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Ohako
10-04-2009, 12:02 PM
This story has been in my head in awhile and decided to write it here is the prologue. Just so u know this prologue is also found in Rai's Amintrox thred. Hmm the prologue may sound a little edgy because i used this as a bio for a thread.
let me know what you think. main character: Roarke

This Roarke has no home and travels by himself. When Roarke was young his parents were killed in a village raid. Roarke was adopted by a friendly Swordsman that wields fives blades in all. His name was Ike, he saved Roarke from the village raid, but was unable to save his parents. Roarke's goal at that point was to learn how to protect ppl precious to him. Ike and Roarke lived on a mountain and ike would slowly teach Roarke how to fight. Ike was a skilled blacksmith and his idea was the best weapon for you to wield is the weapon you make your self. Ike taught Roarke how to make his own swords. From that day Ike would teach Roarke how to use multiple weapons in combat. Roarke then became very skilled in that style and in hand to hand combat. Ike and Roarke would travel the land helping people and doing work for free. Their missions would be a vareity of tasks from assinations of evil tyrants to just catching everyday thieves. Roarke became very confident in his skill and he he thought he was unstoppable. One day, when roarke was 16, there mission was to take out a skilled assasin named Ryo who used the rare multiple weapon style. That day Roarke woke up early and decided to take him out himself. He found the assasin in a abandonded house where they fought. Roarke was doing well against. He was feeling very confident but for one second he dropped his guard and from his sleeve he pulled a hidden blade, a small jagged dagger. Slicing Roarkes chest Roarke fell to the ground dropping his blades at that time Ryo quiclky kicked all Roarkes blades away. he was very short on breathe and could barely move ryo was about to impale him with his katana. Roarke closes his eyes but feels nothing he opens his eyes and sees blood on the floor he looks up to see ike with a katana through his chest. With his last once of strength he cuts ryo leaving a almost fatal wound. Ryo was breathing hard but from my masters limp hand he took the katan that cut him and then fled with his remaing strentgh swearing he will kill Roarke. He blamed the death of ike on himself and could not forgive himself. His goal now was to revenge his master Ike. It has been has been three years...

kakashi uzumaki
10-04-2009, 12:03 PM
hey you finally made one

(and i actually read it all the way)

Ohako
10-04-2009, 12:08 PM
lol thanks KU the prologue is kind of long lol

kakashi uzumaki
10-04-2009, 12:11 PM
yeah i see...but well will you make chapters?

Ohako
10-04-2009, 12:12 PM
yeah i see...but well will you make chapters?

Hmm i will if ppl want me to i already have the whole story planned out in my head

kakashi uzumaki
10-04-2009, 12:16 PM
Hmm i will if ppl want me to i already have the whole story planned out in my head



are you serius?

Ohako
10-04-2009, 12:17 PM
are you serius?

hmm yes lol like i said this story been in my head for awhile

kakashi uzumaki
10-04-2009, 12:34 PM
hmm yes lol like i said this story been in my head for awhile



and you are going to finally going to let it out right?

well good intro

Ohako
10-04-2009, 12:57 PM
and you are going to finally going to let it out right?

well good intro

well if ppl want me too i will

SakuraGirl
10-04-2009, 01:12 PM
wow wow, so good

Ohako
10-04-2009, 03:01 PM
wow wow, so good

Hmm u like it hmm maybe i will put in the 1st chapter expect it the 1st chapter later today or tomorrow

kakashi uzumaki
10-04-2009, 04:02 PM
well if ppl want me too i will


they will.....just dont make it too sad ..:(

Ohako
10-04-2009, 07:35 PM
Chapter 1 Remembrance and Motivation

To think it has been three years master, Roarke thinks to himself. It was a stormy as it his every year on the day Ike was killed. All i remember from that day was giving you a proper burial in mountains we lived in. The pain i felt was like losing my parents again, but this time i had no one to lean on. My master told me to never seek revenge for it is never the answer. My only goal in life was to protect people precious to me and so far i have failed at that. I knew master would never want to be like this, for the past three years i have trained myself and helped people every year i come to this spot to remember my master and i drop off one blue lily every time i visit. This year was different i became wiser and more stern i still haven't forgiven myself for what happened that day, but i finally found some information on Ryo. Ryo has trained himself after taking my master's katana that night, and i my goal is not really for revenge since i learned that was i fueled by hatred. Ryo lives a while away and never seeked me out even though he wants me dead, but now i plan to find him and return the katana to its rightful master.

