run like heck
kiyoshi: yes kisho-sama
scene jump to the hut
yuuto sinks his fangs/transfussion tubes into the pint of blood
kisho: that is disgust-urp*he barfs in a trash can*
yuuto finishes and gets up
kisho: urp where are you going
yuuto: back to training
kisho: are you crazy
yuuto grins: a little
training grounds
kisho: what are you doing back here
yuuto: i am guna train some more
kisho thinking:what a crazy s.o.b.
unknown voice: hey are you guys yuuto of the black heart clan kisho the immortal human
yuuto: yeah, what of it?
assassin apears behind yuuto and whispers: you should have said no...
chapter 9 epic fail
yuuto grins: you shouldnt have anounced your location. to think an assassin couldnt do that.
yuuto turns into a shadows and dispurses
assassin: *gasp*
kisho starts to step in
yuuto hits the assassin from the shadows: dont do it kisho-sama i wana try something
yuuto's eyes go white and his muscles buldge but the mark stays on his cheek, again his hair floats. he is standing completely motion less (kiyoshi arives as well)
*waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah* the assassin looks over and sees himself fly into a pillar
assassin:what the-
he gets hit in the face and dissapears after flying faster than light speed
the assassin that hit the pillar says: d-d-dang this kid could have hit me into yesturday if he wanted!
yuuto finishes him off in a split second and says: finally, looks like i mastered it. (as his body goes back to normal)
kisho: not quite, your nose is bleeding. it is imperfect at best however your movements were effortless. very well then gather those you wish to join us and pack nothing but one pint.
yuuto: only one pint?
kisho: yes one pint. you will only use that technique when you are indanger and you only need blood when you suffer critical injuries. there fore only one is necessary
yuuto: all right
the entire time kiyoshi is in shock from the epic moves
kiyoshi: were there two of that guy?!?!?!?!?!?!?!
kisho: no he knocked that guy back in time
*kiyoshi's eye twitches* he falls over with his mouth wide open
yuuto looks over at kisho: just watch him.
kisho: does this happen often?
yuuto: no only one other time, we were at lunch at school years ago when sum punk knocked my food off of the table
kisho: what did you do?
yuuto: i gutted him like a pig with my bare hands and proceeded to eat him
kisho: i guess you were hungry
(yuuto lold)
scene jump to kazarian
kazarian:WHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAT!!!!!!!!!!!!!
commander: we are terribly sorry kaz-sama
kazarian: that litle runt. he could survive a nuclear blast but couldnt survive a twenty year old and a senior citizen! grrrrrrrr!! time to up the antae! bring me the twins
commander: is that necessary?!
chapter 10
yang and yin
kazarian: what do you mean is that necessary?! do you hold the title of god or commander?!
commander: s-sorry
kazarian: now go get them!
commander runs out
scene jump to yuuto-kun
yuuto: oh come on! you gotta come. we cant do this without yoooooU
fudo:... but why me? i stink at fighting.
yuuto: you do not. i once saw you take on an entire platoon
fudo:... no. it was dumb luck. i suck!
yuuto punches fudo: shut up you are strong and you will show it
fudo:.... okay... but.. i guess it could help....
yuuto:mad:: quit being so depressed you have no right!
fudo:... but why should i. i never new my parents and-
yuuto interrupts: so what!
fudo:... so i am always alone i never new love
yuuto: shut the **** up. i knew my parents. and i- they were taken away from me when i was only two *yuuto looks down* they say "tis better to have loved and lost, than never to have loved at all" but that is a loud of crap. it hurts, it hurts cuz i just stood and watched while they died
fudo: but you were little then
yuuto: i guess. but why did i do nothing till after they died? *tears run down yuutos face* you have no where to go but up just like me. and that is why your coming okay. and dont pull that sobby emo crap again or i will give you a reason to cry
fudo:.......
yuuto: pack your bags
kazarian scene
the twins are there. (yang has white hair and a mouth on his fore head instead of his mouth area, and yin has black hair with a third eye on his forehead. both have pitch black eyes.)
kazarian: kill them! and dont go ease
yang: fine but we...
yin finishes: want 10trillion yin....
both: each!
chapter 11
kisho:listen up everyone! you are now assigned to a new mission. this mission is not only a retrieval mission but also a reconnaissance mission. this is the most important mission of the war so don't screw this up
everyone: sir yes sir!
kisho: i am glad to hear that. also one more thing...
yuuto: well go on.
kisho faces yuuto and stares him dead in the eyes: if you run in to kazarian do not engage. you must flee. if you do not flee you will hinder the success of this mission.
yuuto: teh, if i run into him i will tear him up, and it doesn't matter what you say.
kisho: oh so you would rather the world be destroyed by kazarian than retrieve your fathers body?
yuuto gets silent
kisho: very well. lets go!
the five man retrieval group begins to travel away from the village. smoke can be seen in the distance
yuuto:*sniff sniff* i smell burning flesh! we have to go over there and help them
kisho: ignore it
yuuto: no that is coming from a rebel base!
he runs off toward the fire
kisho: what an idiot.*sigh* men we are heading to the burning village
yuuto arives at the village to see chaos.
yuuto looks over at a group of people. he mutters: those guys have guardian status atire. they must be some of kazarians higher ups
he starts to walk over to them when he is grabbed
kisho: don't go without backup
he lets go and he and the others walk up. yuuto screams out:hey you!
the guardians look over
anonymous guardian: ha look at the weekling rebels coming to save there pathetic allies.
a man comes from the shadows and pulls out his sword. (the sword is a wide single edged sword resembling cloud's sword from final fantasy however it has a small blade sticking out of the other end of the handle)
daiki: i am daiki son of isamu and this village is my homeland
kiyoshi: alright i am not guna be showed up by some punk with a retarded sword. alow me to fight by your side daiki
kei walks up as well: heh i will second that.
guardian: heh you are guna need all the help you can get.
yuuto: i was guna say the same thing
the fight breaks out. yuuto is the only one weaponless. daiki lifts his sword up and surrounds the sword with spiritual energy. he slams the sword to the ground and sends a wave of energy strait threw one of the guardians. the guardian is cut in half. the two halves reconnect
guardian: is that the best you got?
daiki: i am just getting started.

