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Blakexd9
07-29-2009, 05:12 PM
Arcs:
1.Delivering the golden apples
2.The 5 golden mirrors
3.N/A
(All the arcs after 2 are N/A)

Chapter 1, Just The Beginning.

As I packed up for Summer camp I realized there was a box in my closet that wasn't there before. I yelled at my Mom.

"Mom! What is this box in my closet?"

No response.

"Mom!"

No response again. I went to go look for her, and she was outside talking to some strange man. I couldn't hear what they were saying, but the man looked straight at me. He started walking inside. I ran to my room and started packing again. The man came in and he yelled.

"WHO WAS THAT?"

He started talking to my mom.

"There was a kid looking at me out the window. Are you sure he didn't hear us talk?"

"Oh" My mom said, "That must have been Kenson."

"OK whatever" The man said, "Lets go back outside"

I went to the box. All I knew about it is that it was important. I opened it up, all it was was a envelope with my name on it. I opened that up, it said "Come to the park, 12:00 Midnight" I didn't know what it meant so I just put it back in and laid in bed. Before I knew it I was asleep.

I woke up, I looked at the clock. It said 11:58 PM. The next thing I did was crazy. I got out of bed and went outside to the park.

When I got to the park I looked at my watch, it said Exactly 12:00. I said,

"Hello? Anyone here?"

I blinked for maybe 3 seconds, I opened my eyes and surrounding me were about 10 wolfs,

"Uhhhh, I dont know what is going on here"

Not thinking I jumped up on the play set at the park, unfortunately the wolfs came up the slide and they looked like they were going to kill me. I stepped on something and I fell down, I looked it was a peace of paper. It said "Look to your left" I did and there was a sword I picked it up, it was kind of heavy. I slashed at all of the wolfs with the sword. They all fell to the ground. The sun was coming out.

"What the heck just happened?" I said

"You will find out soon" a voice said

"Who are you?"

"I am your guardian, the one who sent the box to you and the sword."

"What is this about?" I said

"My name is Okaon, whenever you need that sword just say the words "Lis Mondo" and it will be wherever you are."

"OK but why were there wolfs?"

"You will find out soon enough, I have to go now."

"But.."

"Im sorry"

Then he was gone. I walked up to a hill, the sun was rising more. There I stood, with no idea what to do.

Chapter 2, Sinun and Gragon.

I just stood there as the sun rose. I wondered what my Mom would do if she saw I was out of the house. I looked at my watch, it was about 1:00 AM. I was about to walk but then something hit my leg, another peace of paper. I read it it said Walk West You Will Find Something waiting for you there. I guessed it was from that guardian dude. So I just started walking west.

Everything I saw was normal, well everything except a big house farther west I never noticed before. I knocked on the door. I heard people waking up, probably my age. 12 or 13, then I heard a adult voice. It sounded like the man I saw at my house. One of the kids opened the door. She had long blond hair and blue eyes, and a shirt that said the number 7. She was beautiful. She asked,

"Who are you? What do you want?"

"Let him in Sinun" The man from my house said,

"But sir..."

"Let him in NOW!"

"Yes Sir"

The Man sat in a rocking chair that looked to big for him, he was playing chess with a different man, before I could say anything the man butted in,

"We have been waiting for you, Kenson."

"How do you know my name?" I said

"Your Mom, didn't you see me talking to your mom? I saw you in the window"

"Why didnt you want me to hear your conversation with my Mom?" I said

"You were suppose to get here on your own, and you did. Did you meet your guardian?"

"Ummmm... Yes I think so."

"Good."

"So those wolfs were a test?"

"Yes"

"Every one of these kids has a guardian. Sinun, the girl you met already, has the guardian of life and death. You have the guardian of Strength and Power. Also Gragon has the guardian of nature. Those are the main guardians. All of us have been waiting years for your arrival. Now you Sinun and Gragon must take these golden apples to my freind Moue.

He tossed me a bag. Even without opening it I could feel the power of these apples. I had to taste one. I reached in and the Man stopped me.

"No one tastes these apples but Moue. You Sinun and Gragon go south to my freind."

Gragon was a boy with pretty nice clothes, and Short Brown hair.

"Lets go" Sinun said

We steped out of the house to see that there were 3 giants, well not really big just maybe about 10 feet attacking the city, and picking up people and eating them.

"Looks like we have some Cannibals on our hands" Sinun said

Chapter 3, Cannibals.

We were standing outside staring at the Cannibals. I said,

"Lis Mondo"

My sword was right next to me, I picked it up. Sinun took this big knife out of her pocket, She said

"So what are we going to do? Charge in?"

"Uhhhh... I guess so" I said

Sinun charged in, one of the Cannibals swung their arm at her. But somehow she dodged it, and the Cannibal's hand hit the ground. All I knew is that she has had years of training. But what about me? I didn't have any training. Meanwhile the Cannibal's arm was still on the ground, it seemed like it was stuck. Sinun ran up the Cannibal's arm, and went on the Cannibal's shoulders. Like a piggy back ride. Then she started stabing the Cannibal with her knife.

"A little help here?" She yelled

"Gragon, you stay here now OK" I said trying not to be mean

"OK Sure." Gragon said

I ran over to Sinun, I tryed to stab the Cannibal with my sword but before I could the Cannibal jumped. He was trying to get Sinun off. She fell off. I ran to her but before I could get there the Cannibal grabbed Sinun, he put Sinun over his mouth and was about to drop her into his mouth. But I did something really stupid. I threw my sword at the Cannibal's eye but it must of been my aim cause it went right into the Cannibal's mouth. That must of been a good thing cause the Cannibal choked and droped Sinun she quickly got up and she said,

"Get out of here C'mon!"

"Why??"

"Cause when Cannibals choke they explode and acid comes out of them! If any of the acid touches us were dead!"

At that time I ran. So did Sinun. Gragon was like,

"C'mon!! He is going to explode! C'mon!"

Then I saw Gragon was running with us. We said nothing just ran. My heart beated so fast, and then the Cannibal exploded. We were far away enough. Acid flew everywere, even on the other Cannibals. The other Cannibals melted, it was the most terrifying thing I have ever seen. Buildings were melting and even people.

"Kenson! You did it! You killed all of the Cannibals!" Sinun said

"I know... But I killed all of those people too, and how am I going to get my sword back?"

"Just say those words it will come back good as new."

"So whatever happens to it I can still get it back?"

"Yup!"

"So were do we go now?" I asked

"We go south, like Dayaru said" Sinun said

"Who is Dayaru?" I said

"He is the man that gave you the sack of golden apples" Sinun said

"Oh were are those?" Sinun said again

"I have them" Gragon said

"OK! So lets head south!" I said

Chapter 4, Gragons Ability's.

We walked south for about 2 hours We took a break every hour. When we got to this field Gragon just stopped, like he was stunned. Then I noticed someone else on the other side of the field.

"Stay back Kenson!" Sinun said worried

We got out of Gragon's way then he ran at the person, he ran so fast I couldn't see him! The other person noticed then they started fighting.

"Why are they fighting?" I said

"They are fighting because they are brothers. 3 years ago Gragon's brother killed Gragon's best freind. When ever they see each other they fight."

I looked at Gragon. But all I saw was a wolf, I blinked and he was back to normal. It mustve been my imagination.

"Im going to try to stop them" Sinun said

"OK" I said

She charged in with her knife and got between them, she said something like,

"More!"

Then her knife turned into a sword. She stabed Gragon's brother and then Gragon!

"What are you doing?" I yelled

She ran over to me,

"They are immortal."

'How...?"

She didnt respond.

Gragon ran over too us. His brother ran off into the woods.

"What was that all about Gragon?" I said

"Nothing" he said, he sounded mad.

"See that mountain there?"

She pointed at a mountain, it was huge I wondered why I didnt notice it before. We walked to it.