kakashi_sempai
10-04-2009, 07:36 PM
it to long i cant read the much

Ohako
10-04-2009, 07:38 PM
it to long i cant read the much

LOL sorry i got carried a way in the prologue but it is kind of edgy and i just released the first chapter it is a little shorter lol

animelover
10-10-2009, 10:53 AM
Cool story O-kun, I think its kinda nice how your the narratar of it...i like this line mostly:

Roarke closes his eyes but feels nothing he opens his eyes and sees blood on the floor he looks up to see ike with a katana through his chest. With his last once of strength he cuts ryo leaving a almost fatal woundyou can picture that and feel the drama in it. Very good, keep going.

Ohako
10-10-2009, 10:56 AM
Cool story O-kun, I think its kinda nice how your the narratar of it...i like this line mostly:

you can picture that and feel the drama in it. Very good, keep going.

Hmm thanks anime-chan yes i will continue :)

animelover
10-10-2009, 10:57 AM
I'll be waiting for it O-kun! way to go big brother..

Ohako
10-10-2009, 11:00 AM
I'll be waiting for it O-kun! way to go big brother..

Hmm yep i might have time for chapter 2 tomorrow

kakashi uzumaki
10-10-2009, 11:36 AM
Chapter 1 Remembrance and Motivation

To think it has been three years master, Roarke thinks to himself. It was a stormy as it his every year on the day Ike was killed. All i remember from that day is the giving was giving you a proper burial in mountains we lived in. The pain i felt was like losing my parents again, but this time i had no one to lean on. My master told me to never seek revenge for it is never the answer. My only goal in life was to protect people precious to me and so far i have failed at that. I knew master would never want to be like this, for the past three years i have trained myself and helped people every year i come to this spot to remember my master and i drop off one blue lily every time i visit. This year was different i became wiser and more stern i still haven't forgiven myself for what happened that day, but i finally found some information on Ryo. Ryo has trained himself after taking my master's katana that night, and i my goal is not really for revenge since i learned that was i fueled by hatred. Ryo lives a while away and never seeked me out even though he wants me dead, but now i plan to find him and return the katana to its rightful master.

yay a new chapter!!!
sweet thanks o-kun

Ohako
01-14-2010, 06:06 PM
Chapter 2 The Adventure begins
" Hmm well well i think that everything, looks like it is finally time to move on and leave these mountains...gah." Has he tumbles down the hill Roarke is ready to set out from his home for the past 10 years and return his masters precious katanas. " Gah stupid clogs *laughs to self* i should be careful right master." Roarke sets off to a small village to find information about Ryo. While walking through the forest hears voices and on instinct takes cover behind a tree. " hmm well well what do we have here?" In the clearing there were two men standing one had a broad sword and the other a small battle axe and laying on the ground was a young red headed girl with a spear laying awhiles away. " What?! was this girl fighting them all by" Roark starts to unbuckle his giant sword and lays it on the ground quietly. " Grr i gotta say Clyde this chick was better then i thought." " Yeah Yeah i know, but come on look at the money she was carrying it was worth it she probably would've beat you if i did not step in Tora." "Hmpf i don't care she gotta lucky, but looks like her luck is gone i am going to finish this now!!!

i_love_kakashi
01-14-2010, 06:09 PM
This is a very good story Ohako!
^_^ I am going to read it when more chapters come!

Ohako
01-14-2010, 06:10 PM
This is a very good story Ohako!
^_^ I am going to read it when more chapters come!