to be continued when i feel like it

devapath
10-23-2009, 06:23 PM
wow deva that was good, i am surprised u had it in you

mangagirl
10-23-2009, 06:23 PM
wow its really cool

devapath
10-23-2009, 06:25 PM
wow its really cool
thnk ya

devapath
10-23-2009, 08:15 PM
just bringing it back to the front

ayana
10-23-2009, 10:09 PM
hey that was really cool

KaiokenX5 Karo
10-24-2009, 12:42 PM
awesome

sasu_girl
10-24-2009, 12:43 PM
cool ^_^

devapath
10-25-2009, 01:20 PM
glad y'all liked it

Ace adventurer
10-25-2009, 04:39 PM
like it but I wouldn't use god and a name right after it cause thats disobeying one of the ten commandments and jeusus

Kuroda Taishi
10-25-2009, 04:41 PM
like it but I wouldn't use god and a name right after it cause thats disobeying one of the ten commandments and jeusus

Please don't force your religous beliefs on other people in a Naruto forum.

KaiokenX5 Karo
10-25-2009, 04:43 PM
Please don't force your religous beliefs on other people in a Naruto forum.
yeah thats like saying Pain shouldn't say anything (no offense to any religious belifes or anything........... except cats XD)

devapath
10-26-2009, 11:45 AM
like it but I wouldn't use god and a name right after it cause thats disobeying one of the ten commandments and jeusus
um what about the god zeus or the god posieden, i did say god not God

devapath
10-27-2009, 01:44 PM
new chapter!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

KaiokenX5 Karo
10-27-2009, 01:53 PM
awesome new chapter

devapath
10-27-2009, 01:53 PM
awesome new chapter
thanks

devapath
10-29-2009, 06:41 PM
new chap to those who care

Kakashi-Hatake
10-29-2009, 08:01 PM
Hated it.

KaiokenX5 Karo
10-30-2009, 02:46 PM
awesome new chapter

devapath
10-30-2009, 03:01 PM
awesome new chapter
... ummmm... why do you always post the same thing? also this is also a place where i wish to take constructive criticism, so anybody say what you hated... but if you say any religious mumbo jumbo then i will down rep

p.s. rep ups for those who give constructive criticism

KaiokenX5 Karo
10-30-2009, 03:09 PM
... ummmm... why do you always post the same thing? also this is also a place where i wish to take constructive criticism, so anybody say what you hated... but if you say any religious mumbo jumbo then i will down rep

p.s. rep ups for those who give constructive criticism
id rather not......

devapath
10-30-2009, 03:10 PM
id rather not......
please *goes sexy no jutsu*

KaiokenX5 Karo
10-30-2009, 03:13 PM
please *goes sexy no jutsu*
................................ -_- fine.... try to spell better .............

devapath
10-30-2009, 03:19 PM
................................ -_- fine.... try to spell better .............
well the spell check isnt working right it stops checking after about 2000 words

KaiokenX5 Karo
10-30-2009, 03:21 PM
well the spell check isnt working right it stops checking after about 2000 words
oh..........................

devapath
11-11-2009, 02:13 PM
i finally put up a new chapter

The Eater of Charkra
11-11-2009, 02:27 PM
Damn that was good. Read my fan fic please.

9naruto
11-11-2009, 02:33 PM
Hey sweet story... a bit lazy to read it all but it looks good. And it all happens so fast I could hardley keep up with it. Nice though :p

devapath
11-12-2009, 06:13 PM
it may seem fast at first but it is just getting the unimportant details out of the way so i can really get the story goin

pretapath
11-26-2009, 05:22 PM
wow that was awesome

ShadowKyuubi
11-26-2009, 05:26 PM
great manga bro!

devapath
11-26-2009, 05:30 PM
great manga bro!
thank you shadow