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Hiro
08-07-2009, 09:13 PM
Alright, okay.
Now, do you want me to give you a clue?
yup ^_^

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-07-2009, 09:13 PM
Alright, the mysterious person is a
Kage.

Yori
08-07-2009, 09:19 PM
Whoever he is, he sounded bad ass in his part last chapter

Hiro
08-07-2009, 09:19 PM
Alright, the mysterious person is a
Kage.
so we'll see more of him in the next arc ^o^

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-07-2009, 09:20 PM
Whoever he is, he sounded bad ass in his part last chapter

Hmmm, to let you know, this is a time before villages existed, so basically, you guys are living in a time several years ahead of us.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-07-2009, 09:21 PM
so we'll see more of him in the next arc ^o^

No, we'll see the other Kages in the next arc and we'll also finally see "The Old Man" that Menrui was talking about in the first chapter.

Yori
08-07-2009, 09:21 PM
Hmmm, to let you know, this is a time before villages existed, so basically, you guys are living in a time several years ahead of us.

Sooo, my characters are younger than yours? If soo, then pride pm i got an idea who i want as the missing-nin from your story

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-07-2009, 09:23 PM
Sooo, my characters are younger than yours? If soo, then pride pm i got an idea who i want as the missing-nin from your story

Alright, tell me and also, I have an idea for how for my characters to come to your time, it's very good, and involves a "time machine".

Yori
08-07-2009, 09:24 PM
Alright, tell me and also, I have an idea for how for my characters to come to your time, it's very good, and involves a "time machine".

Time maching? hmm we will talk about it

shaddix301
08-07-2009, 09:26 PM
no u should make a time travel jutsu with nui!!!!

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-07-2009, 09:26 PM
Time maching? hmm we will talk about it

Hmmm, you PM me about how your character meet mine and who the missing-nin is, and I'll tell you how my characters reach your time frame.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-07-2009, 09:26 PM
no u should make a time travel jutsu with nui!!!!

Drat, you figured out part of it!

shaddix301
08-07-2009, 09:28 PM
HAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHHHHAHAHA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!
*pantingly breathes heavy* MUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-07-2009, 09:29 PM
HAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHHHHAHAHA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!
*pantingly breathes heavy* MUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !

-kicks you-
Alright, now..

shaddix301
08-07-2009, 09:36 PM
*poof shadow clone disapears ~ shadds apears behind pride with kunai*

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-07-2009, 09:40 PM
-sidesteps, dodging the clone-
Alrighty.

shaddix301
08-07-2009, 09:58 PM
Earth Style: Underground Projectile Fish Jutsu!!!!!!!!!! *shadds pops out of the ground pulls pride into the rocks* *pops out and teases pride* MUUAHAHAHAHAHA!

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-07-2009, 09:59 PM
-grins-
You shouldn't have done that.
-opens mouth, revealing 20 paper bombs-
BOOM

shaddix301
08-07-2009, 10:01 PM
aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhh!!!!!

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-07-2009, 10:03 PM
Ha, that's what you deserve.

shaddix301
08-07-2009, 10:18 PM
hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!! *yellow aura surrounds shadds* HHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA! *shadds goes Female Supersaiyan 98767983476083740698!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!* attacks pride, sticks out tobgue* lllllllllllll!!!!!!!!!

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-07-2009, 10:19 PM
-__-"....sidesteps as you smash into the center of the world and burn from the molten lava.

shaddix301
08-07-2009, 10:23 PM
OKAY ENOUGH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *shadds comes out of lava, butt naked, (with hardened lava in the right places) with little white flag* i give up...

takuya
08-07-2009, 10:25 PM
OKAY ENOUGH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *shadds comes out of lava, butt naked, (with hardened lava in the right places) with little white flag* i give up...Thank god for the hardened lava in the right place I don't wanna see that.EDIT:This was written when I think know shad was a girl.EDIT:This is back in void since shad said he was really a guy(how many times are we gonna get tricked)

shaddix301
08-07-2009, 10:29 PM
*flies home puts fresh clothes on * truce pride*

takuya
08-07-2009, 10:30 PM
*flies home puts fresh clothes on (panties!!!) * truce prideDude in your profile it says you're a dude*squints eyes*why would you put on panties?EDIT:Um neverrrrmind.(Feels like an idiot.)EDIT:(Doesn't feel like an idiot anymore)

mangagirl
08-07-2009, 10:30 PM
hmm whats happening here

shaddix301
08-07-2009, 10:32 PM
me and pride were having a fight... he beat up a girl!!

shaddix301
08-08-2009, 02:30 AM
just kidding im not a girl...but a girl beat me up though:D

shaddix301
08-08-2009, 07:23 AM
just wanted to say that...

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 08:40 AM
just kidding im not a girl...but a girl beat me up though:D

-__-"....okay.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 02:13 PM
Arc Two: The Meeting of the Kages


Chapter Twenty-One: One Week Before the Meeting


The journey from the Bird Clan was uneventful: Menrui had lost a few teeth from the punch delivered by Toshi; it had taken two days for Vatas and his group to come back to their home, the Crossroads. One of the most visited areas in the Ninja World, it's nickname was "The Gathering Area". Important meetings were held here regularly, and most of the decisions that changed the world were made here. The Crossroads was located in the middle of the villages, and had no true geographic landscape, to the north were mountains cold as ice, to the south a desert, to the west a thick forest, and to the east, a mountain range. At the center was a large city, with tall skyscrapers hanging though the air.
There were four entrances and each one was guarded. Certain things were required to enter and not many people had those things.


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Several kilometers away, in a desert landscape, where scattered sand blew through the wind, where the sun radiated everywhere, two figures silently walked through the desert, both wearing brown robes with their hoods pulled on to protect their heads from the sun, one figure fat and the other short.
After strolling through the seemingly endless desert for several minutes, one figure stopped and suddenly fell down, landing on his behind. His hood dropped down from the impact, revealing a circular face with a handband tied to his head . Wide brown eyes matched with his tired expression as he yelled, "Sadakage, let's take a break already!" The short figure stopped walking and glanced at her comrade. She then sighed and pulled her hood down. Short silver hair barely reached her shoulder, her peculiar white eyes matching with it.
"It's just been five minutes since we've set off, and you're telling me you're already tired?! It's a miracle you became the Co-Kage of the Sun Village, Jirobo!" She yelled.
Jirobo, not holding a bag of chips, replied with a yell.
"Speak for yourself, Sadakage! You're six years old, for god's sake, Yuno!"


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Now standing before a large black door, Vatas glanced at it, pondering on something. Nui stood next to him, holding a book and speed-reading through it. Toshi, meanwhile, impatientately stomped her foot on the ground while Menrui lay on the ground, asleep. All of them still had their masks on, and were told to not remove it until the mission has been fully finished.



To Be Continued

mangagirl
08-08-2009, 02:20 PM
did i told u how much i love your story?

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 02:22 PM
Yes.....what's your favorite character?

mangagirl
08-08-2009, 02:25 PM
sakura helga lolz

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 02:26 PM
Alright.

The Demon Zabuza
08-08-2009, 02:31 PM
I just had a Sasori and Deidara flashback...

What is the point of having crossroads that only certain people can access?

I'm confuesed.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 02:32 PM
I just had a Sasori and Deidara flashback...

What is the point of having crossroads that only certain people can access?

I'm confuesed.

Hmm, it will be explained later, sometime in the next chapter.

mangagirl
08-08-2009, 02:33 PM
write more!!!