Hmm o really? thanks:mrgreen: ILK if u noticed I slacked of for about three months lol and decided to start it up again

i_love_kakashi
01-14-2010, 06:13 PM
Hmm o really? thanks:mrgreen: ILK if u noticed I slacked of for about three months lol and decided to start it up again


Yep, I really enjoy your story so far keep writing boy!~ lol XD

Ohako
01-14-2010, 06:31 PM
Yep, I really enjoy your story so far keep writing boy!~ lol XD

Thank You and i will lol

Ohako
01-21-2010, 10:41 AM
Chapter 3: An Ally???
Graaaah!!! Tora swings his axe and the girl with the red hair screams. Ching! "What?!?" "Well well it is not nice to pick on beautiful girls hmm." In the background Clyde thinks to himself..." Wow this guy is good, his speed was amazing and blocked it perfectly well looks like Tora will be finished soon." "Y-you punk you will pay for stepping into someone elses business.. who do you think you are?" "Hmm well the name's Roarke." "What I don't care who you are I did not ask for your name gah i am going to kill the both of y-" Smack! Out of nowhere the handle of spear hits Tora clear across the face and he is sent to the ground knocking his axe out of his hand. "We have not finished our fight yet' yelled the red haired girl. Roarke just stands there amazed. "You i will kill you!!! Tora shouts as he struggles to his feet, but in that short time the red~haired girl already knocked out Tora by hitting him in the back of the head with her spear." "Oh well done indeed but you didn't kill him." said Roarke. "I am in no position to end his life." " Hmm well i was a bit careless well best be on my way." Roarke sheaths his sword and walks over to the tree to get his giant sword. "Wait yelled the girl, I owe you thanks for saving my life and what do you mean you were careless?" "Well, says Roarke, there no need to thank me i was only walking by and decided to join since it was 1 against 2 and his friend escaped meaning there could still be trouble for you so i guess i could escort you to the closest town since i need to go there anyways." "Really??? thank you i will repay you somehow in town and Roarke my name is Meleena.

Raiden
01-21-2010, 10:42 AM
*is wearing the darkest robes you've ever seen, on my hands I'm wearing Silver Steel Gauntlets, I have a hood over my hood hiding my face, but you can still see my Jaw, witch to your surprise it looks like a Jaw bone, over my head is a bright yellow halo, as I walk I leave a trail of blood behind me*
Very good Kun Killer

Ohako
01-21-2010, 10:45 AM
*is wearing the darkest robes you've ever seen, on my hands I'm wearing Silver Steel Gauntlets, I have a hood over my hood hiding my face, but you can still see my Jaw, witch to your surprise it looks like a Jaw bone, over my head is a bright yellow halo, as I walk I leave a trail of blood behind me*
Very good Kun Killer

thanks Rai and interesting description you got there.

Raiden
01-21-2010, 10:54 AM
thanks Rai and interesting description you got there.
Oh Rai, the name from long before, I was killed some time ago, after sometime in the afterlife I became the new Grim Reaper for this part of the Void

Maikeru D. Shinigami
01-21-2010, 09:10 PM
I had to reply to this first:

it to long i cant read the much

Are you serious? The prologue is 409 words long, how hard is it to read that? I've written double or more of that in messages on MySpace. In fact, I probably did 9 or 10 times just today. These are more like scenes than chapters really.

And I mean that with no offense to Ohako whatsoever, the story is interesting and the organization is better than most on here.

