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Vaan
07-16-2009, 03:08 AM
Uhm..this is my first poem I ever made and I like to know what people think of it:

Oh,What a beautiful sight
in the middle of the night
the moon shining in all its bright
No sound is what I hear
apart from the wind silently-
whispering in my ear.
A whisper so pleasently
It makes me wish you were here.

At this moment of a lifetime
being alone is such a crime
All this thinking makes time fly
and I notice that clouds are coming by
From the clouds I feel her tears
heaven is crying so it appears.
I feel the rain around my eyes
but then I realize
She's not the only one that cries.

Shkin
07-16-2009, 03:33 AM
its good...kinda lonely..

i think you're the one who's got something that i should know...;)

kibaxino4ever234
07-16-2009, 04:58 AM
It was wery good...i really like it:D

Ryaque
07-16-2009, 06:41 AM
I like it a lot.:mrgreen:

athoatho
07-16-2009, 06:54 AM
why didnt you noticed the stars ? the poem is very nice i think it reflect real emotions, right ? but in a clear night how can one miss the beautiful stars ?

Yoshi-Chan
07-16-2009, 06:55 AM
i like it.

Vaan
07-16-2009, 07:01 AM
why didnt you noticed the stars ? the poem is very nice i think it reflect real emotions, right ? but in a clear night how can one miss the beautiful stars ?

One of my closest friends shortly before I wrote this,and I was
simply devastated at the time.I didnt even notice such beauty there.

Ryaque
07-16-2009, 07:05 AM
One of my closest friends shortly before I wrote this,and I was
simply devastated at the time.I didnt even notice such beauty there.
So sad....I know how you feel though.

SakuraGirl
07-16-2009, 07:10 AM
very very good i think your good at writing poems

athoatho
07-16-2009, 07:14 AM
i am sorry if i was rude, but the first part was talking about the beauty of the night so immediately i imagined a starry night, i lived such moment it is so unique sorry again if i disturbed you

sasruto
07-16-2009, 02:11 PM
it's gooood