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 02:36 PM
Thanks, manga.

shaddix301
08-08-2009, 03:01 PM
NEWS: i finished vatas!!!

shaddix301
08-08-2009, 03:18 PM
Hello people!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

mangagirl
08-08-2009, 03:28 PM
anytime vat and hello

shaddix301
08-08-2009, 03:30 PM
hey is vat still online? i wanted to show him the pic of vatas i drew

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 03:31 PM
hey is vat still online? i wanted to show him the pic of vatas i drew

I'm here and also, tell me how you liked Chapter 21.

mangagirl
08-08-2009, 03:32 PM
yes he is

shaddix301
08-08-2009, 03:33 PM
it was BADASS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 03:37 PM
it was BADASS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

How so?

shaddix301
08-08-2009, 03:41 PM
idk but i wanna learn about the crossroads

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 03:42 PM
idk but i wanna learn about the crossroads

And also why it's guarded and people can't enter with out a...

shaddix301
08-08-2009, 03:43 PM
A donut?

shaddix301
08-08-2009, 03:43 PM
O a kage!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!???????????????????? ???

Space Cowboy Sasori
08-08-2009, 03:44 PM
Just read that latest chapter, I'm loving it. When they were in the desert it reminded me of Sasori and Deidara going to capture Gaara.

You need some puppet users in here. lol

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 03:46 PM
Just read that latest chapter, I'm loving it. When they were in the desert it reminded me of Sasori and Deidara going to capture Gaara.

You need some puppet users in here. lol
Lol, the Demon Zabuza said that too....what was the best part about it?
And the puppet user thing, I already have that covered. :cool:
O a kage!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!???????????????????? ???

No, but it's close.

shaddix301
08-08-2009, 03:47 PM
a kage's...soul?

Space Cowboy Sasori
08-08-2009, 03:48 PM
Lol, the Demon Zabuza said that too....what was the best part about it?
And the puppet user thing, I already have that covered. :cool:


No, but it's close.

A. I'm looking forward to that.
B. I liked all the background information this chapter gave honestly.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 03:48 PM
a kage's...soul?

-__-"...no, the story'll tell you later.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 03:50 PM
A. I'm looking forward to that.
B. I liked all the background information this chapter gave honestly.

Hmmm, alright for A, the puppets users (there will be two or more) will be introduced in Chapter 22 or 23 and also, all the new characters that have been introduced are at least Jonin-Level.
For B, I thought so.

shaddix301
08-08-2009, 04:13 PM
waitis this before or after the orginal naruto series?

Space Cowboy Sasori
08-08-2009, 04:14 PM
I think it's a totally different story in a different land.

shaddix301
08-08-2009, 04:15 PM
I think it's a totally different story in a different land.
i know but BEFORE or AFTER is wat im talking bout...

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 04:16 PM
I think it's a totally different story in a different land.

Hmmm, totally different story that happened a couple hundred years before the Naruto Story.

shaddix301
08-08-2009, 04:18 PM
maybeone of ur puppet masters could be kankuro or sasoris ancester jk

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 04:20 PM
maybeone of ur puppet masters could be kankuro or sasoris ancester jk

Nah, even if I did, it would be copyright.

shaddix301
08-08-2009, 04:21 PM
THATS Y I SAID JK!!!!!!!!!!! jeez

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 04:23 PM
I know....Sasori, Zabuza, post something instead of just sitting there silently.

shaddix301
08-08-2009, 04:31 PM
did u put the pic up already?

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 04:32 PM
No, I'm trying to do something.

shaddix301
08-08-2009, 04:34 PM
well HURRY UP!!!!!!!

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 04:36 PM
Alright, I already uploaded it to my account on PhotoBucket.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 04:39 PM
There, I finished!
Check it out now!

shaddix301
08-08-2009, 04:55 PM
YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY!!!!! to believe that 10 mins ago that was on my desk...

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 04:56 PM
Lol, it probably still is on your desk.

nine tailed fury
08-08-2009, 04:56 PM
*walks in looking burnt, and a piece of hair is on fire*..........WHY did you have to blow up that pm?

shaddix301
08-08-2009, 05:04 PM
bye logging out!!!

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 05:05 PM
*walks in looking burnt, and a piece of hair is on fire*..........WHY did you have to blow up that pm?
Fury, Critic Channel 50!

bye logging out!!!

Bye, shaddix.

nine tailed fury
08-08-2009, 05:06 PM
fury, critic channel 50!
oh, god. I forgot when you blew up my pm!!!!! I never got a chance to read it!!!!!

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 05:07 PM
Well, read it know!
Fury Critic begins in three minutes!

mangagirl
08-08-2009, 05:09 PM
fury is back yay!

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 05:11 PM
fury is back yay!

Yep.....-waits for Fury to finish-

Space Cowboy Sasori
08-08-2009, 05:16 PM
Next chapter is when?

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 05:16 PM
Tomorrow, like always.

nine tailed fury
08-08-2009, 05:39 PM
*camera turns on* its time for everyone favorite aftershow. FURY CRITIC!!!!!! *hits applause button but the boo goes off* ok, who messed with the buttons.....that means the boo button must be the applause. *presses button and nothing happens*........ok on with the show........for this chapter, i give it a. *presses dramatic music button, but instead horror music and a loud girly screech play*......moving on......i give it an 8 out of 10. for the first half, really nothing in particular happens, then in the secong part, we see the sadakage and the co-kage. *2 very strong looking people walk in and start dragging me out* what the heck? let me go!! *one of the camera crew people call out "um, you pressed the security button"* fine, i will roll with it. this has been fury critic, channel 50 news, signing off.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 05:42 PM
Um, actually, you've been move to Channel 48 and also, it's Sadakage.

nine tailed fury
08-08-2009, 05:51 PM
Um, actually, you've been move to Channel 48 and also, it's Sadakage.
thats what i put.....

nine tailed fury
08-08-2009, 05:51 PM
Um, actually, you've been move to Channel 48 and also, it's Sadakage.
why do you keep moving my channel.....

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 05:56 PM
It's due to popularity.

nine tailed fury
08-08-2009, 06:00 PM
It's due to popularity.
its eventually going to be on channel 1. YA HEAR THAT WOW. MOVE OVER!!!!!

Hiro
08-08-2009, 06:09 PM
it was good, i liked it. ^o^

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 06:11 PM
Thanks, what was the best part, Hiro?

Hiro
08-08-2009, 06:13 PM
Thanks, what was the best part, Hiro?
the 6 year old sadakage, that was really cool, she must be even more of a prodigy than gaara, is she a host?

nine tailed fury
08-08-2009, 06:13 PM
so far, this is the best fury critic that i made. but im beginning to run out of random ideas. then again, i still have ALOT more.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-08-2009, 06:14 PM
the 6 year old sadakage, that was really cool, she must be even more of a prodigy than gaara, is she a host?

.......Maybe..

shaddix301
08-08-2009, 11:58 PM
1000 tailed tiger

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-09-2009, 09:00 PM
Wow, that was a random guess..

The Demon Zabuza
08-09-2009, 09:19 PM
Wow, that was a random guess..

And possibly based on Ryaque...

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-09-2009, 09:21 PM
Eh, that's true...

nine tailed fury
08-10-2009, 02:56 PM
is the new chapter coming out any time soon?

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-10-2009, 02:57 PM
I'm gonna start work on it in 1 minute.

The Demon Zabuza
08-10-2009, 02:58 PM
You should have started work on it by now.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-10-2009, 02:59 PM
I'm starting it now, I couldn't earlier because I went to enrollment.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-10-2009, 06:46 PM
Chapter Twenty-Two: The Two in the Mountains


After over half an hour of waiting, the black doors finally opened, with a bang. A staircase was beyond it, leading to complete darkness. Vatas looked at it while Nui silently closed his book and put it back in his tools pack. A man stood before them, half of his body hidden in shadow. A large golden lance rested on his back; he was clad in red armor, his blood-red samurai war helmet reflecting with it as well as hiding part of his spiky red hair. Three long scars scratched the surface around his damned black eyes, adding to the grim expression on his face, turned hat way from scores of years and years on the battlefield. Vatas offered a small smile and said, "How are you doing, Senso?"


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"Lady Kurikage, can I handle this?"
On the deepest parts of the Northern Mountains Range, Ashuuri Hyokai glanced at each of the ten enemy shinobi surrounding her, prepared for the battle with them. She wore a white snow coat, missing a hood and the white cloak matched along with it.
Five scrolls were strapped on her back, her white hair covering part of it. Makeup streaked her face as a playful smile curled on her lips, reminding lookers of a cat toying with its food.
She had one hand on her scroll while the other forming a handsign. Another ninja stood next to her: it was the Kurikage. Wearing a long white cloak, she wore a plain white vest under that cloak: her black hair fighting against that aspect. Her face seemed alive, a soft smile expressing it, and her silver eyes reflecting in the sun, that paled in the icy mountains, the snow blowing across everyone's faces.
"Yes, go right ahead."


Note: Sorry, I wasn't feeling well today, so this chapter was late and a little short as well. :(


To be continued

mangagirl
08-10-2009, 06:49 PM
its ok vat i forgive u!!;)

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-10-2009, 06:51 PM
Thanks. ;)
It's just that I'm having a headache right now..

mangagirl
08-10-2009, 07:08 PM
its ok...lolz ull be ok

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-10-2009, 07:09 PM
I know.
;)

The Demon Zabuza
08-11-2009, 10:21 AM
Ashuuri Hyokai
Hmmm... Could that name be based on anything I wonder...

This was a fairly nothingy chapter. Three people were introduced, and... well, that's about it.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-11-2009, 11:24 AM
Yeah, that's because of my damn splitting headache.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-11-2009, 05:06 PM
Chapter Twenty-Three: The Illuminus on the Move


Ashuuri grinned. "Thank you, Kurikage." She then put her hand on one of the scrolls strapped on her back. Before anyone could react, Ashuuri quickly pulled the scroll out and yelled, "Summoning!" as the scroll whirled around repeatedly and then finally burst into a white cloud as the enemy shinobi each leaped back, all holding kunais.
They stood, waiting, their eyes on the slowly drifting cloud. Suddenly, a long object burst out of the cloud: it impaled one shinobi directly in the chest as all of the other ninjas glanced at it in alarm. The shinobi collapsed, dead, that object still stuck in his body as blood poured out of him, creating a small pool of red liquid.
Now able to be seen better, everyone saw that is was a long pole of ice, leading from the sharp end to the other point, that was hidden by the dusty cloud. A smile could be viewed inside the cloud as all the enemy shinobi started to preform handsigns in alarm.
"Puppet Art: Tentacle Impalement." Ashuuri said, grinning, as twenty poles made out of ice whipped out, heading right for her enemies.


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"Ugh, I hate this damn place." Toshi mumbled as she stomped through the dark sewers under the Crossroads. Senso was ahead of her, and Nui was with him. In Nui's hand was a small orb, shining brilliantly in the gloomy, silent sewers. It was the only source of light down here, and a great one at that. Vatas walked next to Toshi, glancing from corner-to-corner, sometimes spotting a few rats feasting on garbage. Menrui was behind of the group, soaked in water from head-to-toe.
To Toshi's amusement, Senso had nearly drowned Menrui in an attempt to wake him up, and had somewhat succeeded, after receiving complaints from wet by-passers who had the unfortunately luck to be suddenly attacked by five tons of ice-cold water from out of the blue. After being threatened by suing and such, Senso had notoriously avoided that by blackmailing them in return. After a few slaps received from Toshi, Menrui had finally fully woken up, and was surprisingly happy that he was just soaked in water, due to the fact that he was resting on a "do-do" spot and had also taken some bird droppings to the face.
Now they were in the Underground Sewers of the Crossroads, an ancient way of traveling that no one rarely uses anymore due to rumors of it being haunted by a spirit in red armor carrying a large golden lance that had rid the souls of a thousand people. There was no light source in the Crossroads Underground anymore, but strangely, some people still used it as a way of transportation, even with all of the rumors and dangers lurking around like a ghost.
Even though, guards were stationed at every entry of the Crossroads Underground, due to the fact that the Crossroads Underground had at least three entrances to each and everyone of the Crossroads' buildings and many people had tried to use that as an advantage for their not-so-good-for-the-world goals.


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Ashuuri stood on the ice mountains, standing over ten shinobi, all dead, each impaled by at least one "pole" of ice, their blood slipping its way through the ice cracks. She smiled and said, "They had no chance. My Octopus Puppet was too strong for them.", glancing over to her Kurikage, who was quickly looking through the body of the leader of the group who had just assaulted on her and her companion. Ashuuri then remained silent, waiting for her superior to finish whatever she was doing. After several minutes, the Kurikage stood up, and slowly walked over to her. "You're done, Lady Kurikage?" Ashuuri asked.
The Kurikage nodded and then quickly handed her a small object. Ashuuri grasped it, and widened her eyes in alarm, immediately realizing what it was.
"It can't be!"
The Kurikage offered a small nod. "Yes, this confirms the rumors that has been spreading through the area: The Order of the Illuminus Alliance is on the move."


TO BE CONTINUED,

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-11-2009, 05:10 PM
News: Character Profile for Senso has been made.

takuya
08-11-2009, 05:12 PM
Cool Vat keep them coming(more of a threat then a request):twisted::lol:jk but try to get them out as soon as you can

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-11-2009, 05:13 PM
Alright, what was the best thing about this chapter though?

takuya
08-11-2009, 05:14 PM
The fact Menrui almost got drowned and he liked and he had bird droppings to the face and some "do-do" on him I also like the puppet thing I might start putting puppet users in my story

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-11-2009, 05:16 PM
Alright, Sasori, if you see this post, then there, your wish has been fulfilled!
I've added two puppet users to the Story!

mangagirl
08-11-2009, 06:11 PM
you need to write more!!! i need more!! lolz!!!

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-11-2009, 06:14 PM
What was the best part about it?

Yori
08-11-2009, 06:23 PM
Best part is when Ahsuuri was standing over the 10 dead shinobi's ,, So Awsome

The Demon Zabuza
08-11-2009, 06:27 PM
You could start refering to is as the Underground, you don't need to add Crossroads.

Hmm. Why do I get the feeling that we will be seeing a red armored shinobi rather soon...

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-11-2009, 06:28 PM
Wow, you appeared out of the blue.
But thanks for commenting on my story.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-11-2009, 06:28 PM
You could start refering to is as the Underground, you don't need to add Crossroads.

Hmm. Why do I get the feeling that we will be seeing a red armored shinobi rather soon...

Alright, and -__-"..............you failed for my Story Genjutsu, didn't you?

nine tailed fury
08-11-2009, 06:41 PM
its time for everybody's favorite aftershow. FURY CRITIC!!!!!! and, as you know, last time someone screwed around with my buttons, so now i will just show these cards to you instead. like this one says "applause" *shows card and it has a picture of rayman on it, but i dont see that* ok. on with the show. due to technical problems, i wasnt able to make a fury critic for yesterdays, so i am going to do a new segment on fury critic. WHEEL OF HUMAN TORPEDO!!!!!! *throws a sound guy at 2 notes that should say "1" or "2" but instead they say "r" and have a picture of a carrot on it* *sound guy hits the carrot* ok, so we are doing the newest episode. for this 1 i give it a *holds up sign that should say "dramatic music" but instead has a picture of a plunger on it* 7. its funny to see menrui get crapped on by birds, and be happy to be in ice cold water, AND STILL SLEEP!!!*realizes all the cards are wrong* OK, WHO MESSED UP MY CARDS!!!!!! wait, rayman, r, carrot, plungers........oh, god.........BWAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA*a hoard of maniac rabbids from "rayman raving rabbids" come in and carry me out* CHANNEL 50 NEWS!!!!! *1 rabbid knocks over the camera, then looks at it curiously* *it takes out a plunger, yells BWAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA, and hits the camera with a plunger, turning it off*

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-11-2009, 06:45 PM
Hmm, funny, but you forgot some of the highlights of this chapter, like the assault on the Kurikage and the Ashuuri

nine tailed fury
08-11-2009, 06:46 PM
Hmm, funny, but you forgot some of the highlights of this chapter, like the assault on the Kurikage and the Ashuuri
i got rusty from lack of sleep. *rabbid sneaks up on me and i punch it in the face without even looking at it* dont even think about it........

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-11-2009, 06:51 PM
Lol, you should get some sleep then.
Also, I will be starting school tomorrow, so there will be quite some days where I take a break.

nine tailed fury
08-11-2009, 06:53 PM
Lol, you should get some sleep then.
Also, I will be starting school tomorrow, so there will be quite some days where I take a break.
yes, sir!! *falls asleep on floor, next to a half eaten bagel, and a candy bar*

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-11-2009, 06:54 PM
-__-"....clean those up first, please.

nine tailed fury
08-11-2009, 06:57 PM
-__-"....clean those up first, please.
*claps hands in sleep and a guy with a broom comes in and sweeps everything up*

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-11-2009, 06:58 PM
Alright, good enough.
Now then, tell me your favorite character.

nine tailed fury
08-11-2009, 07:01 PM
*a man carries me out and gives vat a note saying "still toshi"

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-11-2009, 07:02 PM
Lol, okay, then what's your second favorite character?

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-12-2009, 05:39 PM
Chapter Twenty-Four: The Explanation


"Senso, what had been up with the Crossroads lately? The security here increased ten-fold...." Vatas questioned as he walked along with the group, glancing for anything peculiar he might come by. "Yes, why is that?" Nui asked, strolling next to Senso, who's eyes were looking forward completely. There were silence, except for the drop of dirtied water calmly dripping down from the metal pipes above them and crashing into the floor.
After several minutes of quietness and walking, Senso finally spoke: "It's because of the Sundown Kage Meeting." Vatas's expression on his face quickly turned to confusion while Nui slightly lowered his head, suddenly developing an interest on the ground. Menrui glanced at Senso, understanding what it meant while Toshi kept silent. "What's the Sundown Kage Meeting?" Vatas asked, his curious side giving over.
"It's basically a big meeting where all the big shots come to talk about boring stuff." Toshi muttered. Senso nodded firmly.
"In a nutshell, yes. More to the details, it is a meeting of important individuals, also known as Kages, from all thirty villages that use our area as a way of traveling. The meeting is held every thirty years, at sundown, like the name implies, and things are usually organized more than a week before than. At that point, the Crossroads are closed up from the public for security reasons. Permits, invitations, or a certain object was required to enter."


Note: We interrupt this Story with a Small Discussion Involving Our Characters


Vatas: Um, what are we doing here again?

Menrui: -asleep-

Nui: I have no idea......weren't we walking in the Underground?

Toshi: So.....what do we talk about now?

Hanataro: Um......we could talk about--

Toshi: Shut up, Hanataro! You're not even in the story anymore!

Vatas: That's true......he might even never appear again.

Nui: Poor Hanataro....

Hanataro: No! It can't be! I'll appear again.......um...in..um....the.....arc..

Toshi: Even you're not sure! See?! There's not even a small chance that you'll appear again!

Hanataro: -cries silently in a corner-


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After over a dozen minutes of walking, Vatas and the group were still walking: the whole area they had walked through all looked the same, dull black walls with some dirt etched on it. Suddenly, Senso halted, his eyes on the floor. The rest of the group stopped too, and glanced at what Senso was looking at.
On the ground, half of it buried by the floor, was a piece of crystal. It shimmered from the light in Nui's hand as Senso's eyes widened in shock as a huge roar was suddenly heard, echoing as the sound of blood splashing was heard.


TO BE CONTINUED

mangagirl
08-12-2009, 06:21 PM
wow awesome!;)

Space Cowboy Sasori
08-12-2009, 06:22 PM
That was the crystal?

O_O

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-12-2009, 06:40 PM
Hello, Sasori!

Uchiha Itachi
08-13-2009, 07:37 AM
maybe the crystal is the object that is needed to enter the crossroads?

mangagirl
08-13-2009, 08:19 AM
maybe ure right

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-13-2009, 01:55 PM
Maybe...maybe not. :cool:

mangagirl
08-13-2009, 01:56 PM
hmm hello vat

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-13-2009, 01:58 PM
Hello, how are you doing today, manga?

mangagirl
08-13-2009, 01:59 PM
me is ok lolz and u?

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-13-2009, 02:01 PM
Sleepy....-yawns-

mangagirl
08-13-2009, 02:17 PM
lol are u ok?

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-13-2009, 02:52 PM
Yeah, I'm fine....but I'm thinking of taking a break today.

shino 4
08-13-2009, 02:52 PM
Nice story vat. Im going to see if i can make mines better.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-13-2009, 02:54 PM
Thanks, what's your favorite character and chapter?

shino 4
08-13-2009, 03:00 PM
Chap 15 and so far my fav character is Vatus shadow pridus

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-13-2009, 03:07 PM
Alright, and also, do you want me to PM you some spoilers?

shino 4
08-13-2009, 03:10 PM
No not yet im thinkng of one though.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-13-2009, 03:11 PM
Alright, then how about just fights upcoming in the not-so-far future?

shino 4
08-13-2009, 03:16 PM
Not a fight but maybe a trap being set.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-13-2009, 03:18 PM
What do you mean by that?

shino 4
08-13-2009, 03:46 PM
From the last chapter you wrote about that crystal and the blood being
splattered on Nui. It could be a trap cause the crystal being picked up and an enemy shinobi could have killed him or something like that

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-13-2009, 03:52 PM
Oh, yeah, but it just said that the SOUND of BLOOD SPLASHING was just Heard.

shino 4
08-13-2009, 03:55 PM
I know that's what mean by a trap by the enemy.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-13-2009, 04:10 PM
Hmmm, actually, this is a whole new enemy.

shino 4
08-13-2009, 04:13 PM
O. An enemy that specialize in crystal style jutsu.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-13-2009, 04:14 PM
Well, let's just say this will be surprising, and also, I'm writing the chapter right now, just in another tab. :D

shino 4
08-13-2009, 04:16 PM
Ok. I can't wait to read it and did you read my part 2 to my story.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-13-2009, 04:18 PM
Yes, I did, but forgot to comment, sorry.

shino 4
08-13-2009, 04:20 PM
Its okay i half to get off now but i will be back on later though.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-13-2009, 04:22 PM
Alright, bye and also, the story will be finished in under ten minutes!

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-13-2009, 04:32 PM
Chapter Twenty-Five: Four Days Until the Meeting of the Kages


"Nui, watch over everyone." Senso muttered, grasping on his lance's handle. He then glanced down once more, and was not surprised at all to see it drenched in blood. "Where are you going, Senso?" Nui asked, his eyes darting from every inch of the area.
Senso managed a small but rare nowadays smile, one that showed in the light brought off from the orb in Nui's hand. "Me? I'm going hunting, haven't you heard? It's wolf hunting season."


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Sakura Helga stood on the rooftop of a large house, gazing at the Crossroads and the skyscrapers and buildings within it. The house was a post two kilometers off of the Crossroads, and guards inhabited it, all now dead, as Sakura suddenly heard a sound. She slowly turned her head, barely glancing at the source. Kama stood, his scythe lazily hung on his back, blood dripping from it and hitting the earth.
Blood was on his face, and his clothes were dry, but now a little red-colored. "I see you have enjoyed your killing spree." Sakura Helga said, and leaped down toward Kama. She landed gracefully on the ground, and stood up, smiling as she looked behind him, seeing all twenty-three guards housing the guard post, all dead, their bloods pouring into and mixing with the dirt on the ground.


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Senso was gone, and it had been ten minutes since they had departed. Senso had given Nui a map to lead him and his group to their destination, but unfortunately, an accident involving a comment from Menrui and a fight breaking up between Toshi and him had ended up with Menrui with some bruises and half a map, the other part buried under boulders. Surprisingly, the fight did not cause the Underground to collapse, but Nui wasn't going to take chances.
After walking through the same dull halls, there was the reaching dread clawing its way into Nui's mind as he feared of his childhood friend's possible death. There were occasional sounds of weapons being clattered against each other and shouts, and with each of those shouts, he grasped his sword more heavily and heavily, hoping the best that his friend would make it out alive of whatever ordeal he was going through right now.


To Be Continued....Next Time: A Glance at Nui's Past!

The Demon Zabuza
08-13-2009, 04:35 PM
lol, precisely on time.

I think that that was really another nothing chapter. Some random guards died, and Nui has a childhood friend. Although, it does point towards something about Nui's past...

mangagirl
08-13-2009, 04:39 PM
*faints* omg i love this!

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-13-2009, 05:05 PM
*faints* omg i love this!
-catches you-

lol, precisely on time.

I think that that was really another nothing chapter. Some random guards died, and Nui has a childhood friend. Although, it does point towards something about Nui's past...

Yep. And also, I wonder if you had a figured out what Senso had meant about "wolf hunting".

kzilla2000
08-14-2009, 04:02 PM
in the beginning god made the-wait to far back XD,here we go god made computers to type interesting stories like vat made like your bleach story

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-14-2009, 04:18 PM
in the beginning god made the-wait to far back XD,here we go god made computers to type interesting stories like vat made like your bleach story

What do you mean by that?
But thanks for the compliment.

mangagirl
08-14-2009, 04:18 PM
are u going to write a new chapter vat?

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-14-2009, 04:20 PM
Hello, manga.
And yes, in about ten minutes, I'll start work.

mangagirl
08-14-2009, 04:21 PM
ok thanks and hi

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-14-2009, 04:23 PM
Alright. ^_^

mangagirl
08-14-2009, 04:24 PM
ok lolz c ya

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-14-2009, 04:25 PM
See ya.
-poofs into white ash-

-deidara-
08-14-2009, 04:46 PM
ughhh most not have tasted good:lol: ewwwwwwwww lol

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-14-2009, 05:01 PM
Do you have any comments, -deidara-?

mangagirl
08-14-2009, 05:01 PM
please dei dont spam

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-14-2009, 05:04 PM
What manga posted. ^_^
Have a nice day.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-14-2009, 06:38 PM
Nui Gaiden


Unfortunately, the author is not feeling well today, so there will be no new chapter(s) today. Sorry! The author has also promised he will make up for it. Have a Good Day.
:mrgreen:

Yori
08-14-2009, 06:52 PM
what A tease!

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-14-2009, 06:55 PM
Yep. :p

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-15-2009, 05:40 PM
Special! Nui Gaiden!

Chapter Twenty-Six: The New Kid



Twelve Years Ago, in The Light Clan.


Thirteen-year-old Nui Onimusha walked through the halls of the Light Ninja Academy, glancing from left to right, with an unusual thirst for knowledge. He quickly looked at the students around him, and was not surprised at all to see them gossiping about him.
"It's him, that kid who got the Bijuu sealed inside him.." one blond-haired boy muttered to his friends. "I heard his dad left the village.." whispered another student, a brown-haired girl, glancing nervously at Nui like if she was staring at a rabid dog instead. With that, Nui sighed as he stopped, looking at a door with the number 11 etched on it. He slowly grasped the door's handle and twisted it as the door opened before him, revealing a room. The room was dull, with green walls, and a floor made out of seemingly slick wood. He then quickly sat down on the floor and waited. As he waited for the teacher to arrive, a group of students had gathered outside of the door, all muttering about him nervously, to Nui's annoyance.
Suddenly, a yell came through, shocking everyone. "Hey! Get into the room, you damn kids!" The kids quickly obeyed, all rushing into the room and setting into a bowing stance, their eyes searching for the source of that order. After a minute or two, the source was finally located as a man walked into the room. He wore a plain black kimono, and a smell of blood quickly spread through the air as he walked through the room. Red spiky hair were a few feet from the dull ceiling, his lance that was strapped to his back nearly reaching that height also. He then stopped and sat down before all of the students, and offered a smirk.
"So you're the newbies?" he asked, the smirk still on his scarred face. "Yes...." Nui muttered. Immediately, the teacher turned his head at him and said, "Tell me your name, kid!" "Nui Onimusha..." Nui said, his eyes locked at his teacher's eyes. "Onimusha? That Royal Family? Well, you should know, here, in my class, I treat everyone the same, no one gets treated better, no one lesser."
Nui offered a small smile. Phew, finally, a change of difference..., he thought. The teacher smiled back and then continued. "And also, anything you say to me, refer to me as sensei!" Nui nodded. "And what would be your name, sensei?"
The red-haired teacher grinned. "It's Senso Ukitaro, I have red hair, I'm a Chunin, and I'm eight years old, you got that?"


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During the next couple of months, class was enjoyable to Nui. The gossiping about still didn't end, but they were appearing less and less. Senso was a good teacher, and his word on treating everyone the same was proved valid, and Nui was happy about that, now that he had finally had a friend to come to. Every few weeks, he would come to Senso to discuss about things and he enjoyed every visit.
He was somewhat surprised to discover that Senso always had time to talk with him despite the facts that he had duties as both as a teacher and shinobi. It turns out, there were rumors concerning him too, creating a wall between him and the other shinobi, who all didn't exactly like him because of it and the fact that he was just a small child and that itself created a special bond between them, student and teacher.
One day, Nui was walking down the streets of the Bird Clan, like everyday. School had been cancelled, due to a meeting that required all Chunin, Special Jonin, and Jonin, leaving the majority area of the clan empty. Details were mostly blank, but a hint was left out, and Nui knew it concerned about the choosing of the new Kage. Suddenly, he felt something behind him and then suddenly collapsed. Nui landed on the ground, and looked up to see a figure standing on a phone poll, smiling wickedly. The figure was wrapped in black, and wore a mask, showing only dark eyes, which spoke of blood lust. In one hand, he formed a hnadsign, while in the other, he held a long blade made out of steel. "I've got you, boy. You're dead."
With that, he jumped down and landed on his knees, and then slowly took off his mask, revealing a cocky grin. Nui desperately tried to move, to stand up, to just even lift his hand, but found out that he couldn't now matter how hard he tried.
"It's no use resisting, Onimusha boy. No one has ever surpassed my Body Paralyzing Touch Ninja Art." the masked ninja said. With that he lifted his sword and yelled, "Now die!", as he sent his sword down, right for Nui's throat. Suddenly, something whistled through the air and the next thing Nui knew, he was looking up to see another figure , this one just a centimeter before him. The figure wore black baggy pants, topped with a sleeveless purple shirt, it matching with the long purple hair hanging loosely on it. The masked ninja's blade was clattered against a kunai, which the purple-shirt woman now held.
"I was just going to that meeting, and look here at what I found....Nui, you're getting in trouble too much nowadays." she said, smiling. Nui managed a small smile and then replied, "Surprising to find you here, but then again, you're always late......Sakura-sensei."
Sakura smiled and started to form a handsign and looked at her masked opponent.
"Your luck has just run out, whoever you are. You're looking at the Light Clan Speed Master, Sakura Helga."


To Be Continued.

nine tailed fury
08-15-2009, 06:43 PM
its time for everyones favorite aftershow. FURY CRITIC!!!!!! *applause goes off* for this episode, i give a 8 out of 10. we saw what nui was like 12 years ago, and learned that his teacher was.......the same age as him......*whispers to camera crew* did i read this right???? well, aparently i did. senso is friendly to nui, and i wonder if there will be a guy-lee partnership in the future.......
*camera flashes and i look like a todler* ok, who is messing with the camera? *flashes again and im a baby* I MEAN IT!! *flashes and i turn into an embrio* STOP!!!!!!!!!!!! *flahses and i am gone*
camera guy: this has been fury critic, channel 50 news, signing off.
sound guy: so THATS what you planned to do to say that.
camera guy: i TOLD you it wasnt risky, i just sent him back in time to where he wasnt even in existence.........i see where that went wrong. *camera flashes and im back, holding the devils blade in my hand* WHY YOU LITTLE!!!!! *slashes at camera guy and camera gets chopped in half, making it turn off*

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-15-2009, 06:47 PM
Lol, but you forgot one single important fact....that Nui knew Sakura Helga, who is now a member of the Order of the Illuminus Alliance.

nine tailed fury
08-16-2009, 11:58 AM
i forgot to care about that part.....

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-17-2009, 02:02 PM
Yeah, and that was a damn big part, dude...

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-17-2009, 04:37 PM
News: Sorry, but no new chapter today due to a wedding. ^_^

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-17-2009, 09:32 PM
Special: Nui Gaiden!


Chapter Twenty-Seven: Family Assassin Attempt


The sound of metal scrapping against each other was heard as Sakura Helga's lips curled into a grin. The shinobi immediately widened his eyes a bit as he heard Sakura Helga's announcement.
"Light Speed Master? Are you.......the Flash of Bright, Sakura Helga?" the enemy ninja asked, fear harboring his mind. "Why, yes. Yes I am."
Reacting by her words, the ninja suddenly gulped as sweat suddenly pelted through his skin, his eyes now only speaking of senseless fright. Just as Sakura had thought in her mind a few moments ago, the shinobi then jumped back, and turned around, and suddenly disappeared, leaving only a thin cloud of white smoke.
"Coward." Sakura muttered and then glanced back to look at the still Nui and then placed a single finger on his chest.
"Ninja Art: Disimobolizing." She said. Suddenly, Nui felt like if a great burden had just been lifted. He then quickly stood up, and was surprised to see that he could move again. Nui then looked at Sakura and then said, "Thank you, Sakura-sensei." Sakura Helga nodded and then glanced at the spot were he had escaped from. "Nui, go home. Make sure to lock the doors. I'm going to hunt that intruder down."
And with that, she immediately disappeared too, leaving only a small burst of winds as leaves flew through the air.


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Several hours later, at evening, where shinobi were heading to their homes to rest, Nui sat in his house, reading a book. From what he had heard, the meeting between the ninjas were now over, and they had left their discussion at a sort of cliffhanger. The streets of the Light Clan were now once again filled with people, who were all seemingly cheerful, but some were silent, having been told classified information and were now pondering about the info they had just received.
Nui's home was enormous, but he was the only resident in it besides the servants that worked in it. The walls were painted with the drawings of majestic dragons, and ancient objects hung everywhere, just waiting to be broken one way or another. Now sitting in the library located in the center of the house, Nui sat on the floor, reading through a long scroll. Suddenly, the doors opened as two people stepped through it, all grim-faced. Nui slowly glanced up, and looked into the faces of Senso and Sakura. A timidly-looking woman stood behind them, wearing a small smile on her plain face.
"Nui, come with us." Senso muttered, and Nui knew that it was not an invitation, but an order.

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"Where are we going?" Nui asked as he and Senso and Sakura quickly strolled through the now dark streets of his Clan. The street s were now empty, most of the ninjas were now tucked in their homes, soundly asleep. The sky was dark as ever, the moon shining as a dim source of light. "To the Kage's Building." Senso muttered. "Why?" Nui countered. "Sakura had caught an intruder today, the intruder whose's goal was to eliminate you. We have interrogated him, and......"
"And what?"
Senso quickly glanced down as Sakura looked at Nui with a serious expression on her face and then said, "It's your father, Nui. He sent that ninja to attempt to assassinate you." , as Nui's eyes widened in both alarm and shock.


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The Onimusha Clan was always a proud clan, it's cores existing from inside the Light Clan, which heavily benefited from that. Most of the Kages in the Light Clan were in the Onimusha Family Tree, and there were a certain one that was so famous, or infamous to be exact, that every clan had heard of them. And that Kage was Nui Onimusha's father, Hisagi Onimusha. A very powerful man, he was highly respected by all around him. Then came one day, he had alone assassinated the whole Onimusha Clan, all in one single twisted night, even killing his own wife, leaving only one survivor: Nui.

Now, standing before the Kage Building, Nui gazed at it, and wondered about what he would fine beyond it, and he thought that it would forever change his life. Turned out, he was right...


To Be Continued

Sephiroth
08-17-2009, 09:34 PM
pretty good

mangagirl
08-18-2009, 08:41 AM
yayz!!!awesome!:D

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-18-2009, 01:32 PM
Thanks, guys. :D

mangagirl
08-18-2009, 02:09 PM
anytime vat!

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-18-2009, 02:20 PM
:D ;) :mrgreen:

shaddix301
08-18-2009, 02:22 PM
im back!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-18-2009, 03:50 PM
Hello, shaddix.
You should start on reading the chapters you've missed, my friend.

Taker369
08-18-2009, 03:55 PM
i read better reading 4 kids lol jk good job pervy sage.

The Demon Zabuza
08-18-2009, 04:01 PM
U....Uchiha......

Taker369
08-18-2009, 04:02 PM
ok cool.

shaddix301
08-18-2009, 04:03 PM
hey vat,i have finished up on metrui and kama... butfirst tell me wat u thught of toshi first brah!!!

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-18-2009, 04:06 PM
hey vat,i have finished up on metrui and kama... butfirst tell me wat u thught of toshi first brah!!!

Oops, I accidentely deleted it. :|

shaddix301
08-18-2009, 04:38 PM
uuuuuhhh... ill send it to u again...

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-18-2009, 04:41 PM
Alright, and also, what was the last chapter you've read?

shaddix301
08-18-2009, 04:42 PM
http://www.flickr.com/photos/30358480@N03/3805084525/ (http://www.flickr.com/photos/30358480@N03/3805084525/)

shaddix301
08-18-2009, 04:42 PM
uuuuuuuuuh the last one

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-18-2009, 04:43 PM
Wow, you read quick.

shaddix301
08-18-2009, 04:50 PM
im in the eight grade but i read at a softmore's pace;) in the fourth grade i was already reading sixth grade books

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-18-2009, 04:53 PM
That's pretty good, keep it up.

shaddix301
08-18-2009, 04:55 PM
hey nice rank!!:p

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-18-2009, 04:58 PM
Oh, you're joking about it too now? :cool:
At least I got a CUSTOM TITLE, which you didn't! :p

shaddix301
08-18-2009, 04:59 PM
heyy...take it easy man... not being sarcasticly brah...

The Demon Zabuza
08-18-2009, 05:00 PM
Calm down Vat, the sheep need feeding.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-18-2009, 05:01 PM
Alright, it's time for me to work on Part Three of Nui Gaiden....

shaddix301
08-18-2009, 05:02 PM
yyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaayyyyyy yyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy!WATD U THINK OF TOSHI?

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-18-2009, 05:03 PM
Calm down Vat, the sheep need feeding.
-_-"
.......alright.
yyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaayyyyyy yyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy!WATD U THINK OF TOSHI?
It's.....PM me.

takuya
08-18-2009, 05:10 PM
im in the eight grade but i read at a softmore's pace;) in the fourth grade i was already reading sixth grade booksLast year we needed to get tested to see what level we read on and I read on an 11th grader's level and think if we read at that level already imagine what level we'll read on when we get to that grade(I'd prolly be on a college level and maybe you too or you'd read on a senior's in high school's pace)

nine tailed fury
08-18-2009, 06:04 PM
vat has a farm.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-18-2009, 06:07 PM
vat has a farm.

-__-"........no I don't.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-18-2009, 08:53 PM
Special: Nui Gaiden!


Chapter Twenty-Eight: Before The Interrogation


Built at the center of the whole Clan, the Kage's Building was a very important place. It was there where most shinobi went to receive their missions and the hallways were almost always filled, except for now, in the middle of the night where Nui, Sakura, and Senso stood ten yards before it, Nui glancing at it. He had only traveled here a couple of times, and with those two travels, he still had no time to fully explore the gigantic building.
The walls on the outside were painted solidly with pure white, and two large doors, both with a golden knob on them and a single word that translated ; the ceiling of the building was irregular, having five longs horns on it, and the center of the roof having a flat slick floor, a long flag pole with the handband symbol of the Light Clan on it, the pole's end smashed into the floor.
"Nui, let's go." Senso commanded as Sakura kept silent. Finally, after a moment, Nui answered with a simple but effective nod.

__________________________________________________ _______________


"It's Senso, may I please come in? It's about the intruder today." Tenso asked, knocking softly on the door. A few minutes had passed since him and the group had entered the Kage's Building, and just as usual, there were some guards posted around the area. After granted access, they were escorted in, and led to this spot.
The halls inside the Kage's Building were much more imaginative and bright, having walls with colors that slowly from one to another as you progressed. Pictures of all the past Kages and Co-Kage were put on the walls, and a list of their acomplishments were on a paper that was taped right under it for show off. Bright lamps on the ceiling kept the whole building lighted, fortunately.
Sakura had explained the details of the issue to Nui when they were walking, and Nui had accepted each piece of information silently, and was now pondering on each of them.
After several minutes of waiting in silence, they had finally heard a voice from the door: "Come in, Senso Ukitaro , Sakura Helga, and Nui Onimusha."
The voice was clearly a female's, soft, and lightly scented with an accent. Senso responded by grasping the knob on the door, slowly twisted it, and pushed it open, revealing a room, mostly darkened. He then slowly walked in, followed by Sakura, who nodded in respect at something in the shadows. Nui followed suit, nervously glancing at each of the figures in the shadows. Suddenly, he heard a noise behind him and spun around, to see the door closed.
He then quickly turned around as the lights instantly flashed to life, blinding Nui for a moment. The blindness quickly died down, revealing a small dull room painted in white and black and a chair was placed in the middle, a weak man sitting in it, chains locking him from any chance of escaping. He was bandaged heavily, and he carried three long scars, all likely received from Sakura.
Two figures stood, all leaning on the wall. One was a girl: her short brown hair barely managed to reach her shoulders, and she was a small figure, only reaching no less than three and a half feet. Both on her belts were two short daggers, each sheathed by a small stylish scabbards. The other figure was a medium-height man; his black hair spiked everywhere, and three long scars ran down his haggard face. He wore a slick black coat, and holster pouches, all filled with weapons and medical tools in them; a long broadsword was on his back, shining in the light, the rust being able to be seen. The brown-haired girl then moved forward and opened her mouth and said, "Hello, Nui-kun!"
Nui offered a thin smile and then replied, "How are you doing, Nami-chan?"
The girl known as Nami glanced up at Nui and replied with a warm cat-like smile.

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"Now, on to business." the spiky black-haired man said and walked over to Senso and then stopped. He then quickly whispered something into Senso's ear, and then moved on as Senso's eyes quickly widened.
He then once again stopped at the man sitting weakly in the chair and then announced, "Let the interrogation begin!"

The Demon Zabuza
08-18-2009, 09:00 PM
Torture!

What form of torture could they use?

shaddix301
08-18-2009, 09:00 PM
awesome... keep it up bro...

Space Cowboy Sasori
08-18-2009, 09:25 PM
Wow nice chapter Vat.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-19-2009, 04:04 PM
Wow nice chapter Vat.
Please Post The Best Part In This Chapter. :cool:

awesome... keep it up bro...
Thanks, what was the best part in the chapter?

Torture!

What form of torture could they use?

You'll figure that out either today or tomorrow.

Malak
08-19-2009, 04:10 PM
nice.... keep writing...:eek:

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-19-2009, 04:10 PM
nice.... keep writing...:eek:

What's your favorite character, Malak?

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-19-2009, 07:58 PM
Special: Nui Gaiden!


Chapter Twenty Nine: The Interrogation


"Nui of the Royal Onimusha Family, please step forward." the black-haired man said. Nui stepped forward just as he told as he glanced at the man chained to the chair. The weak man glanced up and then said, "You look just like your father, little boy."
At that point, Nui had looked like he had just had a nerve shot through and although he kept silent, his eyes spoke of pain and sorrow. "Don't try to off-topic us, intruder." the black-haired man said and then put a hand on the chair , smiling nastily. "Or perhaps you'd like another trip to the dentist."
Reacting, the intruder's face quickly expressed fear as he started to plead. "No, please! I'll do anything!" The black-haired man then grinned. "As you can see, he was quite easy to crack."
Senso then stepped forward and looked up. "If you had already interrogated him, then why did you told us to come here, Kato?"
The black-haired man who was called Kato by Senso offered a fake smile but then quickly realizing that his false smile didn't fool anyone, he stopped altogether. "That is because it concerns Nui Onimusha."
"Then why did you requested us to come along?" Sakura asked, her curiosity now acting up. Kato shrugged. "I just thought that you, Little Miss Helga, should know this information, since you're were once his student and that our friend here, Senso, should also know since he was with him for at least a dozen missions together."
Upon reaction, Sakura glanced elsewhere while Senso suddenly developed an interest at the floor. In under two minutes, Kato had just hit a nerve on all three of his visitors, as well as frightening the intruder. Kato then turned his head to look at the weakened man and said, "Now tell us. Everything."
The man nodded quickly in fear, mostly from the fact that he was frightened from the trip to the so-called dentist. After a moment of silence, he finally talked.
"Lord Hisagi sent me to assassinate that child, Nui Onimusha. I never liked killing kids but he was offering a huge payment of over 1,500,000,000 ryo. I accepted, of course. I meant him and he gave me blueprints of the village. The blueprints were highly accurate, even to the point of the corners and doors. Lord Hisagi also gave me information on the kid, from the picture to even a list of favorite foods. He also knew that today most of the shinobi wouldn't be here, so his attempt of assassination was seemingly flawless. The Light Speed Master arriving was a coincidence, and a big one at that."
Immediately, the questions quickly came after that.
Senso had the first chance: "Where did you meet him?
"Do you know where he is?" Sakura asked while Kato remained silent and Nui slowly absorbed all of the new knowledge he had just heard. "I met him in an alleyway and I don't know where he is." the intruder slowly answered after a moment of hesitation, but he knew that his life was worth selling out his payer.
Now it was Kato's turn to step in. He walked over to Senso and then said, "Our team of ANBU Black Ops have been trying to uncover Hisagi Onimusha's location and it seems that they have found the answer."
"Where is he then?" Sakura asked, her eyes alert once again.
"In the Country of Snow." Senso suddenly said as Nui's eyes widened as Kato offered a smile.
"And that will be your mission, to go to the Country of Snow in search for Hisagi Onimusha!"

To be Continued...

shaddix301
08-20-2009, 07:55 AM
cool man...

The Demon Zabuza
08-20-2009, 07:58 AM
1,000,000 ryo? Asuma was worth 35,000,000...

But yays for a new mission!

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-20-2009, 02:57 PM
Back in the time, people were poorer. =/

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-20-2009, 09:44 PM
Special: Nui Gaiden!


Chapter Thirty: Toward the Country of Snow


Kato had explained about their mission: it was a reconaissance-type of operation. Sakura, Senso, and Nui were the whole team. They were given an hour to prepare and were told once they were confirmed that Hisagi Onimusha was there, they were supposed to return back to the Clan immediately and report the intelligence they had gathered. Overall, it seemed like a good old simple mission.
Sadly, that wasn't even close to what the mission truly turned out to be as Nui, Senso, and Sakura stood at the gates of the Light Clan, with Kato and Nami seeing them off.
Ten yards tall, the entry doors of the Light Clan were the most known area of the whole Clan, due to the fact that it was the first thing anyone would see when they enter the Clan and the last thing when they exit it. The doors were painted yellow, with japanese kanji on them. A post was built right next to it, where two ninja sat in guard.
The limit had already passed and it was now time for Nui and his group to depart for their destination. They were now all wearing white cloaks with hoods attached, the cloaks on top of their normal outfit. "Bye, Nui-kun!" Nami shouted happily, waving as Nui, Senso, and Sakura slowly departed. Nui returned her wave with a wave of his own while Kato yelled out at them: "Good Luck!"
Soon, the group had left, and Kato and Nami were left on their own. "Think they'll survive?" Kato muttered to Nami.
"Yeah, Nui-kun will make sure of that," Nami replied with a warm smile. Reacting to that, Kato burst into a shaky laughter.
"Is that based on his battle skills or your crush on him?"

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Under a deep frozen cave, in a land with coldness beyond imagination, three figures walked through a hall entirely created out of pure ice. They all wore long white cloaks, their hoods on, only showing their hair. Their white shoes clattered against the ice-cold ground as their swords, all sheathed by scabbards, swung around lazily as they strolled, their breaths creating shivers in the air. The first figure, a long brunette-haired woman said, "He requested you guys too?"
The second figure, a large bald man snarled. "Of course, he knew our talents were perfect for this type of mission."
The last figure, a small shaggy-haired boy shrugged, "Exactly." , as the brunette-haired woman smiled, flashing a toothy grin as she and her companions continued walking.

"Lord Hisagi wants to have his kid killed, eh? Then we're the perfect team to do that, he even knew about my love for slaughtering children."


To Be cOntinued

The Demon Zabuza
08-21-2009, 04:49 AM
o_O...

One phycotic child murder, one apparant werewolf, and one weirdo.

This arc is getting interesting, although I did see Konoha's gates in there.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-21-2009, 01:56 PM
o_O...

One phycotic child murder, one apparant werewolf, and one weirdo.

This arc is getting interesting, although I did see Konoha's gates in there.

Yep. ^_^


The next chapter's gonna be when the battles start, and the last chapter of this arc is gonna end in about three or so chapters, and we'll continue with the original story.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-21-2009, 04:49 PM
Special: Nui Gaiden!


Chapter Thirty-One: The Country of Snow


"When will we reach there?" Nui asked as he, Sakura, and Senso walked, their shoes thumping on the ground as animals dispersed from their groups as they saw the threesome walked close by. It had been two and half hours since they had departed their Clan, and so far, nothing much had happened and they were now walking through a forest that shielded them from the heat from the sunlight. Sakura gazed elsewhere, seemingly having not heard him while Senso shrugged. "Probably a couple of hours, the Country of Snow ain't that far from here. Might take more if you guys take a break to go potty........"

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The three figures in the cold wasteland had finally reached their destination. Now standing before a huge black steel door, with no decoration at all except for a lightning bolt with an large "X" on it. It would have taken them a lot sooner, but unfortunately, they had gotten lost and an argument quickly ensued, which led to nothing useful besides a scolding from a nearby worker, who had given them directions after receiving five kicks in the face.

They stood there, waiting for the black doors to finally open. After over an hour of waiting, they had finally lost their patience. The brunette-haired woman sighed, impatiently tapping her shoe. The large bald man sat on the icy floor; he then took off his hood, revealing a nightmarish furry face: the top of his head wasn't bald at all, it was covered in fur. In fact, his whole face was covered in orange fur as his eyes with no pupil in it at all glanced at his two companions. A large snout replaced a normal human nose, and three long scars ran down on them, all received from a battle in the past. The brown shaggy-haired buy stood at his right, his eyes closed.

After waiting for another hour, the doors finally opened. They opened slowly, and the split-second they opened a little, a large explosion of chakra was released as the cold wind suddenly lashed everywhere, alarming everybody.
"Such dark chakra..." the brown shaggy-haired boy muttered, his eyes still tightly closed.
Suddenly, a huge static noise erupted through the air as everybody suddenly collapsed to their knees from under the pressure.
The static soon ended, and a voice was heard:

"Matsumora, Kaname, and Allon, it's time to depart. Meet us inside the Black Gate, Lord Hisagi wishes to speak to you."

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"We're here." Senso muttered as his breath flowed out into the cold air. Nui stood behind him, gazing at the unfamiliar landscape while Sakura nodded. "Are you sure this is the place, Senso-sensei?" Nui asked, a little uncertainly in his mind as he gazed at the frozen wasteland below him and looked beyond, and was not surprised to see more and more ice wherever he looked as Senso offered a small affirmative nod.

"Yep. This is the Country of Snow, also known as the Frozen Wastelands."


T. Be Continued.

The Demon Zabuza
08-21-2009, 05:14 PM
Wait, is the bald guy a vampire?

Also, 460 Flashback with the chakra, but at least we get to meet Hisagi at last.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-21-2009, 05:16 PM
Yep. ^^
And for the vampire thing, you're PARTIALLY right...

Anbu Leader
08-21-2009, 05:17 PM
Foreall i am telling you its good i like it!
you got a big amigination for a story!!
i really like it keep going!!

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-21-2009, 05:19 PM
Thanks, what's your favorite character?

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-21-2009, 05:32 PM
Damn, both of them left! :(

The Demon Zabuza
08-21-2009, 08:42 PM
Yep. ^^
And for the vampire thing, you're PARTIALLY right...

Partially right?

Hmmmm... Half Vampire? Like Darren Shan? Or another form of the undead altogether?

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-21-2009, 09:12 PM
Partially right?

Hmmmm... Half Vampire? Like Darren Shan? Or another form of the undead altogether?

Well, he's PART Vampire, I'll give you that.
What do you think about this arc right now?

The Demon Zabuza
08-22-2009, 08:47 AM
Well, he's PART Vampire, I'll give you that.
What do you think about this arc right now?

Part Vampire, part... Hollow? Demon?

And as of now, I prefer it to the last arc, just because I am more interested in the antagonist.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-22-2009, 09:35 AM
Part Vampire, part... Hollow? Demon?

And as of now, I prefer it to the last arc, just because I am more interested in the antagonist.

Okay.

I halted the last arc for this one because:

1) Character Development for Nui

2) The decisions that Nui, Senso, and Sakura makes in this arc will come back right at them in the other arc.

3) I am introducing a new character, and this new character will participate in both arcs.

4) Nui's Relationship with Senso and Why is Sakura now a Member of the Order of the Illuminus when a dozen years ago she was a Light Clan Shinobi.

The Demon Zabuza
08-22-2009, 09:48 AM
I'm not sure that revealing why she joined is the right idea. Revealing that she's a childhood friend, and then leaving her dying at the end of the arc would just get you more interested.

All the other reasons I agree with though.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-22-2009, 09:50 AM
I'm not sure that revealing why she joined is the right idea. Revealing that she's a childhood friend, and then leaving her dying at the end of the arc would just get you more interested.

All the other reasons I agree with though.

Yep. ^^

The end of the arc will be kinda like that.

The Demon Zabuza
08-22-2009, 09:55 AM
I'm getting good at this predicting thing.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-22-2009, 09:58 AM
I'm getting good at this predicting thing.

Yes you are. ^_^

And for that, I'll give you a small token of hint:

The three enemies that were sent by Lord Hisagi to assassinate Nui are all Jonin Level while Nui is a Genin, Senso a Chunin, and Sakura a Jonin.

The Demon Zabuza
08-22-2009, 09:59 AM
Yes you are. ^_^

And for that, I'll give you a small token of hint:

The three enemies that were sent by Lord Hisagi to assassinate Nui are all Jonin Level while Nui is a Genin, Senso a Chunin, and Sakura a Jonin.

Sakura sacrifices herself to save her two teamates? Some sort of cave in? I'm thinking Obito.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-22-2009, 10:02 AM
Sakura sacrifices herself to save her two teamates? Some sort of cave in? I'm thinking Obito.

If you want to know the ending, PM me. ^^

The Demon Zabuza
08-22-2009, 10:22 AM
I'm good without it. I want it to be a surprise, I actually wouldn't want to know any Naruto Spoilers without reading all the chapters first.

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-22-2009, 10:23 AM
Alrighty then. :D
Now, to start writing...

The Demon Zabuza
08-22-2009, 10:24 AM
What, the next chapter?

I just realized that I'm the only one to have commented on the past few chapters. How does that make you feel vat, hmmm?

Vatanui AKA Pride
08-22-2009, 10:27 AM
Sad that no one takes the time to criticize or praise my story much anymore....:(