Ohako
01-22-2010, 08:24 AM
lol nice comment and Thank You Maikeru

Raiden
01-22-2010, 08:26 AM
lol nice comment and Thank You Maikeru
Hmmmm

Ohako
01-22-2010, 08:45 AM
Hmmmm

hmm hey Rai i will have a new chapter up later but probably not today

Leji_Hyuga
01-30-2010, 12:10 PM
good start

Ohako
01-31-2010, 12:09 PM
good start

Thanks Leji i am too busy to write another chapter now but i will soon

kakashi uzumaki
02-01-2010, 05:35 AM
Chapter 2 The Adventure begins
" Hmm well well i think that everything, looks like it is finally time to move on and leave these mountains...gah." Has he tumbles down the hill Roarke is ready to set out from his home for the past 10 years and return his masters precious katanas. " Gah stupid clogs *laughs to self* i should be careful right master." Roarke sets off to a small village to find information about Ryo. While walking through the forest hears voices and on instinct takes cover behind a tree. " hmm well well what do we have here?" In the clearing there were two men standing one had a broad sword and the other a small battle axe and laying on the ground was a young red headed girl with a spear laying awhiles away. " What?! was this girl fighting them all by" Roark starts to unbuckle his giant sword and lays it on the ground quietly. " Grr i gotta say Clyde this chick was better then i thought." " Yeah Yeah i know, but come on look at the money she was carrying it was worth it she probably would've beat you if i did not step in Tora." "Hmpf i don't care she gotta lucky, but looks like her luck is gone i am going to finish this now!!!

Chapter 3: An Ally???
Graaaah!!! Tora swings his axe and the girl with the red hair screams. Ching! "What?!?" "Well well it is not nice to pick on beautiful girls hmm." In the background Clyde thinks to himself..." Wow this guy is good, his speed was amazing and blocked it perfectly well looks like Tora will be finished soon." "Y-you punk you will pay for stepping into someone elses business.. who do you think you are?" "Hmm well the name's Roarke." "What I don't care who you are I did not ask for your name gah i am going to kill the both of y-" Smack! Out of nowhere the handle of spear hits Tora clear across the face and he is sent to the ground knocking his axe out of his hand. "We have not finished our fight yet' yelled the red haired girl. Roarke just stands there amazed. "You i will kill you!!! Tora shouts as he struggles to his feet, but in that short time the red~haired girl already knocked out Tora by hitting him in the back of the head with her spear." "Oh well done indeed but you did kill him." said Roarke. "I am in no position to end his life." " Hmm well i was a bit careless well best be on my way." Roarke sheaths his sword and walks over to the tree to get his giant sword. "Wait yelled the girl, I owe you thanks for saving my life and what do you mean you were careless?" "Well, says Roarke, there no need to thank me i was only walking by and decided to join since it was 1 against 2 and his friend escaped meaning there could still be trouble for you so i guess i could escort you to the closest town since i need to go there anyways." "Really??? thank you i will repay you somehow in town and Roarke my name is Meleena.


great chapters o-kun....where'd u get the names from??

Ohako
02-01-2010, 01:05 PM
great chapters o-kun....where'd u get the names from??

Hmm if you mean the bandit's and Meleena they were totally random names i came up with lol or maybe there is some meaning behind them;)

kakashi uzumaki
02-01-2010, 01:29 PM
Hmm if you mean the bandit's and Meleena they were totally random names i came up with lol or maybe there is some meaning behind them;)

lol well they have good names. Cant wait till next chater o~kun ;)

Ohako
02-01-2010, 01:31 PM
Thanks KU but it be awhile till the next chapter i have a essay to write

kakashi uzumaki
02-01-2010, 04:01 PM
awwww :( ......alright, good luck with the essay!

Ohako
09-03-2012, 10:50 AM
I decided to start this up again with a small update

Chapter 4 The red~haired girl Meleena

Roarke takes a seat. "You really don't have to treat me to lunch." Says Roarke. "It's the least I can do for someone who has saved my life. Now if you don't mind me asking who are you? Its not every day you bump into a swordsman with 5 swords." "Hmm your quite straightforward I ask, well I'am just a simple man who does any kind of work asked of me." Meleena just stares at Roarke examining his face, "You seem like a bounty hunter or hitman to me who dirties his hands for personal gain." "Huh h-how do you get that I' am quite the opposite in fact." says, Roarke. "Well your answer is quite vague tell me about yourself I am curious." Roarke just turns his face and looks out the window." "I see how your type works, wanting something in return hmm? Here I will tell you my story if you tell me yours deal?"