We climbed to the top I was first to the top. I didnt walk for long, I fell. Sinun and Gragon got up and said

"Kenson?"

They walked and saw the hole I fell in, well it wasent a hole. It was a Volcano.

"Oh my god!!" Sinun and Gragon said at the same time.

"Ahhhhhhh!!" I screamed,

I saw the lava at the bottom I knew I was going to die.

Chapter 5, Moue and the Volcano.

I was falling into the lava. I thought I was going to die. Luckily I landed on a rock, that was sinking by the second. I jumped on the next one till I got on a big one that would take a while to sink. Gragon got a rope out of his backpack, well not a rope. He was looking for a rope then fell off the edge of the volcano. He fell into the lava then I remembered he is Immortal. he came out his clothes burnt but weren't on fire anymore. He yelled,

"Were is my backpack?"

He looked over and his backpack was sinking in the lava, we couldn't get up to the top were Sinun was, and the worst thing was that the golden apples sank into the lava too. We were so close to getting to Moue's house then we lose the golden apples. But I didn't have time to think about that, I wondered how we would get up. The next thing Gragon did was very weird. He grabbed me and turned into a wolf.

"What the heck" I thought.

With his claws he climbed up to the top, then I looked back at his and he was regular again.

"How... Were... You...." I said

"Oh we forgot to tell you Gragon is a werewolf" Sinun said

"Uhhhhh... OK?"

"OK! Lets go to Moue's house its right there!" Sinun said

"Were are the golden apples?" Sinun said

"Well... That's the problem... We dropped them into the lava"

"YOU WHAT!" Sinun screamed

She looked at the lava.

"Ugh..." She yelled.

"Maybe we can explain to him..." I said

"OK I guess its worth a try..." Sinun said

We rang the doorbell, a tall cubby man with a gun came at the door.

"WHAT DO YOU WANT?" he said

"We were just..."

"SHUT UP AND SIT DOWN!"

We sat in chairs and next to me was a man who must've been Moue. He was tied up and tape over his mouth. The fat man was on a stage and he said,

"Who wants to die?"

He pointed the gun straght at me.

Chapter 6, Kaue.

The gun was pointed at me. I whispered,

"Lis Mondo"

My sword was next to me, slowly I picked it up. Stood up and said to the fat man,

"Do not shoot anyone, or else."

"Or else what kid?"

"Ill... Stab you with this sword."

"What your going to stab me with your toy sword?"

He shot me with his gun, luckily it hit my sword and bounced off.

"Well aren't you going to be a pain." The man said

He suddenly changed his form, I didn't know how. He was about my age, with a orange shirt and jeans, and blond hair.

"My name is Kaue" he said

He took out a sword and swung at me, I hit his sword with my sword. He must of been trained good. I swung at him and he hit mine with his. Kaue jumped on the stage, and climbed up on top of the stage's lights, a big one. He made it fall, it was right on top of me. I ran to dodge it. I dodged it. Sinun and Gragon untied Moue and they went in a corner. I went on stage, and Kaue jumped down right in front of me.

"Your good" He said,

I stabed him, I thought he would stop me but he didnt. He forced the sword out of him and said,

"We will meet again."

He ran outside. I went over to Sinun, Gragon and Moue.

"Are you guys okay?" I said

"Yeah." Sinun said

"Are you guys here too give me my golden apples?" Moue said

"Yeah but..." I said

"But what?" Moue said

"We kinda droped them in the lava..."

"I know." Moue said

"How?" I said

"I can see the future." Moue said

"How??"

"I was just born with it" he smiled

"OK??" I said

We went out of Moue's house and walked back to the house.

End Of Arc 1: Delivering The Golden Apples.

Beginning of arc 2: The 5 Golden Mirrors.

Chapter 7, Sabriate.

We got back to the house to see everyone sleeping but one girl. She was sitting on her bed and she looked scared. She looked a little older than me, probably 13. She looked at us like she knew us, even know I know I didn't know her. She came over to us and said,

"My name is Sabriate."

"Hello" Sinun said

Just then Dayaru woke up, he told us,

"We have been waiting for you to come back. Did you give the golden apples to Moue?"

"No, we accidentally dropped them into a volcano." I said

"Oh," He said

"But that is not what we need to worry about now. Far away on the other side of the world, a huge beast has got out of its cage. Well not fully out of his cage. If he gets out of his cage he will destroy the world. That's why I need you Kenson, Sinun, Gragon and Sabriate to go find the 5 golden mirrors. Once you get all 5 golden mirrors you will have to put them in frount of the beasts cage and it will put the beast in there, no matter how far away the beast is he will just go right into his cage. This only happens every 1000 years."

"Yes sir!" Sinun said "We will go get the mirrors"

"But first I need you to check out a city that has been destroyed by some purple fog."

"OK!" I said

we walked out of the house and started walking to the city with the purple fog.

We walked a long time but we finally got there, it was destroyed. there was nothing left but destroyed houses.

"Lets see if there is anything still around here" Sinun said

We looked around, nothing. Then we found this cave,

"This mustve been were the people evacuated." Sinun said

"Lets go in." Gragon said

We went in bats were everywere. We walked for sometime and it seemed like a hour.

"There is nothing here, but I feel someone coming behind us." Sabriate said

We looked behind us. No one there. We started walking back. When we got out there was more fog.

"Good thing we stayed in there" Sinun said "We would of died if we stood out here longer."

"Lets go tell Dayaru what happened." I said

"OK!" Gragon said

When we got back to the house everyone was awake, Dayrau said to us

"What was it like?"

"Destroyed. Totaly Destroyed, nothing left. but a cave that the people must've gone in." I said

"I see..." Dayaru said

"OK! I need you guys now to go find the 5 golden mirrors now!" Dayaru said

"Yes sir." Sinun said

'I think the first mirror is in this canyon." He showed us a picture of it.

"I know where that is" Sabriate said "Its far south."

We walked outside and started walking south. Going to find the first mirror.


Chapter 8, The Canyon of death.

When we finally got to the Canyon we stopped to look at its size. It was huge! We walked for a while, we walked past some bushes and out came some deadly wolfs. They looked hungry, just like the night this all started.

"Lis Mondo!" I said

I picked up my sword, swung it at the wolfs and they fell down. They weren't dead.

"Hurry!" Sinun said "They will get up soon!"

We ran far away from them, they came at us. I held up my sword, then they ran away scared from the sword. Well it wasn't the sword they were scared of, it was something behind us. I looked behind us, it was a huge snake. We ran. We ran back the way we came. Not all of us, Sabriate took out her bow and arrow. Shot a couple arrows at the snake, but it didn't do anything. Just made the snake want to kill us more. With its tail the snake hit the canyon very hard, witch made a lot of rocks fall down. The rocks fell right in front of us. Now it was a dead end. Sinun took out her knife, and ran straight at the snake. She ran up its tail and was on top of the snake, just like with the Cannibal she started stabbing it. She yelled,

"Sabriate! Shoot a arrow at his eye! Hurry!"

Sabriate shot a arrow at the snakes eye. She hit it like it was a bulls eye. The snake fell to the ground. Lifeless.

"Well..." Sinun said "Looks like that was the first thing that we had to face..."

"Yup..." Gragon said

We walked for a while, again. Then finally we saw the golden mirror. But guess what was guarding it? 2 cyclops. Two one eyed freaks. They looked straight at us, with their one eye.

"No one goes any farther." one of them said

"Yeah!" the other one said

Gragon turned into his werewolf form. He started attacking one of them. He said

"I got this one! You guys get the other one!"

Not thinking I charged straight at it. He just hit me with his hand and I went flying back.

"How are we supposed to do this?" I said

Sabriate shot some arrows at its eye. Now that made it irritated. It hit us back. Well only Sinun and Sabriate. I ran behind him. I did something that was more funny than good. I stabbed my sword into his butt. That must of did it cause it started picking up rocks and throwing them at everyone. Even the other cyclops. I almost got hit by one, then he picked up a rock so big he just dropped it on himself.

"Well I guess he is taken care of." I said

"OK... I guess" Sinun said

Gragon had already killed the other one. We all walked to the mirror. I went to go get it.

"Stop!" Sabriate said "Its a trap!"

"How do you know that?" I said

I took the mirror and said,

"See? Nothing happened."

For a moment it was silent.

"OK then" Sinun said "Lets go."

We started walking but then lots of rocks fell off the top of the canyon!

"RUN!" Sabriate said

We started running. But then a big rock stopped us from going. Rocks were falling from everywhere.

Chapter 9, Rock Avalanche.

The rocks were falling everywhere. A couple seconds ago a big rock fell right in front of us so we couldn't go. I hit the rock with my sword, nothing happened.

"We don't have much time!" Sinun said

I hit the rock as hard as I could, and there was a crack in it. I hit it about 4 more times, the crack got bigger. Sabriate shot a arrow at the rock, that did it. The rock split in half.

"Lets go!!" Sinun said

We ran. Rocks falling everywhere. We all almost got hit by a big rock. A little rock hit my head. Another little rock hit Gragon's head and he fell down.

"Gragon!" I shouted

He was unconscious, I grabbed him. He was hanging on my back. We started running again. We finally got out of the canyon. Gragon woke up. We sat down, tired.

After about 10 minutes we started walking back to the house were Dayaru was.

When we got to the house we all collapsed on a bed.

"So, did you get the first mirror?" Dayaru said

"Yeah." We all said

"I have no idea where the next mirror is" Dayaru said

"Sinun, Gragon," he said

"Yes" Sinun and Gragon said

"I need you to go show Kenson and Sabriate their beds."

"OK." They said

We walked up some stairs that I never had seen before. Upstairs were 4 beds. I knew they were for all of us, Me, Sabriate, Sinun, and Gragon. Two of them you could tell that they were used, probably Sinun and Gragon's.

"So this is your bed" Sinun said

"And this is Sabriate's bed."

We all collapsed on our beds, and before I knew it we were all asleep.

We awoke to Dayaru yelling,

"I know were the next mirror is!"

We all came downstairs.

"I think the next mirror is in a Pyramid!"

"A Pyramid?" We all said tired

"Yes! But all of you go get some more rest before you go get it."

"OK..." I said

We went upstairs and went to sleep.

Chapter 10, The Second Mirror.

I woke up and everyone was already downstairs. I walked downstairs,

"Good morning Kenson!" Dayaru said

"Its morning already?" I said

"Yes!" He said "We know were the pyramid is!"

"Were?" I said

"Its far east." "Its so far you cant walk there. You will need a Taxi."

"So were are we going to get one?" I said

"Look outside"

I looked outside, there was a taxi right there. Sabriate, Sinun and Gragon got in the taxi. So did I.

We were going smoothly for a while. In till a car came up to us and shot a arrow at our tire.

"The wheel is going to go flat!" Sabriate yelled,

Out of the other car came another arrow, it it our window and broke it.

"Kenson, get out of the car." Sinun said, "We will come in a minute."

"Why?" I said

"Just do it!" She said

I jumped out of the car. It didn't hurt as much as I thought it would. Then Sabriate, Sinun and Gragon came flying out of the car. The car crashed and exploded.

"What about the driver?" I said

"I don't know were he is. He must of got caught in the explosion and died." Sinun said

We walked east for a while. we finally came to a huge pyramid.

"I guess this is it" I said

"Yup!" Sinun said

"But wait, were is the door?" I said

"Probably at the top" Sabriate said

We climbed up to the top of the pyramid. We opened a door and climbed down a latter. We stood still, looking all over the the place. Looking back I couldn't describe what it looked like. We walked forward. We walked for a while, then Gragon yelled,

"AHHHHHHHH!!!!!"

He fell into a trapdoor with spikes. Lots of spikes. I wasn't worried he is immortal.

"Don't worry" I said "He is immortal."

"He isn't if he gets stabbed in the heart!" Sinun said

I looked down to see Gragon stabbed right in the heart.

Chapter 11, Gragon's Death?

I was staring at Gragon, stabbed in the heart. He said,

"Go without me..."

He coughed up some blood.

"We have to go get the mirror" Sinun said

"Why? And just leave Gragon here to die?" I yelled

She grabbed my hand and Sabriate's hand. We started walking. We stopped dead in out tracks when we saw this gooey snake like thing.

"Watch out" Sinun said "It spits out acid, acid that melts you"

It spit at us. Some of the acid got on my shirt, it melted to nothing. Nothing happened to my body.

"Lis Mondo" I said

I picked up my sword. I stabbed the snake thing, I took it out. It was covered in goo. I stabbed it as hard as I could. It fell into some sand. Dead.

"Lets move on!" Sinun said

We climbed up some stairs to see the mirror. In a bunch of sunlight. I walked to it, but something stopped me. A man. Well not a man, a man made out of fire. Yes FIRE! He shot a fireball at me. I stabbed him, it went right through him.

"How are we supposed to beat this guy?" I said

"I dunno!" Sinun said

"Well why don't you help me here!" I said

Sabriate shot some arrows at him, no effect. Just went right through him.

"Hahahahahaha! You cant beat me you little bugs!" Fire said

I decided to call him Fire. At least that's what he looked like his name was.

Fire pulled out 2 swords,

"Who wants to play?" He said

Sinun and I got our swords and we were sword fighting. CHING CHING! Sabriate shot some arrows at him. Still no use.

"Go down the stairs!" Sinun said "He cant go past them!"

We went down the stairs.

"We have to have a plan" I said

"Yeah, we do" Sinun said

"I know what to do." Sabriate said

"What?" Sinun and I said at the same time.

"Water." She said

"What about water?" We said

"We pour water on him."

"Oh! I get it!" We said "But were are we supposed to find water in the middle of the desert?"

"I dunno" she said

Chapter 12, Fire.

We said nothing, just staring at each other. The question was: Where were we going to find water in the middle of the desert?

"If we try to find water underground the sand would just collapse sometime..." Sinun said

"I know..." I said

"WHERE ARE WE SUPPOSED TO FIND WATER??!!!" Sinun screamed,

"Thats it,"I said

I ran up to fire and had a sword fight with him.

"I just remembered!" Sabriate said " I have some water in the backpack!"

But Gragon was wearing the backpack. He fell into a trapdoor of spikes. Fortunately the backpack was sitting right by the trap door. Gragon still had the same expression on his face. I found a water bottle. I poured all of it on Fire. Nothing happened.

"You think that is going to beat the great Fire?" Fire said

"So your name really is Fire." I said

He threw fireballs at all of us. They missed, and hit the sand.

"Go behind the stairs!" Sinun said

We went behind the stairs.

"Man! How are we going to beat this guy?" I said

"We need a big bucket of water." Sinun said

"But where are we supposed to find water? We are in the middle of the desert." I said

"I wonder if that is the only way to beat him." Sinun said

"Look over there" Sabriate said

She pointed to some words, they must of been there for hundreds of years. But it was English. It said

"No one has got out of this pyramid. Leave now."

"What was that about?" I said

"It doesn't prove anything it just tells you get out." Sinun said

"I have a plan" Sabriate said

She told us what to do.

"OK!" Sinun and I said

We went up the stairs.

"You come back for another round?" Fire said

I hit his sword with my sword. We started sword fighting.

"Sinun, NOW!" I said

Sinun rolled a bucket and it made fire fall down. Then Sabriate shot a big arrow at him and he fell down the stairs.

"He is only frozen for a minute so grab the mirror and lets go!" Sinun yelled

I grabbed the mirror knowing it was probably a trap. It was. The floor and everything turned into sand, quicksand. Also behind where the mirror used to be was a time bomb, 10 seconds. Fire started to get up,

"RUN!!!" Sinun said

We ran. We couldn't run as fast, because the quicksand was trying to suck us up. Fire was chasing us, and 10 seconds turned to 9.

To Be Continued...!

takuya
07-29-2009, 05:16 PM
this sounds cool keep going man i wanna see where this lends to

mangagirl
07-29-2009, 05:17 PM
awesome bro!!!i love it!!

jounin
07-29-2009, 05:21 PM
cool start, I would like to see more

Blakexd9
07-29-2009, 05:23 PM
Later in the story he meets more people and you'll see what happens. Everyday I will put more story to it

rocketjed1
07-29-2009, 05:52 PM
That was awsome! Please write the next part!

Blakexd9
07-29-2009, 05:53 PM
That was awsome! Please write the next part!

I will!

Blakexd9
07-29-2009, 07:13 PM
When I get to at least part 5 or 6 I will do a thing were you can make a Character and i might put it in the story.

Blakexd9
07-29-2009, 07:56 PM
Does anyone else like it?

Neos109
07-30-2009, 07:55 AM
Does anyone else like it?

i think it's pretty interesting, u should really continue the story

Blakexd9
07-30-2009, 08:15 AM
Chapter 2, Sinun and Gragon.

I just stood there as the sun rose. I wondered what my Mom would do if she saw I was out of the house. I looked at my watch, it was about 1:00 AM. I was about to walk but then something hit my leg, another peace of paper. I read it it said Walk West You Will Find Something waiting for you there. I guessed it was from that guardian dude. So I just started walking west.

Everything I saw was normal, well everything except a big house farther west I never noticed before. I knocked on the door. I heard people waking up, probably my age. 12 or 13, then I heard a adult voice. It sounded like the man I saw at my house. One of the kids opened the door. She had long blond hair and blue eyes, and a shirt that said the number 7. She was beautiful. She asked,

"Who are you? What do you want?"

"Let him in Sinun" The man from my house said,

"But sir..."

"Let him in NOW!"

"Yes Sir"

The Man sat in a rocking chair that looked to big for him, he was playing chess with a different man, before I could say anything the man butted in,

"We have been waiting for you, Kenson."

"How do you know my name?" I said

"Your Mom, didn't you see me talking to your mom? I saw you in the window"

"Why didnt you want me to hear your conversation with my Mom?" I said

"You were suppose to get here on your own, and you did. Did you meet your guardian?"

"Ummmm... Yes I think so."

"Good."

"So those wolfs were a test?"

"Yes"

"Every one of these kids has a guardian. Sinun, the girl you met already, has the guardian of life and death. You have the guardian of Strength and Power. Also Gragon has the guardian of nature. Those are the main guardians. All of us have been waiting years for your arrival. Now you Sinun and Gragon must take these golden apples to my freind Moue.

He tossed me a bag. Even without opening it I could feel the power of these apples. I had to taste one. I reached in and the Man stopped me.

"No one tastes these apples but Moue. You Sinun and Gragon go south to my freind."

Gragon was a boy with pretty nice clothes, and Short Brown hair.

"Lets go" Sinun said

We steped out of the house to see that there were 3 giants, well not really big just maybe about 10 feet attacking the city, and picking up people and eating them.

"Looks like we have some Cannibals on our hands" Sinun said

To Be Continued!

Blakexd9
07-30-2009, 08:16 AM
i think it's pretty interesting, u should really continue the story
I just got done with Chapter 2:

Chapter 2, Sinun and Gragon.

I just stood there as the sun rose. I wondered what my Mom would do if she saw I was out of the house. I looked at my watch, it was about 1:00 AM. I was about to walk but then something hit my leg, another peace of paper. I read it it said Walk West You Will Find Something waiting for you there. I guessed it was from that guardian dude. So I just started walking west.

Everything I saw was normal, well everything except a big house farther west I never noticed before. I knocked on the door. I heard people waking up, probably my age. 12 or 13, then I heard a adult voice. It sounded like the man I saw at my house. One of the kids opened the door. She had long blond hair and blue eyes, and a shirt that said the number 7. She was beautiful. She asked,

"Who are you? What do you want?"

"Let him in Sinun" The man from my house said,

"But sir..."

"Let him in NOW!"

"Yes Sir"

The Man sat in a rocking chair that looked to big for him, he was playing chess with a different man, before I could say anything the man butted in,

"We have been waiting for you, Kenson."

"How do you know my name?" I said

"Your Mom, didn't you see me talking to your mom? I saw you in the window"

"Why didnt you want me to hear your conversation with my Mom?" I said

"You were suppose to get here on your own, and you did. Did you meet your guardian?"

"Ummmm... Yes I think so."

"Good."

"So those wolfs were a test?"

"Yes"

"Every one of these kids has a guardian. Sinun, the girl you met already, has the guardian of life and death. You have the guardian of Strength and Power. Also Gragon has the guardian of nature. Those are the main guardians. All of us have been waiting years for your arrival. Now you Sinun and Gragon must take these golden apples to my freind Moue.

He tossed me a bag. Even without opening it I could feel the power of these apples. I had to taste one. I reached in and the Man stopped me.

"No one tastes these apples but Moue. You Sinun and Gragon go south to my freind."

Gragon was a boy with pretty nice clothes, and Short Brown hair.

"Lets go" Sinun said

We steped out of the house to see that there were 3 giants, well not really big just maybe about 10 feet attacking the city, and picking up people and eating them.

"Looks like we have some Cannibals on our hands" Sinun said

To Be Continued!

NaruSakufluff4ever
07-30-2009, 08:34 AM
nice dude, this is pretty good WRITE. MORE.

Blakexd9
07-30-2009, 08:43 AM
nice dude, this is pretty good WRITE. MORE.

I will!

Blakexd9
07-31-2009, 07:51 AM
Chapter 3, Cannibals.

We were standing outside staring at the Cannibals. I said,

"Lis Mondo"

My sword was right next to me, I picked it up. Sinun took this big knife out of her pocket, She said

"So what are we going to do? Charge in?"

"Uhhhh... I guess so" I said

Sinun charged in, one of the Cannibals swung their arm at her. But somehow she dodged it, and the Cannibal's hand hit the ground. All I knew is that she has had years of training. But what about me? I didn't have any training. Meanwhile the Cannibal's arm was still on the ground, it seemed like it was stuck. Sinun ran up the Cannibal's arm, and went on the Cannibal's shoulders. Like a piggy back ride. Then she started stabing the Cannibal with her knife.

"A little help here?" She yelled

"Gragon, you stay here now OK" I said trying not to be mean

"OK Sure." Gragon said

I ran over to Sinun, I tryed to stab the Cannibal with my sword but before I could the Cannibal jumped. He was trying to get Sinun off. She fell off. I ran to her but before I could get there the Cannibal grabbed Sinun, he put Sinun over his mouth and was about to drop her into his mouth. But I did something really stupid. I threw my sword at the Cannibal's eye but it must of been my aim cause it went right into the Cannibal's mouth. That must of been a good thing cause the Cannibal choked and droped Sinun she quickly got up and she said,

"Get out of here C'mon!"

"Why??"

"Cause when Cannibals choke they explode and acid comes out of them! If any of the acid touches us were dead!"

At that time I ran. So did Sinun. Gragon was like,

"C'mon!! He is going to explode! C'mon!"

Then I saw Gragon was running with us. We said nothing just ran. My heart beated so fast, and then the Cannibal exploded. We were far away enough. Acid flew everywere, even on the other Cannibals. The other Cannibals melted, it was the most terrifying thing I have ever seen. Buildings were melting and even people.

"Kenson! You did it! You killed all of the Cannibals!" Sinun said

"I know... But I killed all of those people too, and how am I going to get my sword back?"

"Just say those words it will come back good as new."

"So whatever happens to it I can still get it back?"

"Yup!"

"So were do we go now?" I asked

"We go south, like Dayaru said" Sinun said

"Who is Dayaru?" I said

"He is the man that gave you the sack of golden apples" Sinun said

"Oh were are those?" Sinun said again

"I have them" Gragon said

"OK! So lets head south!" I said

To Be Continued!

Ryaque
07-31-2009, 08:48 AM
I LOVE IT!!! It's really good. Two thumbs up. I would love to see more of it.

Blakexd9
07-31-2009, 08:55 AM
I LOVE IT!!! It's really good. Two thumbs up. I would love to see more of it.

Thanks! I really appreciate it!!

Blakexd9
07-31-2009, 08:56 AM
Who is ready for chapter 4?

Ryaque
07-31-2009, 08:58 AM
*jumps up and down* MEEEE!!!!!!!!

Blakexd9
07-31-2009, 09:21 AM
Chapter 4, Gragons Ability's.

We walked south for about 2 hours We took a break every hour. When we got to this field Gragon just stopped, like he was stunned. Then I noticed someone else on the other side of the field.

"Stay back Kenson!" Sinun said worried

We got out of Gragon's way then he ran at the person, he ran so fast I couldn't see him! The other person noticed then they started fighting.

"Why are they fighting?" I said

"They are fighting because they are brothers. 3 years ago Gragon's brother killed Gragon's best freind. When ever they see each other they fight."

I looked at Gragon. But all I saw was a wolf, I blinked and he was back to normal. It mustve been my imagination.

"Im going to try to stop them" Sinun said

"OK" I said

She charged in with her knife and got between them, she said something like,

"More!"

Then her knife turned into a sword. She stabed Gragon's brother and then Gragon!

"What are you doing?" I yelled

She ran over to me,

"They are immortal."

'How...?"

She didnt respond.

Gragon ran over too us. His brother ran off into the woods.

"What was that all about Gragon?" I said

"Nothing" he said, he sounded mad.

"See that mountain there?"

She pointed at a mountain, it was huge I wondered why I didnt notice it before. We walked to it.

We climbed to the top I was first to the top. I didnt walk for long, I fell. Sinun and Gragon got up and said

"Kenson?"

They walked and saw the hole I fell in, well it wasent a hole. It was a Volcano.

"Oh my god!!" Sinun and Gragon said at the same time.

"Ahhhhhhh!!" I screamed,

I saw the lava at the bottom I knew I was going to die.

To Be Continued!

Ryaque
07-31-2009, 09:25 AM
A volcano? Wow more more more MORE!!!!

Blakexd9
07-31-2009, 09:27 AM
A volcano? Wow more more more MORE!!!!

I knew everyone would be like Oh this is getting good! Then the chapter ends

Ryaque
07-31-2009, 09:28 AM
I knew everyone would be like Oh this is getting good! Then the chapter ends
A good writer does that to keep the audience in suspence...I loved doing that with my story but it's different when you're the audience. It's soo good but it's killing me to wait!!

Blakexd9
07-31-2009, 09:30 AM
A good writer does that to keep the audience in suspence...I loved doing that with my story but it's different when you're the audience. It's soo good but it's killing me to wait!!

The Next chapter will be one of the best so far. I cant wait to post it! I might post it tonight or tomorrow... I dunno...

Ryaque
07-31-2009, 09:51 AM
Oh tonight please!!!!! Tonight!!! Come one you're killing me here!!

Blakexd9
07-31-2009, 10:17 AM
I will give you one hint about the next chapter. do you want to hear it?

Ryaque
07-31-2009, 10:32 AM
I will give you one hint about the next chapter. do you want to hear it?
Heck yeah.

Blakexd9
07-31-2009, 01:33 PM
Heck yeah.

Here dont click the spoiler if you dont want to know.

Someone falls into the lava!

Blakexd9
07-31-2009, 03:41 PM
Chapter 5 will NOT up tonight

Blakexd9
07-31-2009, 07:44 PM
Im sorry, Chapter 5 will not come out till tomorrow morning.

Blakexd9
08-01-2009, 07:10 AM
Chapter 5, Moue and the Volcano.

I was falling into the lava. I thought I was going to die. Luckily I landed on a rock, that was sinking by the second. I jumped on the next one till I got on a big one that would take a while to sink. Gragon got a rope out of his backpack, well not a rope. He was looking for a rope then fell off the edge of the volcano. He fell into the lava then I remembered he is Immortal. he came out his clothes burnt but weren't on fire anymore. He yelled,

"Were is my backpack?"

He looked over and his backpack was sinking in the lava, we couldn't get up to the top were Sinun was, and the worst thing was that the golden apples sank into the lava too. We were so close to getting to Moue's house then we lose the golden apples. But I didn't have time to think about that, I wondered how we would get up. The next thing Gragon did was very weird. He grabbed me and turned into a wolf.

"What the heck" I thought.

With his claws he climbed up to the top, then I looked back at his and he was regular again.

"How... Were... You...." I said

"Oh we forgot to tell you Gragon is a werewolf" Sinun said

"Uhhhhh... OK?"

"OK! Lets go to Moue's house its right there!" Sinun said

"Were are the golden apples?" Sinun said

"Well... That's the problem... We dropped them into the lava"

"YOU WHAT!" Sinun screamed

She looked at the lava.

"Ugh..." She yelled.

"Maybe we can explain to him..." I said

"OK I guess its worth a try..." Sinun said

We rang the doorbell, a tall cubby man with a gun came at the door.

"WHAT DO YOU WANT?" he said

"We were just..."

"SHUT UP AND SIT DOWN!"

We sat in chairs and next to me was a man who must've been Moue. He was tied up and tape over his mouth. The fat man was on a stage and he said,

"Who wants to die?"

He pointed the gun straght at me.

To Be Continued!

Blakexd9
08-01-2009, 07:15 AM
I will put more characters in the story by chapter 7, so im doing a thing were you (Yes you) create your own character and I might put it in the story. you make you character like this:

Name:
Age:
Appearance:
Hobbies:

You can put more things if you think of them!

Blakexd9
08-01-2009, 09:16 AM
Chapter 6 may come tonight.

Chidori stream
08-01-2009, 09:57 AM
Here is a fanfiction contest you can enter

http://naruto.viz.com/forum/showthread.php?t=14284

Blakexd9
08-01-2009, 02:58 PM
Anyone want to make a character?

Blakexd9
08-01-2009, 05:35 PM
Chapter 6, Kaue.

The gun was pointed at me. I whispered,

"Lis Mondo"

My sword was next to me, slowly I picked it up. Stood up and said to the fat man,

"Do not shoot anyone, or else."

"Or else what kid?"

"Ill... Stab you with this sword."

"What your going to stab me with your toy sword?"

He shot me with his gun, luckily it hit my sword and bounced off.

"Well aren't you going to be a pain." The man said

He suddenly changed his form, I didn't know how. He was about my age, with a orange shirt and jeans, and blond hair.

"My name is Kaue" he said

He took out a sword and swung at me, I hit his sword with my sword. He must of been trained good. I swung at him and he hit mine with his. Kaue jumped on the stage, and climbed up on top of the stage's lights, a big one. He made it fall, it was right on top of me. I ran to dodge it. I dodged it. Sinun and Gragon untied Moue and they went in a corner. I went on stage, and Kaue jumped down right in front of me.

"Your good" He said,

I stabed him, I thought he would stop me but he didnt. He forced the sword out of him and said,

"We will meet again."

He ran outside. I went over to Sinun, Gragon and Moue.

"Are you guys okay?" I said

"Yeah." Sinun said

"Are you guys here too give me my golden apples?" Moue said

"Yeah but..." I said

"But what?" Moue said

"We kinda droped them in the lava..."

"I know." Moue said

"How?" I said

"I can see the future." Moue said

"How??"

"I was just born with it" he smiled

"OK??" I said

We went out of Moue's house and walked back to the house.

To Be Continued!

End Of Arc 1: Delivering The Golden Apples.

nine tailed fury
08-01-2009, 05:41 PM
i will read this once im done with prides.....

Blakexd9
08-01-2009, 06:12 PM
i will read this once im done with prides.....

OK! Thanks.

Blakexd9
08-01-2009, 06:24 PM
Does anyone want to create a character?

Blakexd9
08-01-2009, 06:26 PM
You have to fill out these for your character:

Name:
Age:
Appearance:
Hobbies:
Freinds or enemies with Kenson:

Blakexd9
08-01-2009, 06:47 PM
Nobody really likes this story huh? Well I don't care I will still make the chapters.

Ryaque
08-01-2009, 06:50 PM
This keeps on getting better and better....sorry I can't make a character though.....

Blakexd9
08-01-2009, 06:51 PM
Almost every other fanfiction has people liking it... What is it? The story?

Blakexd9
08-01-2009, 06:51 PM
This keeps on getting better and better....sorry I can't make a character though.....

Why cant you make a character?

Ryaque
08-01-2009, 07:15 PM
Why cant you make a character?
Well it feels weird because it's YOUR story....and it takes me awhile to think of a good one.

Blakexd9
08-01-2009, 07:17 PM
Well it feels weird because it's YOUR story....and it takes me awhile to think of a good one.

Just make one! (Make one with the name Ryaque or something!)

Blakexd9
08-01-2009, 07:18 PM
you are the only person who reads all of the chapters...

Ryaque
08-01-2009, 07:23 PM
you are the only person who reads all of the chapters...
I'm not the only one....and I already made a 'Ryaque' character, but she already has a story and everything. But wait you just gave me an idea!!

Blakexd9
08-01-2009, 07:24 PM
I'm not the only one....and I already made a 'Ryaque' character, but she already has a story and everything. But wait you just gave me an idea!!

What?

Ryaque
08-01-2009, 07:29 PM
I will put more characters in the story by chapter 7, so im doing a thing were you (Yes you) create your own character and I might put it in the story. you make you character like this:

Name: Sabriate
Age: 13
Appearance: Long black hair that is braided and goes down past her waist, light and dark green dress, carries a black bow and arrows and sword that has a black blade, red hilt, and has dark blue stripes on hilt
Hobbies: Fighting, singing, and loves to run
Personality: Keep quiet unless needs to talk, but when talks usually sayes things that are important. When gets mad is about as bad as.....well me I guesss. And tries to stay on the possitive side of things.

You can put more things if you think of them!
There you go one character for ya.

Blakexd9
08-01-2009, 08:46 PM
There you go one character for ya.

She will be in the next chapter.

Blakexd9
08-01-2009, 08:54 PM
Chapter 7 will be up tomorrow morning!

Blakexd9
08-01-2009, 08:55 PM
Ill tell you guys one thing:

Kaue is a important character, we will get more into him later.

Blakexd9
08-02-2009, 07:43 AM
Chapter 7 will be up in a hour or 2

Ryaque
08-02-2009, 12:16 PM
Woo hoo can't wait.

Blakexd9
08-02-2009, 06:27 PM
Sorry, Chapter 7 wont come out today, it will come out tomorrow morning. (Ive been busy all day, so I didn't have the time to write it...)

Ryaque
08-02-2009, 06:28 PM
Eh that's okay take your time.

Blakexd9
08-02-2009, 06:29 PM
Eh that's okay take your time.

Thanks!

Blakexd9
08-03-2009, 08:23 AM
Chapter 7, Sabriate.

We got back to the house to see everyone sleeping but one girl. She was sitting on her bed and she looked scared. She looked a little older than me, probably 13. She looked at us like she knew us, even know I know I didn't know her. She came over to us and said,

"My name is Sabriate."

"Hello" Sinun said

Just then Dayaru woke up, he told us,

"We have been waiting for you to come back. Did you give the golden apples to Moue?"

"No, we accidentally dropped them into a volcano." I said

"Oh," He said

"But that is not what we need to worry about now. Far away on the other side of the world, a huge beast has got out of its cage. Well not fully out of his cage. If he gets out of his cage he will destroy the world. That's why I need you Kenson, Sinun, Gragon and Sabriate to go find the 5 golden mirrors. Once you get all 5 golden mirrors you will have to put them in frount of the beasts cage and it will put the beast in there, no matter how far away the beast is he will just go right into his cage. This only happens every 1000 years."

"Yes sir!" Sinun said "We will go get the mirrors"

"But first I need you to check out a city that has been destroyed by some purple fog."

"OK!" I said

we walked out of the house and started walking to the city with the purple fog.

We walked a long time but we finally got there, it was destroyed. there was nothing left but destroyed houses.

"Lets see if there is anything still around here" Sinun said

We looked around, nothing. Then we found this cave,

"This mustve been were the people evacuated." Sinun said

"Lets go in." Gragon said

We went in bats were everywere. We walked for sometime and it seemed like a hour.

"There is nothing here, but I feel someone coming behind us." Sabriate said

We looked behind us. No one there. We started walking back. When we got out there was more fog.

"Good thing we stayed in there" Sinun said "We would of died if we stood out here longer."

"Lets go tell Dayaru what happened." I said

"OK!" Gragon said

When we got back to the house everyone was awake, Dayrau said to us

"What was it like?"

"Destroyed. Totaly Destroyed, nothing left. but a cave that the people must've gone in." I said

"I see..." Dayaru said

"OK! I need you guys now to go find the 5 golden mirrors now!" Dayaru said

"Yes sir." Sinun said

'I think the first mirror is in this canyon." He showed us a picture of it.

"I know where that is" Sabriate said "Its far south."

We walked outside and started walking south. Going to find the first mirror.

To Be Continued!

Ryaque
08-03-2009, 08:27 AM
Oh this is really getting good. More please.:mrgreen:

Blakexd9
08-03-2009, 08:28 AM
Oh this is really getting good. More please.:mrgreen:

This arc is very important. It will be like 10 chapters. Maybe even more.

Ryaque
08-03-2009, 08:30 AM
Cool!!

Blakexd9
08-04-2009, 11:43 AM
Chapter 8, The Canyon of death.

When we finally got to the Canyon we stopped to look at its size. It was huge! We walked for a while, we walked past some bushes and out came some deadly wolfs. They looked hungry, just like the night this all started.

"Lis Mondo!" I said

I picked up my sword, swung it at the wolfs and they fell down. They weren't dead.

"Hurry!" Sinun said "They will get up soon!"

We ran far away from them, they came at us. I held up my sword, then they ran away scared from the sword. Well it wasn't the sword they were scared of, it was something behind us. I looked behind us, it was a huge snake. We ran. We ran back the way we came. Not all of us, Sabriate took out her bow and arrow. Shot a couple arrows at the snake, but it didn't do anything. Just made the snake want to kill us more. With its tail the snake hit the canyon very hard, witch made a lot of rocks fall down. The rocks fell right in front of us. Now it was a dead end. Sinun took out her knife, and ran straight at the snake. She ran up its tail and was on top of the snake, just like with the Cannibal she started stabbing it. She yelled,

"Sabriate! Shoot a arrow at his eye! Hurry!"

Sabriate shot a arrow at the snakes eye. She hit it like it was a bulls eye. The snake fell to the ground. Lifeless.

"Well..." Sinun said "Looks like that was the first thing that we had to face..."

"Yup..." Gragon said

We walked for a while, again. Then finally we saw the golden mirror. But guess what was guarding it? 2 cyclops. Two one eyed freaks. They looked straight at us, with their one eye.

"No one goes any farther." one of them said

"Yeah!" the other one said

Gragon turned into his werewolf form. He started attacking one of them. He said

"I got this one! You guys get the other one!"

Not thinking I charged straight at it. He just hit me with his hand and I went flying back.

"How are we supposed to do this?" I said

Sabriate shot some arrows at its eye. Now that made it irritated. It hit us back. Well only Sinun and Sabriate. I ran behind him. I did something that was more funny than good. I stabbed my sword into his butt. That must of did it cause it started picking up rocks and throwing them at everyone. Even the other cyclops. I almost got hit by one, then he picked up a rock so big he just dropped it on himself.

"Well I guess he is taken care of." I said

"OK... I guess" Sinun said

Gragon had already killed the other one. We all walked to the mirror. I went to go get it.

"Stop!" Sabriate said "Its a trap!"

"How do you know that?" I said

I took the mirror and said,

"See? Nothing happened."

For a moment it was silent.

"OK then" Sinun said "Lets go."

We started walking but then lots of rocks fell off the top of the canyon!

"RUN!" Sabriate said

We started running. But then a big rock stopped us from going. Rocks were falling from everywhere.

To Be Continued!

Blakexd9
08-04-2009, 01:43 PM
I entered this story in a fanfic contest and it got a 4/10 with one judge and a 5/10 with another judge. :cry::cry::cry::cry::cry:

Ryaque
08-04-2009, 02:40 PM
Hey it's still a good story. It's one of the best I've read. I give ya a 9/10. Plus I love the last part it was really funny.

Blakexd9
08-04-2009, 02:47 PM
Hey it's still a good story. It's one of the best I've read. I give ya a 9/10. Plus I love the last part it was really funny.

Thanks!

Blakexd9
08-05-2009, 02:38 PM
Who is ready for chapter 9?

Blakexd9
08-05-2009, 02:38 PM
Cuz I am!

Ryaque
08-05-2009, 02:40 PM
mmmmmmmeeeeeeeee!!!!!

Blakexd9
08-05-2009, 03:04 PM
Chapter 9, Rock Avalanche.

The rocks were falling everywhere. A couple seconds ago a big rock fell right in front of us so we couldn't go. I hit the rock with my sword, nothing happened.

"We don't have much time!" Sinun said

I hit the rock as hard as I could, and there was a crack in it. I hit it about 4 more times, the crack got bigger. Sabriate shot a arrow at the rock, that did it. The rock split in half.

"Lets go!!" Sinun said

We ran. Rocks falling everywhere. We all almost got hit by a big rock. A little rock hit my head. Another little rock hit Gragon's head and he fell down.

"Gragon!" I shouted

He was unconscious, I grabbed him. He was hanging on my back. We started running again. We finally got out of the canyon. Gragon woke up. We sat down, tired.

After about 10 minutes we started walking back to the house were Dayaru was.

When we got to the house we all collapsed on a bed.

"So, did you get the first mirror?" Dayaru said

"Yeah." We all said

"I have no idea where the next mirror is" Dayaru said

"Sinun, Gragon," he said

"Yes" Sinun and Gragon said

"I need you to go show Kenson and Sabriate their beds."

"OK." They said

We walked up some stairs that I never had seen before. Upstairs were 4 beds. I knew they were for all of us, Me, Sabriate, Sinun, and Gragon. Two of them you could tell that they were used, probably Sinun and Gragon's.

"So this is your bed" Sinun said

"And this is Sabriate's bed."

We all collapsed on our beds, and before I knew it we were all asleep.

We awoke to Dayaru yelling,

"I know were the next mirror is!"

We all came downstairs.

"I think the next mirror is in a Pyramid!"

"A Pyramid?" We all said tired

"Yes! But all of you go get some more rest before you go get it."

"OK..." I said

We went upstairs and went to sleep.

To Be Continued...!

Blakexd9
08-05-2009, 03:04 PM
mmmmmmmeeeeeeeee!!!!!

There ya go!

Ryaque
08-05-2009, 03:07 PM
A pyramid? This is getting really good.

Blakexd9
08-05-2009, 03:11 PM
A pyramid? This is getting really good.

Not just a pyramid, a pyramid with Quicksand.

Ryaque
08-05-2009, 03:14 PM
Aww you're going to drive me crazy waiting!!

Blakexd9
08-05-2009, 03:25 PM
Aww you're going to drive me crazy waiting!!

And lots of other stuff. A trapdoor with spikes inside it.

Ryaque
08-05-2009, 03:26 PM
Uh COME ON WRITE IT QUICK!!!

Blakexd9
08-05-2009, 03:32 PM
Uh COME ON WRITE IT QUICK!!!

Oh and one more thing, The man made out of Fire. He can control fire.

NaruSakufluff4ever
08-05-2009, 04:36 PM
:mrgreen: this deserves a ten.

NaruSakufluff4ever
08-05-2009, 04:36 PM
Zillion!!!!!!!

Blakexd9
08-05-2009, 04:40 PM
:mrgreen: this deserves a ten.

Thank you! :mrgreen:

Blakexd9
08-05-2009, 04:42 PM
I will be going on vacation so I wont be posting any new chapters for 4 days...

Blakexd9
08-06-2009, 06:59 AM
There wont be any new chapters for a while...

Ryaque
08-06-2009, 08:17 AM
WHAT??!! Aww....have a good vacation but you better have the next part when you get back!!

Blakexd9
08-09-2009, 03:19 PM
Chapter 10 will be up soon.

Blakexd9
08-09-2009, 03:20 PM
I just got back from vacation!

Ryaque
08-09-2009, 04:49 PM
*jumps up and down* WOO HOO!!!!!

Blakexd9
08-09-2009, 04:51 PM
*jumps up and down* WOO HOO!!!!!

Very soon it will come out.

Blakexd9
08-09-2009, 04:51 PM
Oh hey im a chunin :mrgreen:

Ryaque
08-09-2009, 04:55 PM
Lol, congrates.

Blakexd9
08-09-2009, 05:12 PM
Chapter 10, The Second Mirror.

I woke up and everyone was already downstairs. I walked downstairs,

"Good morning Kenson!" Dayaru said

"Its morning already?" I said

"Yes!" He said "We know were the pyramid is!"

"Were?" I said

"Its far east." "Its so far you cant walk there. You will need a Taxi."

"So were are we going to get one?" I said

"Look outside"

I looked outside, there was a taxi right there. Sabriate, Sinun and Gragon got in the taxi. So did I.

We were going smoothly for a while. In till a car came up to us and shot a arrow at our tire.

"The wheel is going to go flat!" Sabriate yelled,

Out of the other car came another arrow, it it our window and broke it.

"Kenson, get out of the car." Sinun said, "We will come in a minute."

"Why?" I said

"Just do it!" She said

I jumped out of the car. It didn't hurt as much as I thought it would. Then Sabriate, Sinun and Gragon came flying out of the car. The car crashed and exploded.

"What about the driver?" I said

"I don't know were he is. He must of got caught in the explosion and died." Sinun said

We walked east for a while. we finally came to a huge pyramid.

"I guess this is it" I said

"Yup!" Sinun said

"But wait, were is the door?" I said

"Probably at the top" Sabriate said

We climbed up to the top of the pyramid. We opened a door and climbed down a latter. We stood still, looking all over the the place. Looking back I couldn't describe what it looked like. We walked forward. We walked for a while, then Gragon yelled,

"AHHHHHHHH!!!!!"

He fell into a trapdoor with spikes. Lots of spikes. I wasn't worried he is immortal.

"Dont worry" I said "He is immortal."

"He isn't if he gets stabbed in the heart!" Sinun said

I looked down to see Gragon stabbed right in the heart.

To Be Continued....!

Ryaque
08-10-2009, 07:20 AM
Oh crap....GRAGON!!! (write more this just keeps getting better and better with each chapter)

Blakexd9
08-10-2009, 07:21 AM
Oh crap....GRAGON!!! (write more this just keeps getting better and better with each chapter)

lol its comin.

Ryaque
08-10-2009, 07:31 AM
Okay I'll wait....

Blakexd9
08-10-2009, 07:46 AM
Chapter 11, Gragon's Death?

I was staring at Gragon, stabbed in the heart. He said,

"Go without me..."

He coughed up some blood.

"We have to go get the mirror" Sinun said

"Why? And just leave Gragon here to die?" I yelled

She grabbed my hand and Sabriate's hand. We started walking. We stopped dead in out tracks when we saw this gooey snake like thing.

"Watch out" Sinun said "It spits out acid, acid that melts you"

It spit at us. Some of the acid got on my shirt, it melted to nothing. Nothing happened to my body.

"Lis Mondo" I said

I picked up my sword. I stabbed the snake thing, I took it out. It was covered in goo. I stabbed it as hard as I could. It fell into some sand. Dead.

"Lets move on!" Sinun said

We climbed up some stairs to see the mirror. In a bunch of sunlight. I walked to it, but something stopped me. A man. Well not a man, a man made out of fire. Yes FIRE! He shot a fireball at me. I stabbed him, it went right through him.

"How are we supposed to beat this guy?" I said

"I dunno!" Sinun said

"Well why don't you help me here!" I said

Sabriate shot some arrows at him, no effect. Just went right through him.

"Hahahahahaha! You cant beat me you little bugs!" Fire said

I decided to call him Fire. At least that's what he looked like his name was.

Fire pulled out 2 swords,

"Who wants to play?" He said

Sinun and I got our swords and we were sword fighting. CHING CHING! Sabriate shot some arrows at him. Still no use.

"Go down the stairs!" Sinun said "He cant go past them!"

We went down the stairs.

"We have to have a plan" I said

"Yeah, we do" Sinun said

"I know what to do." Sabriate said

"What?" Sinun and I said at the same time.

"Water." She said

"What about water?" We said

"We pour water on him."

"Oh! I get it!" We said "But were are we supposed to find water in the middle of the desert?"

"I dunno" she said

To Be Continued...!

Ryaque
08-10-2009, 08:28 AM
This is really good. That is a good question though, where are they going to find water in a desert? Lol, more please.:mrgreen:

Blakexd9
08-10-2009, 10:01 AM
This is really good. That is a good question though, where are they going to find water in a desert? Lol, more please.:mrgreen:

Looks like the people who put the mirror there were smart. They let the man made out of fire guard it cuz the only way to beat him is to pour a lot of water on him. and its in the middle of the desert.

Ryaque
08-10-2009, 10:12 AM
Looks like the people who put the mirror there were smart. They let the man made out of fire guard it cuz the only way to beat him is to pour a lot of water on him. and its in the middle of the desert.
Yeah, VERY smart.

Blakexd9
08-10-2009, 10:12 AM
Yeah, VERY smart.

lol...

Blakexd9
08-10-2009, 10:25 AM
IM done with 12

Blakexd9
08-10-2009, 10:40 AM
I have chapter 12 but im not going to post it yet

Blakexd9
08-10-2009, 10:46 AM
muhahahahahahahhaaaaaaaa

Ryaque
08-12-2009, 06:44 AM
*pouts in a corner* You're evil sometimes....

Blakexd9
08-12-2009, 07:14 AM
*pouts in a corner* You're evil sometimes....

Shoot, I have to write it all over again...:cry:

Ryaque
08-12-2009, 07:17 AM
How come?

Blakexd9
08-12-2009, 07:37 AM
[QUOTE=Ryaque;858927]How come?[/QUOTE

Its a long story...

Ryaque
08-12-2009, 07:41 AM
Are you okay? You seem very sad....

Blakexd9
08-12-2009, 07:48 AM
Are you okay? You seem very sad....

Yeah! JK!

Ryaque
08-12-2009, 07:50 AM
Well don't scare me like that!! I hate seeing my bro sad....but you got me I have to say.

Blakexd9
08-12-2009, 07:54 AM
Well don't scare me like that!! I hate seeing my bro sad....but you got me I have to say.

Sorry... lol

Ryaque
08-12-2009, 07:56 AM
I can't belive I was fooled so easily....lol, you're a good actor.

Blakexd9
08-12-2009, 07:59 AM
Im making chapter 12 so expect it.

Ryaque
08-12-2009, 08:19 AM
Woo HOO!!!

Blakexd9
08-12-2009, 08:24 AM
Chapter 12, Fire.

We said nothing, just staring at each other. The question was: Where were we going to find water in the middle of the desert?

"If we try to find water underground the sand would just collapse sometime..." Sinun said

"I know..." I said

"WHERE ARE WE SUPPOSED TO FIND WATER??!!!" Sinun screamed,

"Thats it,"I said

I ran up to fire and had a sword fight with him.

"I just remembered!" Sabriate said " I have some water in the backpack!"

But Gragon was wearing the backpack. He fell into a trapdoor of spikes. Fortunately the backpack was sitting right by the trap door. Gragon still had the same expression on his face. I found a water bottle. I poured all of it on Fire. Nothing happened.

"You think that is going to beat the great Fire?" Fire said

"So your name really is Fire." I said

He threw fireballs at all of us. They missed, and hit the sand.

"Go behind the stairs!" Sinun said

We went behind the stairs.

"Man! How are we going to beat this guy?" I said

"We need a big bucket of water." Sinun said

"But where are we supposed to find water? We are in the middle of the desert." I said

"I wonder if that is the only way to beat him." Sinun said

"Look over there" Sabriate said

She pointed to some words, they must of been there for hundreds of years. But it was English. It said

"No one has got out of this pyramid. Leave now."

"What was that about?" I said

"It doesn't prove anything it just tells you get out." Sinun said

"I have a plan" Sabriate said

She told us what to do.

"OK!" Sinun and I said

We went up the stairs.

"You come back for another round?" Fire said

I hit his sword with my sword. We started sword fighting.

"Sinun, NOW!" I said

Sinun rolled a bucket and it made fire fall down. Then Sabriate shot a big arrow at him and he fell down the stairs.

"He is only frozen for a minute so grab the mirror and lets go!" Sinun yelled

I grabbed the mirror knowing it was probably a trap. It was. The floor and everything turned into sand, quicksand. Also behind where the mirror used to be was a time bomb, 10 seconds. Fire started to get up,

"RUN!!!" Sinun said

We ran. We couldn't run as fast, because the quicksand was trying to suck us up. Fire was chasing us, and 10 seconds turned to 9.

To Be Continued...!

Blakexd9
08-12-2009, 08:24 AM
Woo HOO!!!

There ya go!

Dem0n Zabuza
08-12-2009, 12:27 PM
I think that theres too much action - your in the house next thing you know 3 giants are attacking the town :|

Dem0n Zabuza
08-12-2009, 12:30 PM
I rated 7 on scale from 1 to 10 Because of the sudden action

Ryaque
08-12-2009, 01:21 PM
Oh this is really good......:mrgreen::mrgreen::mrgreen:

Blakexd9
08-12-2009, 03:37 PM
I rated 7 on scale from 1 to 10 Because of the sudden action

Thanks!

Should Of Had A V8
08-14-2009, 09:18 AM
Awesome story!

Should Of Had A V8
08-14-2009, 09:19 AM
*pouts in a corner* You're evil sometimes....
Wassup i know he is

Should Of Had A V8
08-14-2009, 09:20 AM
HEllo FRisend:mrgreen:

Blakexd9
08-14-2009, 09:40 AM
Thanks V8! I saw you post that! (I was right next to you)

Blakexd9
08-16-2009, 10:06 AM
I haven't made any chapters cuz my cuzins are over.

Blakexd9
08-16-2009, 10:07 AM
THe next chapter will probably come out Wednesday.

Blakexd9
08-16-2009, 10:07 AM
Or Tuesday.

Blakexd9
09-14-2009, 05:02 PM
Sorry I haven't been able to write the chapters yet. Soon it will!