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weshir
03-25-2012, 03:08 PM
Name:Kizia Otawaku
Age: 12
Village:the valley hidden in ash?
Blood type:A
Chakra type: fire (ash)
Personality: hot headed, brave, can be generous sometime, clumsy, and deep down is kind-hearted. And trustworthy
Biography: an orphan since she was born, was raised by wolves, learned from the wolves how to fight, and. Learns she has a sister so she looks for her
Appearance: red long hair with black highlights with a ponytail to the side of her head, black eyes by day and red eyes by night, 5"3, skinny, sometimes wears glasses, long finger nails, barely smiles unless amused, fish net shirt with red sweater over it and very long sleeves and fishnet leggings with mini skirt, two bells on pony tail, large bust and average butt

loganace
03-28-2012, 12:25 PM
(oooh putting the blood type, fancy)

Nice character. I can tell that you care about your characters and you spend time on making them so I only have a small constructive criticism. I would just make a kennkai gennkai. But really I don't have any criticism on anything that you have written. I am going to make another character as well. I usually don't give constructive critism to characters that I can tell are marry sue or I don't feel like giving it to people sometimes.

Hozuki
03-29-2012, 08:07 AM
Yea... I should add more to my character because you can't not have a chakra nature.

loganace
03-29-2012, 04:31 PM
I am looking for a rival character for the fanfic. Do you want your character to be an option for the rival Hozuki.

Sexy~Lexie
03-29-2012, 05:04 PM
Great character you should make more weshir :)

weshir
03-29-2012, 05:22 PM
Great character you should make more weshir :)
Thx I will

weshir
03-29-2012, 05:24 PM
(oooh putting the blood type, fancy)

Nice character. I can tell that you care about your characters and you spend time on making them so I only have a small constructive criticism. I would just make a kennkai gennkai. But really I don't have any criticism on anything that you have written. I am going to make another character as well. I usually don't give constructive critism to characters that I can tell are marry sue or I don't feel like giving it to people sometimes.
Well thx and I will make one

weshir
03-29-2012, 05:56 PM
Yentai Santosu
Age: 15
Blood type: AB
Village: the mountian hidden in snow
Keikei Genkai: his is to reshape or disfigure any type of liquid
Height: 5 feet 7in.
Appearence: long silver and white straight hair, a chain that looks like small rosary seal, a silver scully on, with dark silver gloves matching it, silverish gray eye color, a black as coal sweater under a wolf fur coat, with dark denim pants, silver snow boots (light) with black zipper on the sides , sometimes wear a ninja silverish gray mask, and one long silver night swords with a katana hidden on the bottom of his snow boot
Biography: (add later)
Weapons: long silver and shiny night sword hand crafted by the disciples of the ice lord
And a hand crafyed katana by his mom Naia Santosu

Hes a side character but another one of my creations :)

loganace
03-29-2012, 06:07 PM
Want them in my fanfic?

weshir
03-30-2012, 02:52 PM
Sure that'll be cool

puppetmasterpossession
03-30-2012, 03:38 PM
#This is for bleach, not Naruto....

weshir
03-30-2012, 03:42 PM
Oops oh well

Lone_Espada
03-30-2012, 03:45 PM
#This is for bleach, not Naruto....

Where does it say that?

loganace
03-30-2012, 04:35 PM
Where does it say that?
It doesent. It is for any freeverse character. Itif FV character creation. Not BFV character creation.

puppetmasterpossession
03-30-2012, 05:59 PM
Lol, I just saw that. I always though it was BFV. :P


Carry on.

loganace
03-30-2012, 06:36 PM
I thougt that at first as well.

weshir
04-01-2012, 02:05 PM
were is ya fanfic

loganace
04-01-2012, 02:34 PM
I haven't started it yet.

weshir
04-02-2012, 01:03 AM
? ummmm ok then?

loganace
04-02-2012, 03:56 PM
I am going to start it soon.

weshir
04-03-2012, 06:23 AM
oh so how many characters do you have in